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|IELTS-Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time.
2 - Hai dev.. Over all good attempt....). You have so many good points also...). Be careful about the...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS Writing- Jury should not be given the past criminal records of a defendant
3 - These sentences does not refer to anything of your topic. In the introduction you should introduce topic to...
Writing FeedbackBinny - Feb 1, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) effect of mobile phones on young children.
12 - Hai Somy... Yes, you are right...)Ř› But you mentioned your opinion in the introduction itself.. Sorry for...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Feb 1, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 3, 2013
|IELTS- people have different way of escaping the stress and difficulties
5 - you used many places stress instead use another vocabulary like anxiety, pressure, strain, tension, trauma, distress...
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Feb 1, 2013 / devabe2005 - Feb 1, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) Effects of reading newspaper and watching television news
6 - In the modern world, media such as newspapers and television have become an integral part of peoples' lives....
Writing Feedbackrombos - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Feb 6, 2013
|Lazy talk - Television is dangerous because it has destroyed the family living and communication.
2 - .... I suggest you to present this differently; Some people argue that Television distances the family members and...
Writing Feedbackabcd1234 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS-Children prefer electronic games to other games and toys.Why is it happening
2 - It should be either "rapid technological advancement" or "technological revolution" "Software companies deliver " is the correct form....
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 31, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|(practicing writing) Should first world countries offer economic help to third world?
3 - Thank you very much for your points there! =) I'm not practicing for a certificate (not yet though),...
Writing Feedbackkiniggit - Jan 31, 2013 / kiniggit - Jan 31, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) effects of electronic games on children
4 - ... Your sentence is too complex.. Let's simplify it. Today, it is not an unfamiliar sight to see...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 31, 2013 / Pahan - Jan 31, 2013
|(IELTS graph) three bar charts (developing ans ind. countries)
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 31, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 8, 2013
|schools replacing sports and exercise classes with more academic
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 31, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS - Eat at food stands or restaurants? Eat at home
Writing Feedbackpmw0647 - Jan 31, 2013 / rombos - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS- Effects of replacing sports and games with more acdemic sessions in schools
6 - Hai bosco... Over all good essay.. Nice to read.. Nowadays many schools.... Keep on reading and...
Writing Feedbackrombos - Jan 30, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 1, 2013
|Write a short story about a meal at a Thai restaurant
Writing Feedbackdaivinhtran1993 - Jan 30, 2013 / dumi - Feb 4, 2013
|The most significant transportation innovation of past 200 years?
2 - everyday new things are inventing invented Nowadays millions of people all over the world travel different places with...
Writing Feedbackelmar91 - Jan 30, 2013 / daivinhtran1993 - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS - TASK1 - Write a letter to your friend thanking him/her for guiding interview
2 - ... the interview had already taken place.... so you need to keep this sentence in past tense. ...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013 / dumi - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS- Most schools planning to replace sports classes with more academic sessions
4 - Thanks dumi, arun, I forget to proofread this essay that is why some places it is incomplete. They...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Drop sports classes from school?
5 - Hai Jenny, Pahan, Dev and Arun... Hai Jenny and Pahan... Thanks for the corrections which strengthen my...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 30, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|IELTS:Crime_nothing can be done to prevent it_Agree or disagree?To what extend?
Writing Feedbacktogiang - Jan 30, 2013 / togiang - Jan 30, 2013
|'requirements and conditions of studying in college' - one national curriculum?
5 - Such as different books and courses that each school people learn to it's students and so the students can...
Writing Feedbackmar_b6707 - Jan 29, 2013 / nadrian - Feb 12, 2013
|The squirrel on the roof, basking in the morning sun
2 - about the time when I am done with my own morning routine, bath and toilet, meditation and yoga, and...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 29, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 30, 2013
|" Web of Risks" by Brad Stone ; SUMMARY OF ARTICLE
4 - I'd make it - "Social-networking sites are very popular for making friends" or even "Social-networking sites are popularly...
Writing Feedbackyumigip - Jan 29, 2013 / Bettany - Feb 24, 2013
|Far-sighted/ Persevering/ Help my progres; Important qualities of a good boss
Writing FeedbackQingye - Jan 29, 2013 / Qingye - Jan 30, 2013
|IELTS; INTERNET BRINGS THE WORLD TOGETHER AND MAKE IT SMALLER
3 - The Internet havehas becomea big part of our daily life. It existedexists everywhere; office, home and even your cell...
Writing Feedbackmanson20 - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 30, 2013
|We shouldn't rely on the easier-prepared food too much, even though it has made our life much easier
2 - This is a good essay you have raised some relevant points but in some cases you are reiterating what...
Writing FeedbackQingye - Jan 29, 2013 / Dr Seus - Jan 29, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Economical developments degrade Social values?
4 - let me suggest this way as its an introductory sentence and it should have a punch. Nowadays,...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 30, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) pros and cons of technology in human life.
3 - Hai Somy... Good attempt...): :In addition to....causes...:===> causes pollution to our environment and therby direct.... :In...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 29, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 29, 2013
|[IELTS Essay] Government - Investments in Arts is not a waste of money
2 - This is too close to the prompt introduction. You may take the idea, but present it differently; Governments...
Writing Feedbackmt22 - Jan 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS LETTER-historical building in town and the city council wants to pull it dow
4 - ..."demolishing" is a good key word to use for destroying buildings. This was a shocking news...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 29, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS - Parents are concerned with their children's' up-bringing than before.opin
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 29, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 30, 2013
|(IELTS ESSAY) necessity of child rearing programs for parents?
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 29, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS- Advertisement encourages consumers to buy in bulk, instead of high quality
3 - ... I feel the postive form sounds better; Advertisements play a major role Sometimes they motivate...
Writing FeedbackSKhan - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Child-care courses, best way to up date childcare?
6 - Hai Hung.. Thanks for your wonderful correction.. It was really valuable.. It strength my essay Thanks a...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 28, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 31, 2013
|Some prefer living in places with same weather. Which do you prefer?
4 - ... your previous sentence says you generally have a colder weather throughout the year. This highlighted part...
Writing Feedbackmayraschmidt - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|'my first day on a new job' - narrative essay
2 - Yes, I like where you're getting but I suggest you add an anecdote in this essay. I really like...
Writing Feedbackevadfa - Jan 28, 2013 / janajackson - Jan 28, 2013
|Childcare training course for parents. Agree or Disagree?
7 - Thanks Dev...
Writing FeedbackArun0506 - Jan 28, 2013 / Arun0506 - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS-Countries develop economies improve living standards.degradation social values
6 - .... In my view, unemployment cannot be eradicated, but can be controlled or reduced. Even in highly develped...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Jan 29, 2013
|GRE essay/Topic: job satisfication is an important element of individual wellbeing.
Writing Feedbackmultivariate - Jan 28, 2013 / evadfa - Jan 28, 2013
|'neat and tidy'; Students who can keep their rooms organized are sure to succeed
4 - I take your point and thank you. And I doubt that there may be some other faults,especially the logy...
Writing Feedbacktofel201304 - Jan 28, 2013 / tofel201304 - Feb 2, 2013
|IELTS ; What factors contribute to job satisfication?
Writing Feedbackcaoxue - Jan 28, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|I pinch myself but easily notice this isn't a dream; Creative Writing
3 - Bent!...
Writing Feedbackh4rry - Jan 28, 2013 / LewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013
|We were in a terrible state, trapped by all exits; Creative Writing
3 - I burnt essay...
Writing FeedbackLewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013 / LewisBirty - Jan 28, 2013
|All I knew was that I was safe; creative writing piece
Writing Feedbackwroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013 / wroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013
|Film review on MEN IN BLACK - A-list stars, an excellent production team
Writing Feedbackwroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013 / wroeykid09 - Jan 28, 2013
|IELTS: all parents should take children training courses
5 - i think it would be better if you agreed to the question to list out your ideas perfectlty.. but...
Writing FeedbackCallie0202 - Jan 28, 2013 / somysojan - Jan 28, 2013
|IELTS : museum is for education or for entertainment? BOTH
5 - Hai somy.. Overall good attempt.. Your opinion about why museums to be enjoyable is weak in terms of...
Writing Feedbacksomysojan - Jan 28, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 29, 2013
|TECHNOLOGY HAS BEEN VIEWED AS A TWO EDGED SWORD, preparing for IELTS in Feb...
3 - Hai... :The basic example is THE invention.... :now distance===> now LONG distances... :this luxury has brings...
Writing FeedbackSKhan - Jan 27, 2013 / joythblessy - Jan 29, 2013
|IELTS-Some people think that museums entertain people, while others it is to educate
4 - First, it seems your essay is two short. Try to maintain at least the minimum word count required for...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Jan 31, 2013
|( IELTS essay) Advertisements promotes Quality or Quantity?
6 - hai..Dumi, Dev, Romeo, and syed... Hai dumi.. Thnaks for your support..and correction.. Hai syed.. Thanks for...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 27, 2013 / joythblessy - Feb 8, 2013
|Should educators be paid according to their students performance?
2 - this sounds a bit awkward .... this is my suggestion; to the academic performance of students ...
Writing FeedbackMabossani - Jan 27, 2013 / dumi - Feb 1, 2013
|IELTS; Museums are meant for educating people or entertaining them?
3 - skeleton of skeleton of -->typing mistake The role of the museums in teaching visitors that they do not...
Writing Feedbackjoythblessy - Jan 27, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 27, 2013
|UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS IMPORTANT OR NOT?
3 - not uncommon -- common As an ordinary person, we would be well-advised to attend university to gain knowledge...
Writing FeedbackYukiCat - Jan 27, 2013 / niesaysi - Jan 27, 2013
|CLIMATE CHANGE AND GLOBAL WARMING
2 - I think you did a good job of addressing all of your points. Do you need an introduction before...
Writing Feedbackmrice4 - Jan 26, 2013 / Didgeridoo - Jan 26, 2013
|Advertisement encourages to buy in bulk, whereas it should promote high quality of the products sold
5 - but it is not showing importance to the quality of the product ă‹other than reflect the quality of products...
Writing Feedbackdevabe2005 - Jan 26, 2013 / caoxue - Jan 28, 2013
|Adolescence - Are parents the best teachers? No they are not.
Writing FeedbackEnhsaruul - Jan 26, 2013 / dumi - Jan 26, 2013
|GOVERNMENT SYSTEM; Important thing I want to change in my country
2 - If i could change one important thing about my country, it would be a proverty. Poverty is a a...
Writing FeedbackXAVI XAVY - Jan 26, 2013 / sadammar - Jan 26, 2013
|What difficulties do you foresee in living away from home? Essay.
2 - Reading the prompt over, I feel like they were asking for your own personal experience rather than asking what's...
Writing FeedbackSchoolWorkHard - Jan 25, 2013 / megciso - Jan 26, 2013
|strict rules of children's behavior, children are allowed to do anything they like
2 - The strict education of behavior means that --> The strict education system shows that which contributes to the...
Writing Feedbackgsisland - Jan 25, 2013 / devabe2005 - Jan 26, 2013
|BODY PARAGRAPH OF SINGLE SEX VS CO-ED
2 - in my opinion, co-ex education is much better. About the distraction between girls and boys is too old-fashioned. Right...
Writing Feedbackmissdee - Jan 25, 2013 / lily41628 - Jan 26, 2013
|SAT; Always essential to tell the truth? Or should lie under special circumstances?
NEW - Is it always essential to tell the truth, or are there circumstances in which it is better to lie?...
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