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|An aberrant curriculum in every other state of a nation would certainly be a reason of chaos
Writing Feedbackaaqibmir007 - Sep 30, 2012 / chiragjain - Oct 21, 2012
|The best aspect of the job is the money one earns
Writing Feedbackhamedmas - Sep 29, 2012 / chadenlabiad - Oct 7, 2012
|Social Networking - how does it affect us? Need third body paragraph and conclusion.
3 - Hello bansmart06, The reason why you are stuck at your third paragraph is because the scope of your...
Writing Feedbackbansmart06 - Sep 29, 2012 / nanoflame - Oct 16, 2012
|Should we trust someone in the first impression or not?
NEW - Hi everybody, please give me some your comments for my essay. Thank you very much :) Some people...
Writing Feedbackxucoi - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|Human cloning - is it moral or immoral?
2 - The meaning of the humans cloning is that scientist creates the lab human. They copy the genetic real human,...
Writing Feedbackabcdefgh - Sep 29, 2012 / Ownpudi - Oct 14, 2012
|Human needs vs endangered animals. TOEFL IBT ESSAY
NEW - here is the topic: some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than...
Writing Feedbackafsanehrazi - Sep 29, 2012 / — -
|IELTS CUe card. Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision.
NEW - Describe someone you know who made a wrong decision. You should say: who the person was what the situation...
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|SAT - Is it always necessary to find new solutions to problems?
Writing FeedbackJenny_ysy - Sep 28, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 10, 2012
|school attend: to further knowledge, to experience new things, to earn a degree
2 - to furtherget knowledge, to experience new things, and to earn a degree. use parallel structures...
Writing Feedbackmmouse - Sep 28, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|TOEFL - 'Beethoven' - A person in history whom you want to talk to
NEW - Music has become an essential part of every one's life and many musical artists have also been idols of...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 28, 2012 / — -
|The process of chocolate production; IELTS (Report)
2 - For the word ingredient, you could try replacing some with words like "components" or "factors" Also, your introduction sentence...
Writing Feedbackthe optimists - Sep 28, 2012 / dianephm - Sep 28, 2012
|Toefl Essay "Parents should let their children to make mistakes"
3 - Dear ana_p Many thanks for your assistance I rewrite this topic Parents should let their children to make...
Writing Feedbackya3r - Sep 28, 2012 / ya3r - Sep 28, 2012
|"Winning is..." ENGL101 Honors English 101 class Narrative Essay
3 - I have this condition. It is hard to explain what happens, but mainly that is because for the most...
Writing Feedbackcrackhamster - Sep 27, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 27, 2012
|sat esay: Does the process of doing something matters more than the outcome?
Writing Feedbackeason chen - Sep 26, 2012 / MoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012
|'Luciano Pavarotti' - SAT ESSAY: Is it better for people to have limited choices?
NEW - One's life is constantly affected by the choice he or she has made. It is generally borne in on...
Writing Feedbackeason chen - Sep 26, 2012 / — -
|'Radical reaction and educating / warning people' - IELTS 8 WRITING TASK 2 PAG 79
Writing Feedbackpitchulinha - Sep 26, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 26, 2012
|ancient humans formed rhythms by stones; traditional vs international music
Writing Feedbackorkhan - Sep 26, 2012 / orkhan - Oct 3, 2012
|TOEFL - Should schools focus more on teaching cooperation or on teaching competition?
2 - Your essay is pretty good. It's persuasive and well written. There are some minor errors -> myself...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 25, 2012 / hxuanhung - Sep 28, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"It is not possible to eliminate poverty"
3 - Yes, you are right, but at the end of each para, I have mentioned solution or my opinion, that...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Sep 25, 2012 / ana_p - Sep 29, 2012
|[TOEFL] Being active has a lot of advantages than being passive
NEW - I'm a beginner of TOEFL writing, really hope can get some useful feedback from here to improve my poor...
Writing Feedbackelsaswhuang - Sep 25, 2012 / — -
|SAT essay [Do people learn who they are when they are forced into action?] Thanks
Writing FeedbackMacSydney - Sep 25, 2012 / eason chen - Sep 27, 2012
|I'm having trouble with my introduction. I'm afraid it may be deemed as plagerism?
4 - You actually don 't have to worry too much abt the intro cauze it happens quite often that the...
Writing FeedbackFiction - Sep 24, 2012 / DrDraco - Sep 25, 2012
|Why Sports Should Be Made Compulsory In School
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I really appreciated it!!! Sorry, i forgot to post the reference list. Anyway, I...
Writing Feedbackbeatc - Sep 24, 2012 / beatc - Sep 25, 2012
|ielts : financial education in school - should be mandatory
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 24, 2012 / joythblessy - Sep 24, 2012
|'Dieting - a billion dollar market' - ielts
5 - You are really just bulleting facts. You need to add connecting sentences in between each of the sentences. Your...
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 24, 2012 / oksanavy7 - Sep 24, 2012
|"Afraid" - Filipinos and reptiles essay
2 - Hello, Theresa) Welcome to EssayForum) Always include a topic or question of your essay next time. Your essay is...
Writing Feedbackoptimus3 - Sep 24, 2012 / KhanhZ - Oct 7, 2012
|'Effects of government's spending on culture and education' [IELTS] Writing Task 1_1
5 - I think it always helps to write the effects of something. You could do what cooldudebill suggested, and on...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Sep 24, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 18, 2012
|'Education should be free to all people' Do you agree or disagree with this statement
3 - thank you for your cerrection for my task. this is a practice task for my IELTS Examination. i think...
Writing Feedbacksmxzdy528 - Sep 23, 2012 / smxzdy528 - Sep 28, 2012
|TOEFL - People should have hobbies and activities different from their own work
Writing FeedbackEVAzyy - Sep 22, 2012 / dumi - Sep 25, 2012
|IELTS - Education is a critical driver and a game changer for any country's development
Writing Feedbackvikki - Sep 22, 2012 / layla88 - Sep 26, 2012
|[TOEFL] Impacts of airplanes on modern life
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 22, 2012 / vikki - Sep 24, 2012
|TOEFL Essay - Small or large class - which is better?
NEW - I have just started writting TOEFL essay, thus, your support is so much appreciated! . TOPIC: Do you...
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 22, 2012 / — -
|Concert Report for Les Miserables at Ellen Eccles Theater
3 - I would like feedback from a person that knows music.. No offense but I'm not getting graded on sentence...
Writing Feedbackmdehek - Sep 22, 2012 / mdehek - Sep 27, 2012
|"Do zoos serve any useful function?" - TOEFL ESSAY - ZOOS
2 - You can try to expand more the third paragraph. I think it's quite short compared to the second paragraph....
Writing Feedbackhovan0201 - Sep 22, 2012 / hxuanhung - Sep 27, 2012
|Having two phases - Information gathering & Analyzing; Approach of problem solving
3 - People use different solution methods: 1. Define the problem. 2. Reasons why the problem occured. 3. What do you...
Writing Feedbackmeili luo - Sep 22, 2012 / cahillcahill - Sep 28, 2012
|'Having written many essays' - Introduction of Myself
NEW - I've been writing many essays already since my grade school years and one of my favorites is writing about...
Writing Feedbackavrillorraine - Sep 21, 2012 / — -
|IELTS -Eating in many Western countries
3 - Thank you very much for the feedback. This was my first essay for IELTS, so I don't have very...
Writing Feedbackcolor - Sep 21, 2012 / color - Sep 22, 2012
|[IELTS] advantages vs disadvantages .requiring revision
Writing Feedbackcanadyfor - Sep 21, 2012 / canadyfor - Sep 23, 2012
|Choosing the place of working - IELTS ESSAY
Writing Feedbackxuanda - Sep 21, 2012 / vikki - Sep 24, 2012
|TOEFL: I prefer to learn by a teacher - can learn the subject a lot deeper
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Sep 21, 2012 / MoonMoon - Sep 23, 2012
|Property prices and rents affected the livelihood of many Hong Kong people?
Writing Feedbackzer000 - Sep 20, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 10, 2012
|My Essay "Heros or Tyrants?" - Needs critique and help with transitions......
Writing FeedbackJMcClain - Sep 20, 2012 / elevit2 - Sep 27, 2012
|'Ah Kang' - Narrative writing- freedom
3 - Thank you very much and your comment is really helpful~ LOL ya it is indeed quite a silly mistake...
Writing Feedbacksecschoolboy - Sep 20, 2012 / secschoolboy - Sep 25, 2012
|IELTS - To reduce traffic in cities, we should reduce traveling by people
Writing Feedbackhoshmp - Sep 20, 2012 / dumi - Sep 25, 2012
|'success and knowledge' - [TOEFL] Learning about the past has no value
NEW - Topic: Learning about the past has no value on for those of us living the present. Do you agree...
Writing Feedbackminhmetalhead - Sep 19, 2012 / — -
|[IELTS] Artificail robots substitute human
2 - there are some of my critisms: - The title doesn't fit the content of essay. - your body paragraph,...
Writing FeedbackPATRICK84 - Sep 19, 2012 / xuanda - Sep 21, 2012
|An Analysis of Outsourcing Information Systems
Writing Feedbackmonajha - Sep 18, 2012 / kbambisa - Sep 19, 2012
|Read the selection below on glycolysis. Rewrite this in your own words
2 - splitting sugar also known as glycolisis, is split into three carbon sugar These smaller sugars are then oxidized then...
Writing Feedbackclarke13 - Sep 18, 2012 / chadenlabiad - Oct 7, 2012
|Toefl Topic: Knowledge from experience or knowledge from books?
Writing Feedbackmeili luo - Sep 18, 2012 / meili luo - Sep 19, 2012
|IELTS Essay: Pollution, traffic congestion and solutions
2 - Drivers should be charged for congestion fee, thus this will force people to use public transport rather than private...
Writing Feedbackquy - Sep 17, 2012 / monajha - Sep 17, 2012
|certain high schools require students to learn foreign language while other let stude
2 - schools are playing very bigimportant role to makein improving a students'carriercareer (SPELLING) prospects . only school build's up a...
Writing Feedbackbhupender - Sep 17, 2012 / April April - Sep 21, 2012
|[IELTS TASK 2] Developing countries are focusing on tourism. Reason and your opinion.
2 - Nowadays, an increasing number of impoverished nations are focusing on the development of tourism. It(There) is no doubt that...
Writing Feedbackrtfbvg - Sep 17, 2012 / quy - Sep 17, 2012
|[IELTS] People's diet and traditional foods
Writing FeedbackEhsan - Sep 17, 2012 / Ehsan - Sep 20, 2012
|Toefl: Do you agree or disagree? "Automobile has improved modern life"
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Sep 17, 2012 / ace - Sep 18, 2012
|'Past achievements are requirements of a significant contribution' A GRE ISSUE
2 - Your introduction is a bit unclear, it is wordy and hard to understand. write it in a clear concise...
Writing Feedbackiceyniex - Sep 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 30, 2012
|College narrative essay on a moment of success.
Writing Feedbackomo5031 - Sep 17, 2012 / the optimists - Sep 28, 2012
|Love or Jealousy paragraph- Is this to harsh?
2 - is stronger because it thieves and festers off the ever-present pillars of Truth and Reality. Yeah it is...
Writing FeedbackTooDamn_Funky - Sep 16, 2012 / Pirateking - Sep 16, 2012
|Toefl essay feedback: (Agree/Disagree) Employers should employ long-life worker.
2 - There has appeared endless controversy over human resource. One controversial issue for human resources is whether or not to...
Writing Feedbackhuonglt11 - Sep 16, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Sep 18, 2012
|IELTS Essay: Talent or Training
NEW - Could you please check my essay and give me some feedback? I would appreciate it. Topic: It is...
Writing Feedbackalexskyes - Sep 16, 2012 / — -
|It all began when I moved away from my life in Siberia; Life Story/ GCSE ESSAY
Writing Feedbackconversefloss - Sep 15, 2012 / EF_Susan - Sep 27, 2012
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