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|IELTS task 2: Noise levels have impact the quality of our life?
Writing Feedbackdevil - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|TOEFL: MORE VOCATION TIME Vs HIGHER SALARY
3 - Awesome, Kathy... Ellen, can you easily understand the corrections made here? Some people think money is everything,...
Writing Feedbackeating105 - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|Cambridge IELFTS - Prevention is better than cure. Health education.
Writing FeedbackPony - Mar 9, 2011 / Pony - Mar 16, 2011
|Toefl - It would be tragic if we put the wrong metric on judging people (external appearance)
4 - However, other people regard outer appearances as something very important indicators.-----I changed it so that it would make sense...
Writing Feedbackosooo - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|[TOEFL] The real source of success (courageous and bold people)
6 - Ha ha, okay, I'll check it out. I don't think you used the word resentful correctly here. You...
Writing FeedbackBorislav - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|TOEFL - Parents are the best teachers? No, it does not hold for every case!
5 - Impressive! You are ready for the toefl. Just forget about it and move on to other challenges. When you...
Writing Feedbackg8231226702 - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 13, 2011
|TOEFL: Does Television destroy our bonds with friends and family?
6 - That's always great advice. When you argue, show the opponent and audience that you do understand their reasoning and...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Mar 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 22, 2011
|School board to increase the physical education requirement to three years - CBEST
Writing FeedbackKarla - Mar 8, 2011 / adam20 - Mar 29, 2011
|New generation no more read books. Is this complaint true?
4 - Let's say "the modern generation" The modern generation does not... have time to visit a public library to...
Writing Feedbackjomse - Mar 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|"War Is Hell" - English Descriptive Essay
Writing FeedbackAthanatos - Mar 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2011
|IELTS - museums and art galleries will disappear soon?
2 - I don't think Chinglish is something to avoid. People from different parts of America and Europe speak very...
Writing FeedbackShrek Fiona - Mar 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|More and more people claim that modern work patterns are a source of stress.
3 - ...results of temporary work patterns which have formed stressful lifestyles for people of the modern generation. Resolutions can be...
Writing Feedbackmegiacodon - Mar 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|Some people spend the entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times.
3 - believes Keep it plural: ...new people, new cultures, and new beliefs that are all so amazing to me; I...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Mar 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|Young people have no influence on the decisions about the society
Writing Feedbacksunnycoastwang - Mar 6, 2011 / sunnycoastwang - Mar 13, 2011
|Describe the "TRAITS OF A LEADER" . Which of those fits you best ?
4 - In academic writing, professors often expect you to use at least 3 or 4 sentences in a paragraph....
Writing Feedbackstooks - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|GRE Sample: "Scientific Fact Invariably Proves to be Inaccurate"
3 - Impressive writing! Let me make some suggestions. Almost anything is as much something as it is nothing.---no commas....
Writing Feedbackkgw - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|Improving your knowledge and dealing with other people - reasons to attend school
Writing Feedbackg8231226702 - Mar 6, 2011 / g8231226702 - Mar 13, 2011
|Narrative Essay: Fun with Elders
4 - => all I could see were the smiling faces (your sentences in past tense, so use "could" instead of...
Writing Feedbackbbish520 - Mar 6, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 7, 2011
|"early childhood teachers and classrooms" - article reflection
5 - Okay Sylvia Brown, let's simplify this intro: To begin with, m My two little critiques are about the vagueness...
Writing Feedbackmintchoco - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|Do you agree or disagree that people benefit more traveling in their own country ...?
3 - Recently, people have more chances to travel around the world, and it has become more affordable. They travel...
Writing FeedbackPeifen - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|Is it better to live for the moment or plan for the future?
Writing Feedbackkrauser - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 12, 2011
|'Equalitarianism manifest' - the same number of male and female students.
Writing FeedbackBarbieTsu - Mar 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 11, 2011
|Admired characteristic to understand ourselves
6 - Thanks for your help Kevin! @Jhonies Saysi! I have been trying very hard for my writing. I switched my...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Mar 5, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 11, 2011
|Understanding, responsible - important qualities of a good supervisor /boss/?
2 - => When a supervisor hires employees, he or she expects from them to do their best at working places....
Writing FeedbackVarbanov - Mar 5, 2011 / KathyLala - Mar 7, 2011
|SAT - Failure is the beginning of education
Writing Feedbackcathchen - Mar 5, 2011 / cathchen - Mar 13, 2011
|IELTS; Children need to recieve the proper education before engaging in paid work
Writing Feedbackglars908 - Mar 4, 2011 / glars908 - Mar 6, 2011
|Old aged people go to live in homes, who should bear the fee - government or family
2 - You should write small sentences instead of many commas. You should mention clearly introduction and conclusion paragraph about your...
Writing Feedbackmohang - Mar 4, 2011 / vaishali1980 - Mar 6, 2011
|"Listening to music and reading" - Things That Inspire Me
2 - Hey, Delilah, this is a very thoughtful critique! Rebenrio, I think you did very well with this! It has...
Writing Feedbackbutterbescotch - Mar 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2011
|Traveling to get job . . Environment is the Victim
5 - This part needs a little change: Firstly, government can provide or increase public transportation and make workers about...
Writing FeedbackMahrooo - Mar 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 10, 2011
|Internet is valuable information for everyone, if we know how to use it properly
3 - Nowadays, the Internet plays an... People who have a mobile phone or a computer will be able to...
Writing Feedbackzezaar66 - Mar 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2011
|Analytical writing: "Education will be truly effective only if individually..."
2 - Well, this is not really about emphasis on quality, is it? It is about specialization. The intro paragraph...
Writing Feedbackkak3521 - Mar 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2011
|TOEFL-"forest is disappearing but needs to be saved."
Writing FeedbackY529 - Mar 3, 2011 / Y529 - Mar 21, 2011
|"The smell of the library is different" - a descriptive essay (library)
Writing Feedback92angel - Mar 3, 2011 / Mahrooo - Mar 4, 2011
|People in our modern age stay longer than in the past generation
3 - I like the way Keng used the word "stay." It is poetic and cool. But for improving clarity, let's...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Mar 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 9, 2011
|Contrasting between two jobs (commuting, hours, job type)
3 - In addition, the second job was closer to me. In addition, the second job was closer for me. ...
Writing Feedbackmalakot - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|"Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics"?
2 - Use "ing"...while overlooking other contributing factors in determining the social customs and ethics, which may play equally, if not...
Writing FeedbackRichardHIT - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2011
|"to increase my levels of physical activities" - behavioral modification paper
2 - Hello! First of all, I feel as though you could make your topic paragraph grab the readers attention...
Writing Feedbackhello12345 - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Mar 2, 2011
|Chinas one child policy and the group that is most affected
3 - After the passing of Mao Zedong, the belief of having a large population diminished since China's population had grown...
Writing Feedbackeddiebee323 - Mar 2, 2011 / ukkuma - Mar 6, 2011
|IELTS Whether new buildings should be built in traditional style?
Writing FeedbackShrek Fiona - Mar 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|IELTS: The Internet has transformed lives and economies but it turning the world ...
9 - Hi there, Borislav was totally right. I'm preparing for IELTS test too. I have found out that,...
Writing Feedbackdaquoc - Mar 2, 2011 / englishlearner1 - Apr 8, 2011
|(Elephant) the most important animal in your country? Why is the animal important?
Writing FeedbackKeng - Mar 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 8, 2011
|PRICELESS MOMENTS - TOEFL Older people enjoy their life more than young people
4 - Few weeks ago, when I took IELTS, we had 60 mins for two tasks. Somehow, I managed to "survive"...
Writing Feedbackmocak - Mar 1, 2011 / m00ny - Mar 2, 2011
|Topic: "Is the impact of imported food beneficial or not?"
Writing Feedbackcoronaeffect - Mar 1, 2011 / coronaeffect - Mar 9, 2011
|students' competence at all levels of the Malaysian education
6 - Conclusion: My suggestion. Improve teaching method, better trained teachers. Implement workplace experience by students doing certain hours of...
Writing Feedbackno183 - Mar 1, 2011 / Guest - Mar 24, 2011
|'globalization risk' - visitors to a country follow local customs and behavior?
3 - Here, I would like to suggest possible ideas for your essay. Tourists play an important role in tourism...
Writing Feedbackcherrysong - Mar 1, 2011 / IqbalThemi - Jun 2, 2015
|(the social processes) My teaching philosophy of museum teaching
4 - I prefer avoiding phrasal verbs in essays, but surely you can use it. Also, (as you probably noticed) word...
Writing Feedbackmintchoco - Mar 1, 2011 / m00ny - Mar 2, 2011
|A Great Nation = the general welfare of all its people
2 - It refers to a notion that what is known as "welfare." For my part, welfare is often indicated by...
Writing Feedbackwujing10 - Feb 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 3, 2011
|"to consider the limitation of parents" -Parents are the best teachers?
2 - Others, including me, argue that, although parents could play a key role in children's lives, it's a little hasty...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 7, 2011
|It's better to have peace than prevailing war
4 - Long sentences are long. Try breaking down your ideas into more swallowable bits. Once you broach the 20 word...
Writing Feedbackniesaysi - Feb 28, 2011 / kgw - Feb 28, 2011
|Essay: The 'O' levels are redundant
Writing Feedbacktrenkins - Feb 28, 2011 / trenkins - Mar 13, 2011
|(control / opportunities /compliance) important qualities of a good supervisor (boss)
2 - Try to use those corrections when you type the essay again. Type it again just to practice the correct...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Feb 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 7, 2011
|young people's decision have no influence on the future of the nation
3 - to be much difficult. ---To be very difficult. Well... You work very hard here, so... there is...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|Groups or Organizations are an important part of people's lives. Are they important?
5 - Keep it plural: ...new norms and values for a living and apply all of them to the whole community....
Writing Feedbackjoseph240 - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|Some people believe in making large amount of money while others don't care about it
3 - Capitalize when you start a sentence. Whereas is one word, no two. Do not capitalize "money" Some people...
Writing Feedbackgeetakaradkhele - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|toelf essay- Should going to class at school be optional or required?
4 - Wow, you really got me thinking about this interesting question. It would be kind of interesting to let the...
Writing Feedbackmagicwwh - Feb 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 6, 2011
|An education is a life choice - "Educational institutions vs fields of study"
Writing Feedbackkgw - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2011
|Reflection essay (argument considering the use of the organic foods)
2 - ...are safer and healthier more safety and healthy than conventional foods. It is interesting so far! I...
Writing Feedbacknayayoumi - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 28, 2011
|Investing on public transportation is preferable!
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 7, 2011
|Essay about the believe of people on child education - feedback
6 - I see a potential flaw with this essay. You are acting as though one cannot educate the child...
Writing Feedbackalaba2812 - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 5, 2011
|(love, care, family) - should pets be treated as family members
4 - From ancient times , human beings have been living in groups because they are social animals. Earlier there...
Writing Feedbackgeetakaradkhele - Feb 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Mar 4, 2011
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