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|narrative essay: Snowboarding Accident. (Original Composition)
NEW - Discuss the topic: Our friends and family are important. Grade 12 As I was snowboarding down the mountain,...
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|[IELTS] Is air travel only benefit for the richest people?
NEW - In the present-day society, it is believed that air travel has become the best way to travel a far...
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|'highly motivated, self-disciplined and well-organised' - Distance learning
NEW - The number of courses offered by distance has increased a great deal over the last few years. In the...
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|'people deserve to be known for what they did' - - TOEFL
Writing FeedbackNayara - Jan 31, 2012 / Nayara - Feb 1, 2012
|'it was a completely new life' - memoir Essay
4 - memoir essay...
Writing Feedbackcalanka - Jan 31, 2012 / calanka - Jan 31, 2012
|'work has become the most vital part' - help for ielts essay
NEW - Topic As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important...
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|'They follow what their heart say' - Childhood Dreams essay
Writing Feedbackkabir1 - Jan 31, 2012 / kabir1 - Jan 31, 2012
|'the mental desire without money' - Happiness in life - Ielts writing.
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Jan 31, 2012 / Mai Chu - Jan 31, 2012
|nuclear technology a danger to life on Earth? Benefits and risks?
3 - The invention of nuclear technology came as a relief for humanity, in the advent of an all time deficit...
Writing Feedbackkapuriasonu - Jan 31, 2012 / calanka - Jan 31, 2012
|(price of petrol increase / the cement making process) - IELTS ESSAYS
2 - After putting the power into the mixer, and it is then heated by Rotating heater So throughthanks for...
Writing Feedbackkiwiuua - Jan 30, 2012 / Mai Chu - Jan 31, 2012
|Should the elderly be taken care by the society or family
2 - I really don't think you should restate the question in the first paragraph. Also, stay away from me an...
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 30, 2012 / reidabook - Jan 30, 2012
|E.E. Cummings "How have these aspects of life influenced the poet and his work?"
3 - Throughout his life, Cummings would often travel to many countries, which included France and even Soviet Russia. Cummings...
Writing FeedbackGigantron - Jan 30, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 7, 2012
|Persuasive Writing - Travelling around the world
4 - Hi, I am a Canadian Language teacher based in Thailand. I teach academic & creative prose. I've read some...
Writing FeedbackVan19602 - Jan 30, 2012 / ranger_85 - Jan 31, 2012
|[IELTS]Can distance learning bring the same benefits of attending schools?
3 - Thank you so much, Susan. Your correction is very helpful. By the way, as for your correction of the...
Writing Feedbackchelseazcl - Jan 30, 2012 / chelseazcl - Jan 31, 2012
|Fable story : the princess snail
Writing Feedbackthaoquyen - Jan 30, 2012 / thaoquyen - Jan 31, 2012
|[IELTS] Parents should not Control What Children Learn at School
5 - For those parents who like to supervise their kids' learning at school, theysometimes worry about ]classes setting] class set-up...
Writing Feedbackjpplus - Jan 29, 2012 / dumi - Jan 31, 2012
|'being a pharmacist' - which paragraph is better?
3 - I prefer the second. I'm not a native speak English, so I'm not able to correct the mistakes. However,...
Writing Feedbackunjh4545 - Jan 29, 2012 / Nayara - Jan 30, 2012
|The Addiction Stigma: Finding the Grey Area Between Immorality and Disease
2 - Hi :) I will proofread your essay, and suggest some changes. Now, at 46, after winning two rounds...
Writing Feedbackbeccaleigh - Jan 29, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Jan 30, 2012
|'The New York Yankees are my favorite baseball team' - English II essay
NEW - I have yet to type up my intro paragraph and conclusion just because im not sure what she wants...
Writing Feedbackmcgee1095 - Jan 29, 2012 / — -
|'building a factory near my community is really a catastrophe' - TOEFL writing
2 - I would provide with the third paragraph as well. All in all, good points. Can you please look through...
Writing Feedbackr00524025 - Jan 28, 2012 / Parvina - Jan 28, 2012
|'learn to develop good characteristics in ourselves' - TOEFL
9 - Think you 2...
Writing FeedbackParvina - Jan 28, 2012 / mishal alzaid - Feb 2, 2012
|TV & MOVIES have a great impact on the life of modern people ; TOEFL
Writing Feedbackfansr0731 - Jan 28, 2012 / fansr0731 - Jan 28, 2012
|'Friendship is a kind of emotion in mind' - TOEFL writing
4 - The content is good, but you can develop the first and the last paragraph more. For the first...
Writing Feedbackchufan Chou - Jan 28, 2012 / fansr0731 - Feb 4, 2012
|How are we better than our fore fathers - my essay
3 - thank you so much for your nice analysis...i didnt high lighted the worest side of the issue although i...
Writing Feedbackfarhatsultana - Jan 28, 2012 / farhatsultana - Jan 29, 2012
|'The most time-consuming housework' - bar chart for IELTS
NEW - The chart shows the division of household tasks by gender in Great Britain. Write a report for a university...
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|Getting used to the madness! culture shock I encountered.
2 - From my experience, I would like to say that culture shock is an impact of travelling from a familiar...
Writing FeedbackMJKIM - Jan 27, 2012 / basawang - Jan 30, 2012
|knowledge; 'It's not true that young people enjoy more than older' - TOEFL
4 - Yes your arguments are very well-written. I just find one grammar error. They could save up some money during...
Writing FeedbackNayara - Jan 27, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 27, 2012
|'Medical, nursing, and health care system in Iran' - THIS JOURNAL
4 - It is clear that the health care system is one of the most important organizations in each country. ...
Writing Feedbackshery - Jan 27, 2012 / EF_Susan - Feb 6, 2012
|IELTS: People should not be forced to retire at a particular age such as 60 or 65
2 - meo71 There is aare number of arguments in favour of not forcing people to retire. Firstly, the experience they...
Writing Feedbackmeo71 - Jan 27, 2012 / farina - Jan 27, 2012
|'I want to be a doctor in the future' - Describe your short and long-term goals
3 - --yes of cause I will read your essay! this is a 1000 characters paragraph. I cannot write it longer....
Writing Feedbackxinxin - Jan 26, 2012 / xinxin - Jan 26, 2012
|My Relationship With My brother, A memoir
Writing Feedbacksavstar26 - Jan 26, 2012 / savstar26 - Jan 26, 2012
|Does technology make us less creative or not?
3 - I made a few corrections. English is not my first language, but I think 'predicament' means similar to 'embarrassing...
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 26, 2012 / vargam91 - Jan 26, 2012
|Essay on the plight of children in Sub-Saharan Africa
4 - We need to help show these youthful children that someone loves them. We need to show them that even...
Writing Feedbackhc23881 - Jan 26, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 27, 2012
|Government should fund fundamental science research
2 - Fundamental is the study of the laws of nature that govern the behavior of the universe, from the very...
Writing Feedbacksinghdeol - Jan 26, 2012 / cypress - Jan 26, 2012
|Prompt: Regret and Lucien
Writing FeedbackEltaria - Jan 26, 2012 / thatgirl12 - Jan 26, 2012
|About good grades and positive thinking
NEW - Good grades are not something that you find on the streets and just pick up! Grades comes from hard...
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|computer is serving a lot of people in almost every field
Writing Feedbackmehak aijaz - Jan 25, 2012 / mehak aijaz - Jan 26, 2012
|'Multicultural country and gays' - benefits of being in a diverse cultural community
3 - My pleasure!...
Writing Feedbackchentangni1994 - Jan 25, 2012 / chentangni1994 - Jan 26, 2012
|Pain (First writing Essay) - 'Pain is a word that most of us hate'
6 - Google is the best friend. Everything you can find there. Also, If you think that you need some...
Writing FeedbackAlpha - Jan 25, 2012 / eddies - Apr 24, 2014
|'I have lost him completely' - a difficult choice and face the consequences
Writing Feedbackraquelbee - Jan 25, 2012 / arianna_muv - Jan 25, 2012
|'planning of up-to-date and metropolitan cities' - Ielts essay review
4 - however, it seems to me that governments would better handle this matter better than individual owners. Good essay.Keep it...
Writing FeedbackMahmoud Saeed - Jan 25, 2012 / cypress - Jan 26, 2012
|'experiences obtained from work and travel are valuable' - IELTS essay
2 - It has almost become a western tradition for students, who are about to commence the first year of university,...
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 24, 2012 / EF_Susan - Jan 24, 2012
|Descriptive Composition on City Street at night-feedback&suggestions.
NEW - From a bird's eye view, this may seem like speckles of various colours in combination to form a bokeh...
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|Classmate in schools can lead children to reach to progression and triumph
5 - i totally agree with what ur trying to prove but try rewording phrases like this one becuase it needs...
Writing FeedbackAMiNENGiNE - Jan 24, 2012 / waldo01 - Feb 7, 2012
|'catch a train to go to KLCC' - NEW YEAR CELEBRATIONS
2 - It would be easier if you put the prompt up. That way, we would know exactly what to critique....
Writing FeedbackNoorain - Jan 24, 2012 / saurabh93 - Jan 24, 2012
|'the invention of (mobile) phone has changed all' - technology and people interaction
3 - It brings great convenience for us I think is "to us " You want ideas? Think about situations...
Writing Feedbackkiwiuua - Jan 23, 2012 / chufan Chou - Jan 28, 2012
|'classes should be mandatory' - students should be required to attend classes....
Writing FeedbackParvina - Jan 23, 2012 / Parvina - Jan 25, 2012
|'Childhood - being the loved one' - the happiest time
Writing FeedbackParvina - Jan 23, 2012 / Parvina - Jan 23, 2012
|'more and more exhibitions and sculptures appearing in public' - IELTS Essay
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 23, 2012 / cypress - Jan 23, 2012
|'joined the band in the fifth grade' -Childhood experiences that improved self esteem
Writing Feedbackmeasinkaren - Jan 23, 2012 / measinkaren - Jan 24, 2012
|'That special someone is my MOM' - THE PERSON I ADMIRE
4 - Every person admires someone. She taught me to keep moving even though I'm close to giving up, she believes...
Writing Feedbacknidshelpinessay - Jan 23, 2012 / beccalevesque - Jan 23, 2012
|'computers have found the diverse use in many fields' - IELTS essay
4 - Invention of computers has changed the way mankind interactsused to interact with themselves and with the environment. Moreover,...
Writing FeedbackMohit1 - Jan 23, 2012 / dumi - Jan 24, 2012
|'because of the Technology and sophisticated products' - IELTS essay
NEW - Tppic : The best way to solve the world's environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel ...
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|Do people accomplish more when they are allowed to do things in their own way? SATs
2 - hey there, your essay is balanced, argumentation is also impressive. You just need to work on minor things:...
Writing Feedbackvonquixotic - Jan 23, 2012 / Mohit1 - Jan 23, 2012
|ENG102 Term Paper, CSR & Tobacco Industry
2 - - Nicely written and presented in a logical way. - I don't feel that you need help on anything,...
Writing FeedbackNewnamJ - Jan 22, 2012 / Thors Hammer - Jan 22, 2012
|'Doctor is a respectful job in many cultures' - IELTS essay
5 - Hello Elainedlcruz Thanks for your comments.from my understading, the essay topic is asking if environmental issues will be better...
Writing Feedbackcypress - Jan 22, 2012 / cypress - Jan 23, 2012
|Govt Should Banned the Smoking?
3 - Well i will admit that if government did banned the smoking then people would be able to walk around...
Writing Feedbackbestdzines - Jan 22, 2012 / kplovesyou95 - Jan 22, 2012
|IELTS - Natural Talent or Training with Hardwork ? Both Views
Writing Feedbackjayk - Jan 22, 2012 / jayk - Jan 24, 2012
|'advertising is necessary in the free market economies' - NEGATIVE OR POSITIVE
Writing Feedbackjohnsmith111111 - Jan 21, 2012 / jayk - Jan 22, 2012
|'it was a beautiful day' - Descriptive Essay - Lifetime event
2 - Beautiful essay... Couple of suggestions - not that you need them... Sky as blue as a shallow Caribbean ocean......
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