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|IELTS: taking gap year has become one of the growing trends among students
2 - Basically your writing is ok. But I suggest you have topic sentence at the beginning of the two body...
Writing Feedbackwandelion - Apr 1, 2018 / lanvt2811 - Apr 3, 2018
|The only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.
Writing Feedbackshirley82113 - Apr 1, 2018 / shirley82113 - Apr 3, 2018
|CBEST. Television encourage or discourage learning - or does it do both depends on circumstances?
Writing FeedbackAid1 - Apr 1, 2018 / Aid1 - Apr 21, 2018
|"One More Chance" ...on topic flow, shifting topic to topic, what to discuss in closing?
3 - Thank you for the feedback. It will be extremely helpful in editing my rough draft and move me in...
Writing Feedbacklin2053457 - Apr 1, 2018 / lin2053457 - Apr 3, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: sales figures - export performance between 2003 and 2008
2 - Chau, congratulations on writing a little more than the minimum required number of words for this essay. You did...
Writing Feedbackchauvy2002 - Mar 31, 2018 / Holt - Apr 1, 2018
|When you live in a major city you can learn many features of the whole society
3 - I check this essay by following you advice. I found that there are many thing I can do better....
Writing FeedbackShsiao - Mar 31, 2018 / Shsiao - Apr 2, 2018
|People have a tendency to think that Art and music are too trivial compared to others subjects
Writing Feedbackyuletide - Mar 30, 2018 / yuletide - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS task one: the locations choice of the new supermarket
2 - Kiki, this essay will get an automatic failing score because you did not present the minimum 150 word requirement,...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 30, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS Writing Test - Does the coverage of sport on television discourage teenagers from exercise?
3 - This corrections might be useful ; This is suggestions ; discouragement from / to young adults the pressure...
Writing FeedbackNancy Huang - Mar 30, 2018 / abang yoga - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS task two: young people tend to take a gap year before they study in universities
2 - Kiki, remember that there is a 5 sentence maximum per paragraph presentation. For the task 2 test, you should...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 30, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Purchasing the same goods in every part of the world - a good or bad trend?
3 - Vu, there are two problem points that I want you to concentrate on fixing in your upcoming essays. First,...
Writing Feedbackvhlinh96 - Mar 29, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Charge for admission in museum? Evaluate this policy - IELTS
3 - Vua, this is a single opinion essay as presented by the question "Do you think the advantages of charging...
Writing Feedbackvhlinh96 - Mar 29, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|The diagram about how to get energy from geothermal power plants
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - Mar 29, 2018 / abang yoga - Apr 2, 2018
|Ratification of a Skilled Labour Declaration
2 - Ulfah, this is a very well developed outline presentation for your paper. Everything about it is strong, informative, and...
Writing Feedbackulfahfadhila - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Should the government control the salaries and limit money people earn.
3 - Anh, the score for this essay will be a 4. You only responded to the personal opinion side. There...
Writing Feedbackaley anhnguyen - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS ESSAY: REWARD STUDENTS WHO SHOW THE BEST RESULTS OR THOSE WHO SHOW IMPROVEMENTS
3 - Bao, this essay will gain you a final score of 4 due to the tangential discussion that you provided...
Writing FeedbackBaoanh - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|CBEST ESSAY Television helps in learning agree or disagree
2 - Lakshmi, since you are not being scored on an individual basis for this essay but rather, on the whole...
Writing Feedbacklaksri23 - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing - a better life with an undergraduate degree or a master degree?
2 - Hi, I think your writing is not too bad, but your essay needs a better introduction and conclusion. You...
Writing Feedbackanchitang0321 - Mar 27, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 29, 2018
|Should scientific research, business and the academic information be shared freely or not?
2 - Michelle, it will be useless for me to point out the scoring errors that you made in this essay...
Writing Feedbackemrysharding - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|To share information to the public or not
4 - @abang yoga Thank for your helping on reviewing my essay. I will improve on those grammar errors on my...
Writing Feedbackmt000000 - Mar 27, 2018 / mt000000 - Apr 1, 2018
|IELTS test one - why students study and how much support do they get
6 - Kiki, your first statement is insufficient. It must be a proper representation of the information included in the original...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS Essay Some people think that having a set retirement age (65 years) for everybody is unfair
Writing Feedbacknanc90 - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Space travel vs environment problems? which one is important? PTE
2 - Hey! You have a good essay. Nice use of vocabulary and your ideas are put well together. There...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Mar 26, 2018 / DoctorWho - Mar 26, 2018
|IELTS: pollution and traffic growth - higher gas price as the obvious solution?
4 - Hi Amalia Hanifah, it is glad to see your writing here. So, you will get a number of feedbacks...
Writing Feedbackamalianhanifah - Mar 26, 2018 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 27, 2018
|Sharing information in a variety of fields freely
3 - Thank you so much for your reply!! I think maybe I misunderstood the topic. I will rewrite it...
Writing Feedbackyakoe - Mar 26, 2018 / yakoe - Mar 27, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2: In your opinion, what has been the most significant transportation...
Writing FeedbackNKNam123 - Mar 25, 2018 / NKNam123 - Mar 26, 2018
|Sharing confidential information for free and for everyone?
3 - this is good introduction paragraph for beginning however it is important to make an interesting introductory paragraph so...
Writing Feedbackdimasnrw - Mar 24, 2018 / fadlanmuzakki - Mar 25, 2018
|Colleges and universities have to enroll the same numbers of students in both genders in all subject
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 24, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 27, 2018
|[Ielts task 2] Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness.
2 - ... because we cannot live without money in the modern world. - I afraid "survive" implying biological living. We...
Writing Feedbackhappyfunny - Mar 24, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 24, 2018
|Higher taxes should be collected from industries causing higher industrial pollution?
3 - Anh, your opening statement is not a paraphrase of the original prompt, this means a failing score in the...
Writing Feedbackanhtho1412 - Mar 23, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|Which type of accomodation is best? Advantages of apartment living overweight house's disadvantages.
3 - spacious any hobby (any + singular) houses are considered as to be more advantageous In conclusion/To conclude, it...
Writing FeedbackSTA - Mar 23, 2018 / sumomoakiko - Mar 25, 2018
|Do the disadvantages of using e-mail surpass the advantages?
4 - Kavan, your response is inaccurate. This is a comparison of opinion discussion. Since you are being asked to weigh...
Writing Feedbackquocviet - Mar 23, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|It is only a matter of time before teachers are replaced by technology in the classroom.
3 - Hoang, while you wrote a pretty good essay here. I am not going to applaud your work for accuracy...
Writing Feedbackharryhoangvn - Mar 22, 2018 / Holt - Mar 26, 2018
|Technological advances significantly change the way we live, which includes communication
5 - at the beginning I was not very sure whether this instruction "In what ways has technology affected the...
Writing FeedbackPhucnguyen - Mar 22, 2018 / Phucnguyen - Mar 26, 2018
|The average number of Vietnamese students studying in France, Russia and America between 2000
Writing Feedbackhuonggiza - Mar 21, 2018 / huonggiza - Mar 26, 2018
|Teleworking should be adopted ?!?
4 - Hello thanh, Normally in the introduction (ielts) we have two part: paraphrase sentence, answer and introduction to your...
Writing FeedbackBui Thanh - Mar 21, 2018 / happyfunny - Mar 23, 2018
|IELTS writing part 1 - percentage of people aged 65 and over (line graph)
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 21, 2018 / kikiyiu - Mar 22, 2018
|Circus Entertainment - IELTS writing task 2 correction
Writing FeedbackNKNam123 - Mar 20, 2018 / NKNam123 - Mar 21, 2018
|Government should invest more money in science education rather than other subjects
2 - Hoa, you opening paraphrase is not an accurate restatement of the original prompt. Your discussion instruction line is also...
Writing FeedbackHoa Tran - Mar 20, 2018 / Holt - Mar 21, 2018
|China-Russia Market research
3 - @Holt Hi Thank you for your response, I am writing this article for marketing research purpose. I am trying...
Writing Feedbackbaqixiaohei - Mar 20, 2018 / baqixiaohei - Mar 20, 2018
|Telling the truth is the first thing I would like develop in a good relationship
3 - Thank you so much!!! This is my first exercise. I very appreciate that you help me improve my structure...
Writing FeedbackJessicaLiao - Mar 18, 2018 / JessicaLiao - Mar 24, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing: How does the increasing availability of information influence life?
3 - Li, your essay was going pretty well until you decided to discuss the US elections. Don't delve on discussing...
Writing Feedbackdeniselee - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|Some people believe that taking their children into the boarding school is the best choice
Writing Feedbacktey - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|Ielts writing - Take a gap year between high school and university.
5 - Tranh, in an opinion essay, you should represent only one opinion for discussion. That is, unless the prompt specifically...
Writing Feedbackmanhhackc - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|DREAM BIG FUND essay competition
3 - Putri, your essay is not very academic in presentation and also, requires a more coherent presentation for the essay....
Writing Feedbackflykitten - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|THE BEST WAY TO REDUCE YOUTH CRIMES IS TO EDUCATE THEIR PARENTS WITH PARENTAL SKILLS
4 - Nguyen, the highest score you can get for this essay is a 5 because you did not properly respond...
Writing Feedbackjokyhuy - Mar 17, 2018 / Holt - Mar 20, 2018
|There is no place left for teachers in today's world. PTE write essay
2 - This is good writing... to me, you have ticked all boxes 1. Lexical Resource 2. Task Achievement 3....
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Mar 16, 2018 / afaquekhan85 - Mar 16, 2018
|"The Bet" by Anthon Chekov - MY THOUGHTS
3 - @TJLuschen This is not exactly an assignment but just a diary that I would like to keep on practicing...
Writing Feedbackruntothesun1972 - Mar 16, 2018 / runtothesun1972 - Mar 17, 2018
|Academic result in measuring people's intelligence
2 - This is ambiguous writing... to me, you are lacking in nearly all boxes 1. Lexical Resource = repetition...
Writing Feedbackmanhhackc - Mar 16, 2018 / afaquekhan85 - Mar 16, 2018
|Travel agencies with customized travel program or free backpacking?
4 - really appreciate both of your comments!! may i ask how much score can my writing like this one get...
Writing Feedbackdeniselee - Mar 16, 2018 / deniselee - Mar 17, 2018
|IELTS A.W Task 2: people should keep all the money and not pay tax to the state
2 - Dear Polin_Togatorop, There is something you may want to consider further here. "Some people say an ability...
Writing FeedbackPolin_Togatorop - Mar 16, 2018 / hanhndvn - Mar 16, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 GT. Formal letter to an newspaper
NEW - You recently read an article in newspaper about someone you know personally. You found some information is wrong. Write...
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|Some people assume that spending money on maintaining public libaries is not necessary
Writing Feedbacklinhdan1198 - Mar 15, 2018 / linhdan1198 - Apr 2, 2018
|Financial institutions, beside revenue-generating activities, should contribute more to community
NEW - (IELTS) As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Agree or disagree? businesses - gaining profit...
Writing Feedbacktqhung94 - Mar 14, 2018 / — -
|Evaluate viable solutions to the problem of workplace stress.
NEW - Could anyone give me some feedback about my essay? Thank you and have a good day! reducing stress...
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|A proper training is very significant to make a fundamental structure of children's mind
3 - @nilfort your essay has a series of problems that needs to be addressed before you can even begin to...
Writing Feedbacknilfort - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 18, 2018
|Check sentences about media topic - newspapers
Writing FeedbackNguyen123 - Mar 11, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 14, 2018
|Evaluate the pros and cons about factory built near the community. [TOEFL]
3 - @kevin86120 You must avoid starting your sentences with the connecting words "And, but, or because". As these are connecting...
Writing Feedbackkevin86120 - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 14, 2018
|Death with Dignity Essay - should patient be allowed to end their life on their own terms?
2 - Kyra, you presented a personal opinion at the end of paragraph 2 but did not follow up on the...
Writing Feedbackkyra2114315 - Mar 11, 2018 / Holt - Mar 14, 2018
|IELTS Task 1 Bar graph about percentage of men and women doing exercise systematically
3 - @TJLuschen Thank you for your feedback! I am going to practice again based on this Thank you!...
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