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|People with talents: BORN OR MADE?
3 - Thank you very much, perhaps i can use Albert Einstein as my example? What do you think? I really...
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|Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence
2 - Today , some researchers according their researches believe that the genetic factors are much more influences influential on...
Writing Feedbackhrbagheri - Jan 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 8, 2011
|Leadership and ethics.Situation you have dealt with these issues and influenced you
5 - EF_Susan Thanks susan you have been generous in giving 6 out of 10.But can u help me in making...
Writing Feedbackyasirshah - Jan 11, 2011 / yasirshah - Jan 28, 2011
|"I'm from Kuala Lumpur" - Essay about my self
4 - There are eight members in my family which is my father, my mother, two older brothers, one older sister,...
Writing Feedbackthenadi - Jan 11, 2011 / atham64 - Jan 11, 2011
|"Ehhlo dis is five Sta Pandah callin" - essay about self
4 - I think I would just rewrite your line where you pretend you're a waitress with correct spelling/ grammar, and...
Writing Feedbackashleymc16 - Jan 10, 2011 / mwgstan - Jan 11, 2011
|Smoking should not be permitted in restaurants
3 - Thanks Maria for useful suggestion. I need help in both grammar check and ideas I expressed. I...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jan 10, 2011 / vaishali1980 - Jan 12, 2011
|TOEFL: Smoking in restaurants should not be permitted, agree or disagree?
4 - need to give opposite opinions' views about how it is their freedom to smoke where they want but then...
Writing Feedbackjunerosie - Jan 10, 2011 / atham64 - Jan 11, 2011
|Eating at food stands or restaurants OR Prepare food at home?
NEW - Nowadays, eating becomes very important for each people.Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants because it's...
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|Don't Judge---Story from my life that teaches a moral (for english class)
Writing Feedbackem2always - Jan 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2011
|Center Stage; The music has begun
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2011
|Everyone should have a person who you interested (my nephew)
Writing Feedbacklwshing - Jan 9, 2011 / peevzeeweez - Jan 15, 2011
|"Liber's company mission and financial problems" GRE argument analysis.
4 - Well, ordinarily in academic writing you would be responding to an actual person, and you would know whether it...
Writing Feedbacksaloca7 - Jan 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2011
|"When someone's dancing over a clover, don't slow their step"
Writing Feedbackem2always - Jan 7, 2011 / canes4life - Jan 12, 2011
|Describe a diagram that shows the enviromentl issues raised by a product
2 - Hi Ilaria! I'll try to improve this... you should put all these sentences into one paragraph. The...
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2011
|IELTS: Should the government choose university subject for students?
3 - What do you mean by these people? If you mean sociologists I would prefer "These sociologists" or "They"....
Writing Feedbackriny - Jan 7, 2011 / saloca7 - Jan 8, 2011
|Describe a music video or a concert has made an impression on you.
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 7, 2011 / sweetheart87 - Jan 10, 2011
|Overwork and Stress - Cause and solution
4 - That's great. I am also impressive your nickname "Shark on diet". Thank you very much for your help. (Lý...
Writing FeedbackNapoleon - Jan 6, 2011 / Napoleon - Jan 21, 2011
|"to fund the building of affordable housing for students" - GRE Arguments
Writing Feedbacksaloca7 - Jan 5, 2011 / saloca7 - Jan 8, 2011
|Essay about exercise which is element of healthy lifestyle
2 - F itness is how much ability or work that body can do. Also, it depend on endurance, flexibility, strength...
Writing FeedbackMahrooo - Jan 5, 2011 / leia624 - Jan 5, 2011
|ielts: cultural heritage used to attract tourists and promote tourism
Writing Feedbacksakura0v0 - Jan 5, 2011 / waqar - Jan 9, 2011
|"disadvantages than advantages of using a computer" - my summary - computer
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|Conscience upholds a string of moral values in life; SAT practice essay
5 - How is this? 1st paragraph Conscience is a precursor that determines one's acts. The question if conscience is...
Writing Feedbackjtpl - Jan 4, 2011 / jtpl - Jan 7, 2011
|Ethan Frome Analytical Essay - Sledding Passage
2 - Please do not paste content that appears on other websites! :-) Does this sentence accurately express the...
Writing Feedbackkisskill16 - Jan 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2011
|I need a good headline for my newspaper article based upon Jim Carrey
6 - embarrassed others but in Carrey's case ...need a comma after others it doesnt seem like a full article...its...
Writing Feedbackallstarz000 - Jan 4, 2011 / em2always - Jan 6, 2011
|Self-Portrait-- SMU RA Position Essay
Writing Feedbackericao2010 - Jan 4, 2011 / ericao2010 - Jan 4, 2011
|TOEFL: small town has some advantages such as healthy life and better facilities
4 - ... according to some factors, Some people prefer to live in tall ... One of the conditions that...
Writing Feedbackazar1921 - Jan 4, 2011 / linying - Jan 14, 2011
|University is the place where people seek to further develop their expertise
4 - their expertise and knowledge support their causes (?) to take a degree that's more widely accepted, to...
Writing Feedbacksweetgoofy - Jan 2, 2011 / riny - Jan 7, 2011
|IELTS essay-unhealthy diet and do not enough exercise
3 - Humans health has become ...when you talk about the time (present) you have to use the parfect tense. ...
Writing Feedbackmelodybai - Jan 2, 2011 / riny - Jan 7, 2011
|what is your horoscope predictions and do you believe in it??... i want to improve it
NEW - Although I do not believe in horoscope predictions. But, according to horoscope predictions, it seems that I would experience...
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|Sex Slavery--Intro to the prompt "problem in america right now"
Writing Feedbackem2always - Jan 2, 2011 / canes4life - Jan 2, 2011
|'paying for communal expenses is quick' - internet has given people access to information on a level
3 - People who live in countryside the countryside The Internet gives good opportunity to people to have connections...
Writing Feedbacklilly1234 - Jan 2, 2011 / Nanoluvv8D - Jan 4, 2011
|causes and solutions for problems with student behavior
Writing Feedbacktrang_12934 - Jan 2, 2011 / LUDACRISS007 - Jan 2, 2011
|"Parents must stimulate their children to study" - essay help revision
2 - Although a comfortable life became the main reason to have an education , most students wish everyday would be...
Writing Feedbackhasgc - Jan 1, 2011 / bluedog2004 - Jan 1, 2011
|Violence against women - essay suggestions
NEW - Violence against women Since thousands of years human beings' lives have been affected by violence. Year after year...
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|How to phrase or start an essay to highlight network license?
Writing Feedbackyanglee248 - Dec 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2010
|Jobs that you enjoy or jobs that you can earn a lot of money
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Dec 30, 2010 / pashnetala - Jan 25, 2011
|Perceptions of Muslims/Arabs
8 - Any Muslims or Arabs who would like to clarify the substance and misconceptions of your culture and/or religion in...
Writing Feedbackwriterblock - Dec 30, 2010 / writerblock - Dec 31, 2010
|"Place for growth both as a visionary and a human being." - Why Northwestern?
2 - 1) "give a man a fish... capitalize a direct quote 2) without a hesitation,...without any hesitation? 3)...
Writing Feedbackddkk - Dec 29, 2010 / writerblock - Dec 29, 2010
|BLACK OUT IN YOUR AREA; me and my family essay
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|Student, not teachers or administrators, should be in control of their own education
4 - Great job here... I'll identify some erors: Who is better at the decision for education? Is it the student,...
Writing FeedbackBNMS - Dec 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 12, 2011
|Sporting Events: Outlet for a patriotic feeling or the way to reduce the tension?
5 - Suggestions are helpful, thank you. I don't know whether u can see or not, i rewrote the essay. I...
Writing FeedbackBobur - Dec 28, 2010 / Bobur - Jan 12, 2011
|Factory farming food. Your opinion about what it's better to eat.
Writing FeedbackBobur - Dec 28, 2010 / Bobur - Jan 12, 2011
|ielts essay: zoos should be built to protect rural animals, do you agree?
3 - This is so excellent. The grammar is great, and the style of writing is rhythmic and clear... I think...
Writing Feedbackstarwish - Dec 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 10, 2011
|Freedom for creative artists to express their ideas in whichever way they wish
Writing Feedbacktrang_12934 - Dec 28, 2010 / trang_12934 - Dec 29, 2010
|Education will be truly effective only when it is individually designed - GRE
2 - An educational system can be effective only if the students' needs and interests are taken into account. It ...
Writing Feedbackyiye_lily - Dec 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Dec 29, 2010
|"We should teach these personal fiancé skills" -An issue that is very important to me
3 - i change it....
Writing Feedbackkekeibra - Dec 27, 2010 / kekeibra - Jan 2, 2011
|Astrology satisfying human needs that are not addressed by mainstream science?
2 - "Although they believe it is the rotations of the planets that cause influenza, in deed, medicines, aspirin, for example,...
Writing FeedbackRosespeng - Dec 27, 2010 / Codric - Dec 28, 2010
|On effectiveness of satire to personal hygiene
2 - Unless you have the miraculous one wiper, the skid may soon be present. Skid marks, contrary to popular...
Writing Feedbackwriterblock - Dec 27, 2010 / EmoPopsicle - Dec 28, 2010
|An essay on world peace and international understanding
Writing Feedbackzailn - Dec 27, 2010 / writerblock - Dec 27, 2010
|Whether there are times when lying is acceptable.
3 - Oops, forgot a mistake in the second paragraph, second sentence. It has to be "pretended" because it is in...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Dec 27, 2010 / mikeehnow - Dec 29, 2010
|May 11, 1996, a DC-9 aircraft operated by ValuJet Airlines, carrying 105 Passengers
Writing Feedbackcowahbella - Dec 26, 2010 / cowahbella - Dec 28, 2010
|Competition and cooperation is both important as children are growing up - my IELTS writing
3 - The issue of children's education has been constantly debated in our society. ...and less time consuming in cooperation...
Writing Feedbackxiaofeixia2013 - Dec 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 5, 2011
|AN ACCIDENTAL, OCCIDENTAL PLAN: (Political leadership) Writing an exploratory essay
Writing Feedbackwriterblock - Dec 24, 2010 / writerblock - Dec 31, 2010
|Improvised essay. "Fiddler on the Roof"
2 - i think its a good essay and most importantly it ends with a positive note. Besides that, I think...
Writing Feedbackshu - Dec 24, 2010 / pagall - Dec 24, 2010
|A narrative of process of finding a house to rent (unforgetable experiences)
Writing FeedbackRedboat - Dec 24, 2010 / Redboat - Dec 25, 2010
|"I am a Proud African" VCU write about you and why you choose VCU.
3 - I think you don't really need your second paragraph since your first paragraph already strong about your identity. In...
Writing Feedbackrisingfame - Dec 23, 2010 / basketball - Dec 24, 2010
|The effects of using computer everyday on children
Writing FeedbackShrek - Dec 23, 2010 / Benn_Myers - Dec 27, 2010
|Mass media have been influencing our daily lives from various aspects
Writing FeedbackShrek - Dec 22, 2010 / Shrek - Jan 3, 2011
|ielts essay: distance-learning vs. attending school in person
2 - Dear Ruan, I think you can try to restructure your sentence like this because the second idea flows...
Writing Feedbackstarwish - Dec 22, 2010 / rajeshaaidu - Dec 22, 2010
|Describing Bordeaux - France; especially known for its wine
Writing Feedbackbanhbichqui_nt - Dec 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 1, 2011
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