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|'better standard of living for people' - ielts - 2 task
4 - I've changed the pointed mistakes by you guys thank you very much, I really need to get down to...
Writing Feedbackskop - Nov 10, 2012 / skop - Nov 11, 2012
|'From Qatar and an independent school for girls' - about yourself
Writing Feedbackdmj - Nov 10, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 11, 2012
|'all writers started career at their 20s' - Ielts - graph
Writing Feedbackgop - Nov 10, 2012 / dumi - Nov 12, 2012
|'Coral Gables, Miami' - My lost palace
3 - What about Coral Gables makes you like getting lost? Getting lost is usually not pleasant, so what about the...
Writing Feedbackjincera1 - Nov 10, 2012 / cezyou - Nov 10, 2012
|'Independent, Artistic, Curious' - 3 WORDS TO DESCRIBE YOURSELF ESSAY
5 - MY SECOND DRAFT. I get rid of the curiosity part because I cannot find anything else to back it...
Writing Feedbacksydvu76 - Nov 9, 2012 / sydvu76 - Nov 14, 2012
|How dependent we are on machines? / Are machines going to take over the world?
NEW - We are living in a society which is called a "technologically civilized" society. Every small work that we do...
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|Essay about taxation to reduce air traffic - feedback
Writing FeedbackMSMK - Nov 9, 2012 / MSMK - Nov 9, 2012
|'positive and inspirational trend' - IELTS: Creative artists' freedom
Writing Feedbackhumanx - Nov 8, 2012 / humanx - Nov 11, 2012
|This is a research paper on whether Social Networks causes relationships to end
NEW - The guidelines for this paper are as follows Transition sentence to get from the previous paragraph Topic sentence Supporting...
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|'Educate first' - an uneducated person cannot teach an educated person.
2 - Notes -You keep switching between "someone" and "you". Pick one -Openings and closings are too short -Grammar, Punctuation -Honestly,...
Writing Feedbackmepo - Nov 8, 2012 / petemess95 - Nov 16, 2012
|benefits and drawbacks of studying abroad...argumentative essay
2 - However, as a coin has two sides,this situationstudying abroad brings both benefits and drawbacks. The advantages of getting a...
Writing Feedbackspongebob123 - Nov 8, 2012 / Shoko0229 - Nov 22, 2012
|WritingTask1: Boys and Girls cultural and leisure activities
2 - Your essay is great. However, I suggest you to use more linking words such as on the contrary, while,...
Writing FeedbackHewlett1920 - Nov 8, 2012 / Scientiana - Nov 19, 2012
|IElLTS - reducing pollution and damage to the remote environments
Writing Feedbackjenny45 - Nov 8, 2012 / skop - Nov 12, 2012
|'money-centered people' - Judging person by his social status and material possessions - ielts
Writing Feedbackmanjit809 - Nov 8, 2012 / manjit809 - Nov 8, 2012
|'working for the childrens right' - Children engaged in paid work essay
5 - Hi Ibadullah, From the writing task description, I can see that this is for the IELTS writing exam....
Writing Feedbackibadullah - Nov 6, 2012 / Inspired2012 - Nov 14, 2012
|Is money synonymous to success?
Writing FeedbackCharmaine VC - Nov 7, 2012 / Charmaine VC - Nov 8, 2012
|TOEFL - Improving conditions - Has human harmed the Earth or made it a better place?
Writing FeedbackMunkhjin - Nov 7, 2012 / dumi - Nov 9, 2012
|'Effort to keep some things private' - question for the SAT
3 - Society did not have the opportunity to share "its" opinions is a really great thing - seems a little...
Writing Feedbackjazzyjj - Nov 7, 2012 / archie18 - Nov 28, 2012
|'Harmful effects' - IELTS Essay about the influence of advertisement
Writing Feedbackying0216 - Nov 7, 2012 / ying0216 - Nov 11, 2012
|Power of advertisements are overrated!
3 - Thankyou ah_zafari for your suggestions, I will try to improve those fiels which you highlited....
Writing Feedbackpriya9991 - Nov 7, 2012 / priya9991 - Nov 10, 2012
|History shows us how forgetful human beings are
Writing Feedbackrkandil - Nov 7, 2012 / jincera1 - Nov 7, 2012
|'museum can attract visitors' - [ielts] topic with museum
8 - Plz every one comment on this There are different kinds of people having different personalities and opinions living...
Writing Feedbackrenlyso - Nov 7, 2012 / ibadullah - Nov 10, 2012
|'Good atmosphere' - What change to hometown more appealing to people your age?
4 - "Although there are many buses in the urban and rural area, but it is pretty hard for people to...
Writing Feedbackpurplepotato - Nov 7, 2012 / zahras93 - Nov 11, 2012
|[graph] Percentage of students giving good ratings - IELTS review
Writing Feedbackbigbang15101990 - Nov 7, 2012 / renlyso - Nov 7, 2012
|The power of advertising and ads in the commerce essay
4 - ah_zafari Thanks for your valuable advice. Please see If this change can be helpful in introduction :- ...
Writing Feedbackmanjit809 - Nov 7, 2012 / manjit809 - Nov 7, 2012
|Dishonesty in relationship / Should you be always truthful?
3 - thanks a lot!...
Writing FeedbackMai_Alexei - Nov 6, 2012 / Mai_Alexei - Nov 8, 2012
|'years to build' - WILL I EVER TRUST AGAIN?
3 - Thanks for the reply it really helped i changed it to "I will remember that conversation until the day...
Writing Feedbacktata98 - Nov 6, 2012 / tata98 - Nov 6, 2012
|'What I taught myself' - Essay Revision
Writing Feedbackdudeman - Nov 6, 2012 / ysysysys - Nov 10, 2012
|'More comfortable with parents' - Toefl Essay-Parents are the best teacher.
2 - Hai Sonia... Always write the question because, there are so many types of essays.. it was simple...
Writing Feedbackchikoo09 - Nov 6, 2012 / joythblessy - Nov 24, 2012
|TECHNOLOGICAL FOODS IS HARMFUL TO PEOPLE'S HEALTH ( IELTS )
3 - HI.dzung1991 Beside motivator, general background should be given in the introduction. However, ah_zafari said that the opinion should...
Writing Feedbackdzung1991 - Nov 6, 2012 / renlyso - Nov 10, 2012
|AP Lang Essay: The Twerp in the Photo is Me
Writing FeedbackKnighted - Nov 6, 2012 / Martin80 - Nov 15, 2012
|IELTS,ESSAY with topic Relationship between different countries
Writing Feedbackrenlyso - Nov 6, 2012 / renlyso - Nov 7, 2012
|IELTS; Rural depopulation- Effects and Suggestions to reverse the trend
NEW - Hi guys, I'm practicing for the IELTS test and here is my essay. Could you please help me to...
Writing Feedbackbibica - Nov 6, 2012 / — -
|Fast food brings us more avails than drawbacks (IELTS task 2)
Writing Feedbackclackkent - Nov 6, 2012 / humanx - Nov 8, 2012
|Feedback- Has technology isolated us from society and nature?
Writing Feedbackmap181 - Nov 5, 2012 / sailinalbion - Nov 6, 2012
|[IELST task 2] Topic parents or school should teach children
2 - This opening statement sounds a bit deviated from the topic which deals more with teaching children social skills...
Writing Feedbacksilentwarrior - Nov 5, 2012 / dumi - Nov 6, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid commu
Writing Feedbackjenny45 - Nov 5, 2012 / sydvu76 - Nov 29, 2012
|IELTS ; Nowadays travelling abroad is more convenient and cheaper!
Writing Feedbackanar_ - Nov 5, 2012 / anar_ - Nov 16, 2012
|Humanity is in a tight fit with carbon emissions and climate change; NUCLEAR ENERGY
Writing FeedbackJude2005 - Nov 5, 2012 / CubiksRuber - Nov 23, 2012
|"Love, Loyalty, Trust are the three things to lead a good relationship in life"
Writing Feedbackpal - Nov 5, 2012 / pal - Nov 7, 2012
|Advantages of learning English
3 - Thank to Jennyflower81 for adjusting my writing. The adjusted writing is very helpful for me in the next English...
Writing Feedbackhuybinh111 - Nov 5, 2012 / huybinh111 - Nov 5, 2012
|'technology does not kill the tradition'
Writing Feedbackibadullah - Nov 5, 2012 / ibadullah - Mar 18, 2013
|Individualism and Personal Diversity
Writing Feedback2320beyodor - Nov 5, 2012 / canyouhelpme - Nov 21, 2012
|Friendship and financial matters essay - money can harm relationship?
Writing Feedbackmanjit809 - Nov 5, 2012 / manjit809 - Nov 6, 2012
|Bad sides in public hospitals and the gap between the rich and the poor
4 - I think you should write more about the problem stated in the prompt. Reword the topic as a thesis...
Writing FeedbackHeina - Nov 4, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 6, 2012
|"Today is not a winter day yet. Why is it so thrill?" ; Narrative paragraph
2 - ---------- better rephrase this; it doesn't come clearly : ( Either she couldn't open her eyes or...
Writing FeedbackJames89 - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 17, 2012
|The Cobra - journey to the Amazon; Narrative Essay
2 - Being in nature is very good forexcellent not only physically but also mentally as wellhealth ....
Writing FeedbackHelenSwan - Nov 4, 2012 / geebs5 - Nov 20, 2012
|Most of my family members refer to me by the colloquial expression "foodie" I'm more gourmand though
3 - This essay is very attention grabbing and detailed, I pretty much can see a picture in my mind of...
Writing Feedbackmagnamaxx13 - Nov 4, 2012 / bintadiallo - Nov 26, 2012
|IELTS Essay : Borrowing money from a friend is harmful to friendship
Writing Feedbackw_even - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 5, 2012
|Common App (Essay B) - The Importance of Worldwide Cooperation
Writing FeedbackThePirateKing - Nov 4, 2012 / rezwan3 - Nov 4, 2012
|My IELTS Task 1 Reports (UK citizens travel abroad and the countries visited)
Writing Feedbackahmedsamir - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 19, 2012
|The average weight of people is increasing/ What do you think about this trend?
7 - There are several reasons for this alarming trend, but measures could be taken to tackle the problem. ...
Writing Feedbackdzung1991 - Nov 4, 2012 / Pahan - Dec 2, 2012
|'improvement of education' - change something in your hometown
5 - That is something you can fix quickly through learning. However, in essay writing you need more things; good...
Writing Feedbackyammm95 - Nov 4, 2012 / dumi - Nov 4, 2012
|moving to America when I was three as the biggest struggle - personal statement
2 - Why not start with "the people,the environment...unfamiliar to me" this will keep the reader wondering up until the 4th...
Writing FeedbackMemona - Nov 3, 2012 / Phoebe Africa - Nov 3, 2012
|Do the Right Thing Violence Paper
3 - Thank you!...
Writing FeedbackLyndsey9201 - Nov 3, 2012 / Lyndsey9201 - Nov 4, 2012
|capital punishment is a brustal decision and should be abolished?
2 - Honestly, this essay is not very convincing. I stand with you, but if I didn't, then this would not...
Writing Feedbackphamngocduy - Nov 3, 2012 / ericramon - Nov 3, 2012
|How many hours of 10-11 years old schoolchildren spent time on home activities
2 - The graphic shows how many hours of 10-11 years old schoolchildren spent time on home activities between televisions and...
Writing FeedbackWal - Nov 3, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 8, 2012
|Higher education of advanced learning and teaching - better jobs for graduates?
3 - I have some suggestions on your second essay. Hope you find them helpful. No doubt, humans beings that are...
Writing Feedbackmanjit809 - Nov 3, 2012 / ah_zafari - Nov 6, 2012
|IELTS ESSAY: PARENTS ARE THE BEST TEACHERS
Writing Feedbackjohnz777z - Nov 3, 2012 / MaryMary - Nov 6, 2012
|Fiction books are better than reality? - essay
3 - Contain means capable of holding something. So you should use it with what it is holding. Eg. contain...
Writing Feedbackasdfgg - Nov 2, 2012 / dumi - Nov 2, 2012
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