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|[IELTS]schools should provide courses to train students how to manage money
2 - hello there, i didn't find much problems in your essay but i am having problem with your second sentence...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Aug 29, 2011 / Malaysian - Aug 29, 2011
|Movies or television influence people's behavior badly.
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 29, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 29, 2011
|Ielts: Telecommuting and working at home
2 - Actually, i think there is a fault in your first paragraph. You can start with a fact, not necessarily...
Writing FeedbackEagerlearner - Aug 29, 2011 / skayode - Aug 29, 2011
|TOEFL-The best way to learn about a foreign country......
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Aug 28, 2011 / chxz1020 - Aug 29, 2011
|GREED, one of the most detrimental human foibles
2 - An economics professor at George Mason University, maintains that without greed, our current economic and social structures would implode....
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Aug 28, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Aug 28, 2011
|"Family's annual Christmas tree" - narrative or descriptive essay
Writing FeedbackCaboose - Aug 28, 2011 / Caboose - Aug 28, 2011
|Agree or disagree :People will spend less time on cooking in the future.(for TOEFL)
4 - Thank you soooooooooooooo much!!!I always can't identify grammar mistakes,so I really appreciate your help!!!Thanks!!!...
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Aug 28, 2011 / chxz1020 - Aug 28, 2011
|ielts: life cycle of the silkworm / visitors vs local customs & behaviours
NEW - Hi, First of all thanks a lot for your time and patience.I would like to receive any kind of...
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|It is sometimes believed that the computer is more a hindrance than a help.Agree?
NEW - In this last three decade the biggest human invention without any doubt is computers. Although this significant invention make...
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|Developing and industrialised countries in science and education - Chart description
7 - the chart provides information about the involvement of developing and industrialised countries in science and education in 1980 and...
Writing Feedbackkainam - Aug 28, 2011 / sobin - Sep 3, 2011
|'hard work works always' - When people succeed, it is because of hard work
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 28, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 29, 2011
|There's no evidence to prove that computer will do a job of a teacher better
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|Books have a greater impact on society than TV ( Toefl essay)
2 - I think TV has some advantages over books as well. In TOEFL, it is better to reason both sides....
Writing Feedbackcarolyn1219 - Aug 28, 2011 / chxz1020 - Aug 30, 2011
|"Mr. Charles Schade has been the music director" - GRE argument essay
NEW - Help me to improve my writing skill, Thanks in advance for any post. The following appeared in a...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|Study foreign language at overseas is beneficial or not agree or disagree with extent
Writing Feedbackgsmaan - Aug 28, 2011 / amrosca - Aug 28, 2011
|Capital punishment should be combined with other activities -ielts task 2
NEW - Without capital punishment (death penalty) our lives will be less secure and crime of violence will increase. Capital punishment...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 28, 2011 / — -
|IELTS -- Government wants people to move To Big Cities
4 - Again, thank you so much for your time and comments. They are really helpful. I really need to...
Writing Feedbackmarucat - Aug 28, 2011 / marucat - Aug 30, 2011
|IELTS: disruptive kids should be taught separately
6 - Coupled with a good guidances from their teachers , these students are (would tend to be ) more likely...
Writing FeedbackEagerlearner - Aug 28, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Sep 1, 2011
|"the unemployment crisis" - issue of local, national, or international significance.
3 - I agree with EF susan, this is an excellent essay! My biggest concern is that it does not quite...
Writing Feedbackjtorres89 - Aug 27, 2011 / namato - Aug 29, 2011
|"He who hesitates is lost" + "modern technological world" - short compositions
Writing Feedbackapieceof - Aug 27, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 28, 2011
|Toefl :Advance in transportation and communication like the airplane and the phone
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 27, 2011 / abc1400 - Aug 30, 2011
|ielts:people often decide to work for a time before they start their university
2 - In conclusion, it is clear that dedicatededicating a period to personal achievement is very popular among youngsters especially in...
Writing Feedbackmrscatoni - Aug 27, 2011 / marucat - Aug 28, 2011
|Fatherhood vs Motherhood-ielts task 2
3 - Firstly, only women can not decide whether or not to have a baby because this decision depends on their...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 27, 2011 / Eagerlearner - Aug 28, 2011
|(the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s) IELTS writing
2 - "there is not a great deal of differences in pattern of two decades." --> personally, I think this sentence...
Writing Feedbackhamid2495 - Aug 27, 2011 / mcshang - Aug 27, 2011
|Ielts Topic: The popularity of news media
Writing Feedbackhvthoteen - Aug 27, 2011 / hvthoteen - Aug 28, 2011
|Books have more influence on society than television.
4 - hi, i read your essay n i would like to tell you that you haven't mentioned anything about the...
Writing Feedbackmcshang - Aug 26, 2011 / sobin - Aug 28, 2011
|Neolithical Agricultural Revolution (change to society)
Writing Feedbackotacbateman - Aug 26, 2011 / otacbateman - Aug 27, 2011
|GRE: As technology becomes more and more advanced.. people rely on technology
5 - @Susan & Fang Yu Thanks for picking out my errors. I think i need to proofread my essays more...
Writing Feedbacksilentwf - Aug 26, 2011 / silentwf - Aug 29, 2011
|GMAT "Corporations should try to eliminate the ranks and salary grades"
NEW - "Corporations and other businesses should try to eliminate the many ranks and salary grades that classify employees according to...
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|'lifestyle and eating habit' - The causes of increasing average weight of people
2 - "entertainment industry" I think it is better in pl. form --> industries ummmm, you did a very good...
Writing Feedbackyh1990227 - Aug 26, 2011 / mcshang - Aug 26, 2011
|IELTS: Focus on health education and preventative measures rather than treatment
2 - "thanks to a full health education from their childhoods" -- Do you mean "due to"? If yes, it is"thanks...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 26, 2011 / mcshang - Aug 26, 2011
|Toefl - Television & Movies have a huge impact on our social behavior.
Writing Feedbacksab - Aug 26, 2011 / abc1400 - Aug 30, 2011
|Parents or school,which would be the one teach children in social skills
2 - Hei Zhang! :D Below are some corrections. Perhaps you can retype the essay to get more familiar with...
Writing Feedbackzjn212 - Aug 25, 2011 / amrosca - Aug 26, 2011
|Books or personal experience? Education should not have come from books solely
2 - this is really good and i agree with your argument! few grammar fixes though "Therefore, drowning themselves in...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Aug 25, 2011 / trishhha - Aug 25, 2011
|Memo: title change of laborers in network maintenance section
Writing Feedbackmohamed nawaz - Aug 25, 2011 / amrosca - Aug 25, 2011
|technology will completely replace the traditional teacher in classroom. Do you agree
Writing Feedbackmehdi0912 - Aug 25, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011
|Technology Vs Traditional skills and Way of life
Writing Feedbackmaryam2900 - Aug 25, 2011 / violetkau1 - Jun 16, 2013
|Review the Past to solve the problems of the present and the future.
NEW - In order to solve the problems of the present and the future, people should review the past. In...
Writing Feedbackmcshang - Aug 25, 2011 / — -
|Enhancing general public health cannot be achieved by unilateral measure (sports)
3 - I think it is better for your essay to take a clear possition in your first paraghraph. For example...
Writing Feedbackbigbanglov - Aug 25, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 25, 2011
|Do you think it is better to send criminals to jail or let them receive education or
2 - great essay! you made clear elaboration of your point and justify your point of view. however i notice sometimes...
Writing Feedbackpikadali - Aug 25, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Aug 25, 2011
|A single career (old-fashion) OR several careers to earn more money
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 25, 2011 / beepro21 - Aug 30, 2011
|Can increasing petrol's price deal with all the problem?---Cam 8 T3 WT2
NEW - Topic:Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.To what extent do...
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|It is better to grow up with brothers or sisters than to be an only child.
Writing Feedbackiceage1235813 - Aug 24, 2011 / iceage1235813 - Aug 24, 2011
|How can we inculcate the love for one's country?
2 - Your essay is well structured; every paragraph you start with firstly, secondly and nutshell. Therefore, you have given me...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Aug 24, 2011 / divalish89 - Aug 24, 2011
|IELTS task2 Can computer replace a human teacher?
3 - You have a strong point of view. Amiable attitudes are the other main difference between these two ...
Writing FeedbackTomLin - Aug 24, 2011 / Mai Chu - Aug 28, 2011
|The media should consider famous people's lives
7 - Since the teenagers' body is not strong, they would face a number of physical difficulties. ----I made a small...
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Aug 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2011
|Should the main purpose of schools be to teach to become useful workers / tax payers?
3 - thank you a lot! 'towards their needs' means purpose of educating children at school first is to benefit themselves...
Writing Feedbackthanhomenh_nq99 - Aug 24, 2011 / thanhomenh_nq99 - Aug 24, 2011
|Factors to broadcast good news and bad news-ielts task 2
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 24, 2011 / amrosca - Aug 25, 2011
|IELTS - "children and rules of behavior in different countries"
NEW - Essay on "In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior, in other countries they are allowed to...
Writing Feedbackchopvika - Aug 24, 2011 / — -
|IELTS; Parents & school are both reasonable for teaching children to be good citizens
NEW - Topic:Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that...
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Aug 24, 2011 / — -
|CLEP essay "Teachers are responsible for motivating students".
3 - Thank you, your corrections will be very helpful. I find these types of essay questions difficult mostly because I...
Writing Feedbacklangers1 - Aug 23, 2011 / langers1 - Aug 24, 2011
|Toefl: today men only focus attention on meeting their needs for farmlands, housing, or industry
2 - Nowadays, many animals are on the verge of extinction since their habitats are being destroyed by mankind. Many environmentalists...
Writing Feedbackhvthoteen - Aug 23, 2011 / soshianet - Aug 23, 2011
|In order to success, you should be more or different from others?
3 - Thanks a lot!...
Writing Feedbackvivianliu - Aug 23, 2011 / vivianliu - Aug 23, 2011
|"children should manage their own money at the young age" - TOEFL
Writing Feedbackyc9055 - Aug 23, 2011 / yc9055 - Aug 24, 2011
|CLEP - Individual Opportunity: Myth or Reality?
4 - Thank you! As you mentioned improvements I was able to see right away what you meant. And I thank...
Writing Feedbacklangers1 - Aug 23, 2011 / langers1 - Aug 23, 2011
|Sharing of wealthy nations and responsibility of poorer nations-ielts task 2
2 - The governments of poor nations have many difficulties in different fields such as economy developing economies,----only developing economies is...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Aug 23, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Aug 24, 2011
|Teachers are responsilbe for motivating students to learn. To what extent you agree?
2 - Firstly, what is the length needed for the essay? I think you have some valid points in your essay...
Writing Feedbackakashacharya30 - Aug 23, 2011 / waikin - Aug 23, 2011
|Reducing the overall consumption of natural resources by creating awareness
NEW - The world is consuming natural resources faster than they can be renewed. Therefore, it is important that products are...
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|IELTS - Change, angel or devil?
NEW - Topic: Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think...
Writing Feedbackfish333 - Aug 22, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL physical exercise -on giving preference
4 - Your writing is not bad. I think you should pay more attention to your essay topic. In this essay...
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