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|Do you think it is the good idea for a student to have a part time job?
4 - Hi Nowaday is wrong should writ nowadays . Also it is better to separate your paragraphs. Best wish...
Writing Feedbackshinbonis - Oct 24, 2011 / monamona - Oct 26, 2011
|Freedom from stress and hunger.
2 - I'm sorry but I couldn't even get through your first paragraph! Sorry to be so brutal but it obvious...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Oct 24, 2011 / daniel44992 - Oct 24, 2011
|It is better to have one or two close friends than to have a large number of casuals
4 - Thankyou Soshianet and Lena for helping me. I think I need more time to revise my essay properly. wish...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Oct 24, 2011 / bahareh - Oct 24, 2011
|toefl- professors should pay more attention on researching or education?
5 - I think it is better use this style in your writing: Introduction --- consider two different side of idea...
Writing Feedbackjcclscl - Oct 24, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 6, 2011
|Compare/ Contrast: Intellectual vs. Ideological in the new age.
Writing FeedbackDevinJCan - Oct 24, 2011 / DevinJCan - Oct 26, 2011
|Toefl: Attending a live performance is exciting, amusing and energetic.
NEW - Some people prefer to stay at home and watching a live event on television; however, others would rather attend...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Oct 23, 2011 / — -
|How important is it to look beyond superficial appearances?
3 - nice, thanks...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 23, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 24, 2011
|History - which academic class has been your favorite
3 - Nice phrasing! your interest in the subject really comes across! I'm guessing you want to major in history? :D...
Writing Feedbackcapriciousprite - Oct 23, 2011 / artiQlate - Oct 23, 2011
|IELTS (four charts show the death reasons of registered Indians and total population)
2 - These pie charts represent the main causes of death (Injuries, Circulatory, Cancers, Respiratory, Infectious and Others) for registered Indians...
Writing FeedbackTomLin - Oct 23, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 27, 2011
|Charts; why adults decide to study/how costs of adult education should be shared
NEW - The charts below show the results of a survey of education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults...
Writing Feedbackhuynhthanhhuyen - Oct 23, 2011 / — -
|Jordan is an image of success, talent and inspiration - meeting with him would be my dream
2 - If I could be a famous athlete, this would sure be Michael Jordan, the best basketball player of all...
Writing Feedbacktrantrongduc - Oct 22, 2011 / MellyLove - Oct 22, 2011
|'how society perceives of your identity' - advice on my book essay
2 - If you can write an intro paragraph like this one above, I don't think you need to worry about...
Writing Feedbacklollypop12 - Oct 22, 2011 / Rajiv - Oct 26, 2011
|'An excellent teacher and a good friend' - describe the best teacher you ever met
Writing Feedbacklena1202 - Oct 22, 2011 / lena1202 - Oct 24, 2011
|Family Tree Essay- Introduction
4 - You're very welcome. I'm asking because you are actually posting a course work essay here in the undergraduate admission...
Writing FeedbackSalisburya - Oct 22, 2011 / cloudwatcher - Oct 22, 2011
|'globalization brings different cultures together' - IELTS
3 - Its really so kind of you that you reviewed my essay. I posted few essays on some other sites...
Writing Feedbackgargankita - Oct 22, 2011 / gargankita - Oct 23, 2011
|'headed for Sioux Falls, SD' - My presence and the community
NEW - Two days ago, a few underclassmen, classmates and I were headed for Sioux Falls, SD in our big yellow...
Writing Feedbackjameson1 - Oct 21, 2011 / — -
|'Studies abroad and the cultural aspect of the experience' - TOEFL
2 - Studying abroad is one of very common things that students do, and they have different reasons for that. I...
Writing FeedbackMideo29 - Oct 21, 2011 / BunyodBek - Oct 21, 2011
|'doing things we don't enjoy' - TOEFL Essay
3 - Thanks a lot for your valuable notes my friend! What do you think of my writing overall? The structure...
Writing FeedbackMideo29 - Oct 21, 2011 / Mideo29 - Oct 21, 2011
|"This is the third time you've almost lost it" - Free Response Essay
Writing Feedbackflipwhit - Oct 20, 2011 / flipwhit - Oct 21, 2011
|'Afraid of murders all my life' - Essay about my fear
3 - I think you used too much "fears" in the last paragraph so maybe you need to paraphrase. And maybe...
Writing Feedbacknaomiyeahnaomi - Oct 20, 2011 / ljxlrdjxdr - Oct 20, 2011
|Do you think long distance flight should be banned?
2 - Individuals typically electconsider airplane as a relatively convenient, time-efficienct, and economical way oflong travel for a long time ....
Writing FeedbackBingbing - Oct 20, 2011 / dumi - Oct 21, 2011
|THEN THERE WAS ME
3 - This essay is really good. It is heartfelt and sincere, but never whiny, which is also a good thing....
Writing Feedbackcollege_bound17 - Oct 20, 2011 / Zeugma - Oct 21, 2011
|Identity Essay: My Experiences in Atheism
NEW - I totally bombed this essay the first time I tried to write it. Completely missed the whole point of...
Writing Feedbackjohnnymayer - Oct 20, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL-help from the government is often not necessary
4 - of course you can but in formal and professional writing, you should avoid using short sentence without a full...
Writing Feedbackhihihiah - Oct 19, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 21, 2011
|About Betsy Hart, an adoptive writter (her writing style is evocative and simple)
NEW - Betsy Hart is a countrywide syndicated journalist for the Scripps Howard News Service. She is prominent for writing about...
Writing Feedbacksaxiibo10 - Oct 19, 2011 / — -
|Cause and Effect Essay on the power of words
Writing Feedbackmeagain - Oct 19, 2011 / — -
|Cause and Effect for Biological Purposes of Alcohol
Writing FeedbackBrezzySwaggg18 - Oct 19, 2011 / BrezzySwaggg18 - Oct 20, 2011
|'my ideal image' a person you admire, and say why you admire hime/her
4 - tnx, i think it needs some more details, but im allowed to use 100 words in this essay. anyway...
Writing Feedbackfarnoosh1362 - Oct 19, 2011 / farnoosh1362 - Oct 20, 2011
|Ielts Task 2: Formal examination vs continuous assessment
NEW - Hi, can someone help me go through my essay? Topic: Only formal examinations,written or practical, can give a...
Writing Feedbackdianalpy - Oct 19, 2011 / — -
|The advices from grandparents have no use for their grandchildren, agree of disagree?
NEW - Hi, I'm really appreciate that someone could give me suggestions about the essay that I wrote. Topic:The advices...
Writing Feedbackyiyiyiy - Oct 18, 2011 / — -
|'Only formal examinations,written or practical, can examine knowledge' IELTS
3 - Thank you so much szheng,You are right. i have written this essay in 35 minutes,iam preparing for IELTS and...
Writing Feedbackp177 - Oct 18, 2011 / p177 - Oct 18, 2011
|(globalization has become a general tendency): Ielts
NEW - Hi guys I really need your help,please give me your suggestions and corrections as possible as needed , thanks...
Writing Feedbackdiliutianmoxue - Oct 18, 2011 / — -
|'Which Way to Go' - my reflective essay
3 - What is the question for this essay? As Liebe has said, you need to add hook in the beginning...
Writing Feedbackvgrommes - Oct 18, 2011 / callmeapple - Oct 19, 2011
|"Respect everyone" is the most important school rule - O level
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Oct 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 20, 2011
|Let's Marry! - issues of fake marriage in the immigration system
2 - This is what I would personally do in order to improve flow and grammar. There is one major problem...
Writing Feedbackbbish520 - Oct 17, 2011 / disaznboii19148 - Oct 19, 2011
|'working in an office is boring and bad for your health?' - work Essay
NEW - Some people think that working in an office is boring and bad for your health, and some say the...
Writing Feedbacksaxiibo10 - Oct 17, 2011 / — -
|English reading 1. Fundamental of Soccer
Writing Feedbacksaxiibo10 - Oct 17, 2011 / saxiibo10 - Oct 17, 2011
|Essay that identifies central argument from a a Homeless Man's Perspective
2 - Her statement holds true on several occasions ---'Occasions' doesn't seem like the right word to use here. Homeless...
Writing Feedbackhannbanana - Oct 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 19, 2011
|'to manage financial difficulties' - Students to take a part-time job while studying?
Writing Feedbacknguyendinhtuong - Oct 17, 2011 / nguyendinhtuong - Oct 18, 2011
|'People studying purposes for adult education [chart]' - Writing Task
4 - last reason are job-irrelevant, withby 40% out of you can use it >> AS can be seen ,instead of...
Writing Feedbackkillcharlie - Oct 17, 2011 / p177 - Oct 18, 2011
|(very healthy and enjoyable) Advantages and disadvantages of cycling
Writing FeedbackKhattara - Oct 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 17, 2011
|It is not the clothes that make a person; People behave differently when they wear different clothes
5 - jeveux yes, this is an optional essay, but im going to pass IELTS exam, thats why i am trying...
Writing FeedbackHell Yeah - Oct 16, 2011 / Hell Yeah - Oct 16, 2011
|Artemether Injection (Anti-malaria) - just one paragraph to refine
NEW - One of our star medicines ---Artemether Injection (Anti-malaria) was detected 2% below standard and thus resulted in a "Non-conformation"...
Writing Feedbackinaustin - Oct 16, 2011 / — -
|'Thinking and competency' - Work in a team or independently, which more effective?
2 - In which circumstance you can act in a efficient way, team-work or individual work? This is the most frequently...
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - Oct 16, 2011 / Bobur - Oct 16, 2011
|Do violence and immorality in the media make our society more dangerous and immoral?
3 - Violence and immortality have raised many questions recently.(too plain sentence, add something catchy to begin your speech) The tough...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 16, 2011 / mvlauria94 - Oct 21, 2011
|Distance-learning program is better than traditional education?
2 - 1. ...one of the dominating choices --> dominant / crucial / vital / decisive choices 2. Equally importantly -->...
Writing FeedbackBingbing - Oct 15, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 15, 2011
|Cinemas and the silver screen
2 - Cinemashashave been more popular for people recently. hundreds of films have been made that to attract people. and famous...
Writing Feedbacknamlun191 - Oct 15, 2011 / Bobur - Oct 15, 2011
|Basketball is my tool to alleviate pressure; My hobby (to play basketbal)
Writing FeedbackLawrence - Oct 15, 2011 / shanne84 - Oct 15, 2011
|'bear the burden / push to learn / think' - important qualities of a leader?
NEW - The best leaders are not those who seek power or have great political skill. Great leaders-and these are exceptionally...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 15, 2011 / — -
|IELTS essay, what benefits do skyscrapers bring?
Writing Feedbackdna - Oct 15, 2011 / dna - Oct 19, 2011
|Ielts task 1, two graphs about reasons for study and the amount of support
2 - 1. The percentage of 80% of students --> Eighty percent of students 2. On the contrary , the first...
Writing Feedbackneedurhelp - Oct 15, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 16, 2011
|If children want to do well in school, parents should limit time of watching tv.
NEW - this is my essay, pls check>< Since students' performances not only decides their future prospects, but also affects...
Writing Feedbackrichard35568 - Oct 15, 2011 / — -
|Toefl IBT Writing, Topic: In order to be well-informed, ..
4 - Nowadays, people get more and more information from the media. Some people believe and feel enough about the sources,...
Writing Feedbackrita66q - Oct 14, 2011 / engstu - Oct 19, 2011
|You are planing to study abroad. what do you think you will like or dislike about it?
3 - Hi lolo12; thankyou for your advise, and I thought that I wrote my essay in the way like other...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Oct 13, 2011 / bahareh - Oct 15, 2011
|What human trait would you most want to understand? (Jealousy)
Writing FeedbackKrennis93 - Oct 13, 2011 / diegorivero412 - Oct 13, 2011
|'someone you know that act with courage' - a journal topic about courage
2 - To be honest, this is a not good writing. however , practice makes perfect so you should rewrite this...
Writing FeedbackBrianna_winter - Oct 13, 2011 / beepro21 - Oct 14, 2011
|Write about an occasion when a furious argument took place
3 - The end of year examinations were now finally over. I first went towards the department store, as I...
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Oct 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 13, 2011
|TOEFL;In 20 yrs, fewer cars in use ? only when the substitutions are available
Writing FeedbackAuguste - Oct 13, 2011 / Auguste - Oct 23, 2011
|life in the city is becoming increasingly unappealing
2 - Kind of boring. The intro is especially boring, you need to hook your reader! get a quote from an...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Oct 13, 2011 / r0400293 - Oct 13, 2011
|About Nelson Mandela - One material of SAT I prepared
2 - Nelson Mandela, the first black people president of Africa, had struggled for black people since 1944 and was ...
Writing Feedbacklittleblue - Oct 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 13, 2011
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