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|'The Hunger Games' - literacy narrative to proof read
2 - I have always thrived in math and science courses, but when it came to reading there was something about...
Writing Feedbackwrivers - Sep 12, 2012 / seraph - Sep 24, 2012
|TOEFL: There is nothing uneducated people can teach educated people. Do you agree?
4 - Your essay is very good, organized your thoughts well..but you had some grammatical errors...i mentioned two..so like go over...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 12, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 13, 2012
|Why Materialistic People Are Less Happy in Marriage?
5 - cool!...
Writing Feedbackzer000 - Sep 12, 2012 / ThreeFive2Hood - Sep 24, 2012
|Prehistoric village of Palea, evidences. GRE Argument topic 1
6 - Hi Westway50 Thanx for your grading my essay. I seek your suggestion for the practice of Essay. Can...
Writing FeedbackMriytunjay - Sep 12, 2012 / Mriytunjay - Oct 1, 2012
|GRE issue topic-The surest indicator of a great nation
2 - I think it's a great, well thought out essay. I guess there are some problems with commas, like: ...
Writing Feedbackmujunlin - Sep 12, 2012 / ace - Sep 12, 2012
|Toefl: taking action directly is usually a good strategy
2 - it is nice approach, but i think you should write in four paras, 1st Introduction, than discuss topic, than...
Writing FeedbackJelLyLy - Sep 12, 2012 / hoshmp - Sep 20, 2012
|A person should never make an important decision alone? I dont agree
Writing Feedbackhungvud - Sep 12, 2012 / hungvud - Sep 15, 2012
|"Mobile Technology and Today's Student" - why wouldn't we take advantage of that?
Writing Feedbacksmiller - Sep 11, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 19, 2012
|Toefl Topic: Do you prefer living in a place with diverse climate or a place ...
2 - Writing in "first person" means that you are writing as if you are speaking it, in real time. It...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Sep 11, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 12, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1; Figures of the hamburgers annual sales of Marry
2 - The line graph illustrates the figures of theMarry'sannual hamburgers annual salesof Marryat his restaurant. The report will give a...
Writing Feedbackweareone_08 - Sep 11, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 11, 2012
|Toefl -Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money,
4 - O'K i will try to explain what I mean when I say concrete introduction. You should generalize what bot...
Writing Feedbacknamrta - Sep 11, 2012 / eradulova - Sep 12, 2012
|brings equality, create unity; Should schools strickly enforce dress codes?
5 - You made some very good points in your essay. I think school dress codes also help keep students more...
Writing Feedbackhp709 - Sep 11, 2012 / chess1921 - Sep 12, 2012
|Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
2 - Two things: 1. There should be a space after comma. 2. This, for example: "a society flourishing there...
Writing Feedbacksanyagoyal1988 - Sep 11, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|TOEFL: University student should not be required to attend classes.
3 - Your essay is quite good...but i think you should revise the essay and look out for all those silly...
Writing Feedbackmissbjang - Sep 11, 2012 / Shayke_96 - Sep 11, 2012
|Everything was silent. I did not hear the heavy drumming sounds of the dog breathing.
2 - Hi :) You have done a very nice job with your essay. It is very descriptive, and definitely takes...
Writing Feedbackzmelman - Sep 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 11, 2012
|[IELTS]Men and women employed in full-time jobs have to share evenly household chores
3 - In your second as well as third para you didn't mention the present situation/modern world in which Men and...
Writing FeedbackTomy6240 - Sep 10, 2012 / amittt - Sep 11, 2012
|IELTS:The graph compares the number of visits: Pop Parade vs Music Choice
Writing Feedbackdidiconopidi - Sep 10, 2012 / didiconopidi - Sep 26, 2012
|'free entrance to museums and art galleries' -revise my IELTS writing task 2
6 - Hm, you didn't add anything useful. You just rewrote Grama's input... You should add someting more unique....
Writing Feedbackoptal - Sep 10, 2012 / ace - Sep 11, 2012
|Does our happiness come at the cost of others' misery?
2 - I strongly recommend you to separate your essay to 3-4 paragraph. It will be more clear to indicate your...
Writing Feedbackandshewashappy8 - Sep 9, 2012 / zer000 - Sep 12, 2012
|'self-satisfaction' - GRE:True success can be measured
3 - Thanks Dumi...
Writing Feedbackmahsaa - Sep 9, 2012 / mahsaa - Sep 13, 2012
|Plase Evaluate my essay for Toefl - Category - Aggree or Disagree
4 - ...
Writing Feedbacknamrta - Sep 9, 2012 / meili luo - Sep 18, 2012
|Traffic Congestion - The fundamental problem of modern cities
Writing FeedbackArienne - Sep 9, 2012 / Amany - Sep 10, 2012
|IELTS MODERN SOCIETIES NEED SPECIALIST IN CERTAIN FIELDS
3 - It depends on your opinion. If you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages you should mention more positive...
Writing Feedbackdidiconopidi - Sep 9, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 11, 2012
|'Living with parents and generation gap' - Topic: iBT writing
Writing Feedbackmahtabk - Sep 9, 2012 / krishnakant - Sep 13, 2012
|'overseas investment by companies' - IELTS Essay
Writing Feedbackqinying - Sep 8, 2012 / qinying - Sep 11, 2012
|GRE;People are too quick to take action; issue based essay
NEW - Issue: "People are too quick to take action;instead they should stop to think of possible consequence of what they...
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|IELTS essay; assess this essay and show me my mistakes?
3 - I wrote another essay, i hope it could score better. The bar chart above, shows the proportion of...
Writing Feedbackfedail - Sep 8, 2012 / fedail - Sep 12, 2012
|Internet, social networks and Internet to humankind - IELTS
4 - This sentence does not provide much enthusiasm to your reader. In my view, you better state your opinion...
Writing Feedbackenchanted178 - Sep 8, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|IELTS: punishment policies in schools
2 - This sounds better if you write it in direct speech; Schools adopt their policies to ensure that there...
Writing Feedbacklsalamon - Sep 8, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|GRE: students choose their fields on study based on their long-term career goals
2 - Open the introduction with a "Motivator" and then write the thesis statement. What you wrote as an introduction...
Writing Feedbackmohammmo - Sep 8, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 8, 2012
|Toefl ibt :Salary increases and promotions to new positions are not the only ways to
2 - It is unquestionable that salary increases and promotions to new positionsare very common ways to reward employees for their...
Writing Feedbacklebay153 - Sep 7, 2012 / dumi - Sep 7, 2012
|TOEFL: Making large amounts of money or earning a comfortable living ?
4 - Thanks for corrections by contributors, I want to ask you people if we made corrections how to make improvements?...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 7, 2012 / amitt - Sep 10, 2012
|IELTS: Causes and solution of today teenagers' behaviour
3 - nguyen has offered excellent help for you by editing your essay. ------- when you say parents'performance, the...
Writing Feedbackstraw99 - Sep 6, 2012 / dumi - Sep 8, 2012
|IELTS - give us your view about engertainment and educative museums .
3 - Hi, For this kind of essay, you must discuss both views in two paragraphs (one for entertainment and...
Writing FeedbackSaeed7 - Sep 6, 2012 / April April - Sep 10, 2012
|Topic : The effect of the illiteracy
3 - try lengthier paragraphs. the diction is interesting though, but this could be a lot better with mroe substance...
Writing Feedbackcaihuu - Sep 6, 2012 / katiecohen96 - Sep 6, 2012
|Topic: studying abroad & studying in Viet Nam
NEW - Some people would like to attend universities in VN while others love studying abroad. Although both studying abroad or...
Writing Feedbackcaihuu - Sep 6, 2012 / — -
|'an imaginary pupil' - Rousseau essay (english lit)
NEW - okay first off i am terribly in english i just would apperisate it if someone would look over and...
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|Students should value their present time and use it right so that they will never regret later.
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 6, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 6, 2012
|Compare the contributions of artists to society - 'scientist is more important'
Writing FeedbackLena05031 - Sep 5, 2012 / Lena05031 - Sep 5, 2012
|College is a waste of money and time/ ROI in sending teenagers to University
2 - Haha that would be true if you're speaking of community colleges or low-mid tier colleges. But the benefits and...
Writing Feedbackzhuyian - Sep 5, 2012 / Dactylic126 - Sep 9, 2012
|ESSAY ON ALCOHOL - lowered or not?
3 - Thanks so much for the response. I did realize my mistakes and about how i kept asking questions, i...
Writing Feedbacksillyxo - Sep 5, 2012 / sillyxo - Sep 5, 2012
|Paid work in children - My discussion essay written following writing task 2 IELTS
Writing Feedbackanhtu214 - Sep 4, 2012 / dumi - Sep 4, 2012
|I believe that teachers are responsible for motivating students to learn
Writing Feedbackfarnaz_nouri - Sep 4, 2012 / MoonMoon - Sep 4, 2012
|GRE ISSUE; TOURISM WILL BECOME OBSOLETE DUE TO TELEVISION & WORLDWIDE COMPUTER
2 - Television and world wide computer connections arethe greatesta great boon to users . ComputerThe internet connects us to...
Writing FeedbackSiddharthvora01 - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 4, 2012
|Healthy Lives for Plainsville residents - GRE
2 - The perspetive of the vice president of Nature's way to expand the business by opening stores of food and...
Writing FeedbackSiddharthvora01 - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 4, 2012
|Difference between present and past generation about stress
5 - Give some examples and explain the example: such as stress due to study,money pressure,stress to employer due to meet...
Writing Feedbacksarahira - Sep 4, 2012 / Siddharthvora01 - Sep 8, 2012
|TOEFL; plethora of convenient stores in Taiwan: 7-11, Family
2 - has greatly enhance the quality of people's lifestyle due to the fact that there is more expand time we...
Writing FeedbackJinFay - Sep 4, 2012 / April April - Sep 4, 2012
|Pets should be treated as family members or not? 'pets are also live creatures'
5 - Thank you guys, especially Jennifer for your precise responses. Although I was overtime for this writing ( 40 mins...
Writing Feedbackthaonguyen1901 - Sep 4, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 5, 2012
|Museum; see things in reality and feel their texture - it's unforgettable moment
4 - An interesting Topic. I think your writing is rather short and need some ideas. I suggest you some more...
Writing Feedbackgag379 - Sep 4, 2012 / thaonguyen1901 - Sep 5, 2012
|Scandals are useful - they stir up all people in any level of classification
Writing Feedbackhsn - Sep 4, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 5, 2012
|In general all communicating media are important and have their own advantages
Writing Feedbacksara_venusir - Sep 3, 2012 / dumi - Sep 4, 2012
|"Chocolat" movie essay
Writing Feedbackm1994 - Sep 3, 2012 / ace - Sep 3, 2012
|'expressing myself in deferent's ways' - My passion for singing
Writing FeedbackCrysta - Sep 3, 2012 / Crysta - Sep 3, 2012
|TOEFL: which do you prefer: A high paying job or quality sparse time
2 - Open the introduction with a motivator and then write the thesis statement. Try to write the reasons (Several...
Writing Feedbackmamad60 - Sep 3, 2012 / ah_zafari - Sep 3, 2012
|'comparison the sales of CD' - Bar chart of IELTS task-1
Writing Feedbacknitish582 - Sep 3, 2012 / color - Oct 1, 2012
|studying major cities only gives a glimpse on a society...
2 - 1. Use a spell checker (example: 'continueing' should be 'continuing' or ' undersrtanding' should be 'understanding'). 2. Proofread (example:...
Writing Feedbackmohammmo - Sep 2, 2012 / testing - Sep 18, 2012
|TOEFL: Why visit MUSEUMS? Learn History &Culture, Making friends
3 - the topic is: Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people...
Writing Feedbackmeili luo - Sep 2, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 2, 2012
|IBT essay.. What do you do for good health?
Writing Feedbackchallagali - Sep 2, 2012 / dumi - Sep 3, 2012
|Autism Vs vaccines essay - the Controversy
2 - Essay sounded awesome! I have a younger sister with Autism, and I loved this! Do you at least have...
Writing Feedbackleshiro - Sep 2, 2012 / amcd - Sep 14, 2012
|'fair government' - Patriot's Pen - Essay bout founding fathers and America
2 - Hello, thanks for commenting on my PAtriot's Pen essay. I'll provide a few comments on yours. If you see...
Writing Feedbackaspiringwriter - Sep 1, 2012 / chessman567 - Sep 3, 2012
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