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|'technology does not deteriorate the ability of humans to think' GRE essay
Writing Feedbackaleks - Sep 13, 2011 / aleks - Sep 14, 2011
|Is money the most important aspect of a job? I THINK SO!
Writing Feedbackkarremflores - Sep 12, 2011 / karremflores - Sep 14, 2011
|TOEFL - Universities should give money to sport activities or libraries
2 - Dear abc1400, I revised your introduction as follows: Libraries and sport activities both play important roles in...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 12, 2011 / basawang - Sep 13, 2011
|GRE essay-preserving the wilderness
3 - Hey, I found a grammar error: The consequences of this trend is heinous therefore appropriate steps must be taken...
Writing Feedbackrahulvasist - Sep 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Oct 4, 2011
|IELTS - Firm discipline is a necessary part of teaching children . agree or disagree
2 - For this case i agree in firm discipline,but it depends in how you handled it,and how the way you...
Writing Feedbacknotaoom - Sep 12, 2011 / karremflores - Sep 12, 2011
|Freedom of artists-ielts task 2
2 - Freedom, the wonderland for each artist's creativeness, can result in (the ) appearance of masterpieces in music, art...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 12, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Sep 13, 2011
|A profile article on an Idol's contestant who made it to the top 9
Writing Feedbackkhumalo - Sep 12, 2011 / khumalo - Sep 13, 2011
|"a nail technician is not an easy and pleasant job" - why I dislike my job
2 - People always says , "A nail technician is a healthy and beautiful professional, who works to improve and decorate...
Writing Feedbackvsam - Sep 11, 2011 / Belle15 - Sep 12, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY - GOVERNMENT SUPPORTING ARTISTS
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 11, 2011 / khumalo - Sep 12, 2011
|health risk assessment of fifty respondents [graph]
NEW - This graph illustrate about sample of health risk assessment of fifty respondent in age ranged between 20 years old...
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|TOEFL-Is Money the most important aspect of a job?
9 - People should consider an occupation that they are passionate ABOUT in order to avoid an insipid life. Assuming...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 11, 2011 / Geenesh - Sep 15, 2011
|IELTS: arranged marriage or not? Which system is better?
6 - However, the couple has not choice, leading to an imposed life which is un likely to not match personal...
Writing Feedbackmrscatoni - Sep 11, 2011 / marucat - Sep 13, 2011
|IELTS - QUALITIES A PERSON NEED TO BE SUCCESSFUL
2 - The qualities a person needs to become successful in today's world cannot be learned at a university or similar...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Sep 11, 2011 / mrscatoni - Sep 11, 2011
|Legal Studies Essay (Legalisation of Prostitution)
2 - Though it is generally tolerated, it is frowned upon in many societies for numerous reasons. it is sorta...
Writing Feedbackdancebaby279 - Sep 11, 2011 / ucfdream16 - Sep 11, 2011
|Toefl - Topic: Some young adults want independence from their parents quickly
NEW - Topic: Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live...
Writing Feedbackkrista - Sep 10, 2011 / — -
|Toefl-the best way to improve the education is to improve the salary of teachers
NEW - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best way to improve the quality of education in...
Writing Feedbackemma102 - Sep 10, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL-To eat at a restaurant or at home? What do you prefer?
5 - Dear isabellaclaudia, I can develop another paragraph about the advantage, but I am afraid that I will...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 10, 2011 / basawang - Sep 11, 2011
|TOEFL-Television is the culprit for destroying communication between friends& family.
2 - most of the people do not have a plan for make a limitation or schedule for watching television. I...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 9, 2011 / soshianet - Sep 9, 2011
|There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person. Do you agree
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Sep 9, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Sep 15, 2011
|Toefl essay: Playing computer games is a waste of time
NEW - it is no longer notorious as people think Because of the quick progress of computer science, subsequently coming...
Writing Feedbackyvonne2930 - Sep 9, 2011 / — -
|make comments or even criticism on teachers or not ----IELTS
Writing FeedbackIcecreamquest - Sep 9, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 12, 2011
|People work because they need money to live. What are some other reasons people work.
5 - yup u r right....i m not satisfied with my writhing skills,though i m going to write toefl on 18th...
Writing Feedbackwinchesters - Sep 9, 2011 / winchesters - Sep 9, 2011
|"majority of men would like to see additional sports programs on television" KICK GRE
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Sep 9, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Sep 9, 2011
|Children burden the hope of families and countries - be a good member of society
5 - don't give examples in brackets....write for instance in place of e.g and continue without brackets. >> From winchesters's...
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Sep 9, 2011 / BarbieTsu - Sep 9, 2011
|"gender equality should not be the concern" equal numbers of male and female students
2 - I have a few tips for you from reading your essay. In my experience, having a range of different...
Writing Feedbackmark83 - Sep 9, 2011 / CarrieC92 - Sep 14, 2011
|IELTS TOPIC:crime is a global problem .we can do nothing to prevent it .
3 - Nowadays, people wants the peaceful and safe lifelives .however,the fact always fail to satisified.even ,some people dsipoint about this...
Writing Feedbackzhangludan - Sep 9, 2011 / BarbieTsu - Sep 9, 2011
|Definition paper - we have to explain a party through denotation and connotation
NEW - Prompt - to define a party by playing between the denotative and connotative meanings without using the words beer,...
Writing Feedbackjleu - Sep 8, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL-Work with a group of people on a team or to work independently
6 - Dear Asmita, I appreciate your valuable comment. Your revision clearly illustrates why cooperation is inevitable. Also, your word...
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 8, 2011 / basawang - Sep 9, 2011
|Authority, professionalism, and preplanning -an important skill a person should learn
4 - Dear Winchesters, I look up in the dictionary and some Internet resources. I believe the correct spelling...
Writing Feedbackwinchesters - Sep 8, 2011 / basawang - Sep 9, 2011
|Statement of purpose for PHD in Mechanical eng - US
NEW - Hi guys, i have written a statement of purpose which needs grammatical and structure correction , can you...
Writing Feedbacksrd4ban - Sep 8, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL-Face-to-face communication is of great importance
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 8, 2011 / winchesters - Sep 9, 2011
|IELTS Topic: Impact of International Tourism
4 - The essay has gracefully presented the social impacts of International Tourism which is true in most cases of developing...
Writing Feedbackthread_a - Sep 8, 2011 / Asmita_ - Sep 9, 2011
|traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods(agree/disagree)
2 - if you are writing IELTS essay, i think in your introduction, u should state to what extent do you...
Writing FeedbackDaniel1991 - Sep 8, 2011 / Geenesh - Sep 11, 2011
|Happiness-is it difficult to define? ielts task2
5 - Thank you so much for your ideas. Maybe, we have different viewpoints of the topic. I get your points...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 8, 2011 / beepro21 - Sep 8, 2011
|Traditional skills and lifestyles-ielts test 2
NEW - Please check my writing and help me improve it! I highly appreciate your help! When a country develops its...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 8, 2011 / — -
|[IBT Toefl] Businesses should do anything they can make a profit. (Agree/Disagree)
NEW - PLZ Can anyone revise my essay?....:) ---------------------------------------------------------------------- ------------------------------------------------- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?...
Writing FeedbackBME Jung - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|My Puffin Rescue ( recent trip to Iceland)
3 - I agree with laurasanchez52. Although it has 'you' in it, the essay doesn't reveal a lot about YOU (character-wise)....
Writing Feedbacklynnesidell - Sep 7, 2011 / dreamingsnow - Sep 7, 2011
|Growing up just outside of Detroit with an unconventional upbringing.
NEW - To me its like a dream; growing up just outside of Detroit with an unconventional upbringing. Looking back now...
Writing FeedbackLDeSloovere - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|Urbanization provides good platform for business, but isn't free of negativities
2 - AsSome people believe that, ---No comma here.--- this leads to an infrastructural inequality among different regions of a country,...
Writing Feedbackzunayed1983 - Sep 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 7, 2011
|TOEFL- What subject is the most important for students?
3 - Dear abc1400, Thanks for your comment. I agree with you that the topic sentence is not clear enough....
Writing Feedbackbasawang - Sep 7, 2011 / basawang - Sep 7, 2011
|"my first flight lesson" - Writing a memoir for my composition class
5 - This is where I really struggle because I find it hard to have a true emotional attachment to things...
Writing FeedbackKaramKozim - Sep 7, 2011 / KaramKozim - Sep 8, 2011
|Public transportation system - hometown, what would you change?
NEW - TOEFL - If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|The demands of society spur the high sales of popular consumer goods.
2 - Yes, and the idea is expressed in the PARAGRAPH TOPIC SENTENCE. Great stuff here. Thanks, Turbina. :-) I...
Writing Feedbacksouthsealxb - Sep 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2011
|Essay about learning about past is valuable or not..
4 - However, in my view the past is ...----I added "the" ...valuable, and learning about it helps us in...
Writing Feedbackwinchesters - Sep 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 16, 2011
|IELTS Topic: Should Immigrants adapt to adopted country?
NEW - Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before. In order to become integrated into society in...
Writing Feedbackjuliet0611 - Sep 7, 2011 / — -
|"taking a break before starting higher education is a good idea" - IELTS
5 - Thanks Geenesh for your inputs/corrections. Thanks so much!! Thanks mrscatoni for pointing out the informality in my paragraph....
Writing Feedbackritu_168 - Sep 7, 2011 / ritu_168 - Sep 11, 2011
|Children should not be engaged in paid work till they finish their basic schooling
3 - Some people say that it adds a lifetimeof valuable experience to a child, which makes them more responsible, while...
Writing Feedbackritu_168 - Sep 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 15, 2011
|How I Learned My Strength-Personal Essay about something that impacted thinking
NEW - Topic: An incident or experience that impacted your thinking or development. Please let me know if I answered...
Writing Feedbackblynnleon - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|"create a positive movement in my city first" -A company to build a large factory
NEW - A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|"an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside" - Your last summer holiday.
NEW - It was an unforgettable 3-day trip to the countryside to visit my grandparents last summer holiday. My family decided...
Writing Feedbackviolonc_21 - Sep 6, 2011 / — -
|How important is sports in your country?
2 - I agree with what they said before me because they caught most of the errors and I also don't...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011 / blynnleon - Sep 6, 2011
|Family life these days has been affected by the hectic lives people lead.
2 - Your essay is excellent. There are only a few mistakes. From the time immemorial, parents hold the role...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011 / Scientiana - Sep 6, 2011
|The amount of leisure time of working men and women - IELTS graph
3 - The graph shows the leisure time in a typical week enjoyed by each sex, compared with employment status during...
Writing Feedbackmanman - Sep 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Sep 15, 2011
|"Money should be spend to resolve global issues first, not wasted on space" - ielts
NEW - Topic: Should governments spend money on space exploration, or should they spend the money on problems here first? ...
Writing Feedbackritu_168 - Sep 5, 2011 / — -
|Is the effort involving inpursuing nay goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached
2 - prompt: Is the effort involving inpursuing nay goal valuable, even if the goal is not reached? Life is...
Writing Feedbackanangelaa - Sep 5, 2011 / Dhillon - Sep 6, 2011
|children engagement in paid work-ielts task 2
2 - i like your essay,it was succinct throughout. the ideas are clearly elaborated with some examples but it would be...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Sep 5, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Sep 6, 2011
|Space travel in the moon is a big step for mankind, but didn't contribute to our life
3 - Thanks Isabella for you valuable advise.I also noticed that.I dont know why my brain always get frozen if I...
Writing FeedbackRini - Sep 5, 2011 / Rini - Sep 6, 2011
|Is television a dangerous influence on teenagers behavior? (Argumentative Essay)
2 - Television is one of the greatest inventions ever. Over the past few decades it has evolved a lot from...
Writing Feedbackpulkit9999 - Sep 5, 2011 / Bobur - Sep 5, 2011
|Improving the quality of education by not increasing teacher's salary.
2 - Higher salary does not necessarily mean teaching improvement. Whether a teacher is willing to or has the ability to...
Writing FeedbackHua0755 - Sep 4, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Sep 4, 2011
|Sports and social activities can offer the same significant things that classes and libraries offer
5 - Yes, I aware of that~~but could you please tell me how to write a good conclusion to this essay....
Writing Feedbackchxz1020 - Sep 4, 2011 / chxz1020 - Sep 6, 2011
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