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|whether to allocate a huge of money for defense is right policy
4 - Yes, but actually many teachers advise against using words like that in the essay. They say the conclusion...
Writing FeedbackChinh - Feb 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|the consumption of different product + people are born with certain talents
3 - Yep, this is very strong... only people with excellent command of English can write like this. task 1...
Writing FeedbackIsi Amat - Feb 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|Hiking safety - exam practice
3 - Thanks, Kelly! Hi Jack, welcome to EF. You have written a great essay. I am going to refer people...
Writing Feedbackjack88 - Feb 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|TOEFL: Why do you think people attend college or university? 'It opens the door'
5 - Hi Sabrina, I'm practicing with the CDs from the TOEFL-Textbooks. I am not sure if it is okay...
Writing FeedbackJonity - Feb 24, 2011 / Jonity - Feb 27, 2011
|GRE AW issue "Student should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study"
NEW - Thanks in advance about any suggestions! 153"Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should...
Writing Feedbacktonia - Feb 24, 2011 / — -
|Every generation of people is different in important ways. How about your generation?
7 - Thank you so much...just do not restrict your ideas...let them follow..Thats what i have learned.Keep reading and writing, that...
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 24, 2011 / dolly - Feb 24, 2011
|teacher should not talk about their own political view , agree or disagree.
3 - Hi Roxina, you have to type it again, and use the corrections dumi provided. They are very good! You...
Writing Feedbackroxina - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
|"A problem shared is a problem solved" (for TOEFL)
6 - Actually, I think I disagree. I have often been surprised at how much my writing improves when I...
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2011
|What are the causes and solutions of Anti-social actions?
8 - Thanks for your great comment, EF_Kevin! I'm always confused with social topics like this, I should read more and...
Writing Feedbackmegiacodon - Feb 23, 2011 / megiacodon - Mar 3, 2011
|The effectiveness of teachers and classrooms - Urban Prep Fellowship
2 - ...still have the zeal and enthusiasm to press forward and teach!---So far, this has a lot of energy and...
Writing FeedbackSatterfield2006 - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|Better documentary tool: Video camera vs written docs
3 - Hi, I will look into the corrections that you have suggested. Thank you so much for your suggestions. :)...
Writing FeedbackVVR - Feb 23, 2011 / VVR - Feb 25, 2011
|O level: Leadership. Necessiity of nurturing leadership in everyone
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|"Dominican Republic and grades" - descriptive essay about a personal experience
Writing Feedbackeve13 - Feb 23, 2011 / eve13 - Feb 27, 2011
|people with original ideas are of much greater respect than followers?
NEW - People who have original ideas are of much greater value to society than those who are simply able to...
Writing FeedbackChinh - Feb 23, 2011 / — -
|Which kind of roommate would you prefer? (American roommate)
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Feb 23, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|"death penalty is applied unfairly and randomly" pros and cons of the death penalty
3 - It deters murderers to do from committing more crimes in the future, because they would lose their lives and...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|Do you prefer learning by yourself to learning with a teacher?
Writing FeedbackBarrera09 - Feb 22, 2011 / Barrera09 - Mar 5, 2011
|Toefl : Teachers should not make their social or political view known to students..
6 - Hello Rich, what are you doing here? I thought I suspended your membership several months ago when you made...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2011
|Hero paper.. "Sometimes even our heroes get hurt"
Writing Feedbackashleynicole12 - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|SAT, example of a realistic person? - Optimism vs Realism
Writing Feedbackcathchen - Feb 22, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 3, 2011
|"Photography and Soccer as My Helpful Hobbies" Write about hobbies something you have
3 - ...aided me in my pursuit of photography and soccer. One of mine my hobbies assisted me in photography....
Writing Feedbackyasinb - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|Role of biomedical research play in your future.
2 - "Take an aspirin to alleviate your fever," said my worried mother after she felt my forehead with her palm....
Writing FeedbackKennyD - Feb 22, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2011
|How young people's behaviour is influenced by their peers
5 - I agree with Kevin.You have great idea there, but in my opinion, I find your essay having plenty of...
Writing FeedbackRoma - Feb 22, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 3, 2011
|SAT essay, can we fuse the ideas or just choose one side when offered the choice?
Writing Feedbackcathchen - Feb 22, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 3, 2011
|Women Should not Choose Abortion Persuasive Paragraph
3 - Wow did not know about that last statement pretty harsh. Thanks for the feedback it's appreciated....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 21, 2011 / ironhawk893 - Feb 24, 2011
|Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study.
4 - Use "parallel structure" Is it better for students to question what they are taught than accepting to accept...
Writing FeedbackSDtoto - Feb 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 28, 2011
|'Important from medical point of view' - Pets should be treated like family members
3 - Notice the two sentences you put together as one run-on sentence: They have their own way to express their...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 21, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|large amount of money or earn comfortable living
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 21, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2011
|The mass media: TV, radio and newspapers, have great influence on people's ideas
5 - Thanks Susan...
Writing FeedbackChinh - Feb 21, 2011 / Chinh - Feb 28, 2011
|Follow the customs of the new country you are in, or keep your own customs?
4 - niesaysi I think transitional devices is a good point. I will take it into consideration nook Your...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 20, 2011 / s033591 - Feb 22, 2011
|The Effect of Global Warming, is it changing our life?
Writing Feedbackarashvet - Feb 20, 2011 / arashvet - Feb 28, 2011
|IELTS-should teenagers learn all school subjects/focus on one subject
4 - Yep, Dumi is great. Hey, do you have questions about the corrections? Are you able to type the essay...
Writing Feedbackkikotan - Feb 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|Tuition's hike shouldn't be implemented in some state universities.
3 - I'm not sure what the beginning of this is supposed to say... Low of tuition! Should it say ......
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Feb 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|To better the society off, people need to watch over the decisions that their leaders are making.
3 - However, it is always important for people to point out the misleading because sometimes society progresses when things are...
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Feb 20, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|Students usually love a teacher with humor - he is closer to his students and teaches better
4 - Great suggestions here. You should challenge yourself! Try to type the essay and use Kathy's corrections. If you make...
Writing Feedbackeating105 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|'young have longer lifetime left' - young people or old people enjoy life better
3 - Yes, put a space after periods, commas, and all other punctuation. Good question! Here is a quick lesson...
Writing Feedbackdodoboy0324 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|"Information described as 'factual' - skepticism" - GRE Analytical Writing
Writing Feedbacksilentwf - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|GRE AW issue 131 The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society
3 - thx very much for your suggestions, and I feel flattered about it, still, there is so much for me...
Writing Feedbacktonia - Feb 19, 2011 / tonia - Feb 22, 2011
|"Be Weary of their Expectations" - a draft, persuasive essay about expectations
4 - This seems like a terrible thing to say after Kathy probably spent 20 minutes helping you. And your comment...
Writing FeedbackSunRa93 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|TOEFL - owing to the development of technology we live in a better life than out ancestors
5 - Do you know about 'active voice' in writing? Look at the difference: People's lives have been changed in many...
Writing Feedbackaqz951 - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 2, 2011
|Undergraduates should have part-time jobs
3 - ...students surveyed working part-time jobs. Some people oppose to letting undergraduates' have part-time jobs, since they... ...
Writing Feedbackanhducht_o0o - Feb 19, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Many students educate themselves abroad - it's parents' decision or enthusiasm over living overseas
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 19, 2011 / joseph240 - Mar 2, 2011
|We have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
4 - Education from family also promote the balance of socialization of children. Parents tell bedtime stories to their children, which...
Writing FeedbackSDtoto - Feb 18, 2011 / pistachiolios - Feb 20, 2011
|Universities are centers of growing scientists and produce the science
5 - thank you:)...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 18, 2011 / mahrou - Feb 26, 2011
|Different choices - Working in group or Working independently ?
Writing Feedbackanhducht_o0o - Feb 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|SPECIALISTIC SUBJECTS v A RANGE OF SUBJECTS IN UNIVERSITY
Writing Feedbackswallow512 - Feb 18, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|task 2 ESSAY ABOUT TRADITIONAL FOOD AND FAST FOOD-(IELTS)
NEW - Topic six: In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food. This is having a negative...
Writing Feedbackswallow512 - Feb 18, 2011 / — -
|Important skill a person should learn in order to successful in the world today?
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Seek the Truth; do not believe in something simply because an authority says so
3 - Comma: Hitler believed his people were the superior race, that the Aryans were the best, and told his countrymen...
Writing Feedbackishigaki - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 26, 2011
|Daydreaming Experience Paper
4 - Rottencandy, what a great username! Well, I think you should change all the "you" to "I" It's manipulating things...
Writing Feedbackrottencandy - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Essay about the E-learning according to teachers - feedback
Writing Feedbackmani_ok7 - Feb 17, 2011 / mani_ok7 - Mar 1, 2011
|Whom in your country would you choose to build a statue for?
3 - Use rightly to modify a verb, not a noun. ...as a righteous candidate, because she is good-hearted, modest, and...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 17, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Essay about independency and a choice between living with family or moving out
6 - hello, i saw your essay, here is some ideas: - you have less evidences to support your essay, and...
Writing Feedbackdodoboy0324 - Feb 17, 2011 / taylor kong - Mar 21, 2011
|Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all
2 - I like the "first, second, third" structure you used for the essay. That keeps the reader focused on the...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|corporal punishments to students
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 1, 2011
|"School Bells " - kindergarten essay
7 - hahahah, you are great. Well, students can do those things, I suppose. However, lately I feel very...
Writing Feedbacktonybtony - Feb 16, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|Essay IELTS: How can the use of private motor vehicles be reduced?
4 - Thank you so much Jennifer. The corrections you have made are genuine. I am going to type it again...
Writing FeedbackVidyadhar - Feb 16, 2011 / Vidyadhar - Feb 18, 2011
|TOEFL-Internet, good or bad?Each coin has both sides
2 - Internet is one of the most significant achievements of mankind. This facility has transformed the life style in a...
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / dolly - Feb 15, 2011
|IELTS-following host country's culture or not?
3 - really? I checked somewhere that there are more than 20 issues with my essay:( but tnx anyway....
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 15, 2011 / s_maryam - Feb 16, 2011
|equal importance; Better to have broad knowledge or specialize in one subject?
Writing Feedbacklatechoco - Feb 15, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 23, 2011
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