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|An ongoing discussion whether boys and girls get benefits more at mixed or single-gender schools
2 - Fiza, your essay is not good at all. You merely provided talking points, discussion topics, if you will, in...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 21, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Metal price prediction - Abstract review
NEW - Hi all, here is the abstract for metal price prediction. My supervisor advised me to rewrite for bad grammar....
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|Essay about the ten top rice- producing countries in 1999 Writing IELTS task1
5 - Thank you. if I supplement my essay may you continue correcting my other fault, please. ... rice-producing country...
Writing Feedbackphuonguyen479 - Apr 21, 2018 / phuonguyen479 - Apr 22, 2018
|Ielts - CULTURE AND CHARACTER FROM THE CHOICE OF CLOTHES?
2 - Maryam, you have confused a simple single opinion essay discussion with an extent essay. The instruction question is simple,...
Writing Feedbackmaryam syed - Apr 20, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Is it possible to say a lot about person's culture and character from his/her choice of clothes?
3 - Zainab, you did not understand the task requirement. This is not an emotional extent essay. Rather, this is a...
Writing FeedbackZainab110 - Apr 20, 2018 / Holt - Apr 22, 2018
|Funds for building a sophisticated railway network.
Writing Feedbackderekhsu - Apr 20, 2018 / derekhsu - Apr 23, 2018
|Newspaper source (paper or website) - Ielts essay- writing task 2:
2 - Phung, read the prompt instruction sentence. You were asked to agree or disagree. Therefore, your last sentence in the...
Writing FeedbackAmber98 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|Building a large shopping centre in the neighborhood. My vote pro or against.
2 - Shela, there are two mistakes contained in this otherwise acceptably presented opinion essay. The first mistake is that your...
Writing Feedbackxierablind02 - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 20, 2018
|The charts compare, in percentage terms, five expenditures in a specific British school
2 - .... were the main schooling expense expense of the school in three.... ... with the number numbers of...
Writing FeedbackGiangNguyen - Apr 19, 2018 / haleemasadiq - Apr 21, 2018
|TOEFL. There's a question whether a trip should be taken with the company of a tour guide...
2 - Tess, always stick to the timed practice tests. If you fail to write an essay within the allotted time...
Writing Feedbacktaokyuhyun - Apr 19, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|What is your view on dillema: better life in the city or outside of a rural area?
Writing Feedbackmaya137 - Apr 18, 2018 / Long Nguyen - Apr 18, 2018
|Technology and traditional values coexistence
3 - Personally, i think your essay is really quite good. However, i think you just need to repeat your opinion...
Writing FeedbackLong Nguyen - Apr 18, 2018 / Amber98 - Apr 20, 2018
|A big chunk of people's earnings goes to purchasing material things
5 - Thank you so much for your feedback. I am trying to improve with each practice everyday before the actual...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 18, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 20, 2018
|Movies and television have more positive impact on young people than the negative - TOEFL
2 - Tianyi, you do not need to focus so much on your word usage because you have clearly understandable representations...
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|IELTS Academic Discussion Essay - Spending money on improving existing public trasport
3 - Nidaa, unfortunately, I cannot grade your work because you did not provide the complete prompt for my reference in...
Writing Feedbacknidaa91 - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|task 1(LETTER) for IELTS GT
NEW - You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop...
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|Energy usage in Australia and house gas emissions. IELTS Writing Task 1 - IELTS 10 Test 1
3 - Daofan, the first thing you have to remember is that the opening paraphrase contains a specific number of sentences...
Writing Feedbackdophan - Apr 18, 2018 / Holt - Apr 19, 2018
|Ielts - increasing demand of cosmetic surgery. 354 words
5 - Your body paragraphs should be equally developed so that the examiner will know that you can support your reasoning...
Writing Feedbackmaryam syed - Apr 17, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 18, 2018
|IELTS Academic Negative Development Essay - Cosmetic Surgery
Writing Feedbacknidaa91 - Apr 17, 2018 / nidaa91 - Apr 18, 2018
|A friend keeping an eye on flat during vacation
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Apr 17, 2018 / sfiza - Apr 18, 2018
|In recent society, more and more people are trying to live by their own
3 - Thank you so much. Was really waiting for your feedback. I would really consider your assessment although it is...
Writing Feedbackjommiejr - Apr 16, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 17, 2018
|Increasing average weight of people has become a matter of great concern nowadays
2 - Jamye, the weakness of your essay lies first, in your overview presentation. Your paragraph restatement contains a run on...
Writing Feedbackthutrang99nt - Apr 16, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Ielts academic discussion essay - the importance of different kind of sports.
5 - Try to develop your ideas in a body paragraph. Currently what I do is (1)Topic Statement, (2) Explain/Restate...
Writing FeedbackZainab110 - Apr 15, 2018 / jommiejr - Apr 18, 2018
|Academic IELTS: Writing Task 2: Importance of Planting Trees in Cities and Towns
6 - Serena, you will score a total of 4 with this essay because your response is only minimal. Your response...
Writing Feedbacksisi999 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Should parents be responsible for teaching their children what polite and good behaviors are?
Writing Feedbackthomas81 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Group members as well as the tour guide both add restrictions to the travel
3 - Tianyi, , this was a pretty good attempt at responding to a direct question essay. However, since you forgot...
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|For some attending classes at school is just a waste of time. Reasons for study.
NEW - Why do you think people attend the colleges or university? Each year, they enrolled a thousand students with...
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|Ielts 8 test 4 task2: heavier weight and less fitness
Writing Feedbackvicki921 - Apr 15, 2018 / vicki921 - Apr 17, 2018
|WE COULD NEVER LEARN TO BE BRAVE AND PATIENT, IF THERE WERE ONLY JOY IN THE WORLD
4 - Chau, the academic focus of your discussion is confusing because you have tried to explain a quote, without really...
Writing Feedbackchauvy2002 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Academic IELTS Writing Task 1: Movie Tickets Sales by Genre from 1980 till 2010
3 - Thank you so much. I will be attempting another writing section soon. Hopefully your advice will help me improve...
Writing Feedbacksisi999 - Apr 14, 2018 / sisi999 - Apr 15, 2018
|The newspapers have a strong effect on an individual's viewpoint and ideas.
3 - Gurpinder, since this is a direct question essay, you are not supposed to indicate your response as a separate...
Writing FeedbackGurpinder - Apr 12, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|The bart graph illustrates information about the performance of travellers using three major airport
2 - "From 1995 to 1999 LaGuardia..." you should change has =>had. you should divide into small paragraphs. you didnt reach...
Writing Feedbackjaspreet8882 - Apr 12, 2018 / chauvy2002 - Apr 15, 2018
|Should children always obey their parents' counsel?
3 - I really appreciate all your comments. Actually, that is an exercise I read from an IELTS Preparation book for...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Apr 12, 2018 / cao1km - Apr 14, 2018
|The amount of money consumers use for six different items - IELTS WRITING TASK 1
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|SCIENCE Article - How Different Kind of Bias Impact Research
2 - Albert, you have too many topics under discussion in this research paper but not enough in discussion in terms...
Writing FeedbackAlb - Apr 11, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|IELTS Essay about stressful lives of modern-day teenagers.
4 - @Holt Thanks for your valuable and honest feedback. I really appreciate your detailed guidance and will follow your instructions...
Writing Feedbackasefnoor - Apr 10, 2018 / asefnoor - Apr 13, 2018
|Judging book by its cover - reliable opinion or not?
3 - Nyuyen, you will not score very well in the TA section of the scoring because you did not properly...
Writing Feedbackdinhnguyen - Apr 9, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|Next career steps for graduate and post-graduate students in the UK
2 - Iksticker, in my opinion, I'd suggest you should work on the main point(which usually comes as the first sentence...
Writing Feedbackiksticker - Apr 8, 2018 / Alao0702 - Apr 16, 2018
|IELTS: ... To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste ?
2 - Minh, you have created a prompt deviation in your discussion which will result in the failure of this essay...
Writing FeedbackNexus54 - Apr 8, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|Newspapers are not being read and news on TV is not being watched by young people...
3 - Ngoc, since you did not post the original prompt with the discussion instruction, I cannot advice you regarding the...
Writing Feedbackrubydo - Apr 8, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|IELTS task 2: production of consumer goods vs environment
3 - To, the task 2 essay should always have 5 paragraphs presented in it. The 5 paragraph presentation helps you...
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Apr 7, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1- The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public
3 - Hai, the only problem that exists in this otherwise well developed essay is the sentence structuring. You have a...
Writing Feedbackhaiilinhh7396 - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|TOEFL Task 2 - Television ads targeted at young children - what is their influence on youngsters?
3 - Louvy, the above advice doesn't really apply to your work if one considers the prompt requirements which does call...
Writing FeedbackLouvy - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|Media and Information Accuracy - TOEFL
2 - @Elain1997 Except some minor mistakes and the conclusion, this is well written essay. The first three paragraphs are very...
Writing FeedbackElain1997 - Apr 5, 2018 / abdo65619 - Apr 9, 2018
|What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?
2 - Hu, unless otherwise requested specifically in the essay prompt, do not include information such as a personal point of...
Writing FeedbackSeila - Apr 5, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|The variety genres of music - which kind is more important for us?
3 - Alifa, I believe you are self studying for the IELTS test which is my you ended up making every...
Writing Feedbackalifafaza - Apr 5, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|DISCUSS ABOUT PLAYING VIDEO GAMES.
2 - Sarah, it is difficult for me to review your work because you failed to provide me with the original...
Writing FeedbackSarah Phan - Apr 4, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|The estimated amount of oil produced by 6 countries between 1990 and 2010
2 - I am impressed by your work and I could not find any grammar or vocabulary mistakes. :) ... per...
Writing Feedbacknamgiang0884 - Apr 3, 2018 / cao1km - Apr 12, 2018
|TOEFL-it is my friends in college that made up my most important memories of the more grown-up stage
5 - @Holt Thank you for your constructive criticism. I've completely rewritten this essay and hope you can give more comments....
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 3, 2018 / Asphodel - Apr 10, 2018
|IELTS Task2 Topic-The positive or negative effects of Internet
3 - Annie, what is the actual prompt you are responding to? Your prompt presentation and your actual discussion are going...
Writing FeedbackAnnieh - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|TOEFL task 2, advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
3 - Mehdi, avoid exaggerations in your presentation. Examiners frown upon examinees who sensationalize the topics given when there is no...
Writing Feedbackmehmoh - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 topic: individuals to provide environmental problems solution
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Apr 3, 2018 / lanvt2811 - Apr 9, 2018
|CBEST defeated by rejection - a situation that has a powerful impact on my personality
2 - Aida, please remember that we always need to have the original prompt instructions posted in the text box before...
Writing FeedbackAid1 - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|Review on NYT argumentative article "Kids, Would You Pleas*e Start Fighting?" by Adam Grant
NEW - Why Fighting Is Good In many occasions where we see siblings arguing in public, parents will go between...
Writing Feedbackkellyyejye - Apr 3, 2018 / — -
|IELTS Essay: Professional like doctors and teachers should be paid higher than other professionals
3 - Faisal, you need to always present a 5 paragraph essay in the task 2 test. That means, the presentation...
Writing Feedbackfaisal_husein - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|IELTS the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployment or homelees
3 - Victoria, your discussion poses a prompt deviation which will result in the failure of this essay in an actual...
Writing Feedbackvict0ria - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing games teaches us about life.
3 - Ryan, you seem to be discussing at least 2 different essay types in this presentation, without really hitting a...
Writing FeedbackRyan66 - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 5, 2018
|Effect of celebrity' coverage on media on children
2 - Hoàng, there is a clear lack of prompt instruction understanding your presentation. This has led to only a partial...
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|Success is a matter of luck - Essay
3 - Abdallah, this is a very convincing essay. Your opinions are based on enough personal observations and popular references for...
Writing Feedbackanajjar - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 4, 2018
|IELTS ONE - The percentage of Australian's citizen did some activities
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