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|Essay about my close friend, Sasha
4 - I really like how you`re approaching this piece of writing but I found that there were too many line...
Writing FeedbackSofi - Oct 21, 2012 / lollypop12 - Oct 21, 2012
|IELTS Writing Task 2, topic about yongsters
2 - Your essay is great! Well organization and well argument! However, you have to be careful with your grammar and...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 21, 2012 / Scientiana - Nov 8, 2012
|Narrative essay in betrayal; 'John Dustin was the most popular boy in school'
2 - hey... women don't envy good looking guys, but go crazy... only men envy ...lol So, I suggest you...
Writing FeedbackBluwinda - Oct 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 14, 2012
|Changes to the society and the suicide rates essay
Writing FeedbackSomeoneNoOne - Oct 20, 2012 / Sheri_Editor - Nov 13, 2012
|[TOEFL] Choose friends who are similar to yourself or different from yourself?
2 - We all have our own friends, and they can be either similar or different from us. Friends who are...
Writing Feedbackcrz_keane - Oct 20, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 21, 2012
|[TOEFL] Attending a live performance vs. TV? 'live football game at a stadium'
NEW - Hi everyone, I'm preparing for TOEFL iBT test. Please help me to improve my writing skills. This is my...
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|'It's not that easy' - The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad
2 - (The example is not that effective: say some shortcoming those are not easily available and accessible in your country...
Writing FeedbackLinhSua - Oct 19, 2012 / Mriytunjay - Oct 20, 2012
|GRE Analytical Argument Task: Memo to WWAC station
Writing Feedbackjackketch - Oct 19, 2012 / westway50 - Oct 21, 2012
|IELTS Exam: people and technology
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|This is my GRE awa practice essay - advance Thanks for Review
2 - All in all, pretty solid grammar wise and some great word choices (exaggerated, libertine, digress) I would do a...
Writing Feedbacknakul123 - Oct 19, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|'consuming less beef, lamb or fish' [ielts] Cambridge 7, test 1
2 - Beef was the most favouring meat, until 1989 it lost the first position. It, however, still maintained its second...
Writing Feedbacksliver1510 - Oct 19, 2012 / jenny45 - Nov 7, 2012
|"International Study" - Higher education should be open to all (discuss)
2 - Chhan Naroth, I completely agree with you. This applies to me because, I am from a not very rich...
Writing Feedbackchhan naroth - Oct 18, 2012 / megsters99 - Oct 18, 2012
|'exotic tourist attractions' - a comfortable living in exchange of money?
2 - Very good work. Few ideas might be added here and there, last but one paragraph is a bit confused.overall...
Writing Feedbackqwertyui - Oct 18, 2012 / priya9991 - Nov 7, 2012
|'county tournament' - narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience
Writing Feedbackalexgrey - Oct 17, 2012 / alexgrey - Oct 19, 2012
|I want to improve my writing for IELTS exam.Kindly indicate my mistakes in the essay
2 - But, these days there isIn recent years,there is an increase in sales oftrend of prepared and processed food, known...
Writing Feedbacknuroon - Oct 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 18, 2012
|news editors; country condition, citizens education, living condition; influence
Writing Feedbackademcelik - Oct 17, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 17, 2012
|'Reducing the effort' - high salary or enjoyable job essay
5 - I think you should check your grammatical structure. See the corrections i made to the paragraph just above the...
Writing Feedbacksuperhero - Oct 17, 2012 / emmasaintly - Oct 19, 2012
|IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time
7 - Sure I will practice more :), thank you dumi. @Mriytunjay : IELTS task 2 writing requires at least 250...
Writing Feedbackdonniedarko - Oct 17, 2012 / donniedarko - Oct 20, 2012
|'unsolved trouble' - Traffic Congestion leads to several critical impacts
3 - First off, you're writing in English. I believe Thai is probably your first language. I cannot write one word...
Writing Feedbackraiyan - Oct 17, 2012 / wesleysuhler - Oct 17, 2012
|'Electing a representative in government' - Essay help for midterm
2 - The entire third paragraph seems to drag on. Maybe try spacing out the essay a little better. It appears...
Writing Feedbackalexnsarria - Oct 16, 2012 / mhk1294 - Nov 11, 2012
|'complicated thinking skills' - IELTS: the main function of university
5 - .... when you rearrange the order it reads well; Should they give knowledge and skills to the graduates.......
Writing FeedbackAida - Oct 16, 2012 / dumi - Nov 9, 2012
|Happiness directly relates to economic success
4 - Jenny,thanks very much for your comment. i think i need to insert some transitional word such as " firstly,secondly...etc"...
Writing Feedbackpolsestart - Oct 16, 2012 / polsestart - Oct 16, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: How to define Happiness
2 - Some individuals feel happy when they have intimate relations (relationship) with (their) friends and family members, while others become...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 16, 2012 / mahsaa - Oct 16, 2012
|writting a parapraph about Vietnamese occasion .
NEW - Tet is the most important celebration of Vietnamese culture. It is an opportunity to reunite family and enjoy many...
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|Toefl: Students working while studying? More disadvantages than advantages
3 - Certainly dumi is right you need to support your arguments with real life examples. You can write short parapgraphs...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012 / williamcosta - Oct 16, 2012
|What are seasons? Are they as different as they seem? - essay
2 - Hello! First, I recommend changing your title; unless, of course, the title was assigned. Given the ambiguity of the...
Writing FeedbackNVShouaXyooj - Oct 15, 2012 / Sheri_Editor - Nov 7, 2012
|Essay about The Child is father of the Man
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|'Life standards and food preparation these days' - criticize my essay
Writing FeedbackDcool - Oct 14, 2012 / humanx - Oct 20, 2012
|narrative essay : the wonderful annoucement
Writing Feedbackquyensunny - Oct 14, 2012 / quyensunny - Oct 15, 2012
|'Pursuance, never succeed in track again' - College Essay Revision
2 - For the first time ever, my life, my passion, my love for track, was fading away from me like...
Writing FeedbackMeiling - Oct 14, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|Governor's School essay on social issue (apathy) that concerns me
3 - Thanks for the feedback. Unfortunately, the deadline has passed and I just went with what my teachers said. Although,...
Writing Feedbackselemi - Oct 14, 2012 / selemi - Nov 8, 2012
|Which is better for children? to grow up in the countryside or in a big city?
3 - @pirFena In my opinion, your essay is quite good, although sometimes I feel hard to understand. You used Academic...
Writing FeedbackpirFena - Oct 14, 2012 / AndreiWindy - Mar 26, 2017
|IELTS :I would prefer to run my business than to own a new house
3 - Thank you phasetwozero for your valuable comments. I am unable to understand what is the problem with following...
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 14, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|"Teachers' role in the classroom"; IELTS
5 - if I want to give an example in the first paragraph in the body like this: " Accordingly, they...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Oct 14, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 16, 2012
|Dilemma whether it is right decision to make Free health care for the POOR
Writing Feedbackfizuli - Oct 14, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 14, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1: GRaph/ consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat
2 - Hi, Williamcosta "Overall, there was a gradual decrease...." => I think you should replay Overall with In the case...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 13, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 14, 2012
|Learners have different preference s ; Self assessment
2 - You have really good ideas here, but in many cases you don't have complete sentences. Sometimes, it's just a...
Writing Feedbackrsantiago - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Is giving the same grade to every student in a group a good way to evaluate students?
5 - One more thing: your second last paragraph presents the opposite view. I am not sure about this but I...
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - Oct 13, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|'consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City' - GRE Argumentative
4 - mahsaa furthermore it is said that two-income families express more concern about healthful eating, Therefore, the new Captain Seafood...
Writing Feedbackmahsaa - Oct 13, 2012 / Halehh - Oct 31, 2012
|"in text Referencing" - This essay is correted by my teacher
2 - I think your teacher is right that you should expand your conclusion somewhat. Think about expanding your idea. Perhaps...
Writing FeedbackBraveheart - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Daily schedules and the glorious life are main reasons that the individuals work to gain money
2 - I do agree that some people work only for money. However, there are also those who work to make...
Writing Feedbackuzbek_sheikh - Oct 12, 2012 / sophiezhu - Oct 13, 2012
|Apartment Vs House; depends on individual financial status and areas of comfort
2 - Living in an apartment undoubtedly has many advantages. First of all, it is cheaper to rent or buy an...
Writing FeedbackNemoo - Oct 12, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|How important is ANZAC story to Australian Identity? clarification on this intro
4 - I just wanted clarification on the direction of my essay is going. I have dificulty writing essays, and I'm...
Writing FeedbackMaraJade10 - Oct 12, 2012 / MaraJade10 - Nov 21, 2012
|'Understanding your child' - Essay about three things good parents do
2 - The second thing is too short I think. Maybe you can add that parents should give their children more...
Writing FeedbackJasmine92 - Oct 12, 2012 / lucy123 - Oct 27, 2012
|SAT: disagreement makes progress
Writing Feedbackbeibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012 / jineshwar1995 - Oct 12, 2012
|If you want to become an expert in a certain field, do you need talent or motivation?
3 - Thank you :)...
Writing FeedbackDiana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012 / Diana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012
|Average weight of people is increasing, causes and solutions; 'burgers & pizzas'
3 - Your essay is good 1- Good vocabulary. 2- Good supporting ideas. however you have to think about the essay...
Writing Feedbackwilliamhayt - Oct 12, 2012 / Nemoo - Oct 12, 2012
|'Farmers and unemployment' - Factory near my community TOEFL
2 - This sentence has several issues; first grammer and then about clarity and its presentation. These issues tend...
Writing Feedbackhang123 - Oct 11, 2012 / dumi - Oct 12, 2012
|College Essay on Dads Heart Attack
Writing FeedbackAmzad123 - Oct 11, 2012 / edenh18 - Oct 27, 2012
|'Weekly money expenditure on fast food' - IELTS
NEW - Hi everybody, I really just need someone to read it over for me.This is Ä°ELTS writing task 1....
Writing Feedbackademcelik - Oct 11, 2012 / — -
|IELTS 'university students' tuition fees - beneficial to the public
Writing Feedbackcarole - Oct 11, 2012 / carole - Oct 12, 2012
|Work in a company vs. have your own business, TOEFL
NEW - Society is often divided into two groups regarding major issues involving occupation. Some people like to have their own...
Writing Feedbacknavid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012 / — -
|'Time of judgement' - college essay
Writing Feedbackjustintubbs - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE
2 - Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE Be sure to discuss each of these topics equally. If you were to...
Writing Feedbackphantan252 - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Academic or non academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
4 - I admire your position. However, if you use shorter sentences, your main idea will undoubtedly stand out...
Writing FeedbackGagandeep - Oct 10, 2012 / rezwan3 - Nov 1, 2012
|IELTS: World literacy rates by region and by gender; 'lower for men than women'
2 - Hello! This makes sense, but has a few grammatical errors. Lack of literacy skills IS found (currently you have...
Writing Feedbackding - Oct 10, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|does cheap air travel damage the environment
2 - Your way of description is good . Straight to the point. I like your way of description and how...
Writing FeedbackLIGE - Oct 10, 2012 / alfredeie - Nov 1, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2 - Sport man makes more money than other. Discuss both views
3 - To be success in --- To ACHIEVE success in (it must be either BE SUCCESSFUL or ACHIEVE SUCCESS) Many...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 10, 2012 / April April - Oct 16, 2012
|Harmful human activity damages the Earth
2 - Sorry for my bad english because i'm still beginner with the language. I think is very interesting the comment...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 10, 2012 / Chapapote - Oct 10, 2012
|How to use "Ratio", "Disproportion" and "volume" in the IELTS Task1 report???
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