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|Telling the truth is the first thing I would like develop in a good relationship
3 - Thank you so much!!! This is my first exercise. I very appreciate that you help me improve my structure...
Writing FeedbackJessicaLiao - Mar 18, 2018 / JessicaLiao - Mar 24, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing: How does the increasing availability of information influence life?
3 - Li, your essay was going pretty well until you decided to discuss the US elections. Don't delve on discussing...
Writing Feedbackdeniselee - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|Some people believe that taking their children into the boarding school is the best choice
Writing Feedbacktey - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|Ielts writing - Take a gap year between high school and university.
5 - Tranh, in an opinion essay, you should represent only one opinion for discussion. That is, unless the prompt specifically...
Writing Feedbackmanhhackc - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|DREAM BIG FUND essay competition
3 - Putri, your essay is not very academic in presentation and also, requires a more coherent presentation for the essay....
Writing Feedbackflykitten - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|THE BEST WAY TO REDUCE YOUTH CRIMES IS TO EDUCATE THEIR PARENTS WITH PARENTAL SKILLS
4 - Nguyen, the highest score you can get for this essay is a 5 because you did not properly respond...
Writing Feedbackjokyhuy - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|There is no place left for teachers in today's world. PTE write essay
2 - This is good writing... to me, you have ticked all boxes 1. Lexical Resource 2. Task Achievement 3....
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Mar 16, 2018 / afaquekhan85 - Mar 16, 2018
|"The Bet" by Anthon Chekov - MY THOUGHTS
3 - @TJLuschen This is not exactly an assignment but just a diary that I would like to keep on practicing...
Writing Feedbackruntothesun1972 - Mar 16, 2018 / runtothesun1972 - Mar 17, 2018
|Academic result in measuring people's intelligence
2 - This is ambiguous writing... to me, you are lacking in nearly all boxes 1. Lexical Resource = repetition...
Writing Feedbackmanhhackc - Mar 16, 2018 / afaquekhan85 - Mar 16, 2018
|Travel agencies with customized travel program or free backpacking?
4 - really appreciate both of your comments!! may i ask how much score can my writing like this one get...
Writing Feedbackdeniselee - Mar 16, 2018 / deniselee - Mar 17, 2018
|IELTS A.W Task 2: people should keep all the money and not pay tax to the state
2 - Dear Polin_Togatorop, There is something you may want to consider further here. "Some people say an ability...
Writing FeedbackPolin_Togatorop - Mar 16, 2018 / hanhndvn - Mar 16, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 GT. Formal letter to an newspaper
NEW - You recently read an article in newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write...
Writing Feedbackamal_ahm - Mar 15, 2018 / — -
|Some people assume that spending money on maintaining public libaries is not necessary
Writing Feedbacklinhdan1198 - Mar 15, 2018 / linhdan1198 - Apr 2, 2018
|Financial institutions, beside revenue-generating activities, should contribute more to community
NEW - (IELTS) As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Agree or disagree? businesses - gaining profit...
Writing Feedbacktqhung94 - Mar 14, 2018 / — -
|Evaluate viable solutions to the problem of workplace stress.
NEW - Could anyone give me some feedback about my essay? Thank you and have a good day! reducing stress...
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|A proper training is very significant to make a fundamental structure of children's mind
3 - @nilfort your essay has a series of problems that needs to be addressed before you can even begin to...
Writing Feedbacknilfort - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 18, 2018
|Check sentences about media topic - newspapers
Writing FeedbackNguyen123 - Mar 11, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 14, 2018
|Evaluate the pros and cons about factory built near the community. [TOEFL]
3 - @kevin86120 You must avoid starting your sentences with the connecting words "And, but, or because". As these are connecting...
Writing Feedbackkevin86120 - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 14, 2018
|Death with Dignity Essay - should patient be allowed to end their life on their own terms?
2 - Kyra, you presented a personal opinion at the end of paragraph 2 but did not follow up on the...
Writing Feedbackkyra2114315 - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 14, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 Bar graph about percentage of men and women doing exercise systematically
3 - @TJLuschen Thank you for your feedback! I am going to practice again based on this Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackJayKIM - Mar 11, 2018 / JayKIM - Mar 15, 2018
|The great advertising affects people's willing of purchasing - Ielts work
5 - HI LUCY, Your essay actually seems fine with advanced vocabulary as well as approriate organization that follow Ielts...
Writing FeedbackLUCYLUCY - Mar 10, 2018 / Sophia Yang - Mar 12, 2018
|When people fail at schools, it doesn't mean that they miss a chance to reach success in the future
Writing FeedbackOscar Tam - Mar 10, 2018 / Oscar Tam - Mar 11, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: Fashionable clothes, Is this attitude a positive or negative development?
3 - Afaque, this is a direct answer single opinion essay. Therefore, you are supposed to pick only one side of...
Writing Feedbackafaquekhan85 - Mar 9, 2018 / Holt - Mar 13, 2018
|Raising Successful Children. [IELTS Writing Task2 ] Children are require to help with household task
2 - The given topic shows a statement, (no need ",") that some parents require their children to give a help...
Writing FeedbackBarneywu - Mar 7, 2018 / chiehpower - Mar 10, 2018
|Should we learn a foreign language? Provide your thoughts.
4 - Thanks for your advice. It is very helpful for me, but I think that writing the essay within 40...
Writing Feedbackchiehpower - Mar 7, 2018 / chiehpower - Mar 10, 2018
|Loan for a music club [GRE Argument] I am new to GRE and need help on AWA writing
Writing Feedbackchlu - Mar 6, 2018 / chlu - Mar 8, 2018
|In today's society, success is often measured in terms of wealth and possessions. Is it right?
Writing Feedbacklvi - Mar 6, 2018 / chlu - Mar 10, 2018
|Questions about transitions of paragraphs and ideas in personal statement for CDC job
2 - Shristi, your first two paragraphs are irrelevant to the prompt questions. The questions posed before you all require you...
Writing Feedbackshumagai - Mar 6, 2018 / Holt - Mar 10, 2018
|Education should be free for everyone. Do you Agree or disagree? Write an essay to present your idea
4 - Pham, your essay is wrong from the very beginning. The prompt paraphrase is incomplete and / or inaccurate. I...
Writing Feedbackmeocon800 - Mar 4, 2018 / Holt - Mar 10, 2018
|Essay: A TRIP TO THE COUNTRYSIDE - the most amazing experience I ever had
Writing FeedbackHappyBoy2003 - Mar 4, 2018 / HappyBoy2003 - Mar 5, 2018
|Should women have the right to join the army? Their motherhood role may be affected. IELTS question
2 - Hey Jawad. You certainly have some interesting ideas for the essay. The errors that I find are mainly...
Writing FeedbackRumi2020 - Mar 4, 2018 / DoctorWho - Mar 4, 2018
|The internet and its effect on academic learning
3 - Thanks for sending your essay here. Please allow me to give you some valuable feedback towards the essay posted....
Writing Feedbackrosita12 - Mar 3, 2018 / eddies - Mar 5, 2018
|Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case?
5 - Alex, in a direct question essay, you must always refer to the discussion type when you develop your draft...
Writing Feedbackalecen - Mar 3, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|Studying in foreign countries gradually become an upward trend - a positive one or not?
3 - Ha, a completely accurate discussion review of your essay cannot be completed without the complete prompt requirement. I need...
Writing Feedbackhathubui2001 - Mar 3, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|A recent movement in education has been called "Back to Basics." Current curriculum controversy.
3 - @sungin115 I am going to review this as an actual research paper and not an English grammar exam since...
Writing Feedbacksungin115 - Mar 2, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|Effects of TV on positive or negative culture
3 - Rosita, the choice of discussion comes with the word "or" separating the two opinions. That word indicates that this...
Writing Feedbackrosita12 - Mar 2, 2018 / Holt - Mar 8, 2018
|Topic 1: Traditional food is undergoing great changes and being replaced by new diets.
4 - @Oscar Tam Thank you for your advice. It has a good point in your idea that I haven't thought...
Writing FeedbackTamia - Mar 2, 2018 / Tamia - Mar 12, 2018
|IELTS | TASK 2 | Full-time education until adulthood/18 years old
2 - The opening paragraph should not present an opinion coming from the writers, as you did, in the topic paragraph.The...
Writing Feedbacksumomoakiko - Mar 1, 2018 / Holt - Mar 7, 2018
|Computer skills vs three integral subjects which have always been taught in education
2 - Yuka, this is a pretty good presentation that fails in only one aspect. As this is an "extent" essay,...
Writing Feedbackmelody14 - Mar 1, 2018 / Holt - Mar 2, 2018
|The best way to study English - the most popular language in the world
2 - Elena, this is a pretty good presentation. You have a clear flow of thought coming out of every paragraph....
Writing Feedbackgreetings - Feb 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 1, 2018
|Parents of obese children should be punished for making their children fat? Do you agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackxuanlengoc - Feb 28, 2018 / Ashkan123 - Mar 4, 2018
|In modern society, ambition is more and more important? How important is ambition for success?
2 - Hoang, is this essay for an IELTS or TOEFL test? Please tell me what test this essay is meant...
Writing Feedbackminhphuong275 - Feb 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 1, 2018
|There's an opinion that the benefits of nuclear technology are more valuable than its disadvantages.
2 - Vu, your opening statement is highly confusing to read. You need to refrain from beginning the discussion in that...
Writing Feedbackvuhoang19 - Feb 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 1, 2018
|Essay about the choice of the people between following a healthy lifestyle and relying on medicine
Writing Feedbackdolelongan - Feb 26, 2018 / senuthilini - Feb 27, 2018
|Writing an essay about how to become a person with good writing skills
Writing Feedbackchanhtruc123 - Feb 26, 2018 / Holt - Mar 1, 2018
|Ielts Essay : Brain drain from poor countries - seeking for solutions
Writing Feedbacksenuthilini - Feb 26, 2018 / senuthilini - Mar 5, 2018
|The lack of discipline in universities is a serious problem today
2 - Long, you will not get a passing grade for this essay. The main reason for the failure of your...
Writing FeedbackOscar Tam - Feb 24, 2018 / Holt - Feb 25, 2018
|IELTS, task2, Government payment for nursery homes.
3 - mazen, your opening statement is a bit in error when it comes to representing the opinion discussion. The prompt...
Writing Feedbackmazenteet123 - Feb 23, 2018 / Holt - Feb 27, 2018
|A request letter for accommodation transfer to an another room
2 - adam, don't use a dictionary to write letters like these. Using terms such as "nocturnal" and "diurnal" indicate that...
Writing Feedbackadamjhons123 - Feb 23, 2018 / Holt - Feb 25, 2018
|Qualities of a good person - faithful, responsible, kind, helpful...
2 - Phuong, if you are writing this essay only as a part of your English vocabulary development, then you have...
Writing FeedbackPhuong nguyen - Feb 23, 2018 / Holt - Feb 23, 2018
|IELTS 2 - Solving food waste issue by raising awareness and generating energy
Writing Feedbackthuydungle - Feb 22, 2018 / happyfunny - Feb 25, 2018
|Student Loan Debt, High Price to Pay For a Bright Future
3 - Claudia, this is not the sort of essay that is helped by telling a fictitious anecdote at the start....
Writing Feedbackcmartinez13 - Feb 22, 2018 / Holt - Feb 23, 2018
|The essay for CBEST about a rejection or defeat
3 - Thank you @ Holt for giving feedback. I have not passed the CBEST test yet, but it's just for...
Writing Feedbackbnilakshi101 - Feb 21, 2018 / bnilakshi101 - Feb 23, 2018
|Descriptive essay: TEN MINUTES - a nuclear war scene topic
4 - @Holt Here is the revised version of this essay~ ((I'm quite worried that this turned out to be...
Writing Feedbackbox_wizard - Feb 20, 2018 / box_wizard - Feb 21, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Importance of Economics or Other Type of Progess
2 - Ying, this essay is lacking a proper opening paraphrase of the original prompt, an accurate 3 body paragraph discussion,...
Writing Feedbackying_chen - Feb 20, 2018 / Holt - Feb 21, 2018
|Consumer Spending Trends and Statistics
2 - Hello Kien! It's very hard to judge your work without the graph/chart for analysis. Make sure you upload...
Writing Feedbackenorman - Feb 19, 2018 / DoctorWho - Feb 20, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: cause &solution- anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others
3 - Hi Kuan, For the two questions type of essay, I agree with your current paragraph structure. -Introduction -Main...
Writing Feedbackccalvin97 - Feb 19, 2018 / ying_chen - Feb 20, 2018
|New Zealand and spending money - Ielts taks1 the pie chart
3 - weiling, aside from an incomplete summary overview, your essay also lacks a proper paragraph representation. You are prone to...
Writing Feedbackbig0321lala - Feb 19, 2018 / Holt - Feb 20, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world.
3 - Tra, your essay is missing an appropriate summary overview, that should have been the first paragraph of this essay....
Writing Feedbacknguyenthikimdung - Feb 18, 2018 / Holt - Feb 19, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Opinions of the Constructing New or Existing Transportation
3 - Thank you for your detail explanation and point out the mistakes I made. I'll improve all the above you...
Writing Feedbackying_chen - Feb 16, 2018 / ying_chen - Feb 18, 2018
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