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|Essay: Most writers of fiction do not earn enough money to live from their writing.
3 - Reading is the important factor of our knowledge and also it is helpstous conduct our life style. Any reading...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - Jun 6, 2011 / dumi - Jun 8, 2011
|Essay about Notepads that changes school life
Writing FeedbackZacharyHero - Jun 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2011
|Mass media means a bridge between people in different places
6 - I'll fix it by adding WHILE: However, while some of these bring benefits for us, there are also bad...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2011
|IELTS>Safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority?
4 - Due to the developed living standard in the world's richest countries, an enormous amount of products are discarded when...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|Better to be self-employed, work for someone else, or own a business? TOEFL
5 - Usually, if you use IN MY OPINION, you should make a general statement afterwards: In my opinion, it is...
Writing FeedbackFatimaTOEFL - Jun 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|How to fund community recreational services (increase taxes?)
Writing Feedbackthrollen - Jun 5, 2011 / throllen - Jun 7, 2011
|"The rose of desert" hotel - description of a place I don't recommend
3 - For this part, you can also use a capital T: ...most part: The taxi driver was uncommonly pleasant, and...
Writing Feedbackpiinka - Jun 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|Do we value only what we struggle for? - SAT practice
Writing Feedbackpianosaremusic - Jun 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2011
|About students and the difficulties they face, how to overcome - Cbest Essay
Writing FeedbackElsie - Jun 2, 2011 / dhammika1973 - Jun 4, 2011
|My Essay on the Advantages and the Disadvantages of Studying Abroad
4 - Thank you very much EF_kevin! I really appreciate your kindness. I like helping others with English as much as...
Writing FeedbackKwSalem - Jun 2, 2011 / kusanagi1981 - Jun 6, 2011
|ESSAY:"The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society."
Writing Feedbackgetgetget - Jun 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|Compare the changes of an area during the years and predicted planning in the future
2 - I'll ad a comma to this compound sentence: According to the first picture, there were only a few...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - Jun 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 4, 2011
|Impact of technology on how people interact with each other
6 - Thanks, Kevin! I got 6.5 in writing band in IELTS, which is a big improvementm and I will continue...
Writing Feedbackiamzj - Jun 1, 2011 / iamzj - Jun 18, 2011
|Essay: Smokers can cause themselves serious health problems.
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - Jun 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2011
|"Reasons vary for people to attend college" - Practice TOEFL
Writing FeedbackFatimaTOEFL - May 31, 2011 / FatimaTOEFL - Jun 2, 2011
|Toefl intergrated writing task: Experiments on animals
3 - Hey, I like your communication style... very engaging. I don't think this is the place to start...
Writing FeedbackCoolmam9x - May 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2011
|Essay: We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - May 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 6, 2011
|In North Korea it is illegal to question people in authority, thus its most corrupt country in world
4 - This sentence might need some revision: The vast majority of societies around the world is largely dependent upon people...
Writing Feedbackjhyoon430 - May 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2011
|"the Gerald Clayton Trio" - Music Appreciation Essay
7 - Thank you for the pointers! I made the necessary corrections and am ready to print and submit - again,...
Writing FeedbackFayette287 - May 30, 2011 / Fayette287 - Jun 2, 2011
|Essay: Disruptive school students have a negative influence on others.
4 - During the school day, students need to study, which is the main target, but unfortunately there are some students...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - May 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2011
|America's ignorance towards Pakistan supported terrorism.
7 - My teacher in school told me to become a technocrat- n not an engineer- i always have his description...
Writing Feedbackkshinu - May 29, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jun 2, 2011
|IELTS - do arts and music improve the quality of life?
2 - My view is that the government should give priority to investing more money in the basic social welfares, such...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - May 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2011
|An unforgettable survey from my childhood (or "I should be a teacher too")
4 - Welcome to EssayForum, Harun!! I'll make some suggestions below: People have many childhood experiences to enrich their lives....
Writing Feedbackhrnkls - May 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2011
|Toefl: Technological Innovations that are important
6 - Okay, Elmar, practice by typing it again and using the corrections you got here. That way, you can form...
Writing Feedbackelmar - May 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2011
|Some jobs are appropriate for men (military), and some jobs are for women (nursing)
NEW - 3. Men and women are different, therefore some jobs are appropriate for men to do (military), and some jobs...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - May 28, 2011 / — -
|The Devastation of my life - memory, transformation and tons of discretion
3 - Do you mean discretion or digression? People usually capitalize God. Capitalize the first word of the...
Writing Feedbackwaquarali - May 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2011
|College/University should be free for ALL determined and qualifying students.
7 - I forgot to answer your question before. The thing is, college is never FREE if people need to get...
Writing Feedbackchocopix - May 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2011
|The external elements have dominated the features of everyone? Characteristics.
5 - Kevin,I appriciate that you pay attention.Thank you so much indeed.I`m more motivated and so amazed aswell that not only...
Writing Feedbackyas rose - May 27, 2011 / yas rose - Jun 5, 2011
|What changes should be made in U.S public education?
3 - ... is high in compared comparison with other countries. or ...is high compared with other countries. Either of...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - May 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 29, 2011
|Moroccan reforms. To what extent are they serious?
Writing Feedbackstart208 - May 26, 2011 / start208 - May 29, 2011
|Academic subjects should be useful for future careers of students?
5 - ...Those, who really love art.. Yoyo Lo, your try is very nice. In the 4th paragraph, you can...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - May 26, 2011 / dhammika1973 - May 30, 2011
|Progress is not possible without sacrifice
2 - One cannot succeed in a difficult endeavor without toiling for months or years.---not necessarily true, as some things are...
Writing Feedbackkartcord - May 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - May 26, 2011
|IELTS--the characteristics we are born vs. our personality and development
2 - Sorry, my english grammar is poor and couldn't help you to correct. Overall, I think the meaning of...
Writing Feedbacknzx7jv - May 26, 2011 / yoyolo - May 26, 2011
|IELTS; The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising!
Writing Feedbacknzx7jv - May 26, 2011 / yoyolo - May 28, 2011
|some people believe that sport have no place in school curriculum
4 - Dear Arefe Safaei, I think i might also include that sport competition in school is sin-qua-non to achieving educational...
Writing Feedbacka_safaei_m - May 25, 2011 / klatz238 - May 28, 2011
|'High costs' - IELTS International sporting occasions
3 - I'll give some more ideas below: Apparently it seems that scenes alike provide us a unique and convenient...
Writing Feedbackjennychen - May 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2011
|Both parents and teachers have to be careful about their attitude to the children - behavior issue
4 - I'll give some more ideas here: Poor student behavior is a major problem faced by schools in the...
Writing Feedback2ral - May 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2011
|Only the minority of people can learn by themselves; 'better to have a teacher'
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2011
|Studying the English language in an English-Speaking country is the best
4 - English is a really ancient language... It had been changing since the middle ages and yet known from the...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - May 25, 2011 / Iridescent - Oct 29, 2011
|computer made life more complex and stressful .
Writing Feedbackbahareh - May 24, 2011 / bahareh - May 30, 2011
|TED talk by a David Christian on Big History; To fulfill our natural function
2 - Before reading this you should look at the TED talk by a David Christian on Big History.---This seems like...
Writing Feedbackalistaire - May 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - May 25, 2011
|The changeable amount of water used globally / number of miles traveled - Two IELTS
5 - Thanks a lot! Are you currently preparing for the IELST exam too? May be you'd better give me...
Writing Feedbackyoyolo - May 23, 2011 / yoyolo - May 26, 2011
|"There are times when lying is acceptable"--TOEFL essay
2 - Lying is acceptable depended depending on what are The right time and good purpose for lying may...
Writing Feedbackkittensu - May 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|IELTS--mobile phone and youngsters, a necessity or evil
6 - that a lot!...
Writing Feedbacknzx7jv - May 23, 2011 / nzx7jv - May 26, 2011
|Ban on Smoking / Advantage and Disadvantage-IELTS
3 - You should start with the history of smokers, take a lot of examples. But the most important thing here...
Writing Feedbacklastielts - May 23, 2011 / maryry - Jun 6, 2011
|The sense of competition in children: co-operate rather than compete?
5 - Than k you for your all attention.I realy appriciate that.I `m glad that i`ve joined at forum. I`m so...
Writing Feedbackyas rose - May 23, 2011 / yas rose - May 25, 2011
|Success is the definition based on persistence as well as the desire of people
Writing Feedbackiluvbee - May 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2011
|The importance to use leisure time for activities that improve mind
5 - Dear EF_Kevin, Thank you very much for your corrections and suggestions of my essay. It is very helpful...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - May 23, 2011 / dhammika1973 - May 24, 2011
|Research essay:The necessity of supernatural figures in society today
Writing Feedbackmpatel24 - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|Description of tea manufacturing process
2 - There are numerous steps in the manufacturing of tea. Firstly, the top of two leaves and bud are...
Writing Feedbacklovelysmile - May 22, 2011 / EF_Susan - May 22, 2011
|TOEFL:Government should spend more on early education than on college education
4 - You don't have to worry about the toefl. The English is nearly perfect. Even people who grew up in...
Writing FeedbackSamuelWei - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|America is so vast that almost everything said about it is likely to be true...
3 - America suffers from an epidemic of obesity, but the slim foods and diet industry is one of are among...
Writing Feedbackharu_no_natsu - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|My mother; she was a teacher: an important person
4 - The first sentence is not very effective. You should change it! What is the best sentence you can write...
Writing Feedbackbechir3 - May 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|Important factors to consider when choosing a university/college.
3 - Also students learn to be flexible, because they have to learn about different ways of living. In addition,...
Writing Feedbackdandlelion - May 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|TOEFL - I follow two steps; My approach to problem-solving?
Writing Feedbackzailn - May 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2011
|IELTS - units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France
Writing FeedbackBukabaka - May 21, 2011 / Bukabaka - May 26, 2011
|Global warming; Climate change research paper.
Writing FeedbackToeiizZ00 - May 20, 2011 / icy ciel - May 21, 2011
|Good news vs bad news; What factors influence this trend? IELTS
5 - Hello! To begin with linking words are also known as organising words and if you succeed in understanding...
Writing Feedbacklastielts - May 20, 2011 / Neeta - May 22, 2011
|"It is better to be safe than sorry" - TOEFL ibt
4 - Here is an example of "redundancy." Google that word if you don't know it. :-) In our life, safety...
Writing Feedbackmywill - May 20, 2011 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2011
|Final Honors English Paper- Why do I deserve to pass this class?
6 - Yes! Silverystars has great advice for the structure of the paper. There are A LOT of grammatical errors...
Writing FeedbackKingFrizzy - May 19, 2011 / Notoman - May 23, 2011
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