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|IELTS Tourism: Advantages outweigh Disadvantages? 'setting restriction areas'
4 - Winnie, this might sound silly, but before you start writing an essay take 5 minutes to put your ideas...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 5, 2011 / amrosca - Jul 6, 2011
|"Weekend will pass as usual" - essay about how i spend my week off.
4 - Look, you capitalized a word after a comma: I always wake up quite late in the morning, After finishing...
Writing Feedbacksooriyan - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|TOEFL: Being taught by a teacher is the most suitable and effective way to learn
4 - The verb tense in this paragraph was the PAST TENSE, so keep it in the past tense: Furthermore,...
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|The role of parents in school: students to study more and be responsible
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 26, 2011
|The ideal teacher: a missionary
4 - You're very much welcome! However, Kevin and Susan are the pros around here, so better wait for a second...
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 4, 2011 / amrosca - Jul 5, 2011
|"CFL lamps make our eyes feel far more comfortable" - TOEFL-Integration
3 - The following paragraph presents three different points of views among the two parties. First of all, the author...
Writing Feedbackjinyan0129 - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|Working moms cause problems in the society - ILETS
7 - Women play a significant role towards the success of any nation. Infact, women are considered to be the backone...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Jul 4, 2011 / w_even - Jul 10, 2011
|Nowadays, more and more universities ask their students to choose one field the school have
3 - As far as I am concerned, I feel that taking classes in many fields can offer students more opportunities...
Writing Feedbackdellvo - Jul 4, 2011 / linh202 - Jul 5, 2011
|Good and Bad effects of TOURISM
3 - Another high quality edit from Ana... I agree with that advice about using shorter sentences. It is easier...
Writing Feedbacknaseem - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office?
7 - Are you talking about the topic sentence of the 3rd paragraph? Another equally important factor that that makes...
Writing Feedbackzhonghua2412 - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2011
|"I love you mom and you're the light of my eyes" - My mom essay
Writing Feedbackfofo - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|"BUY NOTHING DAY" -- More often that once each year.
5 - Buy Nothing Day is observed around the world each November. In honor of the holiday, you will take an...
Writing Feedbackksimms - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|Ielts - it would be unwise to assume a good economy is all that's needed for a country
3 - Hello~~Winnie~~ Economic progress is one way to measure a country's success. Some say that there are other ways...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 3, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|'Understand others' emotion, attitude and feelings' - face-to-face communication is better
2 - Good points about the use of expression (eyebrows, etc) in face-to-face communication! They all affect the way we...
Writing Feedback123nnt - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|Giving mobile phones to the unemployed (IELTS ESSAY)
6 - I am one of the candidate in IELTS exam,too~~ Some people argue that the government should give every...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jul 3, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|TOEFL: People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things ......
3 - That first sentence is a difficult one! I tis difficult to refer to a topic this way. I'll give...
Writing FeedbackBuzz8177 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2011
|TOEFL: Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports
4 - This writing is very strong! If you can always write like this, you will pass the toefl for sure....
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2011
|TOEFL - the main point is to be sure if we can pay a loan or not
7 - It seems like money can do anything, even can harm friendship!---I corrected the grammar. It's not money...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|one word essay on time & quality of our life.
4 - thankyou so much for the feedbaackkss :)) im so happy with the comments, thanks for helping me improvise. well,...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Jul 2, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Jul 12, 2011
|agree/disagree - moving to different countries or towns is not good because
3 - An Ongoing ongoing debate exists over whether moving to different places is a good idea, because it makes...
Writing FeedbackInq Lee - Jul 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause and 1 solution
4 - Accompanying with the continuous development of technology are the surprising advancements in the way people commute. ----Do not write...
Writing Feedbackandytranhung - Jul 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|USE OF CCTV CAMERAS (IELTS ESSAY)
6 - keep pratice more~~Sangeertha~~It's natural to write overtime~~ Don't be nervous~~just calm down and pratice~~...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 30, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|"Should fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood" - ILETS exam
4 - CAPITALIZATION: Do not capitalize mother. Sometimes you will see it capitalized if it is used like a name: She...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|Work for the company or go for our own business?
Writing Feedbackapieceof - Jun 30, 2011 / Geenesh - Jul 1, 2011
|About Water - Water is the most important in our world
Writing Feedbackiloveyou - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|Death penalty or a life in prison for murderers?
4 - The facts in your essay are also useful for the topic of "Fixed punishment for each type of crime?"...
Writing Feedbackandytranhung - Jun 30, 2011 / winniesun - Jul 3, 2011
|Families to pay taxes that support universal education?
Writing Feedbackandytranhung - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|"tourism does not benefit the poorest" - IELTS
5 - It is looking good... Here is an idea: Next, the governments of the countries can build a village...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|Should children learn a foreign language since their childhood in schools?
4 - collegue give good advice. I like your essay and like more the way mates dealt with. Good luck...
Writing FeedbackBecool - Jun 30, 2011 / start208 - Jun 30, 2011
|Should high school students allow to take courses they like? TOEFL
3 - Let's use the word EXPERIENCES: High school experiences play important roles in our academic careers and thereafter throughout...
Writing FeedbackBecool - Jun 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|"equal abilities of both genders" - EQUAL NUMBERS OF MALE & FEMALE IN EVERY SUBJECT
4 - These sentences are too complicated. You should write shorter sentences. Shorter sentences are easier to read, just as...
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Jun 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|How I Spent My Inheritance
Writing FeedbackXray1305 - Jun 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|superficial is external human" One should never judge a person by external appearance
4 - oh thank you i really appreciate that, i have serious English writing problem. also thank you inspiring me...
Writing FeedbackDashka - Jun 29, 2011 / Dashka - Jul 5, 2011
|"people want to educate" - attending college or university for many different reasons
NEW - Hi all, I am preparing for TOEFL exam, and this is my first writing. Please rate it and point...
Writing FeedbackeLearner - Jun 29, 2011 / — -
|Improving roads and highways or improving public transportation?
Writing Feedback123nnt - Jun 29, 2011 / 123nnt - Jun 30, 2011
|The twenty first century experienced the significant growth of globalization.
NEW - Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and...
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Jun 29, 2011 / — -
|There is no better time to be alive than now (really?)
2 - Hi there, I'm preparing for ielts academic too. Just want to help by providing few comments on your...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 29, 2011 / the leaf ninja - Jun 29, 2011
|Email and text messaging threatening the status of written language?
Writing Feedbackroygao2008 - Jun 29, 2011 / 123nnt - Jun 29, 2011
|TOEFL-Smoking should not be promitted in restaurants or other public places
9 - Ha ha, yeah... it's tough. We want to allow each other freedom..so we want to allow people to...
Writing Feedbackcalvinhmw - Jun 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2011
|Money spent on Sports should be equal to money spent on University Libraries
2 - hahahahah.. the leaf ninja... what a great username. It leave my mind wondering, because... well, it must be wet...
Writing FeedbackBecool - Jun 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|Nowadays, food has become easier to prepare. It save lots of valuable time
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jun 27, 2011 / linh202 - Jul 2, 2011
|"desire of good employment" - Why people attend college or university?
Writing Feedback123nnt - Jun 26, 2011 / 123nnt - Jun 30, 2011
|Money spent on the Arts by a government and number of participants in arts.
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 26, 2011 / Geenesh - Jun 29, 2011
|"parents should limit the hours of watching TV programs or movies" - Toefl
4 - This is a great thread! I'll give my ideas, too... Plural: programs Watching television programs and... Use...
Writing Feedbacklisette - Jun 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 27, 2011
|TOEFL_A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high
5 - Hi Bao, your writing is quite impressive. I would like to tell you something about your writing. I noticed...
Writing Feedbackbyxvera - Jun 25, 2011 / Becool - Jun 29, 2011
|TOEFL-Only movies that can teach us something about real life is worth watching agree
3 - Yes...that essay is really good. I'm quite nervous to take my exam.. I can't do like that. I have...
Writing Feedbackbyxvera - Jun 25, 2011 / winniesun - Jul 3, 2011
|To preach a Sermon
Writing Feedbackramonalford - Jun 24, 2011 / amrosca - Jun 27, 2011
|IELTS - Unlimited use of cars may cause many problems.
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 24, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jun 24, 2011
|Parents are the best teachers (they bring us up, teach us, love us)
3 - The first sentence of the essay is a statement-of-the-obvious. I think you should give an unexpected, interesting statement to...
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jun 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2011
|Toefl: grades based solely on exams or based more on class participartoin
5 - Hi cool, I noticed your writing is very good except for some minor mistakes. You are over emphasizing using...
Writing FeedbackCoolmam9x - Jun 24, 2011 / Becool - Jun 30, 2011
|essay on 'Instead of developing its identity, Singapore is ..." - feedback
3 - This seems to be your thesis statement: Nonetheless, I think that the Singaporean Identity can still be felt here....
Writing FeedbackJulgoh - Jun 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2011
|One paragraph only, about a live N.B.A. game.
2 - Stunning your senses... very good... you should buy that domain name! :-) StunningYourSenses.com very cool... I think you...
Writing Feedbackcarsonleeallen - Jun 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 25, 2011
|TOEFL - should boys and girls learn in separate classrooms?
8 - I think seperation of the two genders in the educational field will not help them learn of the real...
Writing Feedbackzailn - Jun 23, 2011 / yoyott - Jun 28, 2011
|I need help on an Essay for the Documentary SiCKO
Writing FeedbackTaleah84 - Jun 23, 2011 / Taleah84 - Jun 24, 2011
|Should the criminals in jail be educated?---IELTS
4 - yes according to me looking at the background of the criminals , dey shud be educated but only after...
Writing FeedbackBruce - Jun 23, 2011 / shikhasachdeva - Jun 25, 2011
|To be a responsible adult,children should manage their own money at the young age
2 - Great writing here, and thanks, Ana, for the work you are doing to help all these essayists. I'll...
Writing Feedbackapieceof - Jun 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 25, 2011
|Pets are deserved to be behaved like the true family members?
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jun 23, 2011 / linh202 - Jun 26, 2011
|Being happy with a job is more important than having a high salary?
Writing Feedback123nnt - Jun 23, 2011 / 123nnt - Jun 26, 2011
|Immediate problems and anticipated problems which is more important to solve?
Writing Feedbackliuys65 - Jun 22, 2011 / liuys65 - Jun 26, 2011
|People attend colleges and universities: education, new friendships and relationships
NEW - Hey guys, it is me again. I just have another paragraph written out, and am hoping if someone will...
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