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|Students usually love a teacher with humor - he is closer to his students and teaches better
4 - Great suggestions here. You should challenge yourself! Try to type the essay and use Kathy's corrections. If you make...
Writing Feedbackeating105 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|'young have longer lifetime left' - young people or old people enjoy life better
3 - Yes, put a space after periods, commas, and all other punctuation. Good question! Here is a quick lesson...
Writing Feedbackdodoboy0324 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|"Information described as 'factual' - skepticism" - GRE Analytical Writing
Writing Feedbacksilentwf - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|GRE AW issue 131 The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society
3 - thx very much for your suggestions, and I feel flattered about it, still, there is so much for me...
Writing Feedbacktonia - Feb 19, 2011 / tonia - Feb 22, 2011
|"Be Weary of their Expectations" - a draft, persuasive essay about expectations
4 - This seems like a terrible thing to say after Kathy probably spent 20 minutes helping you. And your comment...
Writing FeedbackSunRa93 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|TOEFL - owing to the development of technology we live in a better life than out ancestors
5 - Do you know about 'active voice' in writing? Look at the difference: People's lives have been changed in many...
Writing Feedbackaqz951 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|Undergraduates should have part-time jobs
3 - ...students surveyed working part-time jobs. Some people oppose to letting undergraduates' have part-time jobs, since they... ...
Writing Feedbackanhducht_o0o - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Many students educate themselves abroad - it's parents' decision or enthusiasm over living overseas
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 19, 2011 / joseph240 - Mar 2, 2011
|We have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
4 - Education from family also promote the balance of socialization of children. Parents tell bedtime stories to their children, which...
Writing FeedbackSDtoto - Feb 18, 2011 / pistachiolios - Feb 20, 2011
|Universities are centers of growing scientists and produce the science
5 - thank you:)...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 18, 2011 / mahrou - Feb 26, 2011
|Different choices - Working in group or Working independently ?
Writing Feedbackanhducht_o0o - Feb 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|SPECIALISTIC SUBJECTS v A RANGE OF SUBJECTS IN UNIVERSITY
Writing Feedbackswallow512 - Feb 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|task 2 ESSAY ABOUT TRADITIONAL FOOD AND FAST FOOD-(IELTS)
NEW - Topic six: In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food. This is having a negative...
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|Important skill a person should learn in order to successful in the world today?
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Seek the Truth; do not believe in something simply because an authority says so
3 - Comma: Hitler believed his people were the superior race, that the Aryans were the best, and told his countrymen...
Writing Feedbackishigaki - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Daydreaming Experience Paper
4 - Rottencandy, what a great username! Well, I think you should change all the "you" to "I" It's manipulating things...
Writing Feedbackrottencandy - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Essay about the E-learning according to teachers - feedback
Writing Feedbackmani_ok7 - Feb 17, 2011 / mani_ok7 - Mar 1, 2011
|Whom in your country would you choose to build a statue for?
3 - Use rightly to modify a verb, not a noun. ...as a righteous candidate, because she is good-hearted, modest, and...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Essay about independency and a choice between living with family or moving out
6 - hello, i saw your essay, here is some ideas: - you have less evidences to support your essay, and...
Writing Feedbackdodoboy0324 - Feb 17, 2011 / taylor kong - Mar 21, 2011
|Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all
2 - I like the "first, second, third" structure you used for the essay. That keeps the reader focused on the...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|corporal punishments to students
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2011
|"School Bells " - kindergarten essay
7 - hahahah, you are great. Well, students can do those things, I suppose. However, lately I feel very...
Writing Feedbacktonybtony - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|Essay IELTS: How can the use of private motor vehicles be reduced?
4 - Thank you so much Jennifer. The corrections you have made are genuine. I am going to type it again...
Writing FeedbackVidyadhar - Feb 16, 2011 / Vidyadhar - Feb 18, 2011
|TOEFL-Internet, good or bad?Each coin has both sides
2 - Internet is one of the most significant achievements of mankind. This facility has transformed the life style in a...
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / dolly - Feb 15, 2011
|IELTS-following host country's culture or not?
3 - really? I checked somewhere that there are more than 20 issues with my essay:( but tnx anyway....
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 15, 2011 / s_maryam - Feb 16, 2011
|equal importance; Better to have broad knowledge or specialize in one subject?
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 23, 2011
|IELTS:companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research
3 - Use a spell checker: In contemprory sciety society, the issue... that private corporations invest in and administer the...
Writing Feedbackguokaifu - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|Toefl essay- It's better to marry someone who is similar to you or different from you
Writing Feedbackidrofrance - Feb 15, 2011 / idrofrance - Feb 26, 2011
|Toefl- Should school buy computers or books? Both are indispensible in our lives
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2011
|toelf-A transportation vehicle that has changed people's lives.
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 14, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Feb 25, 2011
|About me: Sri Lankan but was born in Australia - my first paragraph
5 - Ethan, I'm so glad you are participating here. You are correct to try to catch the reader's attention. But...
Writing Feedbacksupunja - Feb 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|Museums are the buildings that preserve objects of importance
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / iamthien - Feb 25, 2011
|The invention of microwave has brought dramatic changes in the cooking process
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|modern technology; everyone follows the culture of his own
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 14, 2011 / dolly - Feb 22, 2011
|The advanced technology help students easily learn knowledge. TOEFL essay
Writing Feedbackwindchimethia - Feb 13, 2011 / taylor kong - Mar 17, 2011
|a society's ideas and values revealed by observation of its people---GRE
4 - Well, that much is obvious. Kevin made a correction that turned an incomplete sentence into a complete one....
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 22, 2011
|toefl topic: take one additional thing for a trip
Writing Feedbackchocomilk - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|O level: cloning is a science disaster to come. DYA?
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2011
|IELTS - pros and cons; working or traveling before starting university studies
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|GRE-AW-Argument-Secondary infections and muscle strain
4 - Hey, you did a great job with this. Another point that might be important enough to write about is...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|"What is Success": LUCK OR HARD WORK?
6 - Dolly I mean writing style is too casual. In other words, the structure isn't clear enough. It's better to...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / chris0203 - Feb 15, 2011
|A university education should be provided free of charge to all the interested
3 - You wrote "should be" 2 times in that first sentence. It can be more efficient, like... Oh! I see...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|GOOD NEIGHBOR (reliable, trustworthy, with a sense of humor)
3 - Some are vey very positive, while there are others who can really make your life miserable.---That is so true!...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable
4 - Use the word standpoint, not standing point. From my standpoint, I prone to regard senior friends' advices more...
Writing Feedbackchris0203 - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|Some important qualities of a good supervisor
Writing Feedbackkarinab - Feb 13, 2011 / Jeecee - Apr 24, 2012
|GRE-AW-Issue-Faculty, practical experiences, working outside the academic world
2 - Faculty members can have first-hand perception and unverstanding understanding of the demand from the industry through their participation in...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|Schools should fund the classes and extracurricular activities with the same money
Writing FeedbackEmilyLee - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|"Children to bring about a better society" - ISSUE 130
Writing FeedbackMary861003 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|How is the social or sociable constructed at the site of commerce?
2 - "For example" is strange there, at the start. Maybe this is not the beginning of the paper? A...
Writing Feedbackbeau4u1 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|"Who are you?" Lucy asked; Dystopian Short Story
Writing FeedbackSifan - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular.
2 - The first sentence does not carry a lot of meaning. It will be a stronger start if you revise...
Writing FeedbackCHEN LU - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|The Jealous reactions of one person to the success of a friend.
3 - Jealousy can lead you to do something which you yourself would not even have expected. This was what happened...
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|Toefl - What makes a good parent?
3 - Thanks karinab, I think I should pay more attention on my grammar Really appreciate your corrections, Kak3521...
Writing Feedbacks80776 - Feb 12, 2011 / s80776 - Feb 12, 2011
|Exploring outer space, governments should spend as much money as possible?
4 - In addition to the very thorough feedback from Chi-han Huang, I want to add a point that might improve...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|TOEFL - Parents have many useful ways to help their children to prepare their adult life
3 - There are not many grammar errors in this article actually, but there is a repeated sentence"prepare their adult...
Writing Feedbackqqcandra - Feb 11, 2011 / s033591 - Feb 15, 2011
|O level: teenage love with study and emotional development
3 - As the society progresses, a variety of social issues also arises to be faced by... Among those, adolescent...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|"The role of luck in our success" - When people succeed, is it because of hard work?
2 - with hard working-> hard work they have able -> are able having the luck help ->having luck helps is...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 11, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|TOEFL-iBT Giving money as praise for children's high marks, good or bad?
3 - Here is a quick lesson about singular and plural. It's easy. Every parent always wants... All parents want... One...
Writing Feedbackabao1123 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Toelf: Never, never give up (to keep trying and never stop working for your goals?)
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 10, 2011 / 2011bss - Feb 10, 2011
|"Although my daughters are twins" - Contrast/Comparison Paragraphs
4 - Pre media.. that seems wrong. You should check to make sure you do not need a hyphen or something....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
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