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|Describe your grandmother who is important to you (150 words)
5 - When people say show, don't tell, it means you should not make a claim when you could instead give...
Writing Feedbackquynhtranghbt - Nov 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 21, 2010
|Congestion and air pollution because of increasing number of private cars
2 - Hi huong vu, First, it's under word limitation and you might be getting penalty for this. There are...
Writing Feedbackhuongvt - Nov 11, 2010 / adriennelin - Nov 20, 2010
|TOEFL Essay: Physical health is a prerequisite for mental health and academic achievements
Writing Feedbacklurian - Nov 11, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Nov 22, 2010
|Persuasive essay on implementing uniforms at schools
6 - thank you very much...sadly i don't think that my class is going to continue the essay thing.Looks like we're...
Writing FeedbackSr7248 - Nov 10, 2010 / Sr7248 - Nov 22, 2010
|Media info advantages and disadvantages: comics, books, radio, TV, film, theater
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 10, 2010 / fznfire - Nov 11, 2010
|Leaders that had effect on the world
5 - Capitalize: During the time he was the king of Jordan he made a great achievements and contributions in his...
Writing Feedbackzaid_86 - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|Dress code is an epidemic. Colleges and universities shouldn't have a dress code
Writing Feedbackrona - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|Term paper over different types of Love - Need a peer edit and ideas for conclusion
2 - I don't think you need this sentence, because the reader already knows what puppy love refers to... ...
Writing Feedbacknn8nk - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|"to certify a career" - What are the aims of academic study and how to achieve them?
2 - This essay will explore the aims of academic study and various ways of achieving them in accordance to ...
Writing Feedbackajwadalikhan - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|Mandy, a beautiful black dog - Write a descriptive paragraph
4 - I came to notice that she befriended people with more calm calmer personalities and those who seem to be...
Writing FeedbackJovine - Nov 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|How War and/or Militarization changes gender roles (5 paragraphs)
2 - The military and war, helps to formulate our understandings of patriotism and this country. As soldiers and civilians...
Writing Feedbackluv2write - Nov 8, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 13, 2010
|"going outside or performing physical exercise" - (important issue) Topic - Obesity
2 - I see that Courtney already corrected your grammar here. On behalf of Nathan, Thanks, Courtney! I've learned...
Writing Feedbackbigblueduck - Nov 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 16, 2010
|Tiryns and Athens - Compare and contras essay: two cities
3 - Tiryns and Athens are two cities in which I have lived. Each place has its advantages and disadvantages. (Add...
Writing Feedbackeshotcan - Nov 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 16, 2010
|IELTS essay: Ban on smoking in public places is a must!
Writing Feedbackpollyg - Nov 6, 2010 / tbvjaos555 - Nov 17, 2010
|When in Rome, do as the Romans do. a paragraph discussing a common cliché.
3 - ...meet but my aunt refused, "W e don't eat pig meet in my country." I like this proverb!!--->...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Nov 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 14, 2010
|Negative influences of computers on children - essay
3 - In my strong opinion, the development of computer technology and Internet technology such as a form of the internet...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 14, 2010
|New viewpoints, motivation, enthusiasm and concectration are needed in early education of a child
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 25, 2011
|"percentage change in average house prices + no job, no life" - IELTS essay
Writing Feedbackanarkia - Nov 5, 2010 / bemytthm - Nov 5, 2010
|Topic: In your opinion what factors contribute a good employee.
2 - first of all, i don't like the introduction "nowadays, most of people are working for a company" i think...
Writing Feedbacktoteri - Nov 5, 2010 / danado0ona - Nov 5, 2010
|SAT essay: Can success be disastrous?
2 - 1)When one becomes successful,he or she becomes haughty and arrogant 2)Success is about setting your goals,making life what you...
Writing FeedbackMLE27 - Nov 4, 2010 / Kimayu - Nov 7, 2010
|Education: compare and contrast state-run and privately-owned
NEW - Hi everyone please help me improving my IELTS writing. Having a good education is one of the most important...
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|Are we too dependent on computers?
Writing Feedbackmohab1220 - Nov 4, 2010 / mohab1220 - Nov 18, 2010
|Should successful sports player get a great deal of money??
4 - However, some people think sports players are sacrificed (maybe just change to sacrifice)their lives...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 4, 2010 / anthony1993 - Nov 13, 2010
|TOEFL "Why are some people attracted to dangerous sports?" - to fight boredom
3 - It is well written, indeed. I see you used three arguments here. What I recommend is that you only...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Nov 3, 2010 / Paullee - Nov 19, 2010
|Is cheating in school and work out of control?
2 - Cheating nowadays is associated with many different words, but actually it has they have the same meaning. There...
Writing Feedbackmohab1220 - Nov 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|globalization as it relates to politics & the society in small and developing society
3 - Start with a capital letter: As governance structures are established at a global level to deal with the growing...
Writing Feedbackkaycaste - Nov 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|What do people do and think when they decide to do shopping? (Essay for LLI class)
2 - === Nobody can deny the importance of shopping's effect on people's daily lives . Although shopping has become...
Writing Feedbackdmonkey - Nov 2, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 7, 2010
|developing a strong outline for essay: Banning Smoking in Public Places
Writing FeedbackEmone93 - Nov 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|From China to America: Culture Shock (food, manner) - living in a new country
7 - Kevin: You are sooo sweet! I am not a good writer at all, but thanks for the confidence-boost. I...
Writing FeedbackKianna - Nov 2, 2010 / Kianna - Nov 25, 2010
|"The Business of being Born" essay
Writing FeedbackFlutter92 - Nov 1, 2010 / Flutter92 - Nov 20, 2010
|IELTS : Why should human beings travel to outer space?
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 1, 2010 / anb_duck - Nov 12, 2010
|MONEY is not the most important aspect of a job in certain cases!
4 - Many people need a job for financial purposes. or Many people need a job for a financial purpose. ...
Writing Feedbacko0oSaiyukio0o - Nov 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 11, 2010
|Isuues: Student behaviour at school
NEW - Q:In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the cause of this?...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 1, 2010 / — -
|IELTS: Benefits of students doing extra jobs
4 - Your vocabulary is great, but your writing would be stronger if you eliminated unnecessary qualifiers/adjectives. I also noticed some...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Nov 1, 2010 / gracedrift - Nov 2, 2010
|Vietnamese iconic festival dish
NEW - I would like to introduce with you about New year rice cake (bánh Tét) as Vietnamese iconic festival dish....
Writing Feedbackautumnwave - Oct 31, 2010 / — -
|IELTS- The freedom of expression, no government restrictions
5 - Here is a run on sentence. It needs a conjunction: This is because human rights are acknowledged by society,...
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 9, 2010
|Educational Success - view on single-sex education essay
Writing Feedbacksheikh_mohamed - Oct 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2010
|Government is a necessary evil - Can success be disastrous? - essay help
2 - Undoubtedly, human ought to be success.---a generalzation & change success to successful your intro leaves a lot to...
Writing Feedbackoeglairt - Oct 30, 2010 / em2always - Oct 30, 2010
|The effect of advertising is limited and not strong enough to influence people's eating habits.
NEW - The effect of advertising is limited to unhealthy eating habits Currently, the trend of advertising explosion seems more...
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|Help-is-needed-Essay about Traffic jams- Causes and Solutions
5 - Although there are some causes leading to aggravating traffic congestion, but effective solutions to alleviate the crowd are still...
Writing Feedbackshaaw - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2010
|City or village - what is better?
3 - This style of writing has something special about it. It really carries my attention along. In my view,...
Writing FeedbackTaniad - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2010
|IELTS: students can learn outside the textbook and classroom with a real working experiences
3 - Hi Keven, This is taught by an IELTS examiner. His reasons for writing like this have something to...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 29, 2010 / adriennelin - Nov 20, 2010
|IELTS: Paying more money is the only motivation to make employees work harder...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2010
|Human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more than saving land
4 - Dumi made a good correction here, especially at the beginning. Here is a way you could use "contemporary if...
Writing Feedbackwkp - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2010
|Laws should not be rigid. Instead, they should be flexible enough .......
3 - Laws are formed for the benefit of the people living in the country. It is therefore t heir responsibility...
Writing Feedbackpcube - Oct 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 4, 2010
|Essay:education, meet the needs of individuals and societies
3 - All in all, education should contain a variety of contents to produce educated people such as... then restate your...
Writing Feedbackqsy - Oct 28, 2010 / adriennelin - Oct 29, 2010
|"encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school" - agree?
NEW - In some countries people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting...
Writing FeedbackFarnaz - Oct 28, 2010 / — -
|Maintaining Individualism - Informal Essay
2 - Hi Tyler, I think you meant to use "conforming" here: Therefore, it is possible to gain success without...
Writing Feedbackyumyum242 - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2010
|Identifying with the villain, a figure who wasn't a hero
3 - Can ----> will or Could ---> would but not can---> would If people are prohibited from exploring for that...
Writing Feedbacknavalava - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Is the Internet itself bad for students?
2 - First of all, I believe all of you here are quite familiar with the internet.that sounds really awkward what...
Writing Feedbacknhilun - Oct 27, 2010 / midnight - Oct 27, 2010
|"Choosing a house pet and pet responsibilities" - this is a classification essay
Writing Feedbackkrystidavis - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Susan - Oct 31, 2010
|IELTS: The increasing business and culture contact between countries.
6 - You did! That is correct. But it could be much better. You could spend a whole paragraph expressing...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Should people never be satisfied with what they have? Jane Austine's pride
Writing Feedbackrenyu199014 - Oct 27, 2010 / renyu199014 - Oct 28, 2010
|Hawaii and Georgia - life comparison. Idea about conclusion?
2 - Be careful... it seems like you are calling Georgia and Hawaii cities when they are states. Later on in...
Writing Feedbackvsam - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Internet censorship + Mandatory college curriculum - essays for CLEP english comp
2 - Capitalize Internet. Censorship pertaining to the internet is an extremely volatile topic. --- don't begin with a statement...
Writing Feedbackleahh - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|What in our life does have more relevance: the experience or some characteristics we are born with?
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Oct 26, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Nov 2, 2010
|Fixed Punishment Vs Discretionary Punishment - Discuss
NEW - Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the...
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|What is the best way to pursue happiness? In class essay assignment
Writing Feedbackkiller12125 - Oct 26, 2010 / killer12125 - Nov 1, 2010
|IELTS Compare the pros and cons of following as media for communicating information
NEW - Q: Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you...
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 26, 2010 / — -
|Careers, living costs, jobs - life in a city vs. a countryside
Writing FeedbackSharonSian - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2010
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