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|It is better for children to start learning English language at primary school already
2 - @al50332 Your opening paraphrase is off course, your discussion paragraphs do not follow the required information presentation, and you...
Writing Feedbackal50332 - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Young members of a society wants independence from their parents
4 - Overall good read, there are few sentence construction errors for which I would like to give suggestions: 1st...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 14, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 17, 2017
|I have to write about one-day excursion - report
3 - Nastya, for starters, you can correct the title of the essay from Flesh Mob to "Flash Mob" which is...
Writing Feedbackravenrebel - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Sport is reducing international controversies and leads citizens to express their patriotism
2 - Dang, the above example is inaccurate and does not properly represent the prompt requirements in the paraphrased statement that...
Writing Feedbackdangtam - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|ILETS Task Line graph: Precantage of workers with Illness Absence
6 - @Holt It's just my reading, I am not confident enough be sure about my understanding. I wanted to make...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 14, 2017 / summerlin - Nov 19, 2017
|Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea.
5 - Chinky, did you provide us with the complete original prompt? The reason I am asking is because the prompt...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2, University education should be free for everyone
3 - Hi overall i would like to write you a brief description of a good and academic essay guide, which...
Writing Feedbackmasako - Nov 14, 2017 / naseernasrati - Nov 14, 2017
|The government spending on sport training for top players as compared to everyone
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|People should sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing as it can be beneficial
3 - Trang, you cannot write more than 5 sentences per paragraph for this test. You should also do your best...
Writing Feedbacktrang2311 - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|Our lives has been changed by the Internet significantly in recent years. IELTS task 2
4 - Lin, this essay will receive an automatic failing score because you did not discuss the essay in the manner...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2. Resembling of most countries today. Positive or negative development?
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 13, 2017 / cuban27 - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing part2, congestion and traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities.
8 - Kay, you did not paraphrase the original prompt enough for it to not be considered a plagiarism or cut...
Writing Feedbackmacbz - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|Nowadays children are consuming too many sugar based drinks. what are the reasons and solutions?
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|Essay about dicussing 2 ways (Building subway and building more wider road) to ruduce traffic jams
3 - @Holt Dear Contributor, Thank you for your advice Yes, this essay is for tast 2 in ielts exam. Below...
Writing FeedbackDuong Dung - Nov 13, 2017 / Duong Dung - Nov 13, 2017
|TASK 1: Recycling Rate of Selected Materials: 1982-2010
3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it. Actually, I had difficulties when writing this essay. You're right,...
Writing Feedbacknisarahma - Nov 12, 2017 / nisarahma - Nov 12, 2017
|"Never, never give up" that translated as we should never stop pursuing our goals through hard work
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 12, 2017 / ChannelBlonde - Nov 12, 2017
|Research Paper on Anabolic Steroid Abuse (Need peer review)
2 - Briana, you need to write a stronger introduction to this research paper. Before you launch into the discussion of...
Writing FeedbackBMass20 - Nov 12, 2017 / Holt - Nov 12, 2017
|The pie charts show the expenditure of a school in the UK in three separate years over 20 years
8 - @Holt Thanks for your bonus advice and examples, I really appreciate it. But I am still a little confused...
Writing Feedbackniennien260 - Nov 12, 2017 / niennien260 - Nov 13, 2017
|College Mid-Term Essay about facilities funding
4 - Deadline is 3 days away, I'm starting to get worried a little bit... I'd be really glad for some...
Writing FeedbackPlutonus - Nov 11, 2017 / Plutonus - Nov 13, 2017
|Sharing is a vital step in conducting research and doing business
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 11, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 27, 2017
|TOEFL independent writing - Why go to university?
6 - Please find below the sentence correction which I would like to make: ... is a bridge for the...
Writing Feedbackyauyau727 - Nov 10, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017
|Should America decriminalize drugs for personal use?!
2 - Sandra, your essay is heavy on quoted information, weak on information analysis, comparative discussions, and supporting evidences within paragraph...
Writing Feedbacksandcastle227 - Nov 10, 2017 / Holt - Nov 10, 2017
|The number of people in Australia who visited seven the most popular tourist destinations
2 - LI , you failed to deliver an accurate summary of the essay in the sense that your opening statement...
Writing Feedbackadaxli - Nov 10, 2017 / Holt - Nov 10, 2017
|Nowadays food is easier to get and there's avariety of it. Has this change improved your life?
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 9, 2017 / pier - Nov 9, 2017
|IELTS Writing 2 The tourism industry has grown enormously over the last fifty years.
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 9, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 11, 2017
|Should air fares be increased to discourage people from travelling by plane
3 - Andy, kindly remember to provide the complete prompt the next time that you provide an essay for review. We...
Writing Feedbacksantiagovirus - Nov 8, 2017 / Holt - Nov 9, 2017
|Whether families should pay educational taxes if their kids don't go to government-financed schools
2 - ... that people aregrowing up ... consider their children must be educated in ... Some people believe that the...
Writing Feedbackanitaho577 - Nov 7, 2017 / cuban27 - Nov 7, 2017
|IELTS essay Task 2. Advantages Vs Disadvantages of buying things on the Internet.250words
5 - There are few sentence correction which I would like to make: 1st paragraph:- ... aspect of our dairy...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 7, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|You have decided to resign from your work in order to try a new field.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 7, 2017 / Holt - Nov 7, 2017
|The role of public health workers in helping community protect from communicable diseases.
Writing FeedbackLinhmira - Nov 7, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 9, 2017
|Nowadays online shopping becomes more popular than in-store shopping. Is it a positive or a negative
Writing Feedbackvincentwap - Nov 6, 2017 / vincentwap - Nov 8, 2017
|A letter of application to the organisers. (IELTS TASK ONE)
3 - CJ, you only accomplished the most minimal of word requirements to suit this test. When you limit the words...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 6, 2017 / Holt - Nov 6, 2017
|Computer games are time consuming and they do not provide educational value
3 - I think you already have a quite good sense of grammar and vocabulary. What you need now is to...
Writing Feedbackfafut123 - Nov 5, 2017 / rubychautran - Nov 6, 2017
|Essay: responsibility of parents for their children behaviour
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 5, 2017 / Jimmy879873 - Nov 5, 2017
|Population worldwide until 2100 and its distribution between developed and developing countries
2 - Khang, you are looking at a possible high score of 4 with the type of presentation that you have...
Writing Feedbacktmkhang1999 - Nov 5, 2017 / Holt - Nov 5, 2017
|Studying English will give many advantages to myself and to the future of Timor-Leste.
5 - @Holt Thank You so much, it's my mistake. I've made this essay to applying free IELTS, this essay talking...
Writing FeedbackCrissia - Nov 5, 2017 / Crissia - Nov 6, 2017
|"Leadership and learning are indispensable to each other" - Chevening essay
2 - Yomna, your presentation is too greenhorn. The one problem with presenting an academic leadership and influencing presentation in this...
Writing FeedbackYomnaelkhiamy - Nov 4, 2017 / Holt - Nov 4, 2017
|A letter of reference to my English teacher from the previous school (IELTS TASK ONE)
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 4, 2017 / Holt - Nov 4, 2017
|Vegetables are the best thing you can eat.
Writing FeedbackMyNguyuen - Nov 4, 2017 / zamzamii - Nov 5, 2017
|Essay: Do the advantages of shopping online outweigh the disadvantages?
4 - @WriteWell @Holt Thanks for your assessment about my essay, it's immensely valuable. Hope to receive more help from you...
Writing FeedbackLonggbauu - Nov 3, 2017 / Longgbauu - Nov 4, 2017
|The topic describe positive side when living in city - opportunities, career, raising children, etc.
4 - I'd have to assume that this is for an academic essay because you didn't specify it. Or is it...
Writing Feedbackse7enkieu - Nov 3, 2017 / rumihumaira - Nov 4, 2017
|Is government responsible for child obesity? The positive intervention would be beneficial.
9 - Hi @holt Somehow, all of your comments in this thread has given improvement in my IELTS writing. Thank...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 3, 2017 / Yeskiputri11 - Nov 4, 2017
|The cheap air flight should be banned because it pollutes the air and brings many other problems
2 - @hanhhnhii your opening paraphrase is inaccurate and does not apply to the original prompt. Your sentence number per paragraph...
Writing Feedbackhanhhnhii - Nov 3, 2017 / Holt - Nov 3, 2017
|IELTS Task 2 Essay - The birth rate begin to fall and the population is aging
8 - @niennien260 hi, thank you for your suggestion. I assume my writing styles is influenced by my mother language. :D...
Writing Feedbacknisarahma - Nov 3, 2017 / nisarahma - Nov 12, 2017
|[task 2] Some people believe that it is a good idea to continue to work at their old age
4 - @Holt Glad to hear that. With your help, I've finally found the solution to my problematic presentation. Thanks. ...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Nov 3, 2017 / LadyOfClockwork - Nov 3, 2017
|Essay: television influence on people's behaviour. The effect is negligible.
2 - Ainur, dial it back a bit. Are you writing a practice essay for TOEFL or are you just writing...
Writing FeedbackOzRamsay - Nov 2, 2017 / Holt - Nov 3, 2017
|The question about protecting all wild animals or not
3 - Zhou, as far as this essay is concerned, I cannot review it for applicable content due to the missing...
Writing Feedbackzrq - Nov 2, 2017 / Holt - Nov 3, 2017
|Upraising e-books, good or bad? Adv vs disadv essay.
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 2, 2017 / hanhhnhii - Nov 3, 2017
|The less you use internet, the more you feel happy in life. Ielts writing topic
5 - @Huonglypham since this is the first time you have written a task 2 essay, I can understand how and...
Writing FeedbackHuonglypham - Nov 2, 2017 / Holt - Nov 2, 2017
|IELTS Task 1: the graph compared the consumption of fish and meat in a country
NEW - Question The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country...
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|IELTS Task 1: compared the graph and table about water consumption
2 - Dear Yimin, besides providing all the numbers, you better explain information like which area has the higher water use,...
Writing Feedbackvivian45222 - Nov 2, 2017 / skhaor - Nov 2, 2017
|[task 2] children should not do any paid job, in spite of its benefits
2 - @LadyOfClockwork Hello! I think you started off well, with straightforwardly answering the question. But the essay somewhat loses it...
Writing FeedbackLadyOfClockwork - Nov 2, 2017 / Raza93 - Nov 2, 2017
|Rate and comment on my argumentative essay for GRE- Late night television news viewership decline
4 - Hi, this essay is already good but there are some tiny english mistakes in term of grammar and typos....
Writing Feedbackxin - Nov 1, 2017 / rumihumaira - Nov 4, 2017
|If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one would you choose?
3 - Behzab, your discussion is faulty from the very beginning because you have chosen to represent several charities in your...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 2, 2017
|Broadcasting manipulation to promote clothes, fashion advertisements is a prevailing trend
Writing Feedbackhanhhnhii - Nov 1, 2017 / hanhhnhii - Nov 2, 2017
|TASK 1 For the past year you have been a member of a local club. Now you want to end your membership
2 - @acsstudent you have a pretty good grasp of what you want to say. The problem is in your sentence...
Writing Feedbackacsstudent - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|Number of people think that animals should get rights as people and animals should not be exploited
2 - Guan, you did not provide the complete original prompt along with your response to the essay. You have only...
Writing Feedbackguan721 - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|What does it mean to be an "Aussie?"
3 - I enjoyed reading your writing. Living a country which has less diversity, I am interested in what makes Australians...
Writing FeedbackBobovikisan - Nov 1, 2017 / tenkei - Nov 1, 2017
|When is Rome, do as the Romans do. Acceptation for the foreign culture. Direct question essay.
3 - SG, I think your overall score for this direct question essay could fall under the marker of 6. Your...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Nov 1, 2017 / Holt - Nov 1, 2017
|CBEST writing practice: internet is useful or harmful for human?
3 - Your explanation about internet was good. You just have to focus on the grammar. By practicing more or reading...
Writing Feedbackianoah - Nov 1, 2017 / federik - Nov 1, 2017
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