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|Toefl - 'a more convenient life in a city'?
5 - It's my pleasure helping you dear Wang. I learn that you practice for TOEFL and I can say confidently...
Writing FeedbackWang Jia - Jul 21, 2012 / dumi - Jul 26, 2012
|Should the jury be given pastfacts of the defendant or not?
Writing FeedbackLinh Nguyen - Jul 20, 2012 / Linh Nguyen - Jul 22, 2012
|[IELTS]: pubush drivers more harshly in order to improve safety on the road
2 - First paragraph you did not continue well with the statement:such as people will be detained if they found to...
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 20, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 21, 2012
|IELTS- encourage sense of competition or co-operative in children
2 - they educate => they ARE educateD I think you just have to write 1 sentence as the motivator. I...
Writing Feedbacksamenmohammad - Jul 20, 2012 / April April - Jul 21, 2012
|My essay: work at home with computers and modems instead of working in offices daily.
Writing Feedbackpandawii - Jul 20, 2012 / pandawii - Jul 27, 2012
|'if she didn't show that behavior' - Best friend
Writing FeedbackPaul_james - Jul 20, 2012 / Paul_james - Jul 20, 2012
|'Effects of Caffeine' - need to make this essay twice as long!
4 - I think you can make it twice by adding some scientific statement, religious prohibit and a little bit more...
Writing Feedbackcsomesan - Jul 19, 2012 / alphatio - Jul 22, 2012
|IELTS - reasons for root-seeking trend, and is it good?
2 - And a closer connection => don't start a sentence with AND, use ALSO or BESIDES,... instead. Use whatever suits...
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jul 19, 2012 / April April - Jul 19, 2012
|TOEFL: Leisure activities - Spend your free time outdoors or indoors.
Writing Feedbackchizuru_shuchan - Jul 19, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 19, 2012
|IBT 'the best epoch in everyones life' - college time
Writing Feedbackramtinms - Jul 19, 2012 / ramtinms - Jul 19, 2012
|TOEFL: A teacher's ability to relate well with students is more important than ...
4 - Hi, I think, in such types of essays, you have to agree or disagree, then clarify your opinion...
Writing FeedbackMariRangel - Jul 18, 2012 / ana_p - Jul 23, 2012
|'Media can destroy reputation' - GRE ISSUE
3 - Thank you. I couldn't help myself writing about it. The topic just felt right :P But i'll make sure...
Writing Feedbackbarsa09 - Jul 18, 2012 / barsa09 - Jul 19, 2012
|'mass media pays a lot of attention to public people's personal life' - toefl
3 - The intro "there are two areas of life area" doesn't really make sense. Simply try "there are two areas...
Writing FeedbackNataschaAbra - Jul 18, 2012 / tommyboy614 - Jul 19, 2012
|IELTS:Some people like to travel with companion other people prefer to travel alone
3 - It's my opinion: - "Where do you travel this long holidays ? or Who enjoy with you travel?" ~~~~~~>...
Writing FeedbackAnan_WD - Jul 18, 2012 / chizuru_shuchan - Jul 19, 2012
|'Roommates Qualities' - IELTS
2 - Some of roommates don't know how important to be organized is => SOME ROOMMATES don't know how important IT...
Writing FeedbackDiyab77 - Jul 18, 2012 / April April - Jul 19, 2012
|[IELTS]: The appearance of a building is more important than its function.
4 - Well you can either choose one side (agree OR disagree) and support only that side with the body paragraphs,...
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 18, 2012 / April April - Jul 22, 2012
|'houses on another planet' - Should humans attempt to colonize space ?
8 - nguen, you are very welcome! I will try my best to help you, and consequently learn myself while...
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 18, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 20, 2012
|American continent accounted for the largest proportion of coca-cola sales in 2000
Writing Feedbackjobymonpj - Jul 17, 2012 / bingle2012 - Jul 17, 2012
|'Living in this generation' - [TOEFL essay]
Writing Feedbackbelial612 - Jul 17, 2012 / belial612 - Jul 17, 2012
|IELT essay - causes and solutions for poor work-life balance
6 - YES ,it is true that in ielts essay body paras are more important than intro. and conclu. However ,you...
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jul 17, 2012 / jobymonpj - Jul 17, 2012
|IELTS: Skills instead of Knowledge_Advantage and Disadvantage
17 - I've learnt a lot from you and other members on this forum. And yeah, if native speakers could comment...
Writing FeedbackApril April - Jul 16, 2012 / April April - Jul 20, 2012
|'Divorce' - Cause and effect essay on divorce
Writing Feedbackrandiadair10142 - Jul 16, 2012 / dumi - Jul 17, 2012
|[IELTS]: Should unpaid community service be compulsory for secondary education?
2 - for young student as students in an early age cannot be competent => for young studentS (my suggestion: as...
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 16, 2012 / April April - Jul 17, 2012
|'Money Vs., Development' - my essay grammer, structure and overall quality
Writing Feedbackjuancho8897 - Jul 16, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 19, 2012
|Understanding the Pull-Essay about food addiction versus drug addiction
Writing FeedbackShelbyFields - Jul 16, 2012 / KhanhZ - Jul 17, 2012
|Influenced by past achievements - To take up any field, inspiration is must.
4 - thanks for your help can you please rate this TOPIC: When exercising, some people prefer to exercise indoors at...
Writing Feedbacksupercool - Jul 16, 2012 / supercool - Aug 19, 2012
|'Caleb and Kylee' - comparing and contrasting these two people
Writing Feedbackrotra32000 - Jul 16, 2012 / joshuanderitu01 - Jul 17, 2012
|Building a new factory near community (away from the local people)
2 - on the other hand _ firstly or to begin with .because you are taking about advantages of building a...
Writing Feedbackbsm25 - Jul 16, 2012 / chucnt - Jul 17, 2012
|Essay Ielts: topic Should companies use young people?
Writing Feedbackpandawii - Jul 16, 2012 / pandawii - Jul 17, 2012
|Claim and Reason. How much do you agree or disagree? -- Essay Evaluation
2 - Rachit, It is always helpful to include some example to make the context more clear. For example; you can...
Writing FeedbackRachit891 - Jul 16, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 16, 2012
|IELTS essay -- Discuss that consumer goods are cheaper to buy
2 - The question asks you whether advantages overweigh the disadvantages. You need to say you agree on this or...
Writing FeedbackGOGO - Jul 16, 2012 / dumi - Jul 16, 2012
|Which do you prefer? Being leader of group or just a simple group member.
Writing Feedbackalaki - Jul 16, 2012 / dumi - Jul 16, 2012
|'building good relations with your coworkers' - toefl ibt
Writing FeedbackNataschaAbra - Jul 16, 2012 / NataschaAbra - Jul 16, 2012
|IELTS-What kind of problems can be caused by people resisting to accommodate changes?
Writing FeedbackPvtValley - Jul 15, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 16, 2012
|IELTS practice-Letter about major news in my country
Writing Feedbackanzdriz - Jul 15, 2012 / dumi - Jul 18, 2012
|IELTS -- Students learn more from teachers than from other sources (internet or TV)
2 - I think, "has been changed the ways we learn" is appropriate than "improving.." "the increase of sources.." => "the...
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jul 15, 2012 / PvtValley - Jul 15, 2012
|'not only money' - IELTS: Reasons why people go to work.
3 - Inconclussion To conclude or In conclusion, there are a lot of motivations for people to work, not only money...
Writing Feedbacksmogito - Jul 15, 2012 / gauravwalia1988 - Aug 3, 2012
|'universal pills' - If you could create one invention ,what would it be?
8 - me neither!...
Writing Feedbackchucnt - Jul 15, 2012 / deepakbaniya - Jul 18, 2012
|Preference of where you wish to live is highly personal
2 - Some researchers believe that many people prefer living in small towns. The reason I would like to live...
Writing FeedbackAkrotiri - Jul 15, 2012 / amenanoori - Jul 15, 2012
|IELTS essay -- should students attend private schools
Writing Feedbackbingle2012 - Jul 15, 2012 / smogito - Jul 15, 2012
|'gold fish' - my pet essay
Writing Feedbackreaderxmog - Jul 15, 2012 / April April - Jul 15, 2012
|Toefl writing :what are the important qualities of a good child?
Writing Feedbackmohammad_ee - Jul 15, 2012 / mohammad_ee - Jul 15, 2012
|IELTS!! To obey rules or to have less rules? How to grow up?
Writing FeedbackMInchi - Jul 15, 2012 / MInchi - Jul 15, 2012
|'boy/girl sports activities' / 'leaving home country for abroad' -Ielts writing tasks
2 - U should consider TIME, PLACE, and GENERAL TREND in the introduction of the IELTS writing task one. Where...
Writing Feedbackmarczawa - Jul 14, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 14, 2012
|IELTS - Music industry and copyright reforms
2 - The question asked you about your opinion. At the end of the introduction you should clearly state...
Writing Feedbackhds62 - Jul 14, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 14, 2012
|It's usually better to learn and practice with teachers
4 - i think the Internet is better than a teacher because the Internet has more books than the teacher...
Writing FeedbackLILUSH - Jul 14, 2012 / readerxmog - Jul 15, 2012
|[IELTS]: Telecommunications technology - making lives more exciting and efficient?
5 - Thank you bingle2012. However, some advice that you given are incorrect. 1. telecommunication= phones, mobile phones, radio,...
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 14, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 18, 2012
|'life is the best teacher' - what about the parents?
4 - "they have deep intuition about their children" What do you mean by deep intuition? its better to write more...
Writing FeedbackBahrom_4474 - Jul 14, 2012 / pintianz - Jul 14, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: "Before an important exam, do you think it is better to prepare for ..."
2 - an introduction should include Motivator, thesis statement, your opinion, and blueprint. I think you should improve the structure...
Writing Feedbackzinboo - Jul 14, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 14, 2012
|I would like to emphasize - all we have now resulted from the past
NEW - Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or...
Writing FeedbackLILUSH - Jul 13, 2012 / — -
|People always leave
2 - Look sometimes in this world you are living you have to just let go if something is noloonger important...
Writing Feedbackjehona - Jul 13, 2012 / terencetufuor - Jul 13, 2012
|'dancing is important and influential' - our culture
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement, dancing plays an important role in our culture? Each...
Writing FeedbackLILUSH - Jul 13, 2012 / — -
|IELTS - Essay about woman's place in society
3 - There have been strong arguments regarding women's place in the society inthe last decades. Some people advocate the opinion...
Writing Feedbackhds62 - Jul 13, 2012 / Peter Piper - Jul 13, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"Influence of information available on internet"
3 - --------- change the order; In ancient days, people had to travel a lot to find out information...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 13, 2012 / dumi - Jul 13, 2012
|A POSİTİVE OUTLOOK and people's lives
3 - thank you for checking and could you please explain that how I can improve my sentence sturucture and can...
Writing Feedbackccrnn - Jul 13, 2012 / ccrnn - Jul 13, 2012
|TOEFL Essay,"It was easy in past to identify career or job"
2 - I think you should improve the organization of the introduction. The highlighted sentence includes the points that you...
Writing Feedbackana_p - Jul 13, 2012 / ah_zafari - Jul 13, 2012
|'reducing the frequent use of airplane' - IELTS
7 - Thanks :)...
Writing Feedbackairpunklee - Jul 13, 2012 / airpunklee - Jul 14, 2012
|IELTS: Public libraries, learning materials, and limited resources on Video, DVD
Writing Feedbackwelnorze - Jul 12, 2012 / dumi - Jul 14, 2012
|[IELTS] 'considering their situations and motives' - fixed crime punishment or not?
5 - I think if you could add some practical examples to prove your opinion, that would be better. Best...
Writing Feedbackpratikdbl - Jul 12, 2012 / welnorze - Jul 14, 2012
|Teachers must have fixed and high salary regardless if they do a good job or not
2 - Good essay!! However, from my quick look 1. Check your commas, where you should put and where not....
Writing FeedbackLILUSH - Jul 12, 2012 / pratikdbl - Jul 12, 2012
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