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|Do you think long distance flight should be banned?
2 - Individuals typically electconsider airplane as a relatively convenient, time-efficienct, and economical way oflong travel for a long time ....
Writing FeedbackBingbing - Oct 20, 2011 / dumi - Oct 21, 2011
|THEN THERE WAS ME
3 - This essay is really good. It is heartfelt and sincere, but never whiny, which is also a good thing....
Writing Feedbackcollege_bound17 - Oct 20, 2011 / Zeugma - Oct 21, 2011
|Identity Essay: My Experiences in Atheism
NEW - I totally bombed this essay the first time I tried to write it. Completely missed the whole point of...
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|TOEFL-help from the government is often not necessary
4 - of course you can but in formal and professional writing, you should avoid using short sentence without a full...
Writing Feedbackhihihiah - Oct 19, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 21, 2011
|About Betsy Hart, an adoptive writter (her writing style is evocative and simple)
NEW - Betsy Hart is a countrywide syndicated journalist for the Scripps Howard News Service. She is prominent for writing about...
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|Cause and Effect Essay on the power of words
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|Cause and Effect for Biological Purposes of Alcohol
Writing FeedbackBrezzySwaggg18 - Oct 19, 2011 / BrezzySwaggg18 - Oct 20, 2011
|'my ideal image' a person you admire, and say why you admire hime/her
4 - tnx, i think it needs some more details, but im allowed to use 100 words in this essay. anyway...
Writing Feedbackfarnoosh1362 - Oct 19, 2011 / farnoosh1362 - Oct 20, 2011
|Ielts Task 2: Formal examination vs continuous assessment
NEW - Hi, can someone help me go through my essay? Topic: Only formal examinations,written or practical, can give a...
Writing Feedbackdianalpy - Oct 19, 2011 / — -
|The advices from grandparents have no use for their grandchildren, agree of disagree?
NEW - Hi, I'm really appreciate that someone could give me suggestions about the essay that I wrote. Topic:The advices...
Writing Feedbackyiyiyiy - Oct 18, 2011 / — -
|'Only formal examinations,written or practical, can examine knowledge' IELTS
3 - Thank you so much szheng,You are right. i have written this essay in 35 minutes,iam preparing for IELTS and...
Writing Feedbackp177 - Oct 18, 2011 / p177 - Oct 18, 2011
|(globalization has become a general tendency): Ielts
NEW - Hi guys I really need your help,please give me your suggestions and corrections as possible as needed , thanks...
Writing Feedbackdiliutianmoxue - Oct 18, 2011 / — -
|'Which Way to Go' - my reflective essay
3 - What is the question for this essay? As Liebe has said, you need to add hook in the beginning...
Writing Feedbackvgrommes - Oct 18, 2011 / callmeapple - Oct 19, 2011
|"Respect everyone" is the most important school rule - O level
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Oct 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 20, 2011
|Let's Marry! - issues of fake marriage in the immigration system
2 - This is what I would personally do in order to improve flow and grammar. There is one major problem...
Writing Feedbackbbish520 - Oct 17, 2011 / disaznboii19148 - Oct 19, 2011
|'working in an office is boring and bad for your health?' - work Essay
NEW - Some people think that working in an office is boring and bad for your health, and some say the...
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|English reading 1. Fundamental of Soccer
Writing Feedbacksaxiibo10 - Oct 17, 2011 / saxiibo10 - Oct 17, 2011
|Essay that identifies central argument from a a Homeless Man's Perspective
2 - Her statement holds true on several occasions ---'Occasions' doesn't seem like the right word to use here. Homeless...
Writing Feedbackhannbanana - Oct 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 19, 2011
|'to manage financial difficulties' - Students to take a part-time job while studying?
Writing Feedbacknguyendinhtuong - Oct 17, 2011 / nguyendinhtuong - Oct 18, 2011
|'People studying purposes for adult education [chart]' - Writing Task
4 - last reason are job-irrelevant, withby 40% out of you can use it >> AS can be seen ,instead of...
Writing Feedbackkillcharlie - Oct 17, 2011 / p177 - Oct 18, 2011
|(very healthy and enjoyable) Advantages and disadvantages of cycling
Writing FeedbackKhattara - Oct 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 17, 2011
|It is not the clothes that make a person; People behave differently when they wear different clothes
5 - jeveux yes, this is an optional essay, but im going to pass IELTS exam, thats why i am trying...
Writing FeedbackHell Yeah - Oct 16, 2011 / Hell Yeah - Oct 16, 2011
|Artemether Injection (Anti-malaria) - just one paragraph to refine
NEW - One of our star medicines ---Artemether Injection (Anti-malaria) was detected 2% below standard and thus resulted in a "Non-conformation"...
Writing Feedbackinaustin - Oct 16, 2011 / — -
|'Thinking and competency' - Work in a team or independently, which more effective?
2 - In which circumstance you can act in a efficient way, team-work or individual work? This is the most frequently...
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - Oct 16, 2011 / Bobur - Oct 16, 2011
|Do violence and immorality in the media make our society more dangerous and immoral?
3 - Violence and immortality have raised many questions recently.(too plain sentence, add something catchy to begin your speech) The tough...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 16, 2011 / mvlauria94 - Oct 21, 2011
|Distance-learning program is better than traditional education?
2 - 1. ...one of the dominating choices --> dominant / crucial / vital / decisive choices 2. Equally importantly -->...
Writing FeedbackBingbing - Oct 15, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 15, 2011
|Cinemas and the silver screen
2 - Cinemashashave been more popular for people recently. hundreds of films have been made that to attract people. and famous...
Writing Feedbacknamlun191 - Oct 15, 2011 / Bobur - Oct 15, 2011
|Basketball is my tool to alleviate pressure; My hobby (to play basketbal)
Writing FeedbackLawrence - Oct 15, 2011 / shanne84 - Oct 15, 2011
|'bear the burden / push to learn / think' - important qualities of a leader?
NEW - The best leaders are not those who seek power or have great political skill. Great leaders-and these are exceptionally...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 15, 2011 / — -
|IELTS essay, what benefits do skyscrapers bring?
Writing Feedbackdna - Oct 15, 2011 / dna - Oct 19, 2011
|Ielts task 1, two graphs about reasons for study and the amount of support
2 - 1. The percentage of 80% of students --> Eighty percent of students 2. On the contrary , the first...
Writing Feedbackneedurhelp - Oct 15, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 16, 2011
|If children want to do well in school, parents should limit time of watching tv.
NEW - this is my essay, pls check>< Since students' performances not only decides their future prospects, but also affects...
Writing Feedbackrichard35568 - Oct 15, 2011 / — -
|Toefl IBT Writing, Topic: In order to be well-informed, ..
4 - Nowadays, people get more and more information from the media. Some people believe and feel enough about the sources,...
Writing Feedbackrita66q - Oct 14, 2011 / engstu - Oct 19, 2011
|You are planing to study abroad. what do you think you will like or dislike about it?
3 - Hi lolo12; thankyou for your advise, and I thought that I wrote my essay in the way like other...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Oct 13, 2011 / bahareh - Oct 15, 2011
|What human trait would you most want to understand? (Jealousy)
Writing FeedbackKrennis93 - Oct 13, 2011 / diegorivero412 - Oct 13, 2011
|'someone you know that act with courage' - a journal topic about courage
2 - To be honest, this is a not good writing. however , practice makes perfect so you should rewrite this...
Writing FeedbackBrianna_winter - Oct 13, 2011 / beepro21 - Oct 14, 2011
|Write about an occasion when a furious argument took place
3 - The end of year examinations were now finally over. I first went towards the department store, as I...
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Oct 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 13, 2011
|TOEFL;In 20 yrs, fewer cars in use ? only when the substitutions are available
Writing FeedbackAuguste - Oct 13, 2011 / Auguste - Oct 23, 2011
|life in the city is becoming increasingly unappealing
2 - Kind of boring. The intro is especially boring, you need to hook your reader! get a quote from an...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Oct 13, 2011 / r0400293 - Oct 13, 2011
|About Nelson Mandela - One material of SAT I prepared
2 - Nelson Mandela, the first black people president of Africa, had struggled for black people since 1944 and was ...
Writing Feedbacklittleblue - Oct 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 13, 2011
|Toefl IBT Writing, Topic: Grades based on exams or on class participation.
Writing Feedbackkhouryjok - Oct 13, 2011 / khouryjok - Oct 14, 2011
|'respectation should be part of our life' - Ielts: Cultural Differences
NEW - HI, can someone help me to check my writing. Thanks a lot. My topic is "Some people believe that...
Writing Feedbackdianalpy - Oct 13, 2011 / — -
|IELTS> effects from using computers everyday; 'overuse and misuse computers'
3 - Thank you everyone. @De Silva: I know what you mean, perhaps children don't have money to go shopping...
Writing Feedbacksupernoob101 - Oct 13, 2011 / supernoob101 - Oct 13, 2011
|'My sister is my teacher' - a descriptive paragraph about a person
3 - Thank you so much! This is definitely the best editing I've seen! Thank you thank you thank you!!!...
Writing Feedbackhyemskim - Oct 12, 2011 / hyemskim - Oct 13, 2011
|Work/Money impact of Jobs on life
5 - I didn't mean to offend you, it's just that in my writing my thoughts are pretty good, except I...
Writing FeedbackEditor1010 - Oct 12, 2011 / Editor1010 - Oct 13, 2011
|TOEFL-Technology deteriorates humans thinking.
2 - Actually you dont have to state "first, second or third".. just bring out your ideas. The information or details...
Writing Feedbackmonamona - Oct 12, 2011 / yungtszwing - Oct 12, 2011
|IELTS: How to Allocate Government Expenditure
4 - yes, "on the weekend" is correct then again, you could take part of the sentence out too, and that...
Writing Feedbackwangshushu21 - Oct 12, 2011 / beccalevesque - Oct 12, 2011
|TOEFL - I believe that every businessman should do anything to make a profit
3 - Thank you for your comment. I agree with you about the word "populated", but I think the sentence...
Writing Feedbackargentum - Oct 12, 2011 / argentum - Oct 12, 2011
|essay about women opportunities
4 - First, in the past women used to only be the house maker. Women nurture their house and children in...
Writing FeedbackNMS - Oct 12, 2011 / Editor1010 - Oct 12, 2011
|'Stress is a serious problem' - Ielts task
Writing Feedbackletho7990 - Oct 11, 2011 / — -
|Having good co-workers - TOEFL Exam
5 - Merely google, searching by using the topic (question) of TOEFL or IELST you will find many sample essays. ...
Writing Feedbackshinju - Oct 11, 2011 / engstu - Oct 20, 2011
|computer have negative effects on children. agree or disagree??
Writing Feedbackdheyce08 - Oct 11, 2011 / wraithseeker - Oct 18, 2011
|IELTS: How should the visitors and the host country deal with cultural differences?
4 - letho7990 Thank you for your suggestions. How should write the introduction? should i state each of the...
Writing Feedbacksmilectt - Oct 11, 2011 / smilectt - Oct 12, 2011
|Informal learning and childrean teaching
2 - Hell there, what is this all about? The first two sentences are good, and in this one I would...
Writing Feedbackdapatel - Oct 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2011
|'a teacher should not only focuss on teaching' - IELTS
3 - Thank you very much for the information. I do really get the input especially the usage of 'should'. Thanks....
Writing Feedbackdianalpy - Oct 11, 2011 / dianalpy - Oct 11, 2011
|Causes and solutions to problems with student bad behaviour-ielts task2
NEW - Please help me improve this writing. Give me some comments and a score if possible. Thank you very much!...
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|Ietls7 - positive environment for children grow up (people with talents)
2 - This , however, has blinded people to the factthink that othersanybody can make quicker progress towardin ...
Writing Feedbackletho7990 - Oct 10, 2011 / dumi - Oct 11, 2011
|'Juliet states that Romeo invited her to dinner' - essay of the "to be" verb
NEW - Juliet states that Romeo invited her to dinner on a particular day though she does not keep a journal...
Writing Feedbackladyphoenix1990 - Oct 10, 2011 / — -
|Get the most important characteristics of a society by studying its cities?
NEW - GRE - To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Is it...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Oct 10, 2011 / — -
|When I grow up, I realize that the importance of politeness should be emphasized to a extent
Writing Feedbackrichard35568 - Oct 10, 2011 / richard35568 - Oct 11, 2011
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