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|Rate and comment on my argumentative essay for GRE- Late night television news viewership decline
4 - Hi, this essay is already good but there are some tiny english mistakes in term of grammar and typos....
Writing Feedbackxin - Nov 1, 2017 / rumihumaira - Nov 4, 2017
|If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one would you choose?
3 - Behzab, your discussion is faulty from the very beginning because you have chosen to represent several charities in your...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 2, 2017
|Broadcasting manipulation to promote clothes, fashion advertisements is a prevailing trend
Writing Feedbackhanhhnhii - Nov 1, 2017 / hanhhnhii - Nov 2, 2017
|TASK 1 For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to end your membership
2 - @acsstudent you have a pretty good grasp of what you want to say. The problem is in your sentence...
Writing Feedbackacsstudent - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|Number of people think that animals should get rights as people and animals should not be exploited
2 - Guan, you did not provide the complete original prompt along with your response to the essay. You have only...
Writing Feedbackguan721 - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|What does it mean to be an "Aussie?"
3 - I enjoyed reading your writing. Living a country which has less diversity, I am interested in what makes Australians...
Writing FeedbackBobovikisan - Nov 1, 2017 / tenkei - Nov 1, 2017
|When is Rome, do as the Romans do. Acceptation for the foreign culture. Direct question essay.
3 - SG, I think your overall score for this direct question essay could fall under the marker of 6. Your...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|CBEST writing practice: internet is useful or harmful for human?
3 - Your explanation about internet was good. You just have to focus on the grammar. By practicing more or reading...
Writing Feedbackianoah - Nov 1, 2017 / federik - Nov 1, 2017
|Rate and comment on my argumentative essay for GRE - super screen movies
4 - Thank you for your comments and a big thanks to Holt specially for your insightful response. I am glad...
Writing Feedbackxin - Oct 31, 2017 / xin - Nov 1, 2017
|Unsatisfying career for those who change job frequently?
3 - Plamena you have fa failed Task Accuracy score because of the severe mistakes you made in the opening paragraph....
Writing Feedbackplamchiiii - Oct 31, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|Some people think more money should be spent on researching other planets to live, such as Mars.
2 - I would change the opening sentence as follows: There are some individuals who believe mankind should invest more...
Writing Feedbackkimthanh194 - Oct 31, 2017 / WriteWell - Oct 31, 2017
|Some people agree with the growing up infrastructure such us adding more railways than roads
Writing Feedbackyogann - Oct 31, 2017 / Holt - Oct 31, 2017
|IELTS TASK 2_ People have the right to university education, and government should make it free
3 - Van, you did not accurately paraphrase your prompt topic and discussion instruction. So you will lose TA points for...
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 31, 2017 / Holt - Oct 31, 2017
|Trusting and controlling issue over the internet. Direct questions essay.
3 - SG, your essay is very good but needs to be improved in terms of prompt responsiveness. Your format follows...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 30, 2017
|[task 2] International aid: necessary or not?
2 - Gang, you did an extremely good job in the prompt paraphrasing, but the overall discussion was faulty because you...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 30, 2017
|Which would be cooler, a castle or a tree house? Language advice needed! ;)
4 - Tree houses neither compliment history, nor bring out the ... ( I think this is better.) Your argument...
Writing FeedbackBobovikisan - Oct 30, 2017 / tenkei - Oct 30, 2017
|It is equally important for the government and individuals for paying attention on healthy diet
2 - Sandra, Your opening statement shows that you have been learning how to properly paraphrase prompts. There is however, one...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 30, 2017 / Holt - Oct 30, 2017
|Increasing the fuel price will have a negative effect because it will increase the cost of transport
3 - I think there are numerous problems with your essay, so i think you should rewrite this one.Let me show...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 29, 2017 / Watsup - Oct 31, 2017
|Voluntary service is not a compulsory part of high school programmes... yet
3 - Liou, your discussion is not aligned with the prompt requirements. You are being asked to discuss one side of...
Writing Feedbacklalasihcing - Oct 29, 2017 / Holt - Oct 29, 2017
|Give reasons for your answer on statement that happiness is contemplated as substantial in our life
Writing Feedbackleo_learn - Oct 29, 2017 / leo_learn - Oct 30, 2017
|The increase in university fees and tuition for a family goes far beyond the consumer price index
2 - Lanya, there are a number of problems existing in this essay that makes it impossible for me to consider...
Writing Feedbackmalanya123 - Oct 28, 2017 / Holt - Oct 29, 2017
|Expanding more empty places in universities for young students; education problems essay
3 - Ameila, you started out discussing one topic in this essay and ended with a different altogether. All of your...
Writing Feedbackhuongmyy - Oct 28, 2017 / Holt - Oct 29, 2017
|IELTS W2- Some people believe that it is good to share information freely, others don't
4 - Hello, Your essay doesn't have the right structure. There are too many paragraphs, and two of them with only...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Oct 28, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 28, 2017
|Has online social networking helped us or harmed us?
4 - Hello, Here are some corrections, obsessed with social networks and often go her information can still be passed...
Writing Feedbackdarlynng - Oct 28, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 28, 2017
|[task 1] The charts show the relative size of populations of countries of the European Union
2 - Gang, you had a slight misunderstanding of the provided listing beside the pie charts. The reference to "All other...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 28, 2017 / Holt - Oct 28, 2017
|IELTS Academic Writing Task 1: Bar Chart 1(Car Trips Taken by Men and Women)
5 - "overall" is more suitable for conclusion, so you can reorganize the paragraph in your assay....
Writing FeedbackIELTS_Academic - Oct 27, 2017 / vivian45222 - Nov 2, 2017
|Boarding school is an excellent paradigm for children to comprehensively develop
5 - @linhluong158 You have some strong points. However, please check for proper capitalization in your first paragraph. Then around the...
Writing Feedbacklinhluong158 - Oct 27, 2017 / inok26 - Oct 27, 2017
|It is better to put an entrance fee for museums
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 27, 2017 / Arlen - Oct 28, 2017
|The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon.
3 - You have to state an overview in the introducing paragraph. Try to say something such as the number of...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 27, 2017 / CeciCob - Oct 28, 2017
|In the chart the population distribution in age, of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050
4 - @Holt Thank you for your corrections. I'll improve my writing accordingly. As a English learner, I have been...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 27, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 27, 2017
|Choose one of the following transportation vehicles and explain why you think it has changed people.
2 - The facts about the airplane being able to travel against the rising sun would be nice to have a...
Writing Feedbackpier - Oct 26, 2017 / Avflores88 - Oct 27, 2017
|Nowadays people can purchase goods from another country with just one click or phone call
2 - Hello @just_writer, Here are my suggestions: It is a controversial discussionissue and I thinks it is a negative progress....
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 26, 2017 / pier - Oct 26, 2017
|UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college
4 - Due to certain changes in company / forum policy regarding user participation, I can no longer continue to advice...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 28, 2017
|Is it Self-Defense? Or is it Spreading Chaos? - Gun Control Essay
3 - Hamza, this research / opinion paper is tremendously one sided in presentation. Any research paper that wishes to inform...
Writing FeedbackHamzaza - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 27, 2017
|Some people enjoy changes and new experience, others like to stay unchanged. Compare both approaches
3 - @Watsup Hi. I'm glad to paraphrase the prompt for you: =>Changes are a favorite of some people, who...
Writing FeedbackWatsup - Oct 26, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 27, 2017
|Exercise or a balanced diet to health? Discussion essay.
7 - @Jimmy879873 Hello, This essay is complete integration, I think it is almost flawless. I've been taught to...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Oct 26, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 30, 2017
|The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods a
Writing Feedbacktom090897 - Oct 26, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 26, 2017
|Cambridge FCE: WRITING ABOUT FOREIGN LANGUAGE KNOWLEDGE
3 - Andre, you have a good start to the opening statement. It is interesting and hooks the reader in. However,...
Writing Feedbackandreloc - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|Can students study whatever they want or science and technology is a must?
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|IELTS-Task2- the reason of learning a different language
8 - Hi hlim, besides the errors of misunderstanding the topic, I would like to point out that the conclusion at...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 26, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Oct 28, 2017
|Tables below present information about sales of fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas over Europe
2 - The presentation of the essay information is remarkably improved from your practice essays yesterday. I guess you are getting...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 26, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|IELTS Writing task 2 about influence of colour on our purchasing decisions
4 - Nguyen, your second sentence in the opening paragraph is almost a direct quote from the original prompt. You need...
Writing Feedbacknh_diemquynh - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|Reasons for land degradation - what impair the productive capacity of agricultural land?
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Parents and teachers task is to teach good behavior to children - by force?
4 - @just_writer 1. This kind of essay need to discuss the reason why you agree / disagree. You can...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / hiimsandra - Oct 25, 2017
|Given are two pie charts illustrating how different languages are spoken by British students
3 - Sandra, it is difficult to review your essay because you forgot to upload the image for our reference. You...
Writing Feedbackhiimsandra - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Charts below show how energy is used in an average Australian household vs greenhouse emission
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|An Essay on the topic: Mistakes are always part of learning
4 - Hello, Here are some corrections, it is simply inevitable successful (Typo) after the job is done, you can...
Writing FeedbackJoey351 - Oct 25, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 25, 2017
|[WRITING IELTS TASK 2] - Mass Media controls people's mind. What can be done?
7 - I can understand your confusion. While this type of essay is normally written as a singular opinion essay, there...
Writing Feedbackchantieh - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 26, 2017
|Governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people disagree
3 - @just_writer Of course I won't give up on you. I am going to keep helping you and providing constructive...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished
5 - @Holt I just remember, I recently printed out IELTS answer sheets, to get used to it, actually, This essay...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 25, 2017 / just_writer - Oct 25, 2017
|[IELTS TASK 2] New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time.
3 - I just removed all my comments cause I think you do not need them. Please just follow Holt's instructions....
Writing Feedbackscully_vananh - Oct 25, 2017 / ah_zafari - Oct 25, 2017
|[task 1] map writing: arrangements in an American town between 1948 and the present year
3 - @Holt Glad to hear your advice. I appreciate your corrections, especially I know the usage of "to...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Oct 25, 2017
|Essay about the influence of the internet
4 - Ainur, there is a lack of clarity in the presentation of your essay. Don't get me wrong, I can...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|Information concerning the production of oil in six different countries from 1990 to 2010. IELTS 1
2 - Reinhardt, your sentence presentations do not follow the minimum 3 sentence requirement, which is why your essay automatically fell...
Writing Feedbackkampusbarbarrr - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 25, 2017
|The graphs below presents data about computer ownership as a percentage of the population, 2002-2010
Writing Feedbacktom73217321 - Oct 24, 2017 / tom73217321 - Oct 25, 2017
|Living in a big city is more convenient and easily to find better jobs than in a suburban area
6 - @hiimsandra I will rewrite this essay. Your corrections are very useful. Thank you:) Oh, and the request is "What...
Writing Feedbackirisyuki - Oct 24, 2017 / irisyuki - Oct 25, 2017
|There is a lot of information in each country that becomes accessible if you know their language.
2 - You must never begin the discussion of the essay with a representation of information that is not located in...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 24, 2017 / Holt - Oct 24, 2017
|Statistics of CO2 emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal
2 - Just_writer, hi, there are some grammar mistakes and misspellings. I will address the core: 1. Yous start well...
Writing Feedbackjust_writer - Oct 24, 2017 / nemezidus - Oct 24, 2017
|Where there is no struggle, there is no strength. An essay for financial assistance.
4 - @HoltI am trying to obtain financial assistance from a program they offer for recent graduates of my school and...
Writing Feedbackaundraj - Oct 24, 2017 / aundraj - Oct 24, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 : Many TV advertisements nowadays cause effects on children
4 - Hello, Here are some corrections, them to reduce the harmful effect clamor spend the amount of time to...
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