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|"The role of luck in our success" - When people succeed, is it because of hard work?
2 - with hard working-> hard work they have able -> are able having the luck help ->having luck helps is...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 11, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|TOEFL-iBT Giving money as praise for children's high marks, good or bad?
3 - Here is a quick lesson about singular and plural. It's easy. Every parent always wants... All parents want... One...
Writing Feedbackabao1123 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Toelf: Never, never give up (to keep trying and never stop working for your goals?)
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 10, 2011 / 2011bss - Feb 10, 2011
|"Although my daughters are twins" - Contrast/Comparison Paragraphs
4 - Pre media.. that seems wrong. You should check to make sure you do not need a hyphen or something....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Toefl IBT: "attending college or university is required in our life"
Writing FeedbackJanet0928 - Feb 10, 2011 / Janet0928 - Feb 21, 2011
|Some practices harmed Chinese people's interests and damaged their emotions - GRE
Writing FeedbackXiaowang - Feb 10, 2011 / Xiaowang - Feb 15, 2011
|I and my sister went to the supermarket together
Writing FeedbackThuHien - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|TOEFL - domestic cars will not be considered as a reasonable way to work commuting
Writing Feedbackzjs92 - Feb 10, 2011 / zjs92 - Feb 11, 2011
|Ielts Task2: The problems and Solutions of Using the Internet
2 - I don't think "behind" is the right word to use here: However, there are still many drawbacks behind ...
Writing Feedbackshane - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|Population Growth: WORLD ISSUES PERFECT PARAGRAPH ON EHRLICH THEORY
3 - thanks :) I really appreciate the help and feedback! hahaha its okay it you help late LOL! at least...
Writing FeedbackMajo - Feb 9, 2011 / Majo - Feb 12, 2011
|"wisdom" that old people have - Knowledge gained from books or from experience?
Writing Feedbackkarinab - Feb 9, 2011 / Zakia15 - Feb 26, 2011
|Compare & Contrast "The Two Friends" - feedback.
4 - Thank you ioannidis007 and KathyLala for your feedback, and point out some weaknesses of the essay... I will fix...
Writing Feedbackiamthien - Feb 9, 2011 / iamthien - Feb 9, 2011
|IELTS-sports professional can earn a great more money than others
12 - Hehe, great quote =) (the one with the ending). Nah, I'm so NOT over the moon with my english...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 9, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY The importance of robots and their influences
3 - Thanks, Sarah and Moon, you are great! Assel, I think you should type the essay again and try...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|Television promotes propaganda and it destroyed the communication among friends and family?
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Quest in IELTS: Information provided in the internet can be reliable or trusted?
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / jomse - Feb 18, 2011
|GRE_AW issue 131"The arts reveal the hidden ideas of a society"
4 - People say, "In terms of..." In terms of individual, art, not only representing truth, genuineness and beauty, but...
Writing Feedbackgintoki - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|Well-being of pets (Quest in IELTS)
4 - You need THEM. ... trained animals and kept them as... Do not capitalize there words: ... are Dogs,...
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|A persuasive essay: 'Death penalty should be abolished' for or against
6 - Why capitalize here? ---> severe Punishment if a Person disobeyed... When you include a little extra phrase in...
Writing FeedbackJovine - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|Nursing, My First Job Experience (narrative essay)
Writing Feedbackmdipeolu - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|sacrificial love - I was contented, relieved and in peace.
Writing Feedbackamelia95 - Feb 8, 2011 / amelia95 - Feb 19, 2011
|IELTS: Influence of English - advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - It's okay to say this, but then you need to add one more sentence before ending the paragraph....
Writing Feedbacklippea - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|IELTS- student behaviour- causes and solutions
7 - I see your question. I don't know much about the scoring for ielts, but maybe Kevin or someone...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. ---GRE
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2011
|Travel broaden the horizon and knowledge; communications between countries
Writing Feedbackkate36 - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|Competitive children admire the sense of fulfillment therefore they are always trying to be better.
6 - ...childrens' characters and future lives . Besides, they will hold future responsibilities for a country. ( I changed...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|Independent scholar seeks journal paper advice
2 - Hi Lance, it usually works like this: People post great essays on EssayForum so a lot of people can...
Writing FeedbackLector - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|Tv and Its drawbacks (spreading violence, changing social relations)
2 - Great edit, Kim! Now, Hamid, it is your turn to work some more. Please type the essay again, and...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|schools don't prepare young people for life in the real life.
Writing Feedbackploniite - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 14, 2011
|The socialization of children determines the way of society development
4 - What do you mean? It's a sentence you copied from another essay? You should change some words to...
Writing Feedbacklcnk - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|British and Australian laws - to access to the past criminal record of the defendant?
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|Essay about Scientific Wonderment- feedback
Writing Feedbackbenshen11 - Feb 7, 2011 / benshen11 - Feb 10, 2011
|IELTS: Music was, remains and will be vital part of our lives
6 - @ekologic: I'm not sure about "All walks of life" - never saw it in such context. I'm more keen...
Writing Feedbackekologic - Feb 7, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|"Evaluating the teaching effectiveness of the professors" - GRE, Omega
Writing Feedbackshubhi - Feb 6, 2011 / shubhi - Feb 15, 2011
|Parents can give everything to their children. They understand them more than anyone else does.
5 - Hey, it is true that there are some small errors, but you have to also remember that writing is...
Writing Feedbackthaitornadoes - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2011
|IELTS- creativity-should it be given freedom or restrictions?
4 - Hi Kevin, thanks for the reply... I will try to keep it in mind not to write such contradicting...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 6, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 9, 2011
|Obamacare: Heading Down? (against the health care programs promoted)
5 - You should look at the advantages and disadvantages of Obamacare then come up with a stronger thesis which will...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / oscarsalmons - Sep 10, 2012
|Olevel: Internet/Computer harm or not?
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 6, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 28, 2011
|Rising China and its future: planned or liberal economy?
3 - The size of the government, or the capacity of its intervention defines a country's overall economic policies. or you...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|GRE Issue: On the value of history
Writing Feedbackkitty__lan - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|People who cannot work with computers will be soon disadvantaged.
3 - April and Junwoo Suh, thank you from the deepest of my heart!!! Hope your suggestions and examples will help...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 6, 2011 / tleuliyeva - Feb 6, 2011
|Toefl essay: Modern technology; single world culture will not be created
2 - Especially, ancient cultural people, they will conserve their civilization to distinguish themselves from others. Loose sentence. The...
Writing Feedbacklittle_wingg - Feb 5, 2011 / shelok - Feb 5, 2011
|Advertisements increase sales volume - not wasting of a company's time or money
Writing Feedbacksongyi88 - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|favor food, why it's so special
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Feb 4, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 14, 2011
|A study: Not being a native English teacher has been reputed as a drawback?
3 - Maybe you can be clearer here at the start: ...native English speaker had been reputed as a drawback for...
Writing Feedbackmor2ela - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their teenagers
5 - Sometimes a short sentence is better at the beginning of an essay, because it catches the reader's attention:...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|Descriptive Essay: Description of a Flood
6 - Thesis statment: The college Presidents ar talking about making the lowering the drinking age 18 years old.Everbody know that...
Writing FeedbackEdzo - Feb 4, 2011 / kastro28 - Feb 25, 2011
|TOEFL - What things a movie tells about its country
5 - Let's use words that are specific.. not "things"...it reflects many characteristics of many things about the country that the...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 11, 2011
|IELTS-experience or born traits?which is more effective?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 4, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 10, 2011
|The movie "Troy", Achilles - someone you admire. How have they affected your life?
Writing Feedbackhachillies - Feb 3, 2011 / hachillies - Feb 12, 2011
|"Soon people who cannot work with computers will be disadvantaged" ESSAY
Writing Feedbackm00ny - Feb 3, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|A good son or daughter has a responsibility to obey parents and keep communication with them
2 - I try to give some suggestions for the first 2 paraghaps => Parents sacrifice for their children from...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Feb 3, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
|Describe table - companies advertising expediture IELTS task1
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Feb 3, 2011 / sweetheart87 - Feb 10, 2011
|IELTS-competition or co-operation-which is better?
7 - Thnks Susan, U gave a really good suggestion for writing the last line. :) i hope i will remember...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 2, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 10, 2011
|"fixed punishments for each type of crime?" writing about discuss both view
2 - I found one more error: However, there is increasing in crime rate, this problem does not only in specific...
Writing Feedbackmemory - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|IELTS-Happiness- factors,definition and importance - Prosperity makes individuals complete
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|Personal essay about myself - my identity
2 - I want to find places to shorten sentence and build intensity in the writing: To many high school students,...
Writing Feedbackwemm3 - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|"you can see the wonders" - Season of change
3 - Probably the reason no one helped you is that the help you gave others was like this: "Thats nice....
Writing Feedbackajoye - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|(flexibility / tactfulness / fairness) important qualities of a good supervisor
Writing Feedbackzaid_86 - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|"Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay
8 - Here are some edits => It was time to say goodbye! => When the airplane arrived in Detroit, we...
Writing Feedback8jhoi8 - Feb 1, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
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