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|People can solve important problems by themselves
Writing Feedbackcherry199371 - Nov 15, 2011 / cherry199371 - Nov 16, 2011
|TOEFL_Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good; human's tendency
NEW - Do you agree or disagree that progress is always good? There is no doubt that every one like progression,...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Nov 15, 2011 / — -
|Measures to promote understanding towards volunteerism
2 - Nowadays, volunteerism can be found everywhere. Re- word this sentence Maybe: Volunteerism is a growing trend in many communities....
Writing Feedbacknoobeng - Nov 15, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 16, 2011
|Facebook & www requires english; learning a foreign language early at school.
NEW - It is strongly believed that the role of language in our life is taken for granted. Can you speak...
Writing FeedbackAMiNENGiNE - Nov 14, 2011 / — -
|more and more people start to pay attention to education
2 - A few things... With the rapid development of economy, more and more people start to pay attention to...
Writing Feedbackchealse - Nov 13, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 16, 2011
|'malicious yet popular food items' - Persuasive Essay- AP Language and Composition
5 - "These malicious yet popular food items overwhelmingly occupy the cafeteria." I would change that.. it's the right idea, but...
Writing FeedbackM_Marie - Nov 13, 2011 / morr_j23 - Nov 14, 2011
|Should children taught to be co-operative rather than compete?
Writing Feedbackshandy133 - Nov 13, 2011 / stellastella - Nov 17, 2011
4 - The story tells about a mountain climber,who wanted to climb the highest mountain. He began his adventure after many...
Writing Feedbackfabaca - Nov 13, 2011 / s_saber - Nov 18, 2011
|Should governments spend more money on improving roads, or public transportation ?
2 - Yea.... I find some grammer issues but I dont say you really should worry too much because with little...
Writing FeedbackAMiNENGiNE - Nov 13, 2011 / dumi - Nov 14, 2011
|SAT essay: Should people always be loyal?
Writing FeedbackLily Rose - Nov 12, 2011 / Lily Rose - Nov 13, 2011
|Incredible me essay (what makes me incredible for my language art essay)
2 - Is it the ultimate goal of happiness that, all individuals are searching for? You should re-word this sentence. An...
Writing FeedbackMklina - Nov 12, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 16, 2011
|Write an essay about weather technology makes out lives easier.
3 - pretty good, a little more explanation Although technology has made some aspects of life easier, it has not...
Writing Feedbacknicodorable - Nov 12, 2011 / danny411 - Nov 13, 2011
|'Knockout' My mid- term essay on my autobiographical incident.
Writing Feedbackjobo - Nov 12, 2011 / jobo - Nov 13, 2011
|(History books) what kind of reading do you prefer?
3 - Well I think you did a good job, especially describing your favourite subject and you gave strong points. Although...
Writing Feedbackmojde - Nov 12, 2011 / nicodorable - Nov 12, 2011
|Daydreamer -- poetry-like
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Nov 12, 2011 / rajp98 - Nov 17, 2011
|'television is nothing more than entertainment' - SAMPLE QUESTION FROM IELTS
NEW - Some people believe that television is a powerful educational tool. Other people believe that television is nothing more than...
Writing Feedbackiii_atsied - Nov 11, 2011 / — -
|IELTS- TWO VIEWS ESSAY ABOUT TECHNOLOGY
2 - To begin with, it cannot be denied that technology may have negative effects on human health. Use the computer...
Writing FeedbackK88 - Nov 11, 2011 / soshianet - Nov 12, 2011
|Toefl: active class or inactive one
3 - some irrelative issues. --> some irrelevant issues. to be prepared in the class --> to be prepared for the...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Nov 11, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 15, 2011
|Is pollution a concern of the government, the society or the individual?
2 - Besides the almost rhythmic pattern of your sentences, everything looks good. Your content is great. Personally I would mix...
Writing Feedbackyanigarcia - Nov 11, 2011 / M_Marie - Nov 13, 2011
|'dominance of one sex over another on different faculties' Cambridge Task
Writing FeedbackAnuar KZ - Nov 11, 2011 / Anuar KZ - Nov 19, 2011
|The role of parents is significant. They teach their children how to live and face problems.
4 - Each (plays) major (role), but among them parents have the most strongest(or profound ,or noticeable) impact on their future....
Writing Feedbackabedkh - Nov 10, 2011 / fabaca - Nov 13, 2011
|'Life without such little creatures as pets' - IELTS
Writing FeedbackAnuar KZ - Nov 10, 2011 / Anuar KZ - Nov 11, 2011
|TOEFL-Schools should teach students about specific jobs or general subjects
Writing Feedbackmelody_2204 - Nov 10, 2011 / melody_2204 - Nov 10, 2011
|English 107 - money can't buy long-term happiness
3 - Doctors and lawyers are people, while "jobs" are not, making this part of the sentence incorrect. You could...
Writing FeedbackAddow - Nov 10, 2011 / Guest - Nov 10, 2011
|TOEFL - Teenagers have jobs while they are students? UNICEF discourages states
NEW - TOEFL - In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Nov 9, 2011 / — -
|Universities should teach students about their chosen degree subject
NEW - I will appreciate your advices. thank u in advance! Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?...
Writing Feedbackamanda guo - Nov 9, 2011 / — -
|employees for entire live? I completely disagree; people get old during time
3 - Each company, business and enterprise uses their own method and strategy to make progress. One of the most important...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Nov 9, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 9, 2011
|Do women have to serve in the military?...
Writing Feedbacksmya - Nov 9, 2011 / smya - Nov 23, 2011
|Should we increase punishments for youth's crime?
3 - you need to explain more on what u mean when u say prevention is more effective than increasing punishment...
Writing Feedbackvangphu - Nov 9, 2011 / Addow - Nov 10, 2011
|A sense of competition is necessary for success in life, and should therefore be encouraged.
NEW - Statement: Competition or co-operation? --------- Would like to ask for correction from all of you! Thank from my heart!...
Writing Feedbackjennifervuvu - Nov 9, 2011 / — -
|'Better to attend a small college or a large university?' - TOEFL Essay
3 - Hi buddy, You can some particular points to your essay probably. 1. A bigger university will have a more...
Writing Feedbackkarthik21 - Nov 8, 2011 / ajit88rai - Dec 8, 2011
|TOEFL-course grades are based solely on exams while in other classes on participation
3 - There are several ways for professors to assess their students. They either can give an exam at the end...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Nov 8, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 9, 2011
|'tackle complicated problmes'; Students with organized rooms are more succesful
2 - Hi If you are practicing for TOEFL exam you have to indicate your paragraph by phrases like To begin...
Writing Feedbackqier - Nov 8, 2011 / stellastella - Nov 8, 2011
|TOEFL- Personal lives of people are affected by media
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television, newspaper, magazine and other media pay too much attention...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Nov 8, 2011 / — -
|College years remains fruitful over whole life
NEW - Hi everyone, Here is my essay.Please review my essay. I really appreciate your effort in advance. The college...
Writing Feedbackkarthik21 - Nov 7, 2011 / — -
|Factors that influence the decisions of news editors who control news on TV & papers
2 - News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What ---It's important to remember...
Writing Feedbacktintukuriakose - Nov 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 10, 2011
|IELTS Essay about British and Australian laws re criminal records
Writing Feedbacktsaida - Nov 7, 2011 / tsaida - Nov 10, 2011
|"New Soil" - a college essay about heinies, aliens, and rasberry jam.
3 - Yes I agree that the first paragraph needs some clarifying! I have to say this is so amazing. You...
Writing Feedbackkaunosielu - Nov 7, 2011 / blueshore - Dec 2, 2011
|TOEFL - For me eating at home is necessity and eating out is luxury
2 - For me eating at home is necessary and eating out is luxury. The main reason behind it is health....
Writing Feedbackrupsi - Nov 7, 2011 / ge1992113 - Nov 7, 2011
|IELTS Essay - do you think clothes communicate about culture and weather?
Writing FeedbackMohini - Nov 7, 2011 / abc1400 - Nov 16, 2011
|(new recovery drink) one part of my essay: conclusion and remmendation
3 - Hi Zhang Jie Are you writing an essay or a marketing report? If it's an academic essay it has...
Writing Feedbackiamzj - Nov 6, 2011 / Roger Bishop - Nov 17, 2011
|Promoting Firearm Safety in Children, A personal essay about a "Radical Act"
2 - In my opinion I feel that gun safety should be taught to all people, especially to families and homes...
Writing Feedbackjohnnymayer - Nov 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Nov 10, 2011
|The Old & New Testament - Compare/contrast Paragraph
Writing FeedbackKohana - Nov 6, 2011 / Kohana - Nov 8, 2011
|receive the best direction and education from their parents as well as teachers
5 - Thanks you, Mohini. Admittedly that I thought of it when I was writting this essay, but I was really...
Writing Feedbackkirilenko - Nov 6, 2011 / kirilenko - Nov 7, 2011
|Education: teachers have more influence than parents
Writing FeedbackAbzal - Nov 6, 2011 / stellastella - Nov 9, 2011
|'Attitude for the changing world' Ielts Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbackdinhquangthinh - Nov 6, 2011 / ieltsbuddy - Nov 7, 2011
|TOEFL - In general, people live longer now. Why?
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Nov 6, 2011 / Mohini - Nov 7, 2011
|Do not accept others' criticism cannot succeed?
Writing Feedbackamanda guo - Nov 6, 2011 / amanda guo - Nov 7, 2011
|Only movies that can teach us about real life is worth watching.
Writing Feedbacklily wang - Nov 6, 2011 / lily wang - Nov 8, 2011
|'Christmas Eve in Denmark' - a descriptive story (five-paragraph)
Writing Feedbackadamduun - Nov 6, 2011 / adamduun - Nov 16, 2011
|Addiction of computer leads to ignorence of family
Writing Feedbackyunus - Nov 6, 2011 / yunus - Nov 12, 2011
|Role ModelDaria presents a smart and mindful teenager; Essay on Role Model
2 - and pretending and to try to stray away from the crowd what society's perceiveptionabout to be influenced by thesocialsocieta...
Writing FeedbackEstarburst12 - Nov 5, 2011 / Prettywings - Nov 6, 2011
|'A small truck ran over a two-year-old girl' - This is argument essay
Writing Feedbackthaolam77 - Nov 5, 2011 / Jhangir - Nov 9, 2011
|Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are not.
4 - The grammar is pretty good. I pointed out a couple sentences that I thought could use some work. Nice...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Nov 5, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Nov 8, 2011
|Topic - Suitable age for new language learning - IELTS
2 - It is common and sound nice to end up your essay with a conclusion. Try to begin your conclusion...
Writing FeedbackMohini - Nov 5, 2011 / stellastella - Nov 8, 2011
|Teenage pregnancy and sexual education at schools
2 - The overall message and content is very interesting. However, you can make this essay even stronger if you organize...
Writing Feedbackbdemerdan - Nov 4, 2011 / hesaves - Nov 4, 2011
|Da Nang and Da Lat, Vietnam: Compare and contrast two places you have visited
Writing Feedbackdinhquangthinh - Nov 4, 2011 / dinhquangthinh - Nov 6, 2011
|Money for students sports vs library activies
5 - You need to review your introduction because it is not clear.For example you can put it this way(this is...
Writing FeedbackHarikumarsharma - Nov 3, 2011 / clin93 - Dec 4, 2011
|work 3 days a week with long hours VS work 5 days a week with short hours
Writing Feedbackamanda guo - Nov 3, 2011 / natsheriff - Nov 3, 2011
|Ielts topic_Trying to save endangered animal is a waste of valuable resource
2 - Despite the undeniable cost of money and resource it may brought to in protecting them , IS NOT UNDERSTANDABLE...
Writing Feedbackwxq198820 - Nov 3, 2011 / soshianet - Nov 4, 2011
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