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|'brothers who are already enrolled at NYU' - Why NYU?
Writing Feedbackibeckki - Dec 27, 2011 / silentspring - Dec 27, 2011
|Change is inevitable; 'What motivates people to change' - SAT ESSAY
8 - Here's the thing: SAT essays are not scored logically. Do a little research and you will find that the...
Writing Feedbackilovecandy - Dec 27, 2011 / deremifri - Dec 28, 2011
|Geneva convention between the texts and real application
Writing Feedback3robi_in_Paris - Dec 27, 2011 / 3robi_in_Paris - Dec 27, 2011
|UK has a wider variety of ways of dealing with waste products than the others.
3 - thank you Susan :X:X:X:X:X HOwever, could you help me explain why as regards needs to be replaced by in...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 27, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 27, 2011
|'a guideline should be provided to students' - Cambridge 5 task 2
2 - I corrected a few of your grammatical errors. If you don't mind me asking, you're just learning English, right?...
Writing Feedbacksssmr - Dec 27, 2011 / SoTangy - Dec 27, 2011
|'process of urbanization' - People living in big cities face many problems today
2 - It was only owing to such principles , chasing for greater convenience and more commercial opportunities, that a market...
Writing Feedbacksmilectt - Dec 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Dec 27, 2011
|IELTS Task 2 : banning smoking in all public areas
2 - Hi Park! I think you give compelling explains for your idea. However, I still feel that your writing...
Writing Feedbackyoni - Dec 26, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Dec 26, 2011
|IELTS essay_Should the cost of medicines be reduced?
2 - Hi, I liked that your essay has your effective arguments and I like that you gave your point of...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 26, 2011 / djpralex - Dec 26, 2011
|It's an essay on One minute of that football game.
3 - it's better not use abstract words such as 'nervous', but try to use simile or metaphor to describe the...
Writing FeedbackDevson - Dec 25, 2011 / santoryuu - Dec 25, 2011
|Ielts graph_the illiteracy rate in 2000
2 - From this i keep getting the feeling like you are confusing literacy with literacy rate , they are different...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 25, 2011 / adaswani - Dec 25, 2011
|Cooking essay (advantages of eating healthy and nutrition food)
NEW - I would appreciate it if you could give your comments on this essay. I thank you in advance. ...
Writing Feedbackroshan4 - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|'avoid repeating fault'; A person should never make an important decision alone.
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 24, 2011 / Deniz - Dec 25, 2011
|IELTS: agricultural land degradation; Deforestation and over-cultivation
6 - A very excellent writing. Just find some article might be omitted. In the last sentence, 'almost doubling than the...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao15389 - Dec 24, 2011 / RyanIelts - Jan 7, 2012
|Toefl: Beethoven - The influential person I would choose to meet in one hour
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|television's effects to violence
NEW - Nowadays we are using television too much. we can't live without technology. In my country television is the most...
Writing FeedbackDeniz - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|IELTS graph_crime in the UK in 2002.
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 24, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Dec 25, 2011
|TOEFL_whether athletes and singers are overpaid?
NEW - Professional athletes (such as football stars) and entertainers (such as singers and actors) are paid too much money for...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 24, 2011 / — -
|TOPIC:Why do we need to learn english
2 - Hi! kay, so for the beginning sentence why not say: "Today, many people all over the world study and...
Writing Feedbackhungnguyen1998 - Dec 23, 2011 / littleone - Dec 23, 2011
|TOEFL: Best way to judge about people is to be familiar with their personality - not with their look
3 - IF this is the opening, it would be better if you cut out "some people believes(grammatical mistake)...which someone makes"...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 23, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 26, 2011
|competition vs. cooperation - none of them can work in isolation
Writing Feedbacksparwani - Dec 23, 2011 / sparwani - Dec 26, 2011
|TOEFL essay_Should students live in campus or off-campus housing?
4 - Your Welcome! hope everything goes well for you :) if possible can you edit my post as well, it...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 22, 2011 / dianneraja - Dec 23, 2011
|Endowed - Prologue
4 - Thank you very much! I'm now working on the next chapters. I hope you would help by commenting and...
Writing FeedbackAeli - Dec 22, 2011 / Aeli - Dec 23, 2011
|"I saw my life flash before my eyes" - PERSONAL
2 - Ok, so I think it's definitely really well written and I love all the figurative language and allusions you...
Writing Feedbacktrgcook - Dec 21, 2011 / Alikap - Dec 21, 2011
|Ielts graph_how the UK spent their time in the year 1982
3 - Thank you Susan, you're really dedicated to helping other people with writing skills (me involved) :D. Wish you have...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 21, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 22, 2011
|Short essay about air pollution
4 - Dear Anis, First of all, I am not sure your writing is stick to question's requirement . I think...
Writing Feedbackchlorof4 - Dec 21, 2011 / phuongthao15389 - Dec 23, 2011
|Self-Improvement Philosophical Essay on Happiness and Meaning - feedback
2 - This is a great discussion, very clever. I think it could be a lot better if it included some...
Writing FeedbackDanSabin - Dec 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Dec 26, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY_should children be taught to be co-operative or competitive?
3 - Susan, Thank you for your quick reply, which I have never expected. This English forum is really effective with...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 20, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 20, 2011
|Paragraph Structure - Two Options - what is best or maybe propose a third?
2 - In many languages, the basic unit of cotent is the paragraph. A paragraph includes certain sentences which are arranged...
Writing FeedbackColin_S - Dec 19, 2011 / Smiksha - Dec 20, 2011
|Rising Sun Camp Essay
NEW - The topic of this essay is what position would you see yourself in 50 years if you changed how...
Writing Feedbacksnowfairy10 - Dec 19, 2011 / — -
|'Moin!' - Essay about cultural identity
2 - When you walk on the pier of Hamburg's harbor on a cloudy morning and somebody nods to you, saying...
Writing FeedbackEumi - Dec 19, 2011 / snowfairy10 - Dec 19, 2011
|TOEFL - People work to earn money to have welfare
3 - To catch the idea why the organization works and how you can use that info to your advantage of...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 19, 2011 / Smiksha - Dec 20, 2011
|'different people have different answer' - ielts task 2. definite happiness
4 - hi your essay is too confusing.its sentences starts and abruptly stop without giving any clear meaning. There is to...
Writing Feedbacklllpppricky - Dec 19, 2011 / farina - Jan 5, 2012
|GOVERNMENT SHOULD FOCUSMORE ON PREVENTIVE HEALTH
Writing Feedbackmuktimukti - Dec 18, 2011 / muktimukti - Dec 18, 2011
|'giving international aid to poor countries' - IELTS
5 - you should avoid repeating the structure "there exist". maybe putting all the benefits into one paragraph and considering more...
Writing Feedbackswami12345 - Dec 18, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 21, 2011
|'People visit museums for many reasons' - visiting museums during travel
Writing Feedbacksoroushx2x - Dec 17, 2011 / soroushx2x - Dec 23, 2011
|An essay about Pancreatic cancer
Writing Feedbackdon omar - Dec 17, 2011 / soroushx2x - Dec 17, 2011
|PARENTS or TEACHERS? Who's responsible for making children good citizens?
2 - Discuss(Disscussions) about how to teach children may involve all the aspects of education.One of the discussion(s) is who have(has)...
Writing Feedbackspiritgg - Dec 17, 2011 / smilectt - Dec 17, 2011
|Communication save our time without spending a lot of time in long distances or in traffic jams
3 - misinterpret -> misinterpretation These gestures have meaning which are related to the topic of conversation,-> you can use non-verbal...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 17, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 21, 2011
|The other family in our house
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Dec 17, 2011 / Rajiv - Dec 22, 2011
|Ability to learn from own disappointments is key to personal growth; AP Calculus
NEW - Prompt: The ability to learn from one's disappointments is key to personal growth and success. Tell us about what...
Writing Feedbackazn408 - Dec 16, 2011 / — -
|IELTS:C7T2: Should there be fixed punishments for each type of crime?
3 - It is a collective noun, so you should use the singular form of the verb. When ever you collect...
Writing Feedbacksmilectt - Dec 16, 2011 / pitt4life01 - Dec 17, 2011
|The same necessity of giving money to libraries and sport
Writing Feedbacksoroushx2x - Dec 16, 2011 / soroushx2x - Dec 16, 2011
|Something for my Creative Writing Portfolio. "Meet me there."
NEW - The soil is richer there. It hasn't been touched by the invisible hands of coorperations. The sneering greed of...
Writing Feedbackkayleighlevitt - Dec 16, 2011 / — -
|Important ceremony - Vietnam graduation from high-school
2 - Please re-read it you will find the mistakes yourself. Still if you want, I shall help you. However...
Writing Feedbackjenly - Dec 16, 2011 / sohaibsiddiqui - Dec 16, 2011
|How Writing Changed the World.
2 - Spoken languages were used thousands of years before languages began to be written. People have been now using...
Writing FeedbackDAV032195 - Dec 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Dec 15, 2011
|It is absolutely wrong to student to evaluate teacher's knowledge
Writing Feedbackshafi - Dec 15, 2011 / shafi - Dec 16, 2011
|Topic:"Why do we need to read books"
Writing Feedbackhungnguyen1998 - Dec 14, 2011 / amon2006 - Jan 2, 2012
|Good sense of humor plays an important role in people's life. Agree or not?
2 - take all of the SAT words out, you have to sound like your speaking colloquially to the reader, it...
Writing Feedbackrajankharel - Dec 14, 2011 / sjmiller1993 - Dec 14, 2011
|Should students who work very hard in a course earn very high grades,SAT WRITING
5 - I agree that general purpose of grading is complex topic.And -->, and we should provide that how we can...
Writing Feedbackmursel - Dec 14, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 15, 2011
|Ielts 'fast food is becoming more and more popular even though it's junk'
4 - Dear milamiyamiila I completely disagree with the idea of avoid using Firstly, secondly, ... Because I am preparing for...
Writing Feedbackmilamiyamiila - Dec 14, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 17, 2011
|TOEFL_Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more
2 - stellastella Thank you for your comment on my first essay at essayforum Now it's my turn :D although I'm...
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 14, 2011 / princedynasty - Dec 15, 2011
|Listening greater kinds, forms of music than ever; Traditional vs International
6 - whether traditional music outweighs International music ->whether traditional music outweight International music or not First of all, we...
Writing Feedbackprincedynasty - Dec 14, 2011 / lllpppricky - Dec 19, 2011
|'debate of modern genetic development' - AP English Analysis Essay
2 - Had he arranged the opposing quotes first, the reader would understand them to mean that eugenics development is inevitable,...
Writing FeedbackSohilShah - Dec 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Dec 15, 2011
|Article - "Never stop Loving"
NEW - I need to write an interesting article about Animal Assistance Therapy, as we already had one so I decided...
Writing FeedbackCasper019 - Dec 13, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL- The expression "Never,never give up" means keep trying and never stop working
Writing Feedbackstellastella - Dec 13, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Dec 13, 2011
|Expository essay - My opinion on cell phones
Writing Feedbacktsubaki016 - Dec 13, 2011 / Jennyflower81 - Dec 13, 2011
|A TOEFL topic essay, Should a professor focus on teaching or education?
2 - It is good answer, but I will reccomend for you to make introduction more longer and write hook in...
Writing Feedbackbbw - Dec 13, 2011 / ardak - Dec 13, 2011
|'the number CDs was saled' - description essay
Writing Feedbacklllpppricky - Dec 13, 2011 / lllpppricky - Dec 14, 2011
|'promote humanity and understanding among the people' - IELTS essay
NEW - Topic; Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Other disagrees and thinks...
Writing Feedbackfarina - Dec 12, 2011 / — -
|'Interpersonal skills' - Self Essay
3 - Hi If you are writing for an academic writing it is better to avoid contraction which I see a...
Writing Feedbackpaulo311 - Dec 11, 2011 / stellastella - Dec 24, 2011
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