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|IELTS ADVERTISING- POSITIVE OR NEGATIVE PART OF OUR LIVES
7 - Many believe that advertising has brought great benefits to lives. Therefore, it should be considered a positive activity while...
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Jul 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 11, 2011
|Topic: "Why go to university?" - making dreams come true?
2 - GreatdealsLarge number of student go to universities per year in order to have a healthy and active environment,obtainacquire...
Writing Feedbacknguyendinhtuong - Jul 9, 2011 / dumi - Jul 9, 2011
|TOEFL: The best way of learning life (listening to advice or personal experience?)
NEW - TOPIC: Some people believe that the best way of learning life is by listening to the advice of family...
Writing Feedbackleeward - Jul 9, 2011 / — -
|Sex education should be a compulsory part of the secondary curriculum
5 - EF_Kevin: you have a great English skill and i am grateful for your feedback!Thanks...I will strive for the best...
Writing Feedbacksamuel11023 - Jul 9, 2011 / samuel11023 - Jul 11, 2011
|Ielts - use of nuclear technology should be discouraged even for civil purposes
4 - Welcome to EF!! I'm glad you are enjoying the sight. Thanks for posting! Be careful of little...
Writing Feedbackw_even - Jul 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 11, 2011
|My Grandma, youthful in spirit. Creative writing piece.
NEW - Hi, this is a piece of writing about my grandma, I am strugling with the structure and flow so...
Writing FeedbackGeeRaCeR - Jul 8, 2011 / — -
|ILETS Essay. Mass communication and transport continue to grow.
NEW - As mass communication and transport continue to grow, societies are becoming more and more alike leading to a phenomenon...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Jul 8, 2011 / — -
|TOEFL:Government should regard investing in building roads as the most important
5 - Yes, that is a good idea. However, sometimes you can get the wrong idea easily if you rely on...
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jul 12, 2011
|TOEFL-people should have hobbies and do physical activities
Writing Feedbacklisette - Jul 7, 2011 / lisette - Jul 10, 2011
|Technology or social needs ? Which should get priority over the other?
2 - Every governmental expenditure should be well thought out before being made. This facilitates much of the bureaucratic activity....
Writing Feedbackangellin25 - Jul 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jul 7, 2011
|IELTS: Space Exploration, money should be spent on? 'few compulsory drawbacks'
2 - As the competition between developed countries has become frequent, they try to build a reputation by means of exploration...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|IELTS> "Employees working at home" contribute benefits to employers?
3 - Plural: ...by their beloved family members may... encourage the employees to produce get more work done. ......
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|Better place to live is a big city; more opportunities
4 - Great question! Yes, in the 6th edition of the APA style guide they changed it to recommend typing...
Writing FeedbackBecool - Jul 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2011
|"Siblings vs. Friends" (from college English writing class)
NEW - Please proofread this essay. I really want to improve my writing skill. Forever Friend "A sister is...
Writing FeedbackTruong - Jul 6, 2011 / — -
|(IELTS) The purpose of university education
Writing Feedbackekekek - Jul 6, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 20, 2011
|(IELTS) Will business and cultural contact cause countires lose identities?
4 - Kevin~~ quite appreciate your help~~ I completely agree with your suggestion. Thanks a lot~~ Naruto~~ your suggestions are...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Jul 6, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 20, 2011
|Promoting healthy life style to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment
2 - With the development of technology, there are plenty of medical efforts have been made, which are more effective and...
Writing FeedbackJames Lin - Jul 6, 2011 / dumi - Jul 7, 2011
|"Brand is Me"--About myself as if I'm a brand
2 - Yes, if the first part would be a complete sentence on it's own, then you separate the 2 halves...
Writing Feedbackleia624 - Jul 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2011
|My Family: I'm very proud to be a part
2 - Do not capitalize these words. Only capitalize Honorable, because it is the first word of the sentence! :-)...
Writing Feedbacksarina_19862003 - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|Dropping out; Encouraging the student to get involved in extracurriculars.
4 - It is clear and easy to understand. The mistakes are small mistakes. I think you will pass, but I...
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|The advantages and disadvantages of 3 media's namely Books,Radio& Television
NEW - Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you consider...
Writing Feedbackmadinarafi5 - Jul 5, 2011 / — -
|IELTS Tourism: Advantages outweigh Disadvantages? 'setting restriction areas'
4 - Winnie, this might sound silly, but before you start writing an essay take 5 minutes to put your ideas...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 5, 2011 / amrosca - Jul 6, 2011
|"Weekend will pass as usual" - essay about how i spend my week off.
4 - Look, you capitalized a word after a comma: I always wake up quite late in the morning, After finishing...
Writing Feedbacksooriyan - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|TOEFL: Being taught by a teacher is the most suitable and effective way to learn
4 - The verb tense in this paragraph was the PAST TENSE, so keep it in the past tense: Furthermore,...
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|The role of parents in school: students to study more and be responsible
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Oct 26, 2011
|The ideal teacher: a missionary
4 - You're very much welcome! However, Kevin and Susan are the pros around here, so better wait for a second...
Writing Feedbackcelu - Jul 4, 2011 / amrosca - Jul 5, 2011
|"CFL lamps make our eyes feel far more comfortable" - TOEFL-Integration
3 - The following paragraph presents three different points of views among the two parties. First of all, the author...
Writing Feedbackjinyan0129 - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2011
|Working moms cause problems in the society - ILETS
7 - Women play a significant role towards the success of any nation. Infact, women are considered to be the backone...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Jul 4, 2011 / w_even - Jul 10, 2011
|Nowadays, more and more universities ask their students to choose one field the school have
3 - As far as I am concerned, I feel that taking classes in many fields can offer students more opportunities...
Writing Feedbackdellvo - Jul 4, 2011 / linh202 - Jul 5, 2011
|Good and Bad effects of TOURISM
3 - Another high quality edit from Ana... I agree with that advice about using shorter sentences. It is easier...
Writing Feedbacknaseem - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|Working at home using computers or telephones is better than working in the office?
7 - Are you talking about the topic sentence of the 3rd paragraph? Another equally important factor that that makes...
Writing Feedbackzhonghua2412 - Jul 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2011
|"I love you mom and you're the light of my eyes" - My mom essay
Writing Feedbackfofo - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|"BUY NOTHING DAY" -- More often that once each year.
5 - Buy Nothing Day is observed around the world each November. In honor of the holiday, you will take an...
Writing Feedbackksimms - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|Ielts - it would be unwise to assume a good economy is all that's needed for a country
3 - Hello~~Winnie~~ Economic progress is one way to measure a country's success. Some say that there are other ways...
Writing Feedbackwinniesun - Jul 3, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|'Understand others' emotion, attitude and feelings' - face-to-face communication is better
2 - Good points about the use of expression (eyebrows, etc) in face-to-face communication! They all affect the way we...
Writing Feedback123nnt - Jul 3, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 5, 2011
|Giving mobile phones to the unemployed (IELTS ESSAY)
6 - I am one of the candidate in IELTS exam,too~~ Some people argue that the government should give every...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jul 3, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|TOEFL: People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment - doing things ......
3 - That first sentence is a difficult one! I tis difficult to refer to a topic this way. I'll give...
Writing FeedbackBuzz8177 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2011
|TOEFL: Universities should give the same amount of money to their students' sports
4 - This writing is very strong! If you can always write like this, you will pass the toefl for sure....
Writing Feedbacklinh202 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2011
|TOEFL - the main point is to be sure if we can pay a loan or not
7 - It seems like money can do anything, even can harm friendship!---I corrected the grammar. It's not money...
Writing Feedbackabc1400 - Jul 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2011
|one word essay on time & quality of our life.
4 - thankyou so much for the feedbaackkss :)) im so happy with the comments, thanks for helping me improvise. well,...
Writing Feedbackisabellaclaudia - Jul 2, 2011 / isabellaclaudia - Jul 12, 2011
|agree/disagree - moving to different countries or towns is not good because
3 - An Ongoing ongoing debate exists over whether moving to different places is a good idea, because it makes...
Writing FeedbackInq Lee - Jul 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause and 1 solution
4 - Accompanying with the continuous development of technology are the surprising advancements in the way people commute. ----Do not write...
Writing Feedbackandytranhung - Jul 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|USE OF CCTV CAMERAS (IELTS ESSAY)
6 - keep pratice more~~Sangeertha~~It's natural to write overtime~~ Don't be nervous~~just calm down and pratice~~...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 30, 2011 / ekekek - Jul 6, 2011
|"Should fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood" - ILETS exam
4 - CAPITALIZATION: Do not capitalize mother. Sometimes you will see it capitalized if it is used like a name: She...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|Work for the company or go for our own business?
Writing Feedbackapieceof - Jun 30, 2011 / Geenesh - Jul 1, 2011
|About Water - Water is the most important in our world
Writing Feedbackiloveyou - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|Death penalty or a life in prison for murderers?
4 - The facts in your essay are also useful for the topic of "Fixed punishment for each type of crime?"...
Writing Feedbackandytranhung - Jun 30, 2011 / winniesun - Jul 3, 2011
|Families to pay taxes that support universal education?
Writing Feedbackandytranhung - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 2, 2011
|"tourism does not benefit the poorest" - IELTS
5 - It is looking good... Here is an idea: Next, the governments of the countries can build a village...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|Should children learn a foreign language since their childhood in schools?
4 - collegue give good advice. I like your essay and like more the way mates dealt with. Good luck...
Writing FeedbackBecool - Jun 30, 2011 / start208 - Jun 30, 2011
|Should high school students allow to take courses they like? TOEFL
3 - Let's use the word EXPERIENCES: High school experiences play important roles in our academic careers and thereafter throughout...
Writing FeedbackBecool - Jun 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|"equal abilities of both genders" - EQUAL NUMBERS OF MALE & FEMALE IN EVERY SUBJECT
4 - These sentences are too complicated. You should write shorter sentences. Shorter sentences are easier to read, just as...
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Jun 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|How I Spent My Inheritance
Writing FeedbackXray1305 - Jun 29, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2011
|superficial is external human" One should never judge a person by external appearance
4 - oh thank you i really appreciate that, i have serious English writing problem. also thank you inspiring me...
Writing FeedbackDashka - Jun 29, 2011 / Dashka - Jul 5, 2011
|"people want to educate" - attending college or university for many different reasons
NEW - Hi all, I am preparing for TOEFL exam, and this is my first writing. Please rate it and point...
Writing FeedbackeLearner - Jun 29, 2011 / — -
|Improving roads and highways or improving public transportation?
Writing Feedback123nnt - Jun 29, 2011 / 123nnt - Jun 30, 2011
|The twenty first century experienced the significant growth of globalization.
NEW - Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and...
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Jun 29, 2011 / — -
|There is no better time to be alive than now (really?)
2 - Hi there, I'm preparing for ielts academic too. Just want to help by providing few comments on your...
Writing FeedbackGeenesh - Jun 29, 2011 / the leaf ninja - Jun 29, 2011
|Email and text messaging threatening the status of written language?
Writing Feedbackroygao2008 - Jun 29, 2011 / 123nnt - Jun 29, 2011
|TOEFL-Smoking should not be promitted in restaurants or other public places
9 - Ha ha, yeah... it's tough. We want to allow each other freedom..so we want to allow people to...
Writing Feedbackcalvinhmw - Jun 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jul 4, 2011
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