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|What are some causes of stress among young people and How could this be ameliorated?
7 - .... I guess what you mean by physical lives is about physical activities. ...people do not need to...
Writing Feedbackhannahphan - Jan 8, 2013 / dumi - Jan 9, 2013
|The trend that damages our quality of life: Multinational Companies
8 - That's fine. My intention was to make you understand the difference between "abandon" and "abundant" Examples; He abandoned...
Writing Feedbacksalmav - Jan 8, 2013 / dumi - Jan 9, 2013
|Traveling is a good way of improving our knowledge
2 - Love the last paragraph that includes your opinion along with a quote. But have you thought of bringing that...
Writing Feedbackbongxugalaxie - Jan 8, 2013 / giuzu98 - Dec 12, 2016
|Vacation can be boring, more complicated and less sophisticated without friends
Writing FeedbackChaz - Jan 8, 2013 / Chaz - Jan 9, 2013
|SAT Essay : "Is the purpose of education to change the world?"
NEW - "Is the purpose of education to change the world?" Education can benefit the mankind in tremendous ways and...
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|IELTS ESSAY, International law will not reduce crime rate in different countries
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 8, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 8, 2013
|( IELTS essay) universities should give importance in theoretical or practical educat
5 - hai..Cuong... Thank you so .... Much for your valuable comments... I am agreeing that my essays are...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 8, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 10, 2013
|Which way is the best for a student to make new friends? (TOEFL)
3 - for me, this part is a little bit confused. You should explain clearer (if you have good points...
Writing Feedbackheadshot0313 - Jan 8, 2013 / sir_alex92 - Jan 8, 2013
|University education or Work experience? Uni is more helpful in getting a job; IELTS
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 7, 2013 / salmav - Jan 8, 2013
|( IELTS essay) important decision of a teenager by himself or by parents
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 7, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 8, 2013
|Which matters more for the personality development?Born characteristics or Experience
6 - Dear Duminda and Tessy, Thank you for your comments and time you spent to gothrough my essay. Your comments...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 7, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 7, 2013
|Parents have an exceptionally great impact on their children; TOEFL
Writing FeedbackIcebird - Jan 7, 2013 / Qingye - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS essay- Video games - Do the benefits outweigh the drawbacks?
2 - This opening sentence neither means anything important nor it does introduce your topic to the reader. The highlighted...
Writing Feedbackskynet0512 - Jan 7, 2013 / dumi - Jan 7, 2013
|My Teacher, the one who made an impact on me; Preparing for IELTS
3 - Hi, I think you can write well. However, in this essay you only talk about the relationship you had...
Writing Feedbackvishal341in - Jan 6, 2013 / dumi - Jan 7, 2013
|Using cell phone while driving should be banned
6 - dumi Thank you so much for responding. However, in the first sentence I wanted to use something about...
Writing Feedbackfarzan23 - Jan 6, 2013 / farzan23 - Jan 17, 2013
|Government should pay for environment protection-TOEFL
4 - Governments spend more money on economic development in hope of creating more job opportunities, enhancing gross domestic product...
Writing FeedbackShirley0426007 - Jan 6, 2013 / dumi - Jan 7, 2013
|Young adults should be allowed to decide their profession on their own ; IELTS
11 - hai Arun... Post your essays.. We will see as much as possible.. Prefer recent exam questions.. Concentrate on...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 6, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 7, 2013
|IELTS writing---ability and appearance in the work
3 - ....employment issues are becoming more and more obvious and complicated and they have drawn attention of many concerned...
Writing Feedbacksunys - Jan 6, 2013 / dumi - Jan 7, 2013
|Many parts of the world are losing important natural resourses
Writing Feedbackgio_adam - Jan 6, 2013 / gio_adam - Jan 8, 2013
|(IELTS essay) Internet reduces face-to-face contacts
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 6, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 8, 2013
|LIVE WITHOUT FEAR; Camp Rising Sun App / HONOR & BETTER WORLD
17 - Yeah, that's the tricky part. It's in the future, but I have to describe it as if has already...
Writing FeedbackButterflyDDS - Jan 6, 2013 / ButterflyDDS - Jan 6, 2013
|Job or social life? Which can effect more on one's happiness? (TOEFL)
3 - This is not a complete sentence. You need to combine this with another idea. Obviously, different...
Writing Feedbacklily2012 - Jan 6, 2013 / dumi - Jan 6, 2013
|Family Picnic to Teluk Kemang
2 - hey Theones I have a big question for you. I have already seen this essay elsewhere in this forum...
Writing FeedbackTheones - Jan 6, 2013 / moon05 - Jan 6, 2013
|PORT DICKSON; School holiday exprience
5 - .... I think you should talk more about the experience rather than talking every little detail of the...
Writing Feedbackefinurfatihah - Jan 6, 2013 / dumi - Jan 9, 2013
|expression of one's belief should not be refrained; freedom for artists
4 - Creative works of the artists are an expression of their beliefs and ideas. However, governments often...
Writing Feedbackmishti - Jan 6, 2013 / dumi - Jan 6, 2013
|the best way to raise children is to encourage them to be independent thinkers.
5 - During my thirty years of life, I learned many things. However, out of all, the most important thing...
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Jan 6, 2013 / dumi - Jan 6, 2013
|What contributes on an enjoyable vacation? Good friend to travel-TOEFL
Writing FeedbackShirley0426007 - Jan 5, 2013 / dumi - Jan 6, 2013
|If you have enough money, would you purchase either a house or a business?
Writing FeedbackIcebird - Jan 5, 2013 / dumi - Jan 5, 2013
|Interdisciplinary; It is better to have broad knowledge or to be specialized?
4 - thank you...
Writing FeedbackWENGHUIWEN - Jan 5, 2013 / WENGHUIWEN - Jan 6, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Gene or environment more influential in character
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 5, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 6, 2013
|Traveling in their own country Vs traveling in foreign countries; TOEFL
5 - Thank Helenfox,Shirley0426007, Dumi for your advice I will improve the way that you provided to me. Thanks again....
Writing Feedbackg2080800 - Jan 5, 2013 / g2080800 - Jan 6, 2013
|topic:Today,student's tuition is paid in one of the following ways:
2 - Great editing by Deepak :) Thanks for your time and meticulous editing :) ... there's a small...
Writing FeedbackAlicegaga - Jan 5, 2013 / dumi - Jan 5, 2013
|Some people tend to study a subject on intensive way over a short period of time
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Jan 4, 2013 / aqeel - Jan 6, 2013
|correct choices - SAT Essay: Can success be disastrous?
2 - However, the way we cope with the consequences of success, would determine whether or not the fortune would...
Writing Feedbackstarlight21 - Jan 4, 2013 / dumi - Jan 5, 2013
|Should children engage in some kind of paid work? No
4 - .... it should be "It's". Here's my suggestion;4 It is fundamentally wrong to employ kids in paid work...
Writing Feedbackprabhjotrana - Jan 4, 2013 / dumi - Jan 5, 2013
|IELTS: go to university or start work after school? going to uni is a better choice
5 - The academic credentials are the most important part of one's CV that help the person gain a competitive...
Writing Feedbacky0_3mma - Jan 4, 2013 / dumi - Jan 8, 2013
|[IELTS TASK 2] studying history has little value in the modern world?
NEW - To some people studying the past has little value in the modern world. Why do you think it is...
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|Should there be fixed punishment for crimes?
Writing Feedbackchjutt - Jan 4, 2013 / dumi - Jan 5, 2013
|In many countries children engaged in some kind of paid work.(IELTS)
4 - Today the trend of youngchildrenbeing employed shows an alarming growth. This situation can be observed in...
Writing Feedbacknono824 - Jan 3, 2013 / dumi - Jan 9, 2013
|be a good model; Parents should teach children how to be good members of society
2 - I feel this sounds a bit controversial as even in previous eras, education had always been directed to...
Writing FeedbackBestjjrkm - Jan 3, 2013 / dumi - Jan 9, 2013
|(IELTS graph) underground railway system; London: 775 million people per year
2 - It is clear from the chart that, the oldest three railway stations are the biggest in size of stations...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 3, 2013 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 3, 2013
|'Children suffer due to modern lifestyles of their parents' - Ielts
Writing Feedbacksalmav - Jan 3, 2013 / salmav - Jan 7, 2013
|'Uniting together' -In many cities, crime is increasing why do u think that happening
Writing Feedbackthanh_bin90 - Jan 3, 2013 / thanh_bin90 - Jan 18, 2013
|[IELTS ESSAY] what, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?
4 - Sure... : D I'm from Sri Lanka, a country which has very close relationships with China :D Ok......
Writing FeedbackCrazySnailer - Jan 3, 2013 / dumi - Jan 6, 2013
|IELTS-There can be many negative effects caused by people resisting to new changes!
5 - This is not a strong sentence.This gives an impression that this has begun in recent times. In my...
Writing Feedbackntdang92 - Jan 3, 2013 / dumi - Jan 8, 2013
|IELTS - Recycling rubbish does not happen in some countries; Why & What can be done?
Writing Feedbackjupiter - Jan 3, 2013 / jupiter - Jan 5, 2013
|IELTS writing task 2: The use of CCTV (close circuit television)
7 - Oh thanks u a lot! just followed all links! And sorry, that previous comment of dopq01 made me feel...
Writing FeedbackJanett - Jan 3, 2013 / Janett - Jan 11, 2013
|(TOEFL) Disagree or agree"It is impossible always being honest to your friends."
2 - ..."when" is used two times in this line; There are circumstances that we would better not be honest...
Writing FeedbackSonia96 - Jan 3, 2013 / dumi - Jan 3, 2013
|Easy preparation of food leads to a better life; TOEFL
Writing FeedbackRaviSouza - Jan 2, 2013 / dumi - Jan 3, 2013
|IELTS ESSAY; neighbours and the sense of community is lost. What is causing this?
2 - Hi, You must look through the grammar, I have corrected the first para for you. What you write is...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 2, 2013 / notdisha - Jan 4, 2013
|Machine translation is slower and less accurate than human translation - IELTS
10 - It is also worth noting that MT frequently gives us the most common meanings of the words. Maybe you...
Writing Feedbacksalmav - Jan 2, 2013 / Callie0202 - Jan 9, 2013
|Smoking effects and smoking ban; IELTS
10 - "solution for them" -> solution to sth :) "smoking shortens a human significantly." -> smoking shortens lifespans/ longevity "governments...
Writing Feedbackjupiter - Jan 2, 2013 / salmav - Jan 12, 2013
|(IELTS) Why do we need music? The traditinal music of a country is more important
8 - Appreciate Peter's effort in helping. .... avoid expressing opinions that might lead to controversy; here one may...
Writing FeedbackQayam - Jan 2, 2013 / dumi - Jan 8, 2013
|My grandma has made a lot for our family - essay
Writing Feedbackhuybinh111 - Jan 2, 2013 / katev - Jan 2, 2013
|Formal education start at early ages? Let children play and enjoy childhood (IELTS)
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 2, 2013 / dumi - Jan 8, 2013
|We need to give respect to our traditions and prevent to going the wrong way
4 - This is a formal essay, so do not use colloquialism like "Nowadays" or "way more". If everything in your...
Writing Feedbacknono824 - Jan 2, 2013 / Kitsumi - Jan 3, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) differences between e-learning and conventional learning.
5 - Online learning is associated with all electronic medias and devices and has no geographical or time barriers. Therefore...
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Jan 2, 2013 / dumi - Jan 3, 2013
|Should all people access advanced medical treatment? Yes ; IELTS
Writing Feedbackash5005 - Jan 2, 2013 / dumi - Jan 3, 2013
|Should the parents plan their children s leisure? Yes
Writing Feedbackaqeel - Jan 1, 2013 / aqeel - Jan 4, 2013
|PERCENTAGES OF HOUSEHOLD ITEMES; ( IELTS) table graph
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