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|'Thinking and competency' - Work in a team or independently, which more effective?
2 - In which circumstance you can act in a efficient way, team-work or individual work? This is the most frequently...
Writing Feedbackextrafresh - Oct 16, 2011 / Bobur - Oct 16, 2011
|Do violence and immorality in the media make our society more dangerous and immoral?
3 - Violence and immortality have raised many questions recently.(too plain sentence, add something catchy to begin your speech) The tough...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 16, 2011 / mvlauria94 - Oct 21, 2011
|Distance-learning program is better than traditional education?
2 - 1. ...one of the dominating choices --> dominant / crucial / vital / decisive choices 2. Equally importantly -->...
Writing FeedbackBingbing - Oct 15, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 15, 2011
|Cinemas and the silver screen
2 - Cinemashashave been more popular for people recently. hundreds of films have been made that to attract people. and famous...
Writing Feedbacknamlun191 - Oct 15, 2011 / Bobur - Oct 15, 2011
|Basketball is my tool to alleviate pressure; My hobby (to play basketbal)
Writing FeedbackLawrence - Oct 15, 2011 / shanne84 - Oct 15, 2011
|'bear the burden / push to learn / think' - important qualities of a leader?
NEW - The best leaders are not those who seek power or have great political skill. Great leaders-and these are exceptionally...
Writing Feedbackhugh_ng - Oct 15, 2011 / — -
|IELTS essay, what benefits do skyscrapers bring?
Writing Feedbackdna - Oct 15, 2011 / dna - Oct 19, 2011
|Ielts task 1, two graphs about reasons for study and the amount of support
2 - 1. The percentage of 80% of students --> Eighty percent of students 2. On the contrary , the first...
Writing Feedbackneedurhelp - Oct 15, 2011 / hugh_ng - Oct 16, 2011
|If children want to do well in school, parents should limit time of watching tv.
NEW - this is my essay, pls check>< Since students' performances not only decides their future prospects, but also affects...
Writing Feedbackrichard35568 - Oct 15, 2011 / — -
|Toefl IBT Writing, Topic: In order to be well-informed, ..
4 - Nowadays, people get more and more information from the media. Some people believe and feel enough about the sources,...
Writing Feedbackrita66q - Oct 14, 2011 / engstu - Oct 19, 2011
|You are planing to study abroad. what do you think you will like or dislike about it?
3 - Hi lolo12; thankyou for your advise, and I thought that I wrote my essay in the way like other...
Writing Feedbackbahareh - Oct 13, 2011 / bahareh - Oct 15, 2011
|What human trait would you most want to understand? (Jealousy)
Writing FeedbackKrennis93 - Oct 13, 2011 / diegorivero412 - Oct 13, 2011
|'someone you know that act with courage' - a journal topic about courage
2 - To be honest, this is a not good writing. however , practice makes perfect so you should rewrite this...
Writing FeedbackBrianna_winter - Oct 13, 2011 / beepro21 - Oct 14, 2011
|Write about an occasion when a furious argument took place
3 - The end of year examinations were now finally over. I first went towards the department store, as I...
Writing Feedbackwraithseeker - Oct 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 13, 2011
|TOEFL;In 20 yrs, fewer cars in use ? only when the substitutions are available
Writing FeedbackAuguste - Oct 13, 2011 / Auguste - Oct 23, 2011
|life in the city is becoming increasingly unappealing
2 - Kind of boring. The intro is especially boring, you need to hook your reader! get a quote from an...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Oct 13, 2011 / r0400293 - Oct 13, 2011
|About Nelson Mandela - One material of SAT I prepared
2 - Nelson Mandela, the first black people president of Africa, had struggled for black people since 1944 and was ...
Writing Feedbacklittleblue - Oct 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 13, 2011
|Toefl IBT Writing, Topic: Grades based on exams or on class participation.
Writing Feedbackkhouryjok - Oct 13, 2011 / khouryjok - Oct 14, 2011
|'respectation should be part of our life' - Ielts: Cultural Differences
NEW - HI, can someone help me to check my writing. Thanks a lot. My topic is "Some people believe that...
Writing Feedbackdianalpy - Oct 13, 2011 / — -
|IELTS> effects from using computers everyday; 'overuse and misuse computers'
3 - Thank you everyone. @De Silva: I know what you mean, perhaps children don't have money to go shopping...
Writing Feedbacksupernoob101 - Oct 13, 2011 / supernoob101 - Oct 13, 2011
|'My sister is my teacher' - a descriptive paragraph about a person
3 - Thank you so much! This is definitely the best editing I've seen! Thank you thank you thank you!!!...
Writing Feedbackhyemskim - Oct 12, 2011 / hyemskim - Oct 13, 2011
|Work/Money impact of Jobs on life
5 - I didn't mean to offend you, it's just that in my writing my thoughts are pretty good, except I...
Writing FeedbackEditor1010 - Oct 12, 2011 / Editor1010 - Oct 13, 2011
|TOEFL-Technology deteriorates humans thinking.
2 - Actually you dont have to state "first, second or third".. just bring out your ideas. The information or details...
Writing Feedbackmonamona - Oct 12, 2011 / yungtszwing - Oct 12, 2011
|IELTS: How to Allocate Government Expenditure
4 - yes, "on the weekend" is correct then again, you could take part of the sentence out too, and that...
Writing Feedbackwangshushu21 - Oct 12, 2011 / beccalevesque - Oct 12, 2011
|TOEFL - I believe that every businessman should do anything to make a profit
3 - Thank you for your comment. I agree with you about the word "populated", but I think the sentence...
Writing Feedbackargentum - Oct 12, 2011 / argentum - Oct 12, 2011
|essay about women opportunities
4 - First, in the past women used to only be the house maker. Women nurture their house and children in...
Writing FeedbackNMS - Oct 12, 2011 / Editor1010 - Oct 12, 2011
|'Stress is a serious problem' - Ielts task
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|Having good co-workers - TOEFL Exam
5 - Merely google, searching by using the topic (question) of TOEFL or IELST you will find many sample essays. ...
Writing Feedbackshinju - Oct 11, 2011 / engstu - Oct 20, 2011
|computer have negative effects on children. agree or disagree??
Writing Feedbackdheyce08 - Oct 11, 2011 / wraithseeker - Oct 18, 2011
|IELTS: How should the visitors and the host country deal with cultural differences?
4 - letho7990 Thank you for your suggestions. How should write the introduction? should i state each of the...
Writing Feedbacksmilectt - Oct 11, 2011 / smilectt - Oct 12, 2011
|Informal learning and childrean teaching
2 - Hell there, what is this all about? The first two sentences are good, and in this one I would...
Writing Feedbackdapatel - Oct 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2011
|'a teacher should not only focuss on teaching' - IELTS
3 - Thank you very much for the information. I do really get the input especially the usage of 'should'. Thanks....
Writing Feedbackdianalpy - Oct 11, 2011 / dianalpy - Oct 11, 2011
|Causes and solutions to problems with student bad behaviour-ielts task2
NEW - Please help me improve this writing. Give me some comments and a score if possible. Thank you very much!...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Oct 11, 2011 / — -
|Ietls7 - positive environment for children grow up (people with talents)
2 - This , however, has blinded people to the factthink that othersanybody can make quicker progress towardin ...
Writing Feedbackletho7990 - Oct 10, 2011 / dumi - Oct 11, 2011
|'Juliet states that Romeo invited her to dinner' - essay of the "to be" verb
NEW - Juliet states that Romeo invited her to dinner on a particular day though she does not keep a journal...
Writing Feedbackladyphoenix1990 - Oct 10, 2011 / — -
|Get the most important characteristics of a society by studying its cities?
NEW - GRE - To understand the most important characteristics of a society, one must study its major cities. Is it...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Oct 10, 2011 / — -
|When I grow up, I realize that the importance of politeness should be emphasized to a extent
Writing Feedbackrichard35568 - Oct 10, 2011 / richard35568 - Oct 11, 2011
|Pros and cons of raising fees in universities
3 - You should write about how it affects you as your own thoughts and not talk about how it will...
Writing Feedbackbeepro21 - Oct 10, 2011 / sally9216 - Oct 10, 2011
|'Who is Martin Luther King?' my research essay for Eng Comp.
2 - This is a really good start. Try using some more active verbs rather than "to be" verbs. "Before taking...
Writing FeedbackMayDo - Oct 10, 2011 / alexxlen - Oct 11, 2011
|TOEFL - Watching television broadcast - 'fertile land of numerous shows'
Writing FeedbackDande - Oct 10, 2011 / dumi - Oct 11, 2011
|More and more people are spending money on their pets, despite other expenses
NEW - Really appreciate that if you have time to correct my essay! Thx! /More and more people are spending...
Writing Feedbackrichard35568 - Oct 10, 2011 / — -
|'She cares about our feelings' -the best teacher i ever had
5 - When some of my classmates cannot pay their school's fees on timebecause of some money's problemdue to financial constraints...
Writing Feedbackagirl need help - Oct 9, 2011 / dumi - Oct 13, 2011
|TOEFL essay - Cars enslave us rather than liberate us?
4 - Cars now seem to have made our livelife easier and more convenient. Nevertheless, in my opinion, more cars...
Writing Feedbacknguyendinhtuong - Oct 9, 2011 / dumi - Oct 10, 2011
|o levels: narrative a story in which an interview is important
2 - I think this is definitely a strong narrative and will fulfill the prompt of a narrative essay. I think...
Writing Feedbackmrfrank - Oct 9, 2011 / Leah_Writer - Oct 12, 2011
|IELTS: Discussion on whether the huge salary of the sports professionals is fair
Writing Feedbacksmilectt - Oct 9, 2011 / smilectt - Oct 11, 2011
|First essay for TOEFL - What recent news story has affected you the most?
6 - a normal person ---> an ordinary person all important persons ---> all important people said beautiful words about Jobs...
Writing Feedbackpeterwhite - Oct 9, 2011 / argentum - Oct 9, 2011
|Some people want to eat at home, some not. 'in the restaurant is too expensive'
Writing Feedbackholyboy46 - Oct 9, 2011 / mouna456 - Oct 10, 2011
|TOEFL-Whether or not borrowing money from friends is good.
2 - a couple of reasons Not only does borrowing money from friends test the true friendship, it also offers...
Writing FeedbackDande - Oct 9, 2011 / CarmenCM - Oct 9, 2011
|My memory of my room-Second Home, Here
Writing Feedbacklively - Oct 9, 2011 / deathgoest - Oct 9, 2011
|'In Hong-Kong diversity is nothing more than a mixture of identities' Rutgers
Writing FeedbackCarmenCM - Oct 8, 2011 / yungtszwing - Oct 13, 2011
|The best way to learn about a foreign country is to read its newspapers and magazines
Writing Feedbackargentum - Oct 8, 2011 / — -
|Make a point about a special keepsake you have reminding you of a significant person
2 - The necklace my grandmother gave me is important because she gave to me before she died. When I...
Writing Feedbackhellokittyque - Oct 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 10, 2011
|'The perceived greatness of any political leader' - GRE Essay
3 - While I agree with what Leah West has said about your writing, I think the focus of your essay...
Writing Feedbacksonutulsiani - Oct 8, 2011 / dumi - Oct 12, 2011
|'Heer - Ranja' - immortal love story
5 - a very fine introspection into love, indeed thought provoking. the way u expressed it was very nice btw...:)....
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Oct 8, 2011 / abhikuravi - Nov 6, 2011
|(Nodame Cantabile) - My movie presentation exercise
Writing Feedbackdoris lee - Oct 8, 2011 / doris lee - Nov 16, 2011
|'a time when a friend defended you in difficult circumstances' - narrative essay
Writing Feedbackmrfrank - Oct 8, 2011 / mrfrank - Oct 9, 2011
|An argumentative essay on technology world.
2 - "I it is also easy for teachers to average grades and keeps track of them" "Facebook and its advantaged"...
Writing Feedbackotiliagmercado - Oct 8, 2011 / mrfrank - Oct 9, 2011
|Intensive Agriculture Impact on Earth - destructive agriculture
Writing Feedbacklowryder49 - Oct 7, 2011 / lowryder49 - Oct 17, 2011
|IELTS: Museums VS Computers
4 - thank you...
Writing FeedbackRachellsea - Oct 7, 2011 / Rachellsea - Oct 9, 2011
|working experience;Every student should travel or work being going to university
3 - they haven't received it before ---> they have not received it before (never abbreviate in formal writings, except it...
Writing FeedbackVa_lencia - Oct 7, 2011 / argentum - Oct 9, 2011
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