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|Independent life or living with family?
Writing Feedbackganaanaiz - Apr 4, 2011 / ganaanaiz - Apr 7, 2011
|Has learning about the past been beneficial to our present life? Help me correct it.
3 - Have we even wondered that why we have the subject of history as a pre-requisite course in school. ...
Writing Feedbackngocnam - Apr 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|Toefl: spend leisure time outdoors or indoors?
6 - however, being outdoors seems to allow recreation to happen more easily than being indoors does Thank Kevin and...
Writing Feedbackyecochi - Apr 4, 2011 / yecochi - Apr 6, 2011
|IELTS - old buildings were rebuilt or redesigned
4 - However, there are increasingly many old buildings are becoming the victims during the process of the city's modernization. ...
Writing Feedbackliang_yielin - Apr 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|Essay about Prevention and Health Education is better than cure
5 - Thank you all for your support! I will try to correct and take it into consideration when writing!...
Writing FeedbackPanda271 - Apr 3, 2011 / Panda271 - Apr 7, 2011
|Our children today spend too much time watching TV _AnhTrung
3 - One word: outdoor ...outdoor activities to make them healthier both mentally and physically. The child must do...
Writing FeedbackAnhTrung - Apr 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|STUDYING ABROAD IS NOT JUST STUDYING ABOUT EDUCATION
Writing FeedbackQuiAnLe - Apr 3, 2011 / QuiAnLe - Apr 15, 2011
|College English Composition 1. Essay over "Personal Identity"
3 - The content requirements for this particular assignment are quite ironic -- ironic in that I was misunderstood even before...
Writing Feedbacknuclear_med23 - Apr 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|SAT essay. "Can succes be disastrous?"
Writing FeedbackBiteshock - Apr 3, 2011 / vafa - Apr 3, 2011
|"My cousin is really an emotional person" - A descriptive paragraph
Writing Feedbackvafa - Apr 2, 2011 / butterbescotch - Apr 5, 2011
|"English-Opening to Horror story" - Is my horror story effective?
Writing Feedbackmabcoll - Apr 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|Parents should give money to their children for their high marks at school.
Writing Feedbackhaley_w - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|(chart) Leisure activity in different ages, IELTS Task 1
2 - I think you need mention the value of "0" in Group sport as they are minimals. Besides, there...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 1, 2011 / kelp0308 - Apr 2, 2011
|"Arguing A Position Essay" - Against the Death Penalty/Capital Punishment, Revise.
3 - I would change "on the innocent" to "of the innocent"... and in 1.), it's not the reason that...
Writing Feedbackjk17 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|[IELTS] letter-writing skills will disapear, agree or not?
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|The internet gives us a lot of information, someone thinks it might create problems.
4 - If someone asks me what was the most important invention during in recent decades, I will definitely indicate that...
Writing Feedbackangelinee827 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 4, 2011
|Max Borders: New Threats to Freedom Essay Competition
2 - Regulation is "controlling human or societal behavior by rules or restrictions," and it spreads the span ofspans political, legal,...
Writing Feedbackcaboard493 - Apr 1, 2011 / EF_Susan - Apr 2, 2011
|Definition Essay "A Good Mother"
3 - a place where a moment when actually, do this: Every mother has a moment in her life that she...
Writing Feedbacktarjesir - Mar 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2011
|(charts) EDUCATION ACHIEVEMENT IN WOMEN IN 1945-1995.
Writing FeedbackARIA - Mar 31, 2011 / ARIA - Apr 7, 2011
|IELTS task 2: Developed nation should tackle refugee problem
8 - Ratree~~ personally, too many sentenses begin with "To..." or "The...", maybe you should make your sentenses more changable~...
Writing Feedbackratree - Mar 31, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 11, 2011
|5 paragraph comparison/contrast essay on Arizona and Pennsylvania
3 - I'll add "had"----> I couldn't give him the answer because I had traveled to... ... 38 different states,...
Writing Feedbackabbys10 - Mar 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Apr 3, 2011
|Which is major influence in our life, characteristics we are born with or experience
Writing Feedbackqingsong - Mar 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 11, 2011
|Ronnie Coleman; Celebrity question - what would you ask a famous person?
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Mar 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 5, 2011
|Tourism: Type of company would you most like to see built in your hometown or city
Writing FeedbackArdhitya - Mar 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2011
|[IELTS] attitude to Space Research
9 - ^0^ Add some my advices~ I had wrote some similar topic. After reading yours, I found maybe the beginning...
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Mar 30, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 8, 2011
|What motivates people to change?Any change is accompanied by drawbacks and discomfots
4 - I really like that first sentence. Hey, you should put a space after each comma but not before each...
Writing Feedbackhayooy - Mar 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2011
|Some people like to communicate by e-mail and voice mail. Less face-to-face action?
4 - Dear Aria Thank you so much for your advising. As you said I have problems in my writing especially...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Mar 30, 2011 / mahrou - Apr 2, 2011
|Do you argee that playing computer game is a waste of time? Children should not play?
3 - Good essay I should say! I think that somebody should control children. Take for example their parents or elderly...
Writing Feedbackangelinee827 - Mar 30, 2011 / birdman - Apr 5, 2011
|"not physically and mentally fit to play" - How I suck at sports
Writing Feedbackbutterbescotch - Mar 29, 2011 / butterbescotch - Apr 2, 2011
|Barron's integrated essay 6. The origin of life. Stanley Miller.
Writing FeedbackAzedentist - Mar 29, 2011 / Azedentist - Apr 2, 2011
|Article summary about a mother telling a story about her son
3 - Great edit, Aja! Julie, do you understand all the corrections? Try typing it again with the correct spelling, grammar,...
Writing Feedbackjulie_loc - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 1, 2011
|Individual can do nothing to improve environment; only governments and companies can?
3 - Nowadays means now. "Has always been" means "in the past." So... this is contradictory: Nowadays environmental issue has always...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|"TP Club - travelling around the country and abroad"
2 - TP Club was established in 2001 and chaired by Mark Peter. TP club has around one hundred members since...
Writing FeedbackHelpEnglish - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|A university should invest same money in athletc activities as libraries or not?
2 - the university is a place in which we ... It is sure that there important things or not.---What...
Writing Feedbackcantonistuta - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|[IELTS] cellphone and Internet are harmful to people health, why we use? how to do?
5 - In the first paragraph, you can improve the clarity of your message by explaining HOW it is "detrimental to...
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Mar 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|The Traffic Accident- Free writting- Only Topic.
5 - Thanks dumbdumb; bribe: it was for car accident, after accidents we have 2 choices whether to pay legal money...
Writing FeedbackAhmadmeraj - Mar 29, 2011 / Ahmadmeraj - Mar 30, 2011
|IELTS: some people think building more roads can reduce traffic problems...
4 - I'll give a few more ideas here... I like the "alleviate" suggestion, even though "reduced" was okay: Some...
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|A man / woman will never know what they can do until they first try .
4 - Not knowing one's---apostrophe own strength is a terrible self underestimation and is a common misconception among many people...
Writing Feedbackbahamaessay - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 31, 2011
|The world is like a painting, our existence the penciled outlines and our lives..
8 - I really like your ideas! Your ideas are very deep and different from others, which makes your essay stand...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Mar 28, 2011 / lol_joyce - Apr 20, 2011
|Is the hard drive storage your only concern?
3 - In this essay, I think I have a good idea to improve your straightforward, clear writing style: Add a...
Writing Feedbackkrauser - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 30, 2011
|Our achievements in the past will motivate us today.
5 - GRE AW? I think should develop the thesis statement, ..sounds like only focus on the point that"yesterday is...
Writing Feedbackvsravan - Mar 28, 2011 / findthetime - Mar 30, 2011
|(Internet service and public transportation) - change would make to your home town?
Writing FeedbackY529 - Mar 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|position on Arizona Law: support and opposition( one body paragraph for each side).
Writing Feedbackbarabashka - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|[TOEFL]Daily homework is necessary or not
3 - Yeah, that first sentence has a problem: The topic of whether teachers should give homework to students every day...
Writing Feedbackbluesnow - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|Behavior of people in the formal organization is influenced by structure, technology
Writing Feedbackatyourservice - Mar 27, 2011 / atyourservice - Mar 29, 2011
|IELTS Graph: Contribution of selected sectors to the UK economy in the 20th century
3 - This is a very difficult kind of essay to write! I'll offer some ideas: The graph shows changes in...
Writing Feedbacknamleung - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|TOEFL:Should parents make important decisions for their older children or not?
3 - I think you can strengthen the intro by naming the two things: There are 2 reasons why I disagree...
Writing Feedbacktlnrstw - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|People are more independent in the modern world? - IELTS
4 - People have different views regarding dependence and independence in the modern world. ----I changed this first sentence so that...
Writing Feedbackfdrik - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|Better to watch a movie in a cinema or at home? an TOEFL
4 - Quanue, do you notice this great idea from Mahrou? It is a simplification: here is the possibility that t...
Writing Feedbacklqy - Mar 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2011
|IELTS Essay: About job assignment between men and women
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 26, 2011 / BrookW - Mar 29, 2011
|IELTS about if creative artists can express their ideas in any way they like
4 - Wow, thank you for makingme smarter. This is a very wise observation. I often think about where the...
Writing FeedbackBrookW - Mar 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 29, 2011
|toefl - It is the truth that not all people can do the things they like all the time.
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Mar 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2011
|Need help in writing a better eassy on how to solve gang violence in school
4 - Great corrections here: Violence has increased in our schools within the past four years; more than thirty teachers and...
Writing Feedbackchampion - Mar 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2011
|"Who gives society something of lasting value" - student's response on GRE, ABOUT ART
4 - which otherwise would be too infinitesimal to be described by the public. but meanwhile keeping it in mind...
Writing Feedbacksolitaryreaper - Mar 26, 2011 / butterbescotch - Mar 29, 2011
|"The subject of possession and happines" - Toefl writing
3 - The subjects of money and happiness are interesting subjects because there seem to be many contradictory ideas around them....
Writing FeedbackKaixi - Mar 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 28, 2011
|Ielts Graph (mortality and funding on different diseases)
8 - Yes! That's right... The chart shows (present tense) the facts about what happened (past tense). This is...
Writing FeedbackARIA - Mar 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 3, 2011
|it is more important to spend money on art and music
Writing Feedbackz19b89 - Mar 25, 2011 / z19b89 - Mar 28, 2011
|[IELTS] Select students with academic ablity or teach them together?
Writing Feedbackkelp0308 - Mar 25, 2011 / kelp0308 - Mar 28, 2011
|Research about Philippines: FILIPINOS ARE A NATURE LOVERS
3 - thank you. I am really flattered from all your comments sir Kevin! You know, your CORRECTIONS serve as my...
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Mar 25, 2011 / niesaysi - Mar 30, 2011
|The best way to learn English
Writing Feedbackmoonlighting - Mar 25, 2011 / moonlighting - Apr 13, 2011
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