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|The young slave boy - Freedom (narrative)
3 - Thanks for the comments! I can see i still have a huge problem with my commas...sobs...(sorry for the parts...
Writing Feedbackclaralw - Sep 22, 2011 / claralw - Sep 23, 2011
|Good healt care - honours college UH write a research paper with a central thesis
2 - I come from a developing country in Africa, and every day I see people die.---I added the conjunction AND....
Writing Feedbackchigirl - Sep 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 27, 2011
|"Sunday's meal a delectable delight"
3 - Sunday meals are the best! Yum! In my household Sunday is that long day from church and you come...
Writing Feedbacklevin11 - Sep 22, 2011 / rayganwebster94 - Sep 23, 2011
|"Enjoyment" - The College Years are the Best Time in a Person's Life.
4 - I really like this essay. I think it's helpful to me because, I'm a senior in high school right...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Sep 21, 2011 / rayganwebster94 - Sep 23, 2011
|O level (Some people say that the Internet does more harm than good.)
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Sep 21, 2011 / rayganwebster94 - Sep 23, 2011
|TOEFL - working at home V.S. working in the office
Writing Feedbackfreekyidea - Sep 21, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 21, 2011
|TOEFL- love marriage versus arranged marriage.
Writing FeedbackDande - Sep 21, 2011 / Dande - Sep 22, 2011
|IELTS - positive aspects and drawbacks when children engage themselves in work
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 21, 2011 / Geenesh - Sep 22, 2011
|IELTS TASK1: Avg daily milk consumption
3 - Dear...I believe your original intention is good, but there are so many gramma errors in your post. And, I...
Writing Feedbackthehot - Sep 21, 2011 / thehot - Sep 21, 2011
|Keep analyzing the decisions of the authority to prevent fraud and promote democracy
Writing Feedbacktanvik - Sep 21, 2011 / tanvik - Sep 22, 2011
|TOEFL--good teachers' salaries improve the quality of education fast
4 - I don't think the quality teaching and learning will increase by increasing the salary, there should be positive motivation...
Writing Feedbackmhh2531 - Sep 21, 2011 / sweetykaur - Oct 13, 2011
|'born in Ikoyi, Lagos Island, Nigeria" - childhood memories
3 - adegbola88 Thanks for the comment Am trying to make a topic outline for my essay, how do i go...
Writing Feedbackadegbola88 - Sep 20, 2011 / adegbola88 - Sep 21, 2011
|"Cowboys on Ice" - Descriptive/Narrative essay
NEW - Cowboys on Ice As our U-haul crawled down the southern freeway of Minnesota I remember saying to Cowboy,...
Writing FeedbackNMU11 - Sep 20, 2011 / — -
|"Telepathy" - short story for dystopia
2 - Wow! Telepathy, that got me hooked.(I get fascinated about anything that has to do with the human mind) Although,...
Writing Feedbackyulwan - Sep 20, 2011 / Rechy - Sep 20, 2011
|TOEFL-study history and literature or science and mathematics
4 - Dear Dumi, I searched on the Internet. Some references suggest that "cannot" and "can not" are both...
Writing Feedbacktrochanter - Sep 20, 2011 / basawang - Sep 22, 2011
|'Even video conference won't help' -TOEFL- Face- to- face communication
3 - Thank Ican and Basawang for your response! I rewrite "Although e-mail is convenient, it often leaves us with...
Writing Feedbacktrochanter - Sep 20, 2011 / trochanter - Sep 20, 2011
|'Technology and working in front of a computer is a fantastic idea' - IELTS essay
2 - Nowadays, communication has become less difficult because ofdue to technological developmentadvancement. Furthermore, these people canmay lose personal attachment...
Writing FeedbackiCan - Sep 20, 2011 / dumi - Sep 20, 2011
|TOEFL-The best way to relax is by exercises.
11 - isabellaclaudia, Thanks for your help. However, Kevin has already pointed out that the right usage of this...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 20, 2011 / basawang - Oct 15, 2011
|'Thinking like a Gastronomist' - Writing about eating...
2 - Every Saturday of the week my immediate family, which comprises of about ten people, depending on whom is in...
Writing Feedbackarmaanbindra93 - Sep 19, 2011 / l_borras - Sep 20, 2011
|ielts - pointless to keep traditional skills alive ?
2 - It is certainly irrefutable that today there has beenare numerous advancements in technology.This includesThese include progress in agriculture,...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 19, 2011 / dumi - Sep 19, 2011
|The Mosquito: A look into the Teacher's responsibility in a student's everyday life.
2 - While I pondered which teacher had a definite impact on my outlook on education, it would be Mrs. Stidham,...
Writing Feedbackbigmatt267 - Sep 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 19, 2011
|Restraint in the use of Power impresses people most
3 - @ Justine Syms "There are several examples that construe how the decision to discard the use of power...
Writing FeedbackAsmita_ - Sep 19, 2011 / Asmita_ - Sep 20, 2011
|IELTS -- Modern shopping habits change
3 - marucat you wrote 368 words, that's too much, apart from that, it's better than the last one you worte....
Writing Feedbackmarucat - Sep 19, 2011 / wjxjj123 - Sep 26, 2011
|IELTS-what factors determine one's value to the society? is it wages?
4 - One of the reasons for my belief is that a high pay does not necessarily generate a positive value...
Writing Feedbackwjxjj123 - Sep 19, 2011 / isqun1 - Sep 20, 2011
|'evaluate the teachers' performance instead of improving the salary of teachers
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 19, 2011 / basawang - Sep 20, 2011
|Reading fiction is more enjoyable than watching movies?
2 - Dear Tank, please take into consideration the other elements in an IELTS test. You have 20 minutes for a...
Writing FeedbackTank - Sep 18, 2011 / peiman - Sep 19, 2011
|[Toefl] essays are better to test students than the objective tests - writing task
Writing Feedbackcombatant - Sep 18, 2011 / combatant - Sep 18, 2011
|my GRE argument of "investment in company of heating oil"
5 - In that situation, I always use "she" instead of "he." I am trying to make up for centuries of...
Writing FeedbackKlose_Jun - Sep 18, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Oct 11, 2011
|'TV disease' - How do movies or television influence people's behavior?
3 - 1.instead of addition to that,it will be better if you write in addition to that 2.from above mentioned channel...
Writing Feedbackmihayliuk - Sep 18, 2011 / sayes - Mar 31, 2014
|Why do you think cross cultural romantic relationship face difficulties?
3 - much better! acutally, i can tell u r adept at varying sentence lengths and patterns. my another sugesstion is...
Writing Feedbacknnene - Sep 17, 2011 / inaustin - Sep 18, 2011
|"The Mind Wondering Fields." descriptive essay about a place.
2 - Roe02, I have no experience in any writing competitions, thus I am not qualified to assess your essay....
Writing FeedbackRoe02 - Sep 17, 2011 / basawang - Sep 20, 2011
|IELTS-schools should only teach students skill not ethical value?
Writing Feedbackwjxjj123 - Sep 17, 2011 / wjxjj123 - Sep 18, 2011
|my GRE argument of "Jazz club loan, city of Monroe"--feedback
NEW - This is the first article of GRE argument written by myself, I'm quite at a loss how to develop...
Writing FeedbackKlose_Jun - Sep 17, 2011 / — -
|Should universities accept the equal men and women? -- Ielts Test
Writing FeedbackMai Chu - Sep 16, 2011 / isqun1 - Sep 23, 2011
|Modern Day Serial Killer (descriptive essay -material thing that has changed my life)
2 - Imagine if you could picture each and every person on earth who has died a slow, painful death due...
Writing Feedbackjameszimm1 - Sep 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 17, 2011
|Music and Arts plays an essential role - discuss
Writing Feedbacksaddam1990 - Sep 16, 2011 / saddam1990 - Sep 17, 2011
|'writing complains" - When people need to complain about a product or poor service
Writing FeedbackIeltsDeamon - Sep 16, 2011 / IeltsDeamon - Sep 20, 2011
|OPINION ESSAY - The Usage of Internet = individual paper
NEW - Nowadays, the usage of internet is rapidly spreading. Highly technologies that growing very fast in new generations drive us...
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|Space travel is important or not -----IELTS
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Sep 16, 2011 / trochanter - Sep 20, 2011
|Punishment should be fixed or circumstantial ?
2 - Given that the criminal rate increasing considerably in the recent years, Firstly, along with the disappearence of vegue...
Writing Feedbackerica yu - Sep 16, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 16, 2011
|"teacher performs a vital role" - Computers should replace teachers in a classroom?
5 - Basawang No,I wanted to test myself in essay typing,then i didn't take care of the grammar part... sorry for...
Writing FeedbackTank - Sep 15, 2011 / Tank - Sep 16, 2011
|"Friendly and helping others" - the qualities of a good neighbor?
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 15, 2011 / basawang - Sep 15, 2011
|'Burning Up' - Satirycal Essay on Marijuana
NEW - Burning Up Every year, thousands of pot-smoking Americans get locked up for the use, possession, or sale of...
Writing Feedbackroodag - Sep 15, 2011 / — -
|Teaching children of different abilities; 1% inspiration, 99% perspiration
4 - beskate I really appreciate your detail advice. I usually feel hard in intro and conclusion. I will carefully...
Writing Feedbackjellyfish Roy - Sep 15, 2011 / jellyfish Roy - Sep 15, 2011
|"coming from small village in Trinidad' - A profile about myself
NEW - I grew up in small village in Trinidad which is mainly dominated by Indians. In an Indian cultured home,...
Writing FeedbackRajsingh - Sep 15, 2011 / — -
|Learning foreign language in your own country or in the country which it is spoke
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Sep 15, 2011 / executive101 - Sep 15, 2011
|Nation's well being with a Gross National Happiness Index
4 - Research has shown that purchasing new items has no correlation to achieving happiness as the joy from buying something...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Oct 6, 2011
|ielts - what should the government do to make the country more successful
2 - Hence, the government must provide its citizens with rights of freedom. For example, to choose their own rulers, provided...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 15, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 15, 2011
|TOEFL- 'efforts are just in vain' - best way to improve the quality of education
NEW - Money can be a very powerful motivation for people's efficiency. It is common sense or a convention accepted by...
Writing Feedbackfannie88 - Sep 15, 2011 / — -
|GMAT essay--whether offensive words and behavior should be censored
NEW - "In some countries, television and radio programs are carefully censored for offensive language and behavior. In other countries, there...
Writing Feedbackfannie88 - Sep 15, 2011 / — -
|Most of the students who take advantage of a good sense of humor are much happier in their life
3 - Hi Mahsa; I found some errors in your essay like; Besides, it shows that this kind of people has...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Sep 15, 2011 / bahareh - Sep 16, 2011
|Essay: Going abroad for studying or not?
2 - There seems to be a few grammatical mistakes. for ex- newly is not a proper word, it should be...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Sep 14, 2011 / anik4546 - Sep 15, 2011
|IELTS :How fast foods impact on people?
4 - Furthermore, by comparing to (by comparison with ?) traditional meal which was usually need extra efforts on buying ingredients,...
Writing Feedbackthread_c - Sep 14, 2011 / marucat - Sep 19, 2011
|[TOEFL] A professor with a good sense of humour is more successful in teaching
NEW - subject: Do you agree or disagree that a serious and strict is more effective than a teacher with humor...
Writing Feedbackmhh2531 - Sep 14, 2011 / — -
|"a cruise with my boyfriend" - Describe your perfect vacation
Writing Feedbackrchadwick - Sep 14, 2011 / djyhu - Sep 14, 2011
|SPENDING Money is easier than SAVING Money
2 - Enjoying money is much easier than saving, but you should have enough saved money for enjoying it These days,...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 14, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 14, 2011
|IELTS WRITING: The generation gap between older and younger people
2 - On the other hand, in most countries in the world, throughout their history, always has a connected line between...
Writing Feedbackoonguyenminh - Sep 14, 2011 / nguyenminh - Sep 30, 2011
|'everything appears to be fun' - childhood is the happiest time of a person's life
Writing Feedbacksoshianet - Sep 14, 2011 / djyhu - Sep 14, 2011
|TOEFL- The importance of learning process - Do students need to attend classes?
NEW - Some people believe that university students should be required to attend classes. Others believe that going to classes should...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 13, 2011 / — -
|In a team, those who do not accpet others' criticism cannot achieve success. Toefl.
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