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|Academic IELTS: Writing Task 2: Importance of Planting Trees in Cities and Towns
6 - Serena, you will score a total of 4 with this essay because your response is only minimal. Your response...
Writing Feedbacksisi999 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Should parents be responsible for teaching their children what polite and good behaviors are?
Writing Feedbackthomas81 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Group members as well as the tour guide both add restrictions to the travel
3 - Tianyi, , this was a pretty good attempt at responding to a direct question essay. However, since you forgot...
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|For some attending classes at school is just a waste of time. Reasons for study.
NEW - Why do you think people attend the colleges or university? Each year, they enrolled a thousand students with...
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|Ielts 8 test 4 task2: heavier weight and less fitness
Writing Feedbackvicki921 - Apr 15, 2018 / vicki921 - Apr 17, 2018
|WE COULD NEVER LEARN TO BE BRAVE AND PATIENT, IF THERE WERE ONLY JOY IN THE WORLD
4 - Chau, the academic focus of your discussion is confusing because you have tried to explain a quote, without really...
Writing Feedbackchauvy2002 - Apr 15, 2018 / Holt - Apr 17, 2018
|Academic IELTS Writing Task 1: Movie Tickets Sales by Genre from 1980 till 2010
3 - Thank you so much. I will be attempting another writing section soon. Hopefully your advice will help me improve...
Writing Feedbacksisi999 - Apr 14, 2018 / sisi999 - Apr 15, 2018
|The newspapers have a strong effect on an individual's viewpoint and ideas.
3 - Gurpinder, since this is a direct question essay, you are not supposed to indicate your response as a separate...
Writing FeedbackGurpinder - Apr 12, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|The bart graph illustrates information about the performance of travellers using three major airport
2 - "From 1995 to 1999 LaGuardia..." you should change has =>had. you should divide into small paragraphs. you didnt reach...
Writing Feedbackjaspreet8882 - Apr 12, 2018 / chauvy2002 - Apr 15, 2018
|Should children always obey their parents' counsel?
3 - I really appreciate all your comments. Actually, that is an exercise I read from an IELTS Preparation book for...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Apr 12, 2018 / cao1km - Apr 14, 2018
|The amount of money consumers use for six different items - IELTS WRITING TASK 1
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|SCIENCE Article - How Different Kind of Bias Impact Research
2 - Albert, you have too many topics under discussion in this research paper but not enough in discussion in terms...
Writing FeedbackAlb - Apr 11, 2018 / Holt - Apr 14, 2018
|IELTS Essay about stressful lives of modern-day teenagers.
4 - @Holt Thanks for your valuable and honest feedback. I really appreciate your detailed guidance and will follow your instructions...
Writing Feedbackasefnoor - Apr 10, 2018 / asefnoor - Apr 13, 2018
|Judging book by its cover - reliable opinion or not?
3 - Nyuyen, you will not score very well in the TA section of the scoring because you did not properly...
Writing Feedbackdinhnguyen - Apr 9, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|Next career steps for graduate and post-graduate students in the UK
2 - Iksticker, in my opinion, I'd suggest you should work on the main point(which usually comes as the first sentence...
Writing Feedbackiksticker - Apr 8, 2018 / Alao0702 - Apr 16, 2018
|IELTS: ... To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste ?
2 - Minh, you have created a prompt deviation in your discussion which will result in the failure of this essay...
Writing FeedbackNexus54 - Apr 8, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|Newspapers are not being read and news on TV is not being watched by young people...
3 - Ngoc, since you did not post the original prompt with the discussion instruction, I cannot advice you regarding the...
Writing Feedbackrubydo - Apr 8, 2018 / Holt - Apr 13, 2018
|IELTS task 2: production of consumer goods vs environment
3 - To, the task 2 essay should always have 5 paragraphs presented in it. The 5 paragraph presentation helps you...
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Apr 7, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|IELTS TASK 1- The charts below show reasons for travel and the main issues for the travelling public
3 - Hai, the only problem that exists in this otherwise well developed essay is the sentence structuring. You have a...
Writing Feedbackhaiilinhh7396 - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|TOEFL Task 2 - Television ads targeted at young children - what is their influence on youngsters?
3 - Louvy, the above advice doesn't really apply to your work if one considers the prompt requirements which does call...
Writing FeedbackLouvy - Apr 6, 2018 / Holt - Apr 11, 2018
|Media and Information Accuracy - TOEFL
2 - @Elain1997 Except some minor mistakes and the conclusion, this is well written essay. The first three paragraphs are very...
Writing FeedbackElain1997 - Apr 5, 2018 / abdo65619 - Apr 9, 2018
|What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?
2 - Hu, unless otherwise requested specifically in the essay prompt, do not include information such as a personal point of...
Writing FeedbackSeila - Apr 5, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|The variety genres of music - which kind is more important for us?
3 - Alifa, I believe you are self studying for the IELTS test which is my you ended up making every...
Writing Feedbackalifafaza - Apr 5, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|DISCUSS ABOUT PLAYING VIDEO GAMES.
2 - Sarah, it is difficult for me to review your work because you failed to provide me with the original...
Writing FeedbackSarah Phan - Apr 4, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|The estimated amount of oil produced by 6 countries between 1990 and 2010
2 - I am impressed by your work and I could not find any grammar or vocabulary mistakes. :) ... per...
Writing Feedbacknamgiang0884 - Apr 3, 2018 / cao1km - Apr 12, 2018
|TOEFL-it is my friends in college that made up my most important memories of the more grown-up stage
5 - @Holt Thank you for your constructive criticism. I've completely rewritten this essay and hope you can give more comments....
Writing FeedbackAsphodel - Apr 3, 2018 / Asphodel - Apr 10, 2018
|IELTS Task2 Topic-The positive or negative effects of Internet
3 - Annie, what is the actual prompt you are responding to? Your prompt presentation and your actual discussion are going...
Writing FeedbackAnnieh - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|TOEFL task 2, advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
3 - Mehdi, avoid exaggerations in your presentation. Examiners frown upon examinees who sensationalize the topics given when there is no...
Writing Feedbackmehmoh - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 9, 2018
|IELTS Task 2 topic: individuals to provide environmental problems solution
Writing Feedbacklanvt2811 - Apr 3, 2018 / lanvt2811 - Apr 9, 2018
|CBEST defeated by rejection - a situation that has a powerful impact on my personality
2 - Aida, please remember that we always need to have the original prompt instructions posted in the text box before...
Writing FeedbackAid1 - Apr 3, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|Review on NYT argumentative article "Kids, Would You Pleas*e Start Fighting?" by Adam Grant
NEW - Why Fighting Is Good In many occasions where we see siblings arguing in public, parents will go between...
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|IELTS Essay: Professional like doctors and teachers should be paid higher than other professionals
3 - Faisal, you need to always present a 5 paragraph essay in the task 2 test. That means, the presentation...
Writing Feedbackfaisal_husein - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|IELTS the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployment or homelees
3 - Victoria, your discussion poses a prompt deviation which will result in the failure of this essay in an actual...
Writing Feedbackvict0ria - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 6, 2018
|Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing games teaches us about life.
3 - Ryan, you seem to be discussing at least 2 different essay types in this presentation, without really hitting a...
Writing FeedbackRyan66 - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 5, 2018
|Effect of celebrity' coverage on media on children
2 - Hoàng, there is a clear lack of prompt instruction understanding your presentation. This has led to only a partial...
Writing FeedbackRachel Morre - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 5, 2018
|Success is a matter of luck - Essay
3 - Abdallah, this is a very convincing essay. Your opinions are based on enough personal observations and popular references for...
Writing Feedbackanajjar - Apr 2, 2018 / Holt - Apr 4, 2018
|IELTS ONE - The percentage of Australian's citizen did some activities
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - Apr 2, 2018 / abang yoga - Apr 3, 2018
|IELTS: taking gap year has become one of the growing trends among students
2 - Basically your writing is ok. But I suggest you have topic sentence at the beginning of the two body...
Writing Feedbackwandelion - Apr 1, 2018 / lanvt2811 - Apr 3, 2018
|The only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.
Writing Feedbackshirley82113 - Apr 1, 2018 / shirley82113 - Apr 3, 2018
|CBEST. Television encourage or discourage learning - or does it do both depends on circumstances?
Writing FeedbackAid1 - Apr 1, 2018 / Aid1 - Apr 21, 2018
|"One More Chance" ...on topic flow, shifting topic to topic, what to discuss in closing?
3 - Thank you for the feedback. It will be extremely helpful in editing my rough draft and move me in...
Writing Feedbacklin2053457 - Apr 1, 2018 / lin2053457 - Apr 3, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: sales figures - export performance between 2003 and 2008
2 - Chau, congratulations on writing a little more than the minimum required number of words for this essay. You did...
Writing Feedbackchauvy2002 - Mar 31, 2018 / Holt - Apr 1, 2018
|When you live in a major city you can learn many features of the whole society
3 - I check this essay by following you advice. I found that there are many thing I can do better....
Writing FeedbackShsiao - Mar 31, 2018 / Shsiao - Apr 2, 2018
|People have a tendency to think that Art and music are too trivial compared to others subjects
Writing Feedbackyuletide - Mar 30, 2018 / yuletide - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS task one: the locations choice of the new supermarket
2 - Kiki, this essay will get an automatic failing score because you did not present the minimum 150 word requirement,...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 30, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS Writing Test - Does the coverage of sport on television discourage teenagers from exercise?
3 - This corrections might be useful ; This is suggestions ; discouragement from / to young adults the pressure...
Writing FeedbackNancy Huang - Mar 30, 2018 / abang yoga - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS task two: young people tend to take a gap year before they study in universities
2 - Kiki, remember that there is a 5 sentence maximum per paragraph presentation. For the task 2 test, you should...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 30, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Purchasing the same goods in every part of the world - a good or bad trend?
3 - Vu, there are two problem points that I want you to concentrate on fixing in your upcoming essays. First,...
Writing Feedbackvhlinh96 - Mar 29, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Charge for admission in museum? Evaluate this policy - IELTS
3 - Vua, this is a single opinion essay as presented by the question "Do you think the advantages of charging...
Writing Feedbackvhlinh96 - Mar 29, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|The diagram about how to get energy from geothermal power plants
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - Mar 29, 2018 / abang yoga - Apr 2, 2018
|Ratification of a Skilled Labour Declaration
2 - Ulfah, this is a very well developed outline presentation for your paper. Everything about it is strong, informative, and...
Writing Feedbackulfahfadhila - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Should the government control the salaries and limit money people earn.
3 - Anh, the score for this essay will be a 4. You only responded to the personal opinion side. There...
Writing Feedbackaley anhnguyen - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS ESSAY: REWARD STUDENTS WHO SHOW THE BEST RESULTS OR THOSE WHO SHOW IMPROVEMENTS
3 - Bao, this essay will gain you a final score of 4 due to the tangential discussion that you provided...
Writing FeedbackBaoanh - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|CBEST ESSAY Television helps in learning agree or disagree
2 - Lakshmi, since you are not being scored on an individual basis for this essay but rather, on the whole...
Writing Feedbacklaksri23 - Mar 28, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|TOEFL independent writing - a better life with an undergraduate degree or a master degree?
2 - Hi, I think your writing is not too bad, but your essay needs a better introduction and conclusion. You...
Writing Feedbackanchitang0321 - Mar 27, 2018 / TJLuschen - Mar 29, 2018
|Should scientific research, business and the academic information be shared freely or not?
2 - Michelle, it will be useless for me to point out the scoring errors that you made in this essay...
Writing Feedbackemrysharding - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|To share information to the public or not
4 - @abang yoga Thank for your helping on reviewing my essay. I will improve on those grammar errors on my...
Writing Feedbackmt000000 - Mar 27, 2018 / mt000000 - Apr 1, 2018
|IELTS test one - why students study and how much support do they get
6 - Kiki, your first statement is insufficient. It must be a proper representation of the information included in the original...
Writing Feedbackkikiyiu - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|IELTS Essay Some people think that having a set retirement age (65 years) for everybody is unfair
Writing Feedbacknanc90 - Mar 27, 2018 / Holt - Mar 31, 2018
|Space travel vs environment problems? which one is important? PTE
2 - Hey! You have a good essay. Nice use of vocabulary and your ideas are put well together. There...
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