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|[AWS] Pros and cons of permissive parenting style
2 - Hello symptom, Your essay is clear, but needs more examples to back up why you do not agree with...
Writing Feedbacksymptom - Oct 24, 2012 / linmark - Nov 5, 2012
|'People should not work as slow as turtles' - TOEFL Writing
NEW - Could anyone help me check this and correct my grammatical errors? Big thanks. :) Topic: In today's world,...
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|'You helped America' - Patriots Pen-TELL MY FOUNDING FATHERS
Writing FeedbackDancingstar22 - Oct 23, 2012 / fashion520 - Nov 1, 2012
|[ielts task 1] report on quantities of goods transported in UK
2 - Your writing is very good with good use of a variety of vocabulary. However, try to use more linking...
Writing Feedbackgandora1510 - Oct 23, 2012 / Scientiana - Nov 9, 2012
|IELTS essay: Whether reading is better than TV or internet?
2 - It seems much better now. Thanks very much to you, Elena. I have some questions here: 1. Basically Honestly...
Writing Feedbackbwithu - Oct 23, 2012 / bwithu - Oct 24, 2012
|IELTS Essay : Reading fiction or watching movies : Introduction only
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 23, 2012 / w_even - Oct 23, 2012
|This is preparation for my Greek mythology Finals, I need reviews.
Writing Feedbackmin33 - Oct 22, 2012 / dumi - Nov 20, 2012
|IELTS TASK: support fixed punishment for each type of crime or not
2 - no two crimes happen (appear) in totally the same conditions there's not always one simple punishment which suit every...
Writing Feedbacksydaisy - Oct 22, 2012 / jenny45 - Nov 8, 2012
|IELTS essay: free health care or not
3 - Thanks,Scientiana! I am going to take the IELTS test recently. And I still have a slow writing speed, I...
Writing Feedbackwoyunsi3000 - Oct 22, 2012 / woyunsi3000 - Nov 20, 2012
|Support the arts or protect the environment? 'stop this massacre of the nature'
2 - [quote=juliamedeiross]The humans being hashave been deterioratingdoing lot of damage to the environment for a long time, and nowadays something...
Writing Feedbackjuliamedeiross - Oct 21, 2012 / dumi - Oct 22, 2012
|Movement away from written exams to practical skills.Discuss this trend
2 - These days, besides written papers , many universities have been applying other forms of assessment like practical or oral...
Writing Feedbackhoapq - Oct 21, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 13, 2012
|My father and my eldest brother shaped my personality into what I am today
NEW - Please proofread my essay and correct if there is any grammatical mistake. Thank you in advanced. I have to...
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|too much fat, salt and sugar; Weight of people is increasing, health decreasing
3 - Hi Gangster777 You have pretty good ideas for the body paragraphs. However, the problem is that your essay doesn't...
Writing FeedbackGangster777 - Oct 21, 2012 / April April - Oct 24, 2012
|Critique practice GRE "Analyze an Argument"(head of household)
Writing FeedbackMBA_bound - Oct 21, 2012 / lynzee22 - Mar 12, 2015
|Essay about my close friend, Sasha
4 - I really like how you`re approaching this piece of writing but I found that there were too many line...
Writing FeedbackSofi - Oct 21, 2012 / lollypop12 - Oct 21, 2012
|IELTS Writing Task 2, topic about yongsters
2 - Your essay is great! Well organization and well argument! However, you have to be careful with your grammar and...
Writing Feedbackgoldmanswalking - Oct 21, 2012 / Scientiana - Nov 8, 2012
|Narrative essay in betrayal; 'John Dustin was the most popular boy in school'
2 - hey... women don't envy good looking guys, but go crazy... only men envy ...lol So, I suggest you...
Writing FeedbackBluwinda - Oct 20, 2012 / dumi - Nov 14, 2012
|Changes to the society and the suicide rates essay
Writing FeedbackSomeoneNoOne - Oct 20, 2012 / Sheri_Editor - Nov 13, 2012
|[TOEFL] Choose friends who are similar to yourself or different from yourself?
2 - We all have our own friends, and they can be either similar or different from us. Friends who are...
Writing Feedbackcrz_keane - Oct 20, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 21, 2012
|[TOEFL] Attending a live performance vs. TV? 'live football game at a stadium'
NEW - Hi everyone, I'm preparing for TOEFL iBT test. Please help me to improve my writing skills. This is my...
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|'It's not that easy' - The advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad
2 - (The example is not that effective: say some shortcoming those are not easily available and accessible in your country...
Writing FeedbackLinhSua - Oct 19, 2012 / Mriytunjay - Oct 20, 2012
|GRE Analytical Argument Task: Memo to WWAC station
Writing Feedbackjackketch - Oct 19, 2012 / westway50 - Oct 21, 2012
|IELTS Exam: people and technology
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|This is my GRE awa practice essay - advance Thanks for Review
2 - All in all, pretty solid grammar wise and some great word choices (exaggerated, libertine, digress) I would do a...
Writing Feedbacknakul123 - Oct 19, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|'consuming less beef, lamb or fish' [ielts] Cambridge 7, test 1
2 - Beef was the most favouring meat, until 1989 it lost the first position. It, however, still maintained its second...
Writing Feedbacksliver1510 - Oct 19, 2012 / jenny45 - Nov 7, 2012
|"International Study" - Higher education should be open to all (discuss)
2 - Chhan Naroth, I completely agree with you. This applies to me because, I am from a not very rich...
Writing Feedbackchhan naroth - Oct 18, 2012 / megsters99 - Oct 18, 2012
|'exotic tourist attractions' - a comfortable living in exchange of money?
2 - Very good work. Few ideas might be added here and there, last but one paragraph is a bit confused.overall...
Writing Feedbackqwertyui - Oct 18, 2012 / priya9991 - Nov 7, 2012
|'county tournament' - narrative in which you describe a meaningful event, experience
Writing Feedbackalexgrey - Oct 17, 2012 / alexgrey - Oct 19, 2012
|I want to improve my writing for IELTS exam.Kindly indicate my mistakes in the essay
2 - But, these days there isIn recent years,there is an increase in sales oftrend of prepared and processed food, known...
Writing Feedbacknuroon - Oct 17, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 18, 2012
|news editors; country condition, citizens education, living condition; influence
Writing Feedbackademcelik - Oct 17, 2012 / ademcelik - Oct 17, 2012
|'Reducing the effort' - high salary or enjoyable job essay
5 - I think you should check your grammatical structure. See the corrections i made to the paragraph just above the...
Writing Feedbacksuperhero - Oct 17, 2012 / emmasaintly - Oct 19, 2012
|IELTS (academic) task 2 - leisure time
7 - Sure I will practice more :), thank you dumi. @Mriytunjay : IELTS task 2 writing requires at least 250...
Writing Feedbackdonniedarko - Oct 17, 2012 / donniedarko - Oct 20, 2012
|'unsolved trouble' - Traffic Congestion leads to several critical impacts
3 - First off, you're writing in English. I believe Thai is probably your first language. I cannot write one word...
Writing Feedbackraiyan - Oct 17, 2012 / wesleysuhler - Oct 17, 2012
|'Electing a representative in government' - Essay help for midterm
2 - The entire third paragraph seems to drag on. Maybe try spacing out the essay a little better. It appears...
Writing Feedbackalexnsarria - Oct 16, 2012 / mhk1294 - Nov 11, 2012
|'complicated thinking skills' - IELTS: the main function of university
5 - .... when you rearrange the order it reads well; Should they give knowledge and skills to the graduates.......
Writing FeedbackAida - Oct 16, 2012 / dumi - Nov 9, 2012
|Happiness directly relates to economic success
4 - Jenny,thanks very much for your comment. i think i need to insert some transitional word such as " firstly,secondly...etc"...
Writing Feedbackpolsestart - Oct 16, 2012 / polsestart - Oct 16, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: How to define Happiness
2 - Some individuals feel happy when they have intimate relations (relationship) with (their) friends and family members, while others become...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 16, 2012 / mahsaa - Oct 16, 2012
|writting a parapraph about Vietnamese occasion .
NEW - Tet is the most important celebration of Vietnamese culture. It is an opportunity to reunite family and enjoy many...
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|Toefl: Students working while studying? More disadvantages than advantages
3 - Certainly dumi is right you need to support your arguments with real life examples. You can write short parapgraphs...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012 / williamcosta - Oct 16, 2012
|What are seasons? Are they as different as they seem? - essay
2 - Hello! First, I recommend changing your title; unless, of course, the title was assigned. Given the ambiguity of the...
Writing FeedbackNVShouaXyooj - Oct 15, 2012 / Sheri_Editor - Nov 7, 2012
|Essay about The Child is father of the Man
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|'Life standards and food preparation these days' - criticize my essay
Writing FeedbackDcool - Oct 14, 2012 / humanx - Oct 20, 2012
|narrative essay : the wonderful annoucement
Writing Feedbackquyensunny - Oct 14, 2012 / quyensunny - Oct 15, 2012
|'Pursuance, never succeed in track again' - College Essay Revision
2 - For the first time ever, my life, my passion, my love for track, was fading away from me like...
Writing FeedbackMeiling - Oct 14, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|Governor's School essay on social issue (apathy) that concerns me
3 - Thanks for the feedback. Unfortunately, the deadline has passed and I just went with what my teachers said. Although,...
Writing Feedbackselemi - Oct 14, 2012 / selemi - Nov 8, 2012
|Which is better for children? to grow up in the countryside or in a big city?
3 - @pirFena In my opinion, your essay is quite good, although sometimes I feel hard to understand. You used Academic...
Writing FeedbackpirFena - Oct 14, 2012 / AndreiWindy - Mar 26, 2017
|IELTS :I would prefer to run my business than to own a new house
3 - Thank you phasetwozero for your valuable comments. I am unable to understand what is the problem with following...
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 14, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|"Teachers' role in the classroom"; IELTS
5 - if I want to give an example in the first paragraph in the body like this: " Accordingly, they...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Oct 14, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 16, 2012
|Dilemma whether it is right decision to make Free health care for the POOR
Writing Feedbackfizuli - Oct 14, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 14, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1: GRaph/ consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat
2 - Hi, Williamcosta "Overall, there was a gradual decrease...." => I think you should replay Overall with In the case...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 13, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 14, 2012
|Learners have different preference s ; Self assessment
2 - You have really good ideas here, but in many cases you don't have complete sentences. Sometimes, it's just a...
Writing Feedbackrsantiago - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Is giving the same grade to every student in a group a good way to evaluate students?
5 - One more thing: your second last paragraph presents the opposite view. I am not sure about this but I...
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - Oct 13, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|'consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City' - GRE Argumentative
4 - mahsaa furthermore it is said that two-income families express more concern about healthful eating, Therefore, the new Captain Seafood...
Writing Feedbackmahsaa - Oct 13, 2012 / Halehh - Oct 31, 2012
|"in text Referencing" - This essay is correted by my teacher
2 - I think your teacher is right that you should expand your conclusion somewhat. Think about expanding your idea. Perhaps...
Writing FeedbackBraveheart - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Daily schedules and the glorious life are main reasons that the individuals work to gain money
2 - I do agree that some people work only for money. However, there are also those who work to make...
Writing Feedbackuzbek_sheikh - Oct 12, 2012 / sophiezhu - Oct 13, 2012
|Apartment Vs House; depends on individual financial status and areas of comfort
2 - Living in an apartment undoubtedly has many advantages. First of all, it is cheaper to rent or buy an...
Writing FeedbackNemoo - Oct 12, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|How important is ANZAC story to Australian Identity? clarification on this intro
4 - I just wanted clarification on the direction of my essay is going. I have dificulty writing essays, and I'm...
Writing FeedbackMaraJade10 - Oct 12, 2012 / MaraJade10 - Nov 21, 2012
|'Understanding your child' - Essay about three things good parents do
2 - The second thing is too short I think. Maybe you can add that parents should give their children more...
Writing FeedbackJasmine92 - Oct 12, 2012 / lucy123 - Oct 27, 2012
|SAT: disagreement makes progress
Writing Feedbackbeibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012 / jineshwar1995 - Oct 12, 2012
|If you want to become an expert in a certain field, do you need talent or motivation?
3 - Thank you :)...
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