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|TOEFL Essay,"Influence of information available on internet"
3 - --------- change the order; In ancient days, people had to travel a lot to find out information...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 13, 2012 / dumi - Jul 13, 2012
|A POSİTİVE OUTLOOK and people's lives
3 - thank you for checking and could you please explain that how I can improve my sentence sturucture and can...
Writing Feedbackccrnn - Jul 13, 2012 / ccrnn - Jul 13, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"It was easy in past to identify career or job"
2 - I think you should improve the organization of the introduction. The highlighted sentence includes the points that you...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 13, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 13, 2012
|'reducing the frequent use of airplane' - IELTS
7 - Thanks :)...
Writing Feedbackairpunklee - Jul 13, 2012 / airpunklee - Jul 14, 2012
|IELTS: Public libraries, learning materials, and limited resources on Video, DVD
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 12, 2012 / dumi - Jul 14, 2012
|[IELTS] 'considering their situations and motives' - fixed crime punishment or not?
5 - I think if you could add some practical examples to prove your opinion, that would be better. Best...
Writing Feedbackpratikdbl - Jul 12, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 14, 2012
|Teachers must have fixed and high salary regardless if they do a good job or not
2 - Good essay!! However, from my quick look 1. Check your commas, where you should put and where not....
Writing FeedbackLILUSH - Jul 12, 2012 / pratikdbl - Jul 12, 2012
|HEALTH AND HYGIENE - Many diseases can be prevented
NEW - TERENCETUFUOR HEALTH AND HYGEINE Many diseases can be prevented from having a damaging effect on the body by...
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|IELTS: Convenience foods cannot replace traditional methods of cooking
Writing Feedbacksmogito - Jul 12, 2012 / smogito - Jul 16, 2012
|Ielts ( preventing crimes with childhood behavior analyzing)
Writing FeedbackAlicesh - Jul 12, 2012 / dumi - Nov 20, 2012
|Spending a semester in a foreign university (GRE Issue Essay)
4 - I think the content is good. U provided some good examples, but there is an important thing that...
Writing Feedbackcomputergem - Jul 11, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 12, 2012
|Where do communal responsibility and individual responsibility begin and end?
6 - Everyone get stuck once in a while, Denzel. The main point is that you must try harder and you'll...
Writing Feedbackdenzelmcd - Jul 11, 2012 / KhanhZ - Jul 12, 2012
|Essay about too much payment for film and sports stars - feed back
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Writing Feedbackpravi - Jul 11, 2012 / dumi - Jul 12, 2012
|'gossip-based information' - toefl ibt
4 - A very impressive introduction. I introduced a small change to strengthen your flow further. One small tip...
Writing FeedbackNataschaAbra - Jul 11, 2012 / dumi - Jul 11, 2012
|[IELTS] People born with talent or taught later
Writing Feedbackpratikdbl - Jul 11, 2012 / pratikdbl - Jul 12, 2012
|IELTS Topic: Predict a child to be a criminal in the future by studying his behavior
4 - Thank you 'pravi, Alicesh, deepakbaniya and smogito'. The advice that you provide is valuable and helpful. I will modify...
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 11, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 12, 2012
|Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in
2 - I believe that teenagers nowadays is very difficult. But I totally agree wit you. Nice one Tau...
Writing FeedbackALI ASADI - Jul 11, 2012 / tau - Jul 11, 2012
|IELTS: wellbeing at work
Writing Feedbackmarczawa - Jul 10, 2012 / Slim shady - Jul 11, 2012
|highest purpose of university education, personal or national goals?
2 - Many individuals wonder the about the highest purpose of university education. The founders of tertiary institutions all around...
Writing Feedbackjueeem - Jul 10, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jul 10, 2012
|'transporting goods on railway and pipeline' IELTS
4 - WHat exactly the letter "m" mean? Million? Do not use abbreviation in IELTS writing! I think the phrase "On...
Writing FeedbackNguyen_Dung - Jul 10, 2012 / PvtValley - Jul 14, 2012
|IELTS; How technology has affected the types of relationships people make?
3 - introduction: Toady new technology has become as indispensable part of my life and has affected a positive and negative...
Writing Feedbackduongphuong473 - Jul 10, 2012 / ALI ASADI - Jul 10, 2012
|'coming up with solution for social problems' - essay about issues and young people
Writing FeedbackPvtValley - Jul 9, 2012 / PvtValley - Jul 10, 2012
|'smiling at my own face' - AN ESSAY ABOUT MYSELF...WHAT MAKES ME 'ME'
6 - That awkward moment when you read your old posts... Like, damn! T_____T So, to everyone reading it now,...
Writing FeedbackGuest - Jul 9, 2012 / Guest - Oct 22, 2015
|IELTS Writing task 1: Percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet
2 - Hi, the essay contains 148 words, while u should write at least 150 words. However, I think the essay...
Writing Feedbacksmogito - Jul 9, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 9, 2012
|IELTS Topic: How do organizations give help to poor countries
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 9, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 10, 2012
|It is said that the human beings are becoming slaves of modern technology
5 - You begin the sentence with electricity and then talk about computers without establishing a link between them....
Writing Feedbackkissingyou0912 - Jul 9, 2012 / dumi - Jul 11, 2012
|[IELTS] - Topic:international organisations should provide technology
Writing Feedbackaimee8812 - Jul 9, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 11, 2012
|'money is much important' - The Main reason people go to work is to earn money
6 - I think you have been given enough corrections about your grammar, so I'm only go to suggest a few...
Writing Feedbackhadi1981 - Jul 9, 2012 / smogito - Jul 12, 2012
|'many motives' - Why go to University?
Writing FeedbackBahrom_4474 - Jul 9, 2012 / Bahrom_4474 - Jul 12, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY : best time usage - people visit museums when they travel to new places?
3 - These two sentences are very poor for opening your essay. They do not add value to your argument...
Writing Feedbackartin - Jul 9, 2012 / dumi - Jul 9, 2012
|"our" city, bank and school district - Causal Essay, English 101
4 - Good job , and thanks for your comments Ahmad. You are always brilliant really You deserve more than 7...
Writing Feedbacklovekayliex - Jul 8, 2012 / hadi1981 - Jul 9, 2012
|'camping in the mountains' - Ideal Vacation Literary Essay
4 - Well.... I just gave you my suggestions for this part of your essay in view of improving its presentation....
Writing FeedbackSharonNicole - Jul 8, 2012 / dumi - Jul 9, 2012
|[IELTS] Teenagers with unpaid work is justifiable!
2 - ----- as Ahmad suggested, you better rephrase this sentence because your idea does not come out with...
Writing Feedbackpinkyjuju - Jul 8, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY:In the future, students have the choice of studying at home by using tech
5 - Dear farzin_1875 in my opinion , It will be useful if you consider some note as below: 1- take...
Writing Feedbackfarzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012 / ALI ASADI - Jul 10, 2012
|'acceptable solutions for global village' - IELTS-Globalisation
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 8, 2012 / EF_Team - Jul 8, 2012
|Toefl essay:Every generation of people is different in important ways. How is your
Writing Feedbackfarzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012 / farzin_1875 - Jul 8, 2012
|'outstanding sport players deserve high salaries' - Essay
NEW - TASK: Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people...
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|IELTS-people who have original ideas... (scientists and innovators)
2 - For an "agree and disagree" topic, an introduction should have four main parts :1) Motivator: use interesting opening sentence...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 7, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 7, 2012
|IELTS-international media and cultural diversity.....
2 - -- cultural diversity means a variety of cultures in a specific region; cultural globalization actually refers to...
Writing FeedbackSlim shady - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|'forced to become my own competitor' - UCF Essay
Writing Feedbackbbird17 - Jul 7, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 9, 2012
|IELTS: Should people take care of others_Discuss?
9 - Absolutely! I will consider your suggestions and write my own version for the clincher. Thank you so much, Ahmad!...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 7, 2012 / April April - Jul 8, 2012
|Questioning Authority: Agree or Disagree (GRE Issue Essay)
11 - wow great essay!!!! can you give me some suggestions on writing.. I have many ideas but I am poor...
Writing Feedbackdeepakbaniya - Jul 7, 2012 / supercool - Jul 24, 2012
|IELTS essay: Should government immunize people compulsively?
3 - --------------Though you have issues with presenting your ideas clearly, this introductory para is in line with the expected...
Writing FeedbackTinaGu - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 8, 2012
|THE STUDY OF CHARACTER AND THEIR DEVELOPMENT OR THE STUDY OF LANGUAGE DEVELOPMENT
9 - This is about the research and describing it, is through alot of investigation that God's people have good...
Writing Feedbackjoshuanderitu01 - Jul 7, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 16, 2012
|"my aunt's weeding" - recent news story affected you the most?
Writing Feedbacksherry_6711 - Jul 7, 2012 / sherry_6711 - Jul 9, 2012
|IELTS essay : About factors of job satisfaction
Writing FeedbackPaijin - Jul 7, 2012 / Paijin - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS - REWRITE - Public libraries should not provide books only
Writing Feedbackltw - Jul 7, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 8, 2012
|IELTS - REWRITE - children development and modern games
4 - The only way you can improve your speed is by practicing to write more and more essays. Also reading...
Writing Feedbackltw - Jul 7, 2012 / dumi - Jul 7, 2012
|TOEFL ESSAY:Growing violence in films has affected youngsters in a negative way?
10 - You choose very important topic. Growing violence in films has affected not only youngsters but also it has affected...
Writing Feedbackartin - Jul 6, 2012 / Bahrom_4474 - Jul 13, 2012
|RENTING A HOUSE -PROS AND CONS
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 6, 2012 / dumi - Jul 6, 2012
|(Music Choice / Pop Parade) IELTS COMPARISON OF TWO NEW MUSIC SITES
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 6, 2012 / April April - Jul 7, 2012
|The skill of writing letters will disappear completely - do you agree?
2 - Mobile phones and computers , which are accompanied by thea considerable development ofin technology, have today become two...
Writing Feedbackjessicapham1612 - Jul 6, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 7, 2012
|'science books and skill books' - What kinds of books should we read?
2 - Books are one of the best tools that help connecting the world. Nowadays, many books are established, which makes...
Writing Feedbackpinkyjuju - Jul 6, 2012 / akanjigbolahan - Jul 6, 2012
|'to improve language little by little' - Children Learn Foreign Language Early
2 - The first and second sentences are disconnected to each other. What technological developments have to do with language...
Writing FeedbackKlein Evans - Jul 6, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 6, 2012
|The best way to achieve happiness is not to make others happy.
2 - We all are social animal. the system prevailing in this world is like no one can live by cutting...
Writing FeedbackJeslyn - Jul 6, 2012 / suggestion - Jul 7, 2012
|IELTS - Death Penalty Committing Murder, Climate Change, Mass media shape ideas
3 - Maybe in the first essay, you wanna say "Life in prison is better than death penalty. Because - "...
Writing Feedbacktashappleaddict - Jul 5, 2012 / Jeslyn - Jul 6, 2012
|IELTS essay : Fixed punishment for each type of crime or Flexibility in punishing?
6 - your ideas are not well-organized. you should pay attention to the topic question. in the essay you wrote...
Writing FeedbackPaijin - Jul 5, 2012 / Slim shady - Jul 7, 2012
|Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends
NEW - Popular hobbies and interests change over time and are more a reflection of trends and fashions than an indication...
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|Without the benefit of planning, people are likely to make uninformed decisions
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|'any child can be taught to develop their skill' People are born with certain talents
4 - This is true.... You better rephrase this sentence because it does not sound logical :) .... good call...
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