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|'the aging tendency and burden on the society' - my ielts essay
4 - hai.. Ageing is a process and not a tendency.. 1st sentance =>...poses..i did nt get the meaning...
Writing Feedbackvalency - Dec 2, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 4, 2012
|Modern cooking offers convenient solutions for preparing food
11 - Thank you sooooo much for your revise, Dumi. ^^ To be honest, i'm still confuse about using inappropriate word...
Writing FeedbackSalikron - Dec 2, 2012 / Salikron - Jan 26, 2013
|Why the divorce rate is so high in North America?
Writing FeedbackJareer1979 - Dec 2, 2012 / Jareer1979 - Dec 11, 2012
|The Fruit Section - story for english 9
3 - What is the message of this story? I think you should work on this point. You found you mother,...
Writing Feedbacknowel - Dec 2, 2012 / ah_zafari - Dec 2, 2012
|IELTS Topic. women's role in modern society
5 - hai... I feel you should read the question once more... The question is men discreminated or not..(Nice...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Dec 2, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 2, 2012
|Piano - the meaning of my life!
3 - thank you for the input! could anyone give me their feedback on what they think is the overall quality...
Writing Feedbackuhsikahtap - Dec 2, 2012 / uhsikahtap - Dec 2, 2012
|Talents; Born with them or not? IELTS
Writing FeedbackMommmmo - Dec 2, 2012 / valency - Dec 2, 2012
|Analysing argument estate agents GRE
3 - There are some grammar issues here and that disturbs conveying your idea to the reader; The homeowner who...
Writing Feedbackbusybee - Dec 2, 2012 / dumi - Dec 6, 2012
|analytical Argument GRE
4 - Yes... you have come up with very logical points that need to be considered before taking a decision. Language...
Writing Feedbackbusybee - Dec 2, 2012 / dumi - Dec 5, 2012
|Should universities provide skills for workplace? IELTS Essay
Writing FeedbackMommmmo - Dec 2, 2012 / Mommmmo - Dec 2, 2012
|[TOEFL] College and universities must do a better job for the workplace.
3 - Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackSetter - Dec 2, 2012 / Setter - Dec 2, 2012
|Universities and high schools should teach students specific careers
5 - I disagree with this statement/ I disagree with these statements However, I disagree with this statement...
Writing FeedbackJinQ1212 - Dec 2, 2012 / dumi - Dec 28, 2012
|Did Mother Goddess ever exist? stories circulating over 3000 to 4000 years before Christ
2 - Hi jcfriend; Your essay caught my eyes because its topic aroused interest in me... However, I feel you have...
Writing Feedbackjcfriend - Dec 1, 2012 / dumi - Dec 4, 2012
|Multicultural societies are becoming more and more popular due to...
Writing FeedbackEdna - Dec 1, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 6, 2012
|Urbanization is growing faster, which means the criminals are becoming more common in our lives.
5 - Hai... Urbanization is growing fast...o.k Bt i feel.. it doesn't mean what you wrote... Crime rates are...
Writing Feedbackkeinymigg - Dec 1, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 2, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY Success is something which is so dear that everyone seeks
Writing FeedbackTiablo - Dec 1, 2012 / Tiablo - Dec 3, 2012
|school uniform or giving the student the choice to decide what to wear to school.
2 - I think you need to add more specific details pertaining to your experiences, how you've had to deal with...
Writing FeedbackTiablo - Dec 1, 2012 / kc2vwx - Dec 1, 2012
|IELTS essay, gap year between high school and university
6 - Hai.. Advantages para i feel o.k some points are there. But disadvantages add more ideas.. They...
Writing Feedbackmy88626 - Dec 1, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 1, 2012
|The last two decades the internet has been bringing us many benifits
4 - The last two decades, the internet has provide us many benefitscompare to the negative affects since it has been...
Writing FeedbackSardor 77 - Nov 30, 2012 / Ashley5789 - Nov 30, 2012
|CAE - Report on foreign language learning in your country
NEW - Hi guys.I'm preparing for the CAE exam, I have some difficulties at the Writing part and I need some...
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|Person should never make an important decision alone; 'faculty choosing'
8 - Thank you so much joythblessy and snaacks. ^_^ Your suggest are so useful for me. I will try to...
Writing FeedbackSalikron - Nov 30, 2012 / Salikron - Dec 2, 2012
|Gender Images in Chinese TV shows - Research Proposal
3 - Thank u so much for helping me revise this! This paper is a qualitative content analysis of a...
Writing Feedbackmadsummertime - Nov 29, 2012 / madsummertime - Dec 2, 2012
|'soul-searching and life experience' - SAT Essay (1-12)
Writing Feedbackwhynotzoidberg - Nov 29, 2012 / bhos - Nov 29, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2: go straight to university or take a year off traveling
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Nov 29, 2012 / aeshamalik2010 - Nov 30, 2012
|Technology is clever - Present Paragraph
Writing FeedbackBani - Nov 29, 2012 / dumi - Dec 1, 2012
|Expressing concern : Environmental Damage VS Rise in standard of Living
7 - hai joythblessy, This essay is not for IELTS. I wrote it just out of my interest. Thanks for your...
Writing FeedbackPrem - Nov 29, 2012 / Prem - Dec 1, 2012
|What can we do to save our environment?
3 - hai... As ah_zafari pointed out lots of mistaks..i will give you some ideas.. :Reduce use of plastic and...
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Nov 29, 2012 / joythblessy - Dec 3, 2012
|Dr. Martin Luther King, Jr. Essay Contest: "The Drum Major Instinct"
Writing Feedbackmimilambie77 - Nov 29, 2012 / mimilambie77 - Dec 7, 2012
|IELTS essay, teenagers should encouraged to do unpaid community work
6 - It's easy to follow the ideas that you've given. The topic sentence of each paragraph is quite clear. Good...
Writing Feedbackmy88626 - Nov 29, 2012 / Edna - Dec 4, 2012
|Future Paragraph; Integrated Marketing Communication (IMC) strategy
Writing FeedbackBani - Nov 29, 2012 / dumi - Nov 29, 2012
|Marriage partners should similar or not - essay structure check
3 - Thank you so much Dumi. ^^ Thank you for your comment and suggest. Your example it's useful so much...
Writing FeedbackSalikron - Nov 29, 2012 / Salikron - Nov 29, 2012
|Science VS Religion - what is best for the people?
14 - you can also include , "Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind." by Albert Einstein...
Writing FeedbackPahan - Nov 29, 2012 / cheetha - Jan 21, 2013
|IELTS essay: Blood sports should be banned.
Writing Feedbackshirleybouvier - Nov 28, 2012 / dumi - Nov 29, 2012
|Past Paragaph - "sell-as-much-as-we-can" method
5 - From the old days of marketing (before the 1950s)I'd say "Before the 1950s," because as you're talking about marketing...
Writing FeedbackBani - Nov 28, 2012 / xamanda - Nov 28, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2: gender discrimination in education
4 - Uneven tends to give a meaning of unbalanced. Unfair seems to sound better because it means simply means unjust....
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Nov 28, 2012 / Pahan - Nov 30, 2012
|TOEFL Essay:advantages and disadvantages of building a factory near a community
Writing Feedbackksh - Nov 28, 2012 / Pahan - Nov 30, 2012
|'My Sister and I ' - a comparative essay revision
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|IELTS essay, technolgy and traditional ways
7 - I like your revising. I also read your profile too. Also you help me for my essay before, can...
Writing Feedbackmy88626 - Nov 28, 2012 / hamedmas - Dec 1, 2012
|'expressing negative opinions' - my essay about "TV and Radio Censorship"
Writing FeedbackNazaninrp - Nov 27, 2012 / Nazaninrp - Dec 10, 2012
|Virtual: The Evolving Classroom; Peer review
2 - E-learning is a student-centered teaching technique that facilitates new generation to study at any place with internet access. ...
Writing Feedbackkyaungthu - Nov 27, 2012 / dumi - Nov 28, 2012
|Teaching kids to be actively outside and limit the use of electronic devices
2 - Hai... To start off with...? Better = to begin with, to start with... At a young age....lazy...:...
Writing Feedbacklgalea - Nov 27, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 30, 2012
|'Sharing task' -Teaching small kids is the responsibility of both parents and schools
2 - I think you should pay more attention to the structure and organization of an essay. Start the essay with...
Writing Feedbackmahfouzelsawi - Nov 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 27, 2012
|Crime, population, and taxpayer's role - essay
NEW - Can you help with other essay please? Write about the following topic: In many cities crime is increasing. Why...
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|'My town is in Gaya' - IELST exam essay
5 - The best way for improving your writing skills is reading various texts with different subjects. Reading not only...
Writing Feedbacknorza - Nov 27, 2012 / ah_zafari - Dec 2, 2012
|'People with great imagination' - analytical GRE essay
3 - I think you have presented a good analysis but make sure you are not overusing commas and are clear...
Writing Feedbackbusybee - Nov 27, 2012 / DonnaJm - Nov 27, 2012
|My Biography (a freelance journalist, contributing writer, and activist)
3 - ah_zafari Thank you for your brilliant comments and remarks, hope you continue in future too....
Writing FeedbackMalik Achakzai - Nov 27, 2012 / Malik Achakzai - Nov 28, 2012
|'The Nepal Human Development' - the area of global concern essay
2 - Hello pawan457 you chose a great topic and wrote a great essay! Everything is fine--except that this is too...
Writing Feedbackpawan457 - Nov 27, 2012 / luying9682 - Nov 27, 2012
|IELTS- future developments in IT are likely to have more negative than positive
Writing FeedbackSu Nadi - Nov 26, 2012 / Su Nadi - Nov 27, 2012
|herbicide and pesticide use
2 - Hi, I don't find grammar issues here.... but I guess it should be more interesting to follow......
Writing FeedbackAbby5 - Nov 26, 2012 / dumi - Dec 1, 2012
|(IELTS essay) high payment for sports professionals is fair or not
2 - Recently successful sport professionals can earn enormous amount of money than other peoples who contributes their efforts in various...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 26, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 26, 2012
|'What Plans Do for Me' - Scholarship essay
NEW - i'll need to make an essay for scholarship application which i should submit before december 10th, the topic should...
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|Gilgit Baldistan the paradise like motherland
6 - Gilgit Baldistan an area inside Pakistan, having the same sample of population on the other side of the border...
Writing FeedbackMalik Achakzai - Nov 26, 2012 / Malik Achakzai - Nov 27, 2012
|History Intro paragraph: Do I properly state my argument? *Short*
2 - Well you are having fine hints and a good paragraph just minor changes were needed, as rewritten below. ...
Writing Feedbackpacers7ind - Nov 26, 2012 / Malik Achakzai - Nov 28, 2012
|Keep working or study abroad - must make a decision essay
6 - I have been wondering the same thing for a long time. I haven't started working yet. But I am...
Writing Feedbackmcuong01 - Nov 26, 2012 / Pahan - Nov 30, 2012
|'experiences for future life and job' - TOEFL:Why people attend university?
4 - "...the most important reason..." "....is to increase knowledge...someone who wants to be a medic..." "...because educated people is more...
Writing Feedbackksh - Nov 26, 2012 / sebastiann436 - Nov 26, 2012
|Differences between the traditional family and the modern one.
Writing Feedbackththnho_tl - Nov 26, 2012 / ththnho_tl - Nov 30, 2012
|Global sales; people buy CDs rather the DVD/video and games - IELTS writing Task practice
2 - As far as I know, your essay should be corrected as follows: - There was a significant feature that...
Writing FeedbackCaco - Nov 26, 2012 / mcuong01 - Nov 26, 2012
|'Pre-Medical Society' -applying to Rice University's Weiss School of Natural Sciences
2 - I like how your essay includes a touching personal anecdote, but I feel it would be a better essay...
Writing Feedbacknicolewong - Nov 25, 2012 / achen - Nov 29, 2012
|(IELTS essay) Better: knowledge for book or experience
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 26, 2012
|'Adapting effective laws' - Tobacco and alcohol should be illegal?
3 - Hai.. Instead of poisonous 'gases' change to substances. Waste of economy... Government is spending a large amount...
Writing Feedbackhongkyanh - Nov 25, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 25, 2012
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