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|'Electing a representative in government' - Essay help for midterm
2 - The entire third paragraph seems to drag on. Maybe try spacing out the essay a little better. It appears...
Writing Feedbackalexnsarria - Oct 16, 2012 / mhk1294 - Nov 11, 2012
|'complicated thinking skills' - IELTS: the main function of university
5 - .... when you rearrange the order it reads well; Should they give knowledge and skills to the graduates.......
Writing FeedbackAida - Oct 16, 2012 / dumi - Nov 9, 2012
|Happiness directly relates to economic success
4 - Jenny,thanks very much for your comment. i think i need to insert some transitional word such as " firstly,secondly...etc"...
Writing Feedbackpolsestart - Oct 16, 2012 / polsestart - Oct 16, 2012
|TOEFL Essay: How to define Happiness
2 - Some individuals feel happy when they have intimate relations (relationship) with (their) friends and family members, while others become...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 16, 2012 / mahsaa - Oct 16, 2012
|writting a parapraph about Vietnamese occasion .
NEW - Tet is the most important celebration of Vietnamese culture. It is an opportunity to reunite family and enjoy many...
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|Toefl: Students working while studying? More disadvantages than advantages
3 - Certainly dumi is right you need to support your arguments with real life examples. You can write short parapgraphs...
Writing FeedbackMoonMoon - Oct 16, 2012 / williamcosta - Oct 16, 2012
|What are seasons? Are they as different as they seem? - essay
2 - Hello! First, I recommend changing your title; unless, of course, the title was assigned. Given the ambiguity of the...
Writing FeedbackNVShouaXyooj - Oct 15, 2012 / Sheri_Editor - Nov 7, 2012
|Essay about The Child is father of the Man
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|'Life standards and food preparation these days' - criticize my essay
Writing FeedbackDcool - Oct 14, 2012 / humanx - Oct 20, 2012
|narrative essay : the wonderful annoucement
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|'Pursuance, never succeed in track again' - College Essay Revision
2 - For the first time ever, my life, my passion, my love for track, was fading away from me like...
Writing FeedbackMeiling - Oct 14, 2012 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|Governor's School essay on social issue (apathy) that concerns me
3 - Thanks for the feedback. Unfortunately, the deadline has passed and I just went with what my teachers said. Although,...
Writing Feedbackselemi - Oct 14, 2012 / selemi - Nov 8, 2012
|Which is better for children? to grow up in the countryside or in a big city?
3 - @pirFena In my opinion, your essay is quite good, although sometimes I feel hard to understand. You used Academic...
Writing FeedbackpirFena - Oct 14, 2012 / AndreiWindy - Mar 26, 2017
|IELTS :I would prefer to run my business than to own a new house
3 - Thank you phasetwozero for your valuable comments. I am unable to understand what is the problem with following...
Writing Feedbackw_even - Oct 14, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|"Teachers' role in the classroom"; IELTS
5 - if I want to give an example in the first paragraph in the body like this: " Accordingly, they...
Writing Feedbackannguyen - Oct 14, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 16, 2012
|Dilemma whether it is right decision to make Free health care for the POOR
Writing Feedbackfizuli - Oct 14, 2012 / kathytheson - Oct 14, 2012
|IELTS TASK 1: GRaph/ consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat
2 - Hi, Williamcosta "Overall, there was a gradual decrease...." => I think you should replay Overall with In the case...
Writing Feedbackwilliamcosta - Oct 13, 2012 / annguyen - Oct 14, 2012
|Learners have different preference s ; Self assessment
2 - You have really good ideas here, but in many cases you don't have complete sentences. Sometimes, it's just a...
Writing Feedbackrsantiago - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Is giving the same grade to every student in a group a good way to evaluate students?
5 - One more thing: your second last paragraph presents the opposite view. I am not sure about this but I...
Writing Feedbackhywb2 - Oct 13, 2012 / w_even - Oct 14, 2012
|'consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City' - GRE Argumentative
4 - mahsaa furthermore it is said that two-income families express more concern about healthful eating, Therefore, the new Captain Seafood...
Writing Feedbackmahsaa - Oct 13, 2012 / Halehh - Oct 31, 2012
|"in text Referencing" - This essay is correted by my teacher
2 - I think your teacher is right that you should expand your conclusion somewhat. Think about expanding your idea. Perhaps...
Writing FeedbackBraveheart - Oct 13, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|Daily schedules and the glorious life are main reasons that the individuals work to gain money
2 - I do agree that some people work only for money. However, there are also those who work to make...
Writing Feedbackuzbek_sheikh - Oct 12, 2012 / sophiezhu - Oct 13, 2012
|Apartment Vs House; depends on individual financial status and areas of comfort
2 - Living in an apartment undoubtedly has many advantages. First of all, it is cheaper to rent or buy an...
Writing FeedbackNemoo - Oct 12, 2012 / MBA_bound - Oct 24, 2012
|How important is ANZAC story to Australian Identity? clarification on this intro
4 - I just wanted clarification on the direction of my essay is going. I have dificulty writing essays, and I'm...
Writing FeedbackMaraJade10 - Oct 12, 2012 / MaraJade10 - Nov 21, 2012
|'Understanding your child' - Essay about three things good parents do
2 - The second thing is too short I think. Maybe you can add that parents should give their children more...
Writing FeedbackJasmine92 - Oct 12, 2012 / lucy123 - Oct 27, 2012
|SAT: disagreement makes progress
Writing Feedbackbeibeibajin - Oct 12, 2012 / jineshwar1995 - Oct 12, 2012
|If you want to become an expert in a certain field, do you need talent or motivation?
3 - Thank you :)...
Writing FeedbackDiana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012 / Diana Safiy - Oct 12, 2012
|Average weight of people is increasing, causes and solutions; 'burgers & pizzas'
3 - Your essay is good 1- Good vocabulary. 2- Good supporting ideas. however you have to think about the essay...
Writing Feedbackwilliamhayt - Oct 12, 2012 / Nemoo - Oct 12, 2012
|'Farmers and unemployment' - Factory near my community TOEFL
2 - This sentence has several issues; first grammer and then about clarity and its presentation. These issues tend...
Writing Feedbackhang123 - Oct 11, 2012 / dumi - Oct 12, 2012
|College Essay on Dads Heart Attack
Writing FeedbackAmzad123 - Oct 11, 2012 / edenh18 - Oct 27, 2012
|'Weekly money expenditure on fast food' - IELTS
NEW - Hi everybody, I really just need someone to read it over for me.This is Ä°ELTS writing task 1....
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|IELTS 'university students' tuition fees - beneficial to the public
Writing Feedbackcarole - Oct 11, 2012 / carole - Oct 12, 2012
|Work in a company vs. have your own business, TOEFL
NEW - Society is often divided into two groups regarding major issues involving occupation. Some people like to have their own...
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|'Time of judgement' - college essay
Writing Feedbackjustintubbs - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE
2 - Causes, effects, and solutions to DIVORCE Be sure to discuss each of these topics equally. If you were to...
Writing Feedbackphantan252 - Oct 10, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 10, 2012
|Academic or non academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
4 - I admire your position. However, if you use shorter sentences, your main idea will undoubtedly stand out...
Writing FeedbackGagandeep - Oct 10, 2012 / rezwan3 - Nov 1, 2012
|IELTS: World literacy rates by region and by gender; 'lower for men than women'
2 - Hello! This makes sense, but has a few grammatical errors. Lack of literacy skills IS found (currently you have...
Writing Feedbackding - Oct 10, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|does cheap air travel damage the environment
2 - Your way of description is good . Straight to the point. I like your way of description and how...
Writing FeedbackLIGE - Oct 10, 2012 / alfredeie - Nov 1, 2012
|IELTS TASK 2 - Sport man makes more money than other. Discuss both views
3 - To be success in --- To ACHIEVE success in (it must be either BE SUCCESSFUL or ACHIEVE SUCCESS) Many...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 10, 2012 / April April - Oct 16, 2012
|Harmful human activity damages the Earth
2 - Sorry for my bad english because i'm still beginner with the language. I think is very interesting the comment...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 10, 2012 / Chapapote - Oct 10, 2012
|How to use "Ratio", "Disproportion" and "volume" in the IELTS Task1 report???
Writing Feedbackgreenbeen - Oct 10, 2012 / greenbeen - Feb 27, 2013
|"Traditional Market"- Narration for a theme : Look before you leap
2 - Shopping with my mother in traditional market has become a nightmare for me recently. - Recently, shopping in...
Writing FeedbackAlyssa - Oct 9, 2012 / skinbag - Oct 9, 2012
|Teacher vs parent role in children's intellectual and social development IELTS Task2
Writing FeedbackIris77 - Oct 9, 2012 / Leah_Writer - Nov 5, 2012
|'Norwegian Philosopher Arne Naess' article correction
3 - Can anyone with good english correct this A Norwegian Philosopher Arne Naess invented the term 'Deep Ecology'. An environmental...
Writing Feedbackbat - Oct 9, 2012 / bat - Oct 9, 2012
|IELTS TASK2 Pros and cons of building nuclear power plants
5 - In my opinion, the very first thing is that you'd better write more (IELTS Task 2 essay requires at...
Writing Feedbackz1z1z1z1 - Oct 9, 2012 / Chicken - Oct 24, 2012
|'A person of good moral character' - Writing Sample
Writing Feedbackgospelkeys - Oct 9, 2012 / anniejerry - Oct 9, 2012
|side effect to the society; Higher petrol price Vs Level of traffic & pollution
NEW - Hi, I need to improve my writing skill. kindly give me feedback so that i can improve. Pollution...
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|Design Rationale - Essay about advertising for communication class
2 - Instead of saying this "Advertisements surround us, they appear everywhere" you could maybe say something to the fact of...
Writing FeedbackmBluebear - Oct 9, 2012 / Tabby - Nov 3, 2012
|IELTS: Investment in public transportation to against pollution; Agree/ Disagree
NEW - The policy to increase spending on public transportation to reduce air pollution has been common in many cities in...
Writing FeedbackTran Tong - Oct 8, 2012 / — -
|Problems in relationships have led to separation ; Conflict and Relationship
5 - As this is my first essay I really require your reviews on structure , grammer , sentences , punctuations....
Writing Feedbackiamtrying - Oct 8, 2012 / iamtrying - Oct 13, 2012
|visitors going to music sites / sales and prices of Coca Cola - IELTS Writing task 1
3 - the numbers of Pop Parade's guesses stay around 120.000 = he numbers of Pop Parade's guests stays around 120.000...
Writing Feedbackding - Oct 8, 2012 / Tran Tong - Oct 8, 2012
|Essay: compare and contrast between communicating by mobile phone and letter
Writing Feedbackthao phuong - Oct 8, 2012 / thao phuong - Oct 9, 2012
|The World & Experience - UC Prompts
Writing Feedbackdresdenflyer - Oct 7, 2012 / shmegg - Oct 28, 2012
|I really need help next month I have TOEFL and your comment will help me
Writing Feedbackparnian - Oct 7, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|The process of making tea
Writing FeedbackHeina - Oct 7, 2012 / Heina - Oct 9, 2012
|I am preparing for TOEFL iBT - Students choice of places to live
Writing Feedbackaniketkumar - Oct 7, 2012 / navid_zarif - Oct 11, 2012
|IELTS_importance of academic qualifications and personality in employment
2 - After reading your passage,in addition to some of the influent sentences,I feel you'd better think about how to make...
Writing Feedbackchfrank - Oct 7, 2012 / Jue - Oct 7, 2012
|'Myths are the symbols of humans primitive cognition about the world' TOEFL ESSAY
2 - We are living in a world that isconsists of substances which are ,scientifically speaking,the productresult of the Bigbang that...
Writing FeedbackJue - Oct 7, 2012 / Jennyflower81 - Oct 8, 2012
|SAT essay -Which is more powerful? Conscience Vs Money, Fame, or Power
NEW - I would like some feedback on improving this, also, I would like to know what score I would get,...
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|Report on culture shock between China and French for exchange student
NEW - Hey, it is a little bit longer. Please help me look at the structure and writing. Thank you ...
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