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|The essay for CBEST about a rejection or defeat
3 - Thank you @ Holt for giving feedback. I have not passed the CBEST test yet, but it's just for...
Writing Feedbackbnilakshi101 - Feb 21, 2018 / bnilakshi101 - Feb 23, 2018
|Descriptive essay: TEN MINUTES - a nuclear war scene topic
4 - @Holt Here is the revised version of this essay~ ((I'm quite worried that this turned out to be...
Writing Feedbackbox_wizard - Feb 20, 2018 / box_wizard - Feb 21, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Importance of Economics or Other Type of Progess
2 - Ying, this essay is lacking a proper opening paraphrase of the original prompt, an accurate 3 body paragraph discussion,...
Writing Feedbackying_chen - Feb 20, 2018 / Holt - Feb 21, 2018
|Consumer Spending Trends and Statistics
2 - Hello Kien! It's very hard to judge your work without the graph/chart for analysis. Make sure you upload...
Writing Feedbackenorman - Feb 19, 2018 / DoctorWho - Feb 20, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: cause &solution- anti-social behavior and lack of respect to others
3 - Hi Kuan, For the two questions type of essay, I agree with your current paragraph structure. -Introduction -Main...
Writing Feedbackccalvin97 - Feb 19, 2018 / ying_chen - Feb 20, 2018
|New Zealand and spending money - Ielts taks1 the pie chart
3 - weiling, aside from an incomplete summary overview, your essay also lacks a proper paragraph representation. You are prone to...
Writing Feedbackbig0321lala - Feb 19, 2018 / Holt - Feb 20, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: Forested land in millions of hectares in different parts of the world.
3 - Tra, your essay is missing an appropriate summary overview, that should have been the first paragraph of this essay....
Writing Feedbacknguyenthikimdung - Feb 18, 2018 / Holt - Feb 19, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Opinions of the Constructing New or Existing Transportation
3 - Thank you for your detail explanation and point out the mistakes I made. I'll improve all the above you...
Writing Feedbackying_chen - Feb 16, 2018 / ying_chen - Feb 18, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Agree/Disagree Community Service as a part of study
2 - Hey!! You have a well written essay. I have a few suggestions to improve on your material. It's...
Writing FeedbackUlfaidrus_flip - Feb 16, 2018 / DoctorWho - Feb 19, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Two Opinions of the Internet
3 - Hi, few of my suggestions 1. social media, such as Facebook, "L"ine and so forth. (Line should be...
Writing FeedbackUlfaidrus_flip - Feb 15, 2018 / ying_chen - Feb 16, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Agree or Disagree of Local Police Officer Recruitment
2 - Ulfa, you need to understand something important about the opening statement. This is always presented as a paraphrase of...
Writing FeedbackUlfaidrus_flip - Feb 14, 2018 / Holt - Feb 15, 2018
|Choose to take courses in a variety of subject areas or to focus on a single subject area?
3 - KevinLove, your English grammar is simple enough to warrant only a few minor corrections. You have 2 problems when...
Writing FeedbackStephenYoung - Feb 14, 2018 / Holt - Feb 15, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2: Causes and Solutions of International Tourism
2 - Ulfa, your opening statement is expressive but confusing to read due to your lack of English grammar knowledge. The...
Writing FeedbackUlfaidrus_flip - Feb 14, 2018 / Holt - Feb 15, 2018
|International Tourism and its Influence on the Destined Countries
2 - Hi Sanufal, I have read your essay closer and found a few suggestions for improving yours. In the first...
Writing FeedbackNuval_flip - Feb 13, 2018 / akbarmappiare - Feb 14, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2, Are celerities setting bad role models for the young because of their glamour?
3 - In Paragraph one, you should write one or more sentence about thesis statement beacuse it can make your essay...
Writing FeedbackRumi2020 - Feb 13, 2018 / Nuval_flip - Feb 14, 2018
|New, modern buildings - is it a good investment?
Writing FeedbackIrisyLuna - Feb 13, 2018 / Ashkan123 - Mar 6, 2018
|How to Deal with Depression; Three bad influences
Writing FeedbackQiuChen - Feb 13, 2018 / box_wizard - Feb 22, 2018
|Participating in sports and exercises in Australia. Reporting bar charts - IELTS
4 - Thank you so much for your feedback! Can you give me an example of a complete summary overview?...
Writing Feedbackindrasti - Feb 12, 2018 / indrasti - Feb 14, 2018
|Facebook, Twitter etcetera. What have they done to our society as a whole?
5 - @inderGTR Hi Thanks for your feedback could you elaborate it by giving me some examples? I would really appreciate...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Feb 11, 2018 / PeterBrown - Feb 18, 2018
|Discuss the differences between the way of life in your country now and the way of life in the past
Writing Feedbacktrangnguyen2612 - Feb 11, 2018 / PeterBrown - Feb 11, 2018
|Essay about the contrast between current generation and my parents generation - IELTS
Writing Feedbackahmed_kishk - Feb 11, 2018 / cmartinez13 - Feb 22, 2018
|The diagram illustrates how often Australia men and women in different age groups exercise regularly
4 - @Holt I have re-written it as below, hope to have some feedbacks on this one. Or any other welcome....
Writing Feedbackziminhong - Feb 10, 2018 / ziminhong - Feb 11, 2018
|Marriage or employment? PTE academic
3 - Peter, your presentation is not coming from a general point of view. You are thinking about the disadvantages of...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Feb 9, 2018 / Holt - Feb 10, 2018
|"Cause and effect of studying abroad" This is my IELTS task 2 (recommendations and band score)
3 - Andrew, you will have to disregard the score that you were given by Peter because the lack of original...
Writing Feedbackandrew_andy - Feb 9, 2018 / Holt - Feb 10, 2018
|"You are my sunshine, my only sunshine. You make me happy when skies are gray.." Childhood flashback
4 - @sungin115 your approach to the essay covers multiple memories. This runs counter to the prompt requirement of one, single,...
Writing Feedbacksungin115 - Feb 9, 2018 / Holt - Feb 9, 2018
|Humanitarian subjects have no value for their future careers of students?
2 - Hoang, you need to familiarize yourself with English vocabulary. There is a difference between "humanitarian" and humane. Humanitarian is...
Writing FeedbackHanhannienguyen - Feb 7, 2018 / Holt - Feb 8, 2018
|How does competitiveness affect the individual? Is it a positive or negative quality?
3 - Yes, I have not. I am trying to improve my writing skills and enhance my vocabulary during my leisure...
Writing FeedbackStephanie Song - Feb 7, 2018 / Stephanie Song - Feb 8, 2018
|Modern young people are more able to choose their own lives, than it was in the past
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents...
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|How far is Government constrained by Parliament?
2 - Bradley, this is a highly informative essay for someone who is not very familiar with the UK form of...
Writing FeedbackBagpipe22 - Feb 7, 2018 / Holt - Feb 8, 2018
|In recent years, a lot of readers are choosing to read e-books and not the regular books.
5 - Hello @senuthilini Thank you so much. Its really mean for me when you appreciate my reply to this...
Writing Feedbacksenuthilini - Feb 6, 2018 / priyu323 - Feb 9, 2018
|Earth is being damaged or becoming a better place by human activity.
2 - Mohil, the first rule of TOEFL essay writing is, remember to time yourself. You only have 20 minutes to...
Writing Feedbackmo27hi - Feb 5, 2018 / Holt - Feb 8, 2018
|Face to face communication will become a thing of the past. Opinion essay.
5 - @Holt, I will stick with the method that you provided, and thanks for the clarification on the word usage!...
Writing FeedbackJimmy879873 - Feb 5, 2018 / Jimmy879873 - Feb 8, 2018
|What are the main reasons of immigration? To what consequences can it lead? IELTS TASK 2
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Feb 5, 2018 / Holt - Feb 8, 2018
|Requirement: The line graph compares China and USA birth rates from 1920 to 2000
3 - Kos, your summary overview is not complete as it does not indicate the following information: 1. Discussion topic...
Writing Feedbacknobeday - Feb 5, 2018 / Holt - Feb 7, 2018
|Ielts Writting Part 2: In many city, the population is increasing...
3 - Thank you very much Holt, I really got your points and understand it. I will try to do better....
Writing Feedbackminhtrang2710 - Feb 3, 2018 / minhtrang2710 - Feb 16, 2018
|Solve traffic and transportation problems by moving people to city side
3 - Thanks a lot for your valuable comment. You are the reason behind my improvement of the essay presentation. If...
Writing Feedbacksenuthilini - Feb 3, 2018 / senuthilini - Feb 4, 2018
|Advertising confuses consumers between what they need and what they want
4 - @Holt Thank you so much for your feedback. I will take your lesson and improve my writing skill....
Writing FeedbackMai Nguyen - Feb 2, 2018 / Mai Nguyen - Feb 2, 2018
|IELTS 2 People's opinions differ as to whether or not an information should be shared freely.
4 - @nanajohn Hi Nana, I have a constructive comment for your essay: In the second paragraph, I think you...
Writing Feedbacknanajohn - Feb 1, 2018 / Mai Nguyen - Feb 2, 2018
|Should mathematics and philosophy be optional in schools?
3 - Thanks a lot for spending your valuable time to review my essay. Your comments are really helpful. I am...
Writing Feedbacksenuthilini - Feb 1, 2018 / senuthilini - Feb 2, 2018
|It is better to find and install alternative energy sources rather than increasing the fuel prices
3 - Thank you very much for your valuable comment. I understood the issue and will try to focus on it....
Writing Feedbacksenuthilini - Jan 31, 2018 / senuthilini - Feb 1, 2018
|[TOEFL] Why go to a university - reasons for education
Writing FeedbackYuChiehQin - Jan 31, 2018 / YuChiehQin - Feb 2, 2018
|If you are required to obtain a second specialty, what specialty would you like to study and why?
3 - Mia, consider that you are applying for a job and you are seen to be less skilled than possible...
Writing Feedbackmiawang1121 - Jan 31, 2018 / Holt - Jan 31, 2018
|Over packaged products and its implications PTE
3 - Peter, you seem to have gotten a bit confused in your opening statement. You were unclear about simply having...
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Jan 30, 2018 / Holt - Jan 31, 2018
|"Are all Whites generous givers?" based on a picture
4 - @Hueiru On your good essay, I suggest that you make a conclusive sting that can portrait the aim of...
Writing FeedbackHueiru - Jan 28, 2018 / Godluck - Jan 29, 2018
|Age limit, Who is obliged to work?
3 - Any sentences shouldn't be too long (probably within 20words). There is a very long sentence in the 2nd paragraph,...
Writing Feedbackellielou_alipoon - Jan 27, 2018 / yungcwy - Jan 28, 2018
|Sports and social activities great influence on study should be noted and supported by goverment
2 - Do, I understand that you are most likely self studying for the IELTS test and as such, you are...
Writing Feedbackdohoangvananh - Jan 26, 2018 / Holt - Jan 27, 2018
|Video games having an adverse effect on the people who play them - is that truth, give your opinion.
Writing Feedbackchitrinh_389 - Jan 26, 2018 / Holt - Jan 27, 2018
|Introduction "Impact of Globalization"
2 - @loveofenglish As I read this introduction, I found it wanting in terms of specific, introductory information. The first missing...
Writing Feedbackloveofenglish - Jan 26, 2018 / Holt - Jan 26, 2018
|A friend from another town will come and stay in your apartment. Providing keys and instructions.
2 - LAI, there are number of grammatical errors that distract from the reading of this letter. The first problem that...
Writing Feedbacklineline - Jan 26, 2018 / Holt - Jan 26, 2018
|Some believe that vegan diet is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world
3 - @vinu460 your essay is not going to pass in an actual test setting. For one thing, the essay that...
Writing Feedbackvinu460 - Jan 25, 2018 / Holt - Jan 25, 2018
|Prevention: The Only Solution To Our Health Problems
Writing FeedbackDragonyu - Jan 23, 2018 / Holt - Jan 24, 2018
|Presentation of the employee sick leave issue
3 - I've added this in the post also. Here is the question : The argument claims that according to...
Writing Feedbackrahul07 - Jan 23, 2018 / rahul07 - Jan 23, 2018
|IELTS Taks 1: The construction and number of passengers for different underground systems.
3 - Hi there, here is my opinion In the overall statement, it is quite long. You should pick no more...
Writing Feedbackthaisonvg - Jan 22, 2018 / vietduccan - Feb 1, 2018
|Should the Government or Family Pay for retirement medical cares.
3 - The following are some of your grammar mistakes: 1) ... had better live life? ... 2) Therefore, the ......
Writing FeedbackHanNguyen0510 - Jan 21, 2018 / PeterBrown - Jan 30, 2018
|Homework is unnecessary, do you agree?
6 - From the skills I have developed from authoring several essays, I have come to realize that it is often...
Writing Feedbackannyht - Jan 20, 2018 / inok26 - Feb 1, 2018
|TOEFL Writing Test Task2： Exercise alone or with a group of people
Writing Feedbackfrank87251 - Jan 20, 2018 / senuthilini - Feb 3, 2018
|Changes of the propotion of population aged 65 and over
2 - Dang, even though you wrote more than the required 150 words, there are a number of errors in your...
Writing Feedbackdangtam - Jan 20, 2018 / Holt - Jan 20, 2018
|The number of youngsters reading newspapers or watch the news is declining. Reasons and solutions?
Writing Feedbackvinu460 - Jan 19, 2018 / vinu460 - Jan 19, 2018
|Some believe that work experience is way more crucial than what is currently being taught at schools
Writing FeedbackPeterBrown - Jan 19, 2018 / Holt - Jan 19, 2018
|IELTS: student's basic curriculum - with or without art?
5 - I will assume that you followed the prompt. ... is completely useless ,which I strongly disagree. Thesis statement...
Writing Feedbackkrisujing - Jan 19, 2018 / PeterBrown - Jan 30, 2018
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