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|IELTS_importance of academic qualifications and personality in employment
2 - After reading your passage,in addition to some of the influent sentences,I feel you'd better think about how to make...
Writing Feedbackchfrank - Oct 7, 2012 / Jue - Oct 7, 2012
|'Myths are the symbols of humans primitive cognition about the world' TOEFL ESSAY
2 - We are living in a world that isconsists of substances which are ,scientifically speaking,the productresult of the Bigbang that...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 7, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 8, 2012
|SAT essay -Which is more powerful? Conscience Vs Money, Fame, or Power
NEW - I would like some feedback on improving this, also, I would like to know what score I would get,...
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|Report on culture shock between China and French for exchange student
NEW - Hey, it is a little bit longer. Please help me look at the structure and writing. Thank you ...
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|IELTS Task 01 - Numbers of employed persons by job type and sex
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 6, 2012 / justivy03 - Apr 12, 2015
|Nuclear Family Essay - needs a LOT of reconstructing
2 - On the first sentence i think you shld remove 'or not' because it will sound better if there's only...
Writing Feedbacksamanthaxo - Oct 5, 2012 / jomk - Oct 6, 2012
|Media Analysis Essay - Vietnam War
2 - If you want to be more specific you could say, for example; that ...as independent news organizations presented real...
Writing FeedbackJustawriter7 - Oct 5, 2012 / nelsond1960 - Oct 21, 2012
|Some people believe that there should be fixed punishment of crime. Others however
2 - Mankind is subject to imperfection and its own mistakes. There are to ways to live a life either honorably...
Writing Feedbackpgaur - Oct 5, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 8, 2012
|IELTS letter: requesting some information about the scholarship
3 - jue, thanks for your suggestions by which make the viewpoint more convinced by giving more elabration on the application...
Writing Feedbackredstone - Oct 5, 2012 / redstone - Oct 6, 2012
|IELTS: Should University education be free? 'Everything has two sides'
Writing Feedbackquy - Oct 5, 2012 / pgaur - Oct 5, 2012
|IETLS writing practice: university education-preparation for employment or knowledge?
Writing FeedbackWang Ying - Oct 5, 2012 / Wang Ying - Oct 9, 2012
|Movies expand our knowledge and information about other countries. TOEFL Essay
2 - The last and most important but not the least reason is that movies enhance/escalate our knowledge about other countries....
Writing Feedbacknavid_zarif - Oct 5, 2012 / krishnakant - Oct 5, 2012
|TOEFL essay - help / technology effects
4 - internet,which -> Use space after commas internet, which is the grand an invincible product of technology of 21...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 5, 2012 / krishnakant - Oct 5, 2012
|Government expenses for roads and highways or public transportation - TOEFL essay
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 5, 2012 / besttermpaper - Oct 5, 2012
|Sat essay; punishment as kids teaching method. Intro and Body - grade it, any ways to improve it?
2 - Hi, I made a few corrections/suggestions to your essay. Hope they help. Sorry I couldn't get the strike through...
Writing FeedbackAminemouj - Oct 4, 2012 / Duffy1513 - Oct 4, 2012
|IELTS task 2 - What criteria should be used to decide how much people are paid?
2 - This statements is too broad and does not establish a close link to your topic theme.... Specify the...
Writing Feedbacklavinia94 - Oct 3, 2012 / dumi - Oct 4, 2012
|IELTS - International travel and mass media: Duchess Kate topless
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|Factors influencing job satisfaction; salary and high level position in ranking
Writing Feedbackjahan - Oct 3, 2012 / jahan - Oct 6, 2012
|IELTS ; The roads are getting more crowded with increasing number of cars
2 - With the number of cars increasing,roads are getting more crowded and the environment is becoming more polluted. But I...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 2, 2012 / giaaahhh28 - Oct 2, 2012
|IELTS; parents and schools are able to share the responsibility to educate children
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 2, 2012 / April April - Oct 6, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1 - Immigration figures for the UK
3 - Thank you so much. Those are basic errors. Unacceptable. Normally, I cannot see all of my errors, even I've...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 2, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 2, 2012
|ielts writing, traffic & environmental problems. NEED to improve to Band 7-8
3 - This sounds like an incomplete sentence. Whilst and While (both mean the same) function mostly as a conjuction...
Writing Feedbackafra514 - Oct 2, 2012 / dumi - Oct 16, 2012
|Narrative essay about the time I went on a date with my current boyfriend / "Shelby"
2 - What is the prompt? For the first paragraph, I'd recheck the punctuation. You might want to replace some semicolons...
Writing Feedbacklourdesl - Oct 1, 2012 / zeppy1995 - Oct 11, 2012
|IELTS - Traditional and International music complete each other.
Writing FeedbackAndrixH - Oct 1, 2012 / AndrixH - Oct 30, 2012
|Females & males education [IELTS] Writing Task 1_2
2 - The charts show the number of girls per 100 boys in all levels of education. Compared with nineteen's nineteenth,...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Oct 1, 2012 / goldmanswalking - Oct 21, 2012
|Cell Phones Impact on Society - they have made communication easier
3 - thank you so much!! yes you did help me alot; i added few things thanks to ur feedback...is that...
Writing Feedbackrwony - Oct 1, 2012 / rwony - Oct 1, 2012
|Creative artists should be given liberty to express themselves; like on Facebook
3 - 1. Actually i try to show that yes freedom to be given to creative persons but with some restrictions....
Writing Feedbackpgaur - Oct 1, 2012 / pgaur - Oct 1, 2012
|'How has technology affected relationships' I am preparing to score band 7+ in IELTS
3 - Hey pgaur, thanks for you comment. But could you please elaborate on this more by giving me some...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 1, 2012 / goldmanswalking - Oct 1, 2012
|Pregnant Working Women and Finance
Writing FeedbackAimeyMalambri - Oct 1, 2012 / hagertahir - Oct 27, 2012
|There are many diffrent types of music in the world today. Whay do we need music ?
NEW - Hi everybody, I am a newcomer, and I am trying to improve my writing to get ielts examination next...
Writing Feedbackluckyman - Oct 1, 2012 / — -
|Over-reliance on technology & ability of humas to think for themselves
2 - Hi! I think it's great you are trying to improve your writing skills. What I noticed in your essay...
Writing Feedbackshkh23 - Sep 30, 2012 / abbieflis - Oct 14, 2012
|(SAT Essay) Can knowledge be a burden? (grade it based on the SAT criteria)
4 - excellent writing skill and ideas are good, but the structure of the article is a little bit messy....
Writing FeedbackGuest - Sep 30, 2012 / beibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012
|An aberrant curriculum in every other state of a nation would certainly be a reason of chaos
Writing Feedbackaaqibmir007 - Sep 30, 2012 / chiragjain - Oct 21, 2012
|The best aspect of the job is the money one earns
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 29, 2012 / chadenlabiad - Oct 7, 2012
|Social Networking - how does it affect us? Need third body paragraph and conclusion.
3 - Hello bansmart06, The reason why you are stuck at your third paragraph is because the scope of your...
Writing Feedbackbansmart06 - Sep 29, 2012 / nanoflame - Oct 16, 2012
|Should we trust someone in the first impression or not?
NEW - Hi everybody, please give me some your comments for my essay. Thank you very much :) Some people...
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|Human cloning - is it moral or immoral?
2 - The meaning of the humans cloning is that scientist creates the lab human. They copy the genetic real human,...
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Sep 29, 2012 / Ownpudi - Oct 14, 2012
|Human needs vs endangered animals. TOEFL IBT ESSAY
NEW - here is the topic: some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than...
Writing Feedbackafsanehrazi - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|IELTS CUe card. Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision.
NEW - Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. You should say: who the person was what the situation...
Writing Feedbackviratdg - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|SAT - Is it always necessary to find new solutions to problems?
Writing FeedbackJenny_ysy - Sep 28, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 10, 2012
|school attend: to further knowledge, to experience new things, to earn a degree
2 - to furtherget knowledge, to experience new things, and to earn a degree. use parallel structures...
Writing Feedbackmmouse - Sep 28, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|TOEFL - 'Beethoven' - A person in history whom you want to talk to
NEW - Music has become an essential part of every one's life and many musical artists have also been idols of...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 28, 2012 / — -
|The process of chocolate production; IELTS (Report)
2 - For the word ingredient, you could try replacing some with words like "components" or "factors" Also, your introduction sentence...
Writing Feedbackthe optimists - Sep 28, 2012 / dianephm - Sep 28, 2012
|Toefl Essay "Parents should let their children to make mistakes"
3 - Dear ana_p Many thanks for your assistance I rewrite this topic Parents should let their children to make...
Writing Feedbackya3r - Sep 28, 2012 / ya3r - Sep 28, 2012
|"Winning is..." ENGL101 Honors English 101 class Narrative Essay
3 - I have this condition. It is hard to explain what happens, but mainly that is because for the most...
Writing Feedbackcrackhamster - Sep 27, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 27, 2012
|sat esay: Does the process of doing something matters more than the outcome?
Writing Feedbackeason chen - Sep 26, 2012 / MoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012
|'Luciano Pavarotti' - SAT ESSAY: Is it better for people to have limited choices?
NEW - One's life is constantly affected by the choice he or she has made. It is generally borne in on...
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|'Radical reaction and educating / warning people' - IELTS 8 WRITING TASK 2 PAG 79
Writing Feedbackpitchulinha - Sep 26, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 26, 2012
|ancient humans formed rhythms by stones; traditional vs international music
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Sep 26, 2012 / orkhan - Oct 3, 2012
|TOEFL - Should schools focus more on teaching cooperation or on teaching competition?
2 - Your essay is pretty good. It's persuasive and well written. There are some minor errors -> myself...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 25, 2012 / hxuanhung - Sep 28, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"It is not possible to eliminate poverty"
3 - Yes, you are right, but at the end of each para, I have mentioned solution or my opinion, that...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Sep 25, 2012 / ana_p - Sep 29, 2012
|[TOEFL] Being active has a lot of advantages than being passive
NEW - I'm a beginner of TOEFL writing, really hope can get some useful feedback from here to improve my poor...
Writing Feedbackelsaswhuang - Sep 25, 2012 / — -
|SAT essay [Do people learn who they are when they are forced into action?] Thanks
Writing FeedbackMacSydney - Sep 25, 2012 / eason chen - Sep 27, 2012
|I'm having trouble with my introduction. I'm afraid it may be deemed as plagerism?
4 - You actually don 't have to worry too much abt the intro cauze it happens quite often that the...
Writing FeedbackFiction - Sep 24, 2012 / DrDraco - Sep 25, 2012
|Why Sports Should Be Made Compulsory In School
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I really appreciated it!!! Sorry, i forgot to post the reference list. Anyway, I...
Writing Feedbackbeatc - Sep 24, 2012 / beatc - Sep 25, 2012
|ielts : financial education in school - should be mandatory
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Sep 24, 2012
|'Dieting - a billion dollar market' - ielts
5 - You are really just bulleting facts. You need to add connecting sentences in between each of the sentences. Your...
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 24, 2012 / oksanavy7 - Sep 24, 2012
|"Afraid" - Filipinos and reptiles essay
2 - Hello, Theresa) Welcome to EssayForum) Always include a topic or question of your essay next time. Your essay is...
Writing Feedbackoptimus3 - Sep 24, 2012 / KhanhZ - Oct 7, 2012
|'Effects of government's spending on culture and education' [IELTS] Writing Task 1_1
5 - I think it always helps to write the effects of something. You could do what cooldudebill suggested, and on...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Sep 24, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 18, 2012
|'Education should be free to all people' Do you agree or disagree with this statement
3 - thank you for your cerrection for my task. this is a practice task for my IELTS Examination. i think...
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