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|Roommates quality and their importance - Toefl IBT
2 - your essay is quite good but you dint give examples. To make your essay more interesting to read I...
Writing Feedbackjenny328 - Aug 18, 2011 / oluwakemi - Aug 18, 2011
|An IELTS Essay - Cam8 test2 task2 - technology and communication
Writing Feedbacksaint318 - Aug 18, 2011 / saint318 - Aug 18, 2011
|Is it a waste time for government to spend money on criminals?
NEW - Most people think it is a waste of time for the government to spend a lot of money changing...
Writing FeedbackFly109238 - Aug 17, 2011 / — -
|"a competition background" - a color of life
Writing Feedbacksangnguyen - Aug 17, 2011 / sangnguyen - Aug 19, 2011
|The possible effects of living long on an individual and on the whole society?
4 - I have some ideas for improving this. It is already very good, though! There are some social, financial...
Writing FeedbackOovi - Aug 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2011
|"All group & organization should function as teams" - Essay Evaluation
3 - Team work is the ability to work towards common vision even if the vision gets blurry.----Great sentence!! By the...
Writing FeedbackSumGMAT - Aug 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2011
|Spend more time on personal enjoyment or do what people should do?
2 - Its makeit makes sense for people to explore the pleasure of life. a large amount of works work, which...
Writing FeedbackAuguste - Aug 16, 2011 / Jennifer Zhang - Aug 16, 2011
|[TOEFL] government budget focus, young children or university?
5 - Your essay is prefect but you didn't indent your paragraphs so it it is very hard to read your...
Writing Feedbackphilossophia - Aug 16, 2011 / abc1400 - Sep 1, 2011
|Traditional foods are repaced by international fast food. advantageous or disadvantag
NEW - In many countries , traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food . This is having a negative...
Writing FeedbackFly109238 - Aug 16, 2011 / — -
|[TOEFL] Children's academic success is influenced by parents or classmates?
Writing FeedbackChristyH - Aug 15, 2011 / ChristyH - Aug 16, 2011
|The variable number of water for the agriculture, industrial and domestic use
2 - Some of these ways are illustrated in the graph above. Agriculture, industrial and domestic uses are being investigated...
Writing Feedbackarvin_infinity - Aug 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Aug 17, 2011
|College should not require Freshmen to purchase meal plans
Writing Feedbackvanessa000 - Aug 15, 2011 / vanessa000 - Aug 17, 2011
|"the controlled use of power brings out hidden traits" - Essay evaluation
3 - Thanks Dey, Do you intend to mean in adding more english or correcting grammer or adding more examples?...
Writing FeedbackSumGMAT - Aug 15, 2011 / SumGMAT - Aug 16, 2011
|Essay about argument of a complete ban of smoking everywhere. Agree or disagree?
NEW - Hi guys, I'm newbie here and also in writing IELTS task 2, therefore I will appreciate any useful helps....
Writing FeedbackFerb - Aug 15, 2011 / — -
|Some follow their ambitious dreams, some focus on realistic dreams.What do you think?
NEW - Personally, I believe the ambitious dream is my choice. However, I will break the ambitious dream down to several...
Writing FeedbackMark1 - Aug 15, 2011 / — -
|IELTS writing-There are social and medical problems associated with the use of mobile
NEW - Topic: There are social and medical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What are these problems? Do...
Writing FeedbackOwenXa - Aug 15, 2011 / — -
|Creativity essay - Human thought must be free, imaginative and even playful
NEW - I wrote the following essay in 25 minutes, in preparation for the SAT. English is my second language, and...
Writing FeedbackDanny154 - Aug 15, 2011 / — -
|Books are not needed because one can read information on computers.agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackkiana - Aug 15, 2011 / usnanathan - Aug 16, 2011
|MCAT-The nature of democracy requires that its citizens be dependent upon one another
3 - THank you!...
Writing Feedbackpshla - Aug 14, 2011 / pshla - Aug 21, 2011
|The production and sale of cigarettes should be made illegal.
3 - Hi, Susan Thanks for the correctings. I know the arugment is kind of week, but what I want to...
Writing Feedbackvanessa000 - Aug 14, 2011 / vanessa000 - Aug 15, 2011
|"Be Happy It Happened" - Using A Favorite quotation from an essay or book..
5 - Thanks. We just read "Of Smells" and "Of Studies" in class and I feel like reading more essays like...
Writing FeedbackMcK_Allie - Aug 14, 2011 / McK_Allie - Aug 15, 2011
|"training is more important than natural talent?" - IELTS WRITING TASK
Writing FeedbackIeltslearner - Aug 14, 2011 / Ieltslearner - Aug 15, 2011
|"Just another Thursday" - personal writing
3 - thanks for you edit. the formatting and the lack of the punctuation marks after the last words resulted during...
Writing Feedbackgreenfish16 - Aug 14, 2011 / greenfish16 - Aug 15, 2011
|People should listen to others criticism and think if it's to worth accept it
Writing FeedbackEricGreen - Aug 14, 2011 / EricGreen - Aug 14, 2011
|I prefer to work for a lager company - more chance for promotion
4 - Your writing is great! But if some words can be replaced by others , I mean diversity, such as...
Writing Feedbackshipima - Aug 14, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Aug 25, 2011
|Censorship! - prohibiting people from their own rights
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 13, 2011 / start208 - Aug 14, 2011
|How to reduce YOUTH UNEMPLOYMENT?
2 - Good work but you can do better. if the prompt is about ways to improve the employment situation, then...
Writing FeedbackCANDYCAT - Aug 13, 2011 / greenfish16 - Aug 14, 2011
|"Teamwork = Potential Risks" - IBT integrated writing about team work
NEW - In the lecture, the speaker shows his disapproval toward the statements made in the reading in three aspects. In...
Writing FeedbackXiaowang - Aug 13, 2011 / — -
|All round or specialized? Broad knowledge and specialized knowledge.
7 - We have graded and submitted your essay into our database. Please email us @ firstname.lastname@example.org to get your FREE...
Writing FeedbackAuguste - Aug 12, 2011 / awengerse - Aug 17, 2011
|Ielts Topic: 'peaceful atmosphere' - Some people prefer to live in a small town.
3 - Good effort. The conclusion is ok. But the introduction is crappy. You should not start your essay with what...
Writing Feedbackhvthoteen - Aug 12, 2011 / greenfish16 - Aug 14, 2011
|The problem of ''helicopter parents''
NEW - There are growing number of the so-called ''helicopter parents''.In this essay, you should analyse some reasons and effects for...
Writing Feedbacksamuel11023 - Aug 12, 2011 / — -
|[TOEFL] pieces of advice that you would give visitors coming to your country.
3 - You almost need a communication with someone- delect "almost", then take Susan's correction. You might have problems, or you...
Writing FeedbackHusseinova - Aug 12, 2011 / vanessa000 - Aug 15, 2011
|"the effects of birth order" - Multiple alternative explanations <GRE Prompt>
3 - Thanks Susan. Wanted to know if there were other alternative explanations that you could think of based on...
Writing Feedbacknkhurana - Aug 12, 2011 / nkhurana - Aug 15, 2011
|Greece - which country would you visit if you have 2 weeks free time?
Writing Feedbackpooya p - Aug 12, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 14, 2011
|"changes in our life leads us in a progress" - an essay about changes
NEW - promt.Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change.Others,however,think that change is always a...
Writing Feedbackvanzbenzon - Aug 12, 2011 / — -
|Why do we need to study other cultures?
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 11, 2011 / start208 - Aug 12, 2011
|Our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces human interaction?
NEW - Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 11, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: 'tension & misunderstanding' - international tourism
NEW - International tourism is the biggest industry in the world now. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Aug 11, 2011 / — -
|"independence from their parents" - Should people live with parents ?
4 - This sentenceis eloquent but inefficient!It takes too many words to express the thought. But it is so powerful...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Aug 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2011
|IELTS------build for certain purposes our good exterior?
NEW - It is more important for a building to serve certain purposes than just to look good. Do you agree...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Aug 11, 2011 / — -
|Writing ielts task 1_ Diagram: The water cycle
4 - yes i also agree that you should use the diagram below or above or whatever since in your answer,...
Writing Feedbacklylong - Aug 11, 2011 / bangshws - Sep 6, 2011
|Friendship-We will never apart!
3 - Thanks Emmawyy ..uh,i knew.i was no that good in English actually as this is my second language. Thanks for...
Writing FeedbackMissHanis - Aug 11, 2011 / MissHanis - Aug 12, 2011
|Communication through technology should replace all other forms of communication.....
3 - Thx Susan for your valuable feedback. Next time I will take care of avioding silly mistakes and be judicial...
Writing Feedbackbimala73 - Aug 11, 2011 / bimala73 - Aug 15, 2011
|The purpose of education should be to provide students with a value system
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 11, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 19, 2011
|Should the youngsters have part-time jobs?
Writing Feedbackaleafsun - Aug 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2011
|students should live at home with their parents or should live at school. Discuss.
2 - "Both sides seem to have some elements of truth that need to be discussed in detail" --> I think...
Writing Feedbacknjf20032005 - Aug 10, 2011 / hvthoteen - Aug 11, 2011
|IELTS--the proportion of elderly people is increasing steadily, positive or negative?
NEW - In many countries, the proportion of elderly people is increasing steadily. Does this trend have more positive than negative...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Aug 10, 2011 / — -
|"What was your best writing experience?" - Review my narrative essay
NEW - Write a narrative about your experiences with writing. Generally, what have they been like? What was your best writing...
Writing Feedbackmomof2 - Aug 10, 2011 / — -
|"God defines me" - someone who defines me as a person
NEW - There is someone in my life that defines me as a person-I've always been compared to my older sisters,...
Writing Feedbackmicahcabunilas - Aug 10, 2011 / — -
|'Stress needs some causes to be developed'; Ways of controlling our own stress
NEW - HOW WE CAN CONTROL OUR STRESS? Philosophers say that everything needs some causes for its creation. Of course...
Writing Feedbackamir50 - Aug 10, 2011 / — -
|More and more village workers are not deciding to live in the city and travel in work
3 - "a tremendous number of workers numbers of people is escaping from countryside to urban areas" --> a tremendous number...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Aug 10, 2011 / hvthoteen - Aug 11, 2011
|IELTS - Is Capital Punishment essential to control violence in society?
3 - Hello, Judy. I think you should state your opinion more clearly. Honestly, I cannot find your viewpoint after...
Writing FeedbackTTJudy - Aug 10, 2011 / ekekek - Aug 10, 2011
|My Essay for my First Academic English class: Should The Death Penalty be Illegal?
NEW - Last night, I was watching a Japanese movie called "Criminal Psychology: Personal Behavior Analysis" with my friend, David, at...
Writing Feedbackpakwunlam - Aug 9, 2011 / — -
|Do sorrows take much of our life? do we live to suffer?
NEW - do we live to suffer? In every day life, people enjoy some exciting things and live some happy moments,...
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 9, 2011 / — -
|living in a foriegn country can not be better than your own.discuss
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 9, 2011 / start208 - Aug 10, 2011
|The role of talent in success - born with or received through hard work?
7 - First,point out your view in the first paragragh clearly; 2 or 3 paragraghs to support your view; A concession...
Writing Feedbackmkeyan - Aug 9, 2011 / Helen L - Aug 10, 2011
|[Toefl] Do we need different sources of news to know about truth?
NEW - Topic: We need to have different sources of news and information to know which one is real or who...
Writing Feedbackjostar - Aug 9, 2011 / — -
|fashionably to be concerned; Young are more aware of issues like the environment
3 - well, as the essay title is the contrast of three aspacts between today and the past, so you need...
Writing Feedbackemphatic - Aug 9, 2011 / ekekek - Aug 11, 2011
|People should have hobbies and do activities that are different from their own work
2 - In order to relieve themselves from daily heavy workloads , some people feel that hobbies and activities much different...
Writing FeedbackHelen L - Aug 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Aug 9, 2011
|Tofle topic: a company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near you
NEW - Topic: a company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages...
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