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|People attend colleges and universities: education, new friendships and relationships
NEW - Hey guys, it is me again. I just have another paragraph written out, and am hoping if someone will...
Writing Feedbackthrollen - Jun 22, 2011 / — -
|Success in life comes with 1% of Brilliance & Luck and rest of the 99% is hard work.
Writing Feedbacktamalroy1979 - Jun 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 25, 2011
|ielets essay popular events like the football world cup & other sporting
2 - Hi Spanish eyes, overall I would say that your ideas are good but just a gentle advice for you...
Writing FeedbackSpanish eyes - Jun 22, 2011 / the leaf ninja - Jun 29, 2011
|Should studying subjects that are needed by society be promoted?
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 22, 2011 / Geenesh - Jun 23, 2011
|Movies have been popular for sixty years; inexpensive, entertaining and to go out with friend.
Writing Feedbackrosa paul - Jun 21, 2011 / rosa paul - Jun 25, 2011
|California State government like many is organized with a multi layered hierarchy.
2 - Hi Natasha, I was just wondering what mistakes were made on the first paper... what feedback did you get...
Writing Feedbackscout2family - Jun 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 23, 2011
|Spending time alone or with friends?
3 - They become an energizer for my life, they bring many advices ( advice is an uncountable noun) to me...
Writing FeedbackDongwon - Jun 21, 2011 / linh202 - Jun 24, 2011
|should all the advertisements be banned?---IELTS
4 - I'll pick up where Ana left off: That is not to say, however, that advertisements have no downsides. Of...
Writing Feedbackannie890714 - Jun 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 22, 2011
|IELTS: Academic subjects vs other subjects.
NEW - Hello everyone, I've been preparing myself for the ielts test. I'm looking for some suggestions on my writing. ...
Writing Feedbackluciustsang - Jun 21, 2011 / — -
|"Mark." - a story research
15 - Hei Edward! That's okay... people quickly improve their skill when they practice together here. I hope you always...
Writing Feedbackamrosca - Jun 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|'go back to childhood' Do young people enjoy life more than older people do?
2 - Many adults have been wishingwish that they could go back to their childhood and enjoy their young life again....
Writing Feedbackmhu9 - Jun 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jun 21, 2011
|"my graduation from high school" - generic thank you/graduation announcement
2 - This is a liberal arts major, designed to engage students in creating a voice for influencing our social world....
Writing FeedbackVictorious2011 - Jun 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jun 21, 2011
|Are we free to make our own decision, or are we limited in the choices we make
Writing Feedbackthrollen - Jun 20, 2011 / throllen - Jun 22, 2011
|Some people believe that only pupils of similar interests should be given admissions
3 - Yes, the grammar is bad, but you communicate your meaning powerfully. Don't worry! If you are serious about...
Writing Feedbackvuducnam - Jun 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 21, 2011
|Destruction of the world's forests amounts to death of the world we currently know.
3 - ...the destruction of forests will diminish oxygen production and the quality of life for many animals. Therefore, due...
Writing Feedbackthrollen - Jun 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2011
|"an old man next to the Grandfather clock" - An event that I will never forget
6 - To EF_Kevin: Actually, this isn't a real story, i was actually kinda following my friend's story about the...
Writing FeedbackKieron1598 - Jun 18, 2011 / Kieron1598 - Jun 22, 2011
|Applying for Master's scholarship to Britain! Academic merit and benefit to country.
Writing FeedbackErique - Jun 18, 2011 / Erique - Jun 20, 2011
|"Hamster, My Favorite Pet" - My practice essay
8 - Thank you for your alter and praise. ^o^ thinking in English make me can not exactly convey what i...
Writing Feedbackulfhvoqm - Jun 17, 2011 / ulfhvoqm - Jun 20, 2011
|Is it easier now to form friendships than ever before? ; Meaning of "friendship".
4 - Great job, Zumrad! Ana, thanks for this work you did. Zumrad, maybe you can type the essay again and...
Writing FeedbackZuma - Jun 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 18, 2011
|IELTS:: The gaps between the rich and the poor.
5 - This seems incomplete as an intro paragraph. In my opinion, it is good to add a sentence that...
Writing FeedbackOriharaMairu - Jun 17, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2011
|Education brings up more job opportunities for those who are educated.
7 - I wonder,in essays if i give some data unrealistic but it seem to realistic Is that ok, Example :...
Writing Feedbackthrollen - Jun 17, 2011 / vuducnam - Jun 19, 2011
|Most criminals are set free once they finished their jail term.
3 - No need for FOR: ...regret their sins. A jail term is given to the criminal after a cautious,...
Writing Feedbackvuducnam - Jun 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 18, 2011
|"Those who use drugs should be automatically sentenced to time in prison" - IELTS
3 - ...and effective solutions must be taken achieved in order to trim down the number of drug addicts. ...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 18, 2011
|Essay describing how to you were completely misunderstood (becoming pregnant)
NEW - okay i have to write an essay overexperiences. have you ever attempted to change the way people view you?...
Writing Feedbackmom2cay - Jun 16, 2011 / — -
|A Vacation with the Family in Israel.
3 - This sentence needs a SUBJECT: Spent a good Vacation with ... It needs to be like this: I spent...
Writing Feedbackfridno - Jun 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 18, 2011
|"Scott Rudin" - identify a producer whose work you admire
NEW - Hi everybody :) i'm applying for a film producing course and i have to write about a producer whose...
Writing Feedbackazi_7117 - Jun 16, 2011 / — -
|GRE Essay Specialisits Vs Generalists
Writing Feedbackpac_232 - Jun 16, 2011 / pac_232 - Jun 18, 2011
|"a survey of children's activities" - IELTS writing task 1 sample: Pie Graph
Writing Feedbackbadjeje - Jun 16, 2011 / badjeje - Jun 21, 2011
|Making efforts to ask questions inspires students to thinks critically
5 - Encouraging students to ask also contribute extended information or deeper thoughts about the lessons. This will make the lessons...
Writing Feedbackcalvinhmw - Jun 16, 2011 / 123nnt - Jun 24, 2011
|How you can make my favorite sandwich.(one eight sentence paragraph)
3 - Ha ha, Eric, you make EssayForum a better place with your participation.. thanks! I have to say... this...
Writing Feedbackcarsonleeallen - Jun 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2011
|A beautiful girl at night time
Writing FeedbackJunie Rana - Jun 15, 2011 / Junie Rana - Jul 12, 2011
|Toefl: Children should learn to handle money - benefits for the whole society.
12 - In conclusion, letting children manage their own money will not only benefit children's lives but also benefit the whole...
Writing Feedbackcongcguoke - Jun 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|Is romantic love a good basis for marriage? discuss
2 - Because of mosquitoes, we stay inside. If you use this kind of sentence, you can start with BECAUSE. However,...
Writing Feedbackexon25 - Jun 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2011
|IELTS >More couples saying no to having kids
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2011
|IELTS>major effect on personality:Characteristic we born or our life experiences?
Writing FeedbackParmiss - Jun 15, 2011 / Parmiss - Jun 17, 2011
|Should a prudent person conclude that science and religion are incompatible?
NEW - This is my first post, and my first ever formal writing paper. Feed back would be greatly appreciated. I...
Writing Feedbackcarsonleeallen - Jun 14, 2011 / — -
|"lucky social experience" - equal support for sport and social activities also classes and libraries
3 - Thanks for your help, and for your patience and advices, as you noticed that I have made some mistakes...
Writing Feedbackifournight - Jun 14, 2011 / ifournight - Jun 15, 2011
|Toefl ibt essay: Work in team or independently (preferable)
4 - Hey, I like that argument! This is a meaningful essay, because not everyone would agree with your argument. Yet,...
Writing FeedbackCoolmam9x - Jun 14, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2011
|Compare and contrast - knowledge gained from personal experience vs. classroom
2 - I think the word "creator" here should be in capital letter like what Ms. Khinie wrote because it...
Writing FeedbackkhinieR - Jun 14, 2011 / badjeje - Jun 16, 2011
|Is image more powerful than the written word? - ielts
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 13, 2011 / Geenesh - Jun 16, 2011
|Essay paper: Do you think it is possible to end extreme poverty. If so, how?
6 - This last paragraph shows that your concern is aimed at addressing poverty in the United States. But extreme poverty...
Writing Feedbackhiroshimi - Jun 13, 2011 / John_Champagne - Jun 16, 2011
|IELS> Creative artists to express their ideas should be restricted by government?
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 13, 2011 / Geenesh - Jun 13, 2011
|Universal Primary Education and Free the Children in Kenya (grade 11)
2 - Hi Anne, welcome to EssayForum! I hope you'll have time to help a few other students, because you write...
Writing Feedbackanntc - Jun 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2011
|" Time & Memory" a Narrative for University Fundemental Writing Class
2 - I like that intro!! You write well... I mustered up the lung capacity to murmur "Where's my cell phone?"...
Writing Feedbackmrperez4 - Jun 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2011
|Telling the truth is mandatory in a sound relationship?
7 - hey, EF_Kevin, thx ...i will follow ur advice and try to write more essay ...i will work hard, and...
Writing FeedbackECHOECHO - Jun 11, 2011 / ECHOECHO - Jun 13, 2011
|toefl writing: people holding different views cannot achieve success?
3 - Here is one more sentence that needs some work: Use this phrase: different ....from People with different views from...
Writing FeedbackJuliezhang9001 - Jun 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 13, 2011
|"My grown up Christmas list" song
8 - Yes! Contributing at EF is not about being an English expert. It's about adding some of your own energy...
Writing Feedbackviolonc_21 - Jun 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 18, 2011
|IELTS: should teachers be paid according to the quality of their teaching?
Writing Feedbackbadjeje - Jun 10, 2011 / badjeje - Jun 14, 2011
|[ IELTS ] Children should be encouraged to co-operate or to be competitve?
Writing Feedbackmikneiht - Jun 10, 2011 / mikneiht - Jul 8, 2011
|CBEST: Someone unforgettable (Dinesh)
NEW - Write about an unforgettable person whom you have encountered in your life? What made him or her special? How...
Writing Feedbackztoa - Jun 9, 2011 / — -
|Behavior Therapy (Psychology paragraph)
Writing FeedbackRosalin Becky - Jun 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2011
|The rulers are well-educated; Directors of large companies receive big salaries
3 - Great thread here... thanks everyone! I noticed that realfog fixed an error with a common expression: "As far as...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jun 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2011
|Life and Art - Art immortalizes life.
3 - Hi Sarita, do you understand all of the corrections Ajit gave here? I like your ideas. It's interesting...
Writing Feedbacksarita Rana - Jun 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2011
|Goodbye AIDS? HIV-AIDS is an irremediable disease no more.
8 - Yep, that is what I always think people should do. Now we'll look for more mistakes to correct:...
Writing Feedbacklearner2 - Jun 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2011
|"Narcissistic Personality Disorder" - "The Search" by Naguib Mahfouz.
2 - Right after this part, I think you should have a sentence that continues the theme you stated with...
Writing Feedbackcorralizas - Jun 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2011
|IELTS exam: Should children play or study?
6 - thank you all so much for the suggestions and corrections.. pls keep them coming so the next time i...
Writing Feedbackbadjeje - Jun 8, 2011 / badjeje - Jun 8, 2011
|IELTS - Several languages are in danger of extinction
Writing Feedbackhaitom - Jun 7, 2011 / haitom - Jun 8, 2011
|Social contact affecting health status of older people
NEW - could you tell me which one looks better for the name of the paper as following; Named1: The...
Writing Feedbackpondjung - Jun 7, 2011 / — -
|should school child be limited on the hours of watching tv program and movie?
4 - . If the child is addicted to these entertainments and spend at the second paragraph, you can use 'children'...
Writing FeedbackJuliezhang9001 - Jun 7, 2011 / winniesun - Jun 12, 2011
|"main target is education" - attend college or university for many different reasons.
4 - Thank you very much for dumi and EF_Kevin, now I am learning lots of skills from you and your...
Writing Feedbackdhammika1973 - Jun 7, 2011 / dhammika1973 - Jun 14, 2011
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