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|The bar graph illustrates the proportion of Australian males and females doing sport exercises IELTS
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|Students should choose fields based on their preferences or just focus on job related subjects?
3 - Hoang, your essay is not responding to the task at all. You are being asked to discuss whether or...
Writing Feedbacksillyman2000 - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|Budget spent on building new fastest train railroad or public transport infrastructure? IELTS 2
2 - HI Indri! i have a few suggestions for your essay. 1. this sentence should be Transportation has already...
Writing FeedbackEkaputri17 - Jul 28, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 28, 2018
|Task 2 - Reading books vs. Watching films and television
6 - Thanks @PaulthePhoenix! It's great to know that I should focus on a point in the topic in the case...
Writing Feedbackritanguyen167 - Jul 28, 2018 / ritanguyen167 - Aug 1, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 - it is good to share as much information, while others think the opposite
3 - Siti, the original prompt clues you into the fact that this is supposed to be a 5 paragraph essay...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|IELTS task 2: Reason why children play less with others and the effects on their development
4 - Anh, while your vocabulary is impressive, the fact that your paragraphs are not completely developed in terms of reasoning...
Writing FeedbackAnnLee - Jul 28, 2018 / Holt - Jul 30, 2018
|The government should punish young criminals in the same way as mature people.
NEW - Some people believe that young people who commit serious crimes should be punished in the same way as adults....
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|IELTS WRITNG TASK 2: The impact of ageing populations on both individuals and society
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jul 27, 2018 / Red Moon - Jul 28, 2018
|IELTS 2: Zoos and Wildlife protection; Is it cruel to keep animals in zoos?
2 - Hi caroline! I have a few suggestions related to your writing. 1. Avoid to use this sentence I...
Writing FeedbackCaroline77 - Jul 27, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018
|The government ought to prioritize railways as the primary sector to receive funds rather than roads
2 - Siti, I have several points for correction in your essay in this instance. To start, you must try to...
Writing Feedbackzahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018 / Holt - Jul 28, 2018
|Students eager to traveling and earning more money instead of studying continuously
Writing Feedbackngoccamtu323 - Jul 27, 2018 / Holt - Jul 27, 2018
|Essay about Southland's crucial exports in 2000 and predictions for the next years
2 - Please post the chart so that we could help you more :) A few grammatical suggestions: 1. ... 1...
Writing Feedbackthanhphuc2049 - Jul 26, 2018 / TriceLiu - Jul 31, 2018
|The oversea tourist is the reason for causing tension and negative impacts to the country they visit
4 - Bui, you have some major errors in this essay that will automatically garner yo a failing score. The first...
Writing Feedbackphuongbui - Jul 26, 2018 / Holt - Jul 28, 2018
|The majority of UK students speak at least one other language in addition to English
3 - Hello @Holt Thank you so much for the feedback. It's extremely helpful and I'm so glad that I found...
Writing Feedbackmsyoshino - Jul 26, 2018 / msyoshino - Aug 7, 2018
|Statistical information about the underground railway systems in six cities
2 - Hoang, if you take 27 minutes to write one analytical report, you are taking too much time. You only...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 26, 2018 / Holt - Jul 27, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK1: ESSAY ABOUT UK BIRTH RATE IN WOMEN AT 6 AGE GROUPS
4 - I think the overall writing is very good, however, you should pay more attention to the plural form, for...
Writing Feedbackvodat1512002 - Jul 26, 2018 / Minh2903 - Aug 6, 2018
|People learn another language because of their linguistic passion, career, journey, migration, etc.
NEW - title: Some people say that the only reason for learning a foregin language is in order to travel to...
Writing Feedbackkhue - Jul 26, 2018 / — -
|What I do in my free time - thinking about my goal
3 - Jhuang, this is more of a statement than an essay. So you should present short but clear sentences Since...
Writing FeedbackSandy047 - Jul 25, 2018 / Holt - Jul 26, 2018
|The society and young people impact on it
3 - Thank you so much for your suggestion, Holt. Those are really helpful! Now I have the direction to work...
Writing Feedbackimprove_writing - Jul 25, 2018 / improve_writing - Jul 26, 2018
|IELTS 2: essay discussed about teaching children, what is good and what is bad for them
3 - Baljeet, you have an unnecessary focus on crime in this discussion. The essay only asks about the degree of...
Writing Feedbackbaljeet12345 - Jul 25, 2018 / Holt - Jul 26, 2018
|Age problem in choosing a leader for an organization
5 - Huynh, this is a single opinion essay. All IELTS Task 2 essays are one sided unless otherwise specified. In...
Writing Feedbacktrangtrang96 - Jul 25, 2018 / Holt - Jul 28, 2018
|The number of university undergraduates and government spending on each of them from 1991 to 2001
2 - Hi @Kimmy9682, I think you should include the chart so we can fully understand the topic requirement, therefore...
Writing FeedbackKimmy9682 - Jul 24, 2018 / trangtrang96 - Jul 24, 2018
|Education for young people is important in many countries. What about illiterate adults?
3 - An Le, for starters, you are not giving the correct response in your thesis statement. Your response is not...
Writing FeedbackANLE1608 - Jul 24, 2018 / Holt - Jul 25, 2018
|In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important.
Writing FeedbackTriceLiu - Jul 24, 2018 / TriceLiu - Jul 25, 2018
|The measured rates of weight among residents in the Charlestown
Writing Feedbackhup - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|Developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid
3 - Hoang, the problem you have is that you tend to begin your discussion in the first paragraph when you...
Writing Feedbackhphuc123 - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|Science lessons in school should be more interesting
Writing FeedbackEtheos - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|@IELTS : The beneficial of team sport more than individual sport
2 - Hi @bichnguyen, any chance to post the question as well? From your essay it seem that it is just...
Writing Feedbackbichnguyen - Jul 23, 2018 / smally01 - Jul 23, 2018
|IELTS WRITNG TASK 1: Attendances at hospital emergency care departments
2 - Moon, there is absolutely no way that you will be able to write 222 words in the exam center....
Writing FeedbackRed Moon - Jul 23, 2018 / Holt - Jul 24, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1: WINTER TRAVEL TRENDS IN THE US FROM 1999 TO 2003
Writing Feedbackxdung7292 - Jul 22, 2018 / xdung7292 - Jul 23, 2018
|From the limestone and clay - process of making cement
Writing Feedbackhuyenhuyen69 - Jul 22, 2018 / huyenhuyen69 - Jul 24, 2018
|IELTS 2: music should not be taught in schools instead other subjects such as computers and science
5 - Avoid use this sentence this essay will discuss about ... because it will make the examiner think that...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 22, 2018 / zahranatsir - Jul 27, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 we have three important parts of education: reading, writing and maths.
4 - you can expand your idea why you agree/disagree in your body paragraphs. for instance, in first body paragraph ,...
Writing Feedbackdoda22 - Jul 22, 2018 / dimdim02 - Jul 23, 2018
|The distribution of tourist to different type of tourist attraction particular in Theme Parks
2 - Please include a picture in your thread or your next message for other people to give you feedback...
Writing Feedbackhuyen1109 - Jul 22, 2018 / hphuc123 - Jul 26, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 1: Summary on the structure in job market in Great Britain in 1992
Writing FeedbackGordonW - Jul 22, 2018 / GordonW - Jul 24, 2018
|IELTS writing for increasing of elderly in the country
Writing Feedbacksmally01 - Jul 22, 2018 / smally01 - Jul 23, 2018
|Topic: Some people believe that printed books are no longer necessary in this digital era
3 - Phuong, your grammar is correct in most instances and punctuation marks are properly used throughout the essay. There are...
Writing Feedbacksarahheya - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|Nowadays, there are some countries where the number of young adults is larger than elderly people
3 - Lipo, writing 350 words without proof reading and editing the content of your essay before submission tells me that...
Writing Feedbacklipolipo - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|GMAT - AWA ESSAYS: Art And Music Therapy
2 - Chang, in the first paragraph, you should completely mention the assumptions being made in the discussion presentation. You accidentally...
Writing Feedbackalicecw - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|IELTS Task 2: Prevention is better than treatment?
3 - Hang, your reasons are well developed and presented well in the essay. You have managed to present both supporting...
Writing Feedbackcao1km - Jul 22, 2018 / Holt - Jul 23, 2018
|Governments spend too much money to protect wildlife, while there are other important problems
Writing FeedbackAmericanCorner - Jul 21, 2018 / AmericanCorner - Jul 24, 2018
|IELTSS2- FREE INTERNET ACCESS FOR EVERYONE - BOTH VIEW
Writing Feedbackvanhkhuyen155 - Jul 21, 2018 / vanhkhuyen155 - Jul 22, 2018
|Should environmental problems be solved on a global scale or better to deal with it nationally?
Writing FeedbackDanielphan - Jul 21, 2018 / Danielphan - Aug 1, 2018
|The breakdown of the figures of commodities which were transported by various vehicles in the UK
3 - Do, in order to get the highest scoring consideration for your analytical report in a Task 1 essay, you...
Writing Feedbackdoda22 - Jul 21, 2018 / Holt - Jul 22, 2018
|Better earning opportunities for those who have an university certificate comparing to less educated
2 - Ho, your prompt paraphrase is totally off the mark. You are not responding to the question being asked at...
Writing FeedbackHo Tran Tien Dun - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2: The Development of Tourism Contributed to English Becoming the Most Prominent Language
3 - Thank you for your feedback. since you gave me advice that I have to learn more about developing...
Writing Feedbackdimdim02 - Jul 20, 2018 / dimdim02 - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task2 : share as much information as possible
2 - Lipo, your opening paraphrase is inaccurate because it does not use the proper synonyms to represent the original discussion....
Writing Feedbacklipolipo - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS2 : a number of individuals want to have children later in their life - Reasons and Effects
Writing Feedbackjavidols - Jul 20, 2018 / javidols - Jul 21, 2018
|What do you think schools can do to ensure the health, well-being and safety of their students
Writing Feedbackama12321 - Jul 20, 2018 / ama12321 - Jul 21, 2018
|The media should limit the number of terrible news since it have a large effect on human's lives
3 - Phhuong, you are too focused on showing off your English vocabulary, without considering whether or not it makes sense...
Writing Feedbacktranlamthanh - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|The pie charts below describes how six regions in the world utilized water with unalike purpose
Writing Feedbacklynn1601 - Jul 20, 2018 / lynn1601 - Aug 2, 2018
|Much stricter punishments on traffic driving offenses to decrease the road accidents
3 - @khoipham305 I have a feeling that you are writing this essay as part of a Task 2 response because...
Writing Feedbackkhoipham305 - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Some employers prefer formal qualification than life experience
Writing Feedbackiamaminh - Jul 20, 2018 / iamaminh - Jul 20, 2018
|Writing task 1: Bird migration observed in Woodchuck Country
Writing Feedbackminhthu - Jul 20, 2018 / minhthu - Jul 22, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2: Future plans to design prisons for learning and working
2 - Tran, you did not understand what the discussion method for this topic is. Your response to the original question...
Writing Feedbackawbtbsitw - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|IELTS WRITING TASK 2 - People in the community can buy cheaper products nowadays
2 - TA - 6 Vu, you have a slight prompt deviation in your opening paraphrase. The prompt paraphrase should...
Writing Feedbackgiangvu - Jul 20, 2018 / Holt - Jul 21, 2018
|Children should only start formal education after being graduated from an informal school
2 - Juliano, the essay prompt uses the word "either" in the question response instruction. Therefore, you cannot discuss both points...
Writing Feedbackjulianofs - Jul 19, 2018 / Holt - Jul 20, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - Is traditional skills and ways of life worthy to be kept alive?
Writing Feedbackas920024 - Jul 19, 2018 / as920024 - Jul 20, 2018
|Ielts Writing Task 1: Internet users as percentage of population 1999 - 2009
3 - Thank you for your feedback. I've just practiced writing essays recently and your advice is truly helpful to me!!!...
Writing FeedbackAlexdangphan - Jul 18, 2018 / Alexdangphan - Jul 19, 2018
|IELTS Writing Task 2 - The most important achievements for any child?
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