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|SAT essay: Progress is not possible without a sacrifice
Writing Feedbackvahelo - Nov 19, 2010 / meytng - Nov 22, 2010
|"Fewer and fewer employment opportunities for graduated entereing the job market"
2 - Hi, I think you wrote off-topic, and this is quite serious. The topic asks you to give reasons...
Writing Feedbackuprightfellow - Nov 19, 2010 / adriennelin - Nov 20, 2010
|"The media has the power to instill ideas" - National/Local Concern Prompt
2 - No need for the comma in the first sentence. The first paragraph is a little off-putting because a...
Writing FeedbackDeadmaster - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|should students have part-time jobs while studying?
3 - This is pretty good! One way to improve your writing is to make a longer intro paragraph and a...
Writing Feedbackcamthangtu - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|Getting message from different news resources to understand events under more objective perspective.
10 - Well, it's probably okay. I sometimes say the same things to different people, because sometimes people need the...
Writing FeedbackStridercoo - Nov 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 27, 2010
|The Effects of Love (A Cause/Effect Paper)
2 - Eighteen years old is not too old for any kind of love, puppy or otherwise. After all, "puppy...
Writing Feedbackcucciola21 - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Government should sponsor to build up museum and theatre .
4 - As to whether government should sponsor on the building of a museum and a theatre, the public holds...
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Is the ability to tolerate problems as important as the ability to fix them
2 - I'll give some more corrections. Please practice every correction by typing the sentence 10 times. That is the way...
Writing Feedbacksgl - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Alcoholism vs. other addiction - Compare and contrast
5 - I don't think it is helpful to begin the essay with a sentence about addiction types being ample....
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|Pre-nuptial agreements. Do you think everyone should have it?
4 - I believe both parties will know if there is the need for a pre-nupt before they marry if they...
Writing FeedbackTaniad - Nov 17, 2010 / femifash - Nov 26, 2010
|Never, never give up: what a wonderful word
5 - brightness future Don't tell about what you think, but what you do,where is the specific example?...
Writing Feedbackhaliuq900207 - Nov 17, 2010 / andygu - Nov 17, 2010
|Compare and contrast your way of life with that of your parents
3 - Never type this: more better ...always far more better than their fathers' lives. ...attitudes toward professions and ways...
Writing FeedbackMivi - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|"About the experience of shopping for a new car" - Reasons to buy a Toyota Corolla
4 - I don't think this opening sentence is as effective as it could be. You could give an opening...
Writing Feedbackeraf18 - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|governments should spent more money for health education than research-feedback
4 - Hi Sobin, I see that Adelyne did a great job of correcting the errors. I will enjoy correcting your...
Writing Feedbacksobin - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 26, 2010
|IELTS : Why should we learn how to operate a computer?
5 - Nice! I like this term... Capitalize Internet. You gave good topic sentences for the paragraphs! So.....
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 25, 2010
|"Countries of residence of overseas students in Australia" graph for ielts
6 - The chart shows the trend of the number of foreign students in Australia between 1982 and 2000. We...
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 25, 2010
|It's good that government taxes the flights, especially in the period of holiday
5 - You can also write "heavier" I agree with the statement that government should be try to reduce air...
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 25, 2010
|Struggling with an ethical decision at the age of 12
4 - The first 4 sentences... I think they are the sentence you need to to write to get warmed up......
Writing Feedbackkipta - Nov 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 24, 2010
|Laptop, the Solution of Our Heavy Tasks
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|Why do some students still drive cars than riding a bus? (Evaluation)
2 - I'll add some commas to this sentence: Parker's argument is much more applicable in a city with extremely good...
Writing Feedbackfrankzzsword - Nov 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 22, 2010
|"My Wonderful Sister" - proofread my paragraph
Writing FeedbackNonita - Nov 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 21, 2010
|"managing a salon full of 10 employees" - Negative Experience CBEST writing
Writing Feedbackmelenie - Nov 12, 2010 / melenie - Nov 15, 2010
|Describe your grandmother who is important to you (150 words)
5 - When people say show, don't tell, it means you should not make a claim when you could instead give...
Writing Feedbackquynhtranghbt - Nov 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 21, 2010
|Congestion and air pollution because of increasing number of private cars
2 - Hi huong vu, First, it's under word limitation and you might be getting penalty for this. There are...
Writing Feedbackhuongvt - Nov 11, 2010 / adriennelin - Nov 20, 2010
|TOEFL Essay: Physical health is a prerequisite for mental health and academic achievements
Writing Feedbacklurian - Nov 11, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Nov 22, 2010
|Persuasive essay on implementing uniforms at schools
6 - thank you very much...sadly i don't think that my class is going to continue the essay thing.Looks like we're...
Writing FeedbackSr7248 - Nov 10, 2010 / Sr7248 - Nov 22, 2010
|Media info advantages and disadvantages: comics, books, radio, TV, film, theater
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Nov 10, 2010 / fznfire - Nov 11, 2010
|Leaders that had effect on the world
5 - Capitalize: During the time he was the king of Jordan he made a great achievements and contributions in his...
Writing Feedbackzaid_86 - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|Dress code is an epidemic. Colleges and universities shouldn't have a dress code
Writing Feedbackrona - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|Term paper over different types of Love - Need a peer edit and ideas for conclusion
2 - I don't think you need this sentence, because the reader already knows what puppy love refers to... ...
Writing Feedbacknn8nk - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|"to certify a career" - What are the aims of academic study and how to achieve them?
2 - This essay will explore the aims of academic study and various ways of achieving them in accordance to ...
Writing Feedbackajwadalikhan - Nov 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|Mandy, a beautiful black dog - Write a descriptive paragraph
4 - I came to notice that she befriended people with more calm calmer personalities and those who seem to be...
Writing FeedbackJovine - Nov 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 18, 2010
|How War and/or Militarization changes gender roles (5 paragraphs)
2 - The military and war, helps to formulate our understandings of patriotism and this country. As soldiers and civilians...
Writing Feedbackluv2write - Nov 8, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 13, 2010
|"going outside or performing physical exercise" - (important issue) Topic - Obesity
2 - I see that Courtney already corrected your grammar here. On behalf of Nathan, Thanks, Courtney! I've learned...
Writing Feedbackbigblueduck - Nov 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 16, 2010
|Tiryns and Athens - Compare and contras essay: two cities
3 - Tiryns and Athens are two cities in which I have lived. Each place has its advantages and disadvantages. (Add...
Writing Feedbackeshotcan - Nov 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 16, 2010
|IELTS essay: Ban on smoking in public places is a must!
Writing Feedbackpollyg - Nov 6, 2010 / tbvjaos555 - Nov 17, 2010
|When in Rome, do as the Romans do. a paragraph discussing a common cliché.
3 - ...meet but my aunt refused, "W e don't eat pig meet in my country." I like this proverb!!--->...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Nov 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 14, 2010
|Negative influences of computers on children - essay
3 - In my strong opinion, the development of computer technology and Internet technology such as a form of the internet...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 14, 2010
|New viewpoints, motivation, enthusiasm and concectration are needed in early education of a child
Writing Feedbackwhitney - Nov 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 25, 2011
|"percentage change in average house prices + no job, no life" - IELTS essay
Writing Feedbackanarkia - Nov 5, 2010 / bemytthm - Nov 5, 2010
|Topic: In your opinion what factors contribute a good employee.
2 - first of all, i don't like the introduction "nowadays, most of people are working for a company" i think...
Writing Feedbacktoteri - Nov 5, 2010 / danado0ona - Nov 5, 2010
|SAT essay: Can success be disastrous?
2 - 1)When one becomes successful,he or she becomes haughty and arrogant 2)Success is about setting your goals,making life what you...
Writing FeedbackMLE27 - Nov 4, 2010 / Kimayu - Nov 7, 2010
|Education: compare and contrast state-run and privately-owned
NEW - Hi everyone please help me improving my IELTS writing. Having a good education is one of the most important...
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|Are we too dependent on computers?
Writing Feedbackmohab1220 - Nov 4, 2010 / mohab1220 - Nov 18, 2010
|Should successful sports player get a great deal of money??
4 - However, some people think sports players are sacrificed (maybe just change to sacrifice)their lives...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 4, 2010 / anthony1993 - Nov 13, 2010
|TOEFL "Why are some people attracted to dangerous sports?" - to fight boredom
3 - It is well written, indeed. I see you used three arguments here. What I recommend is that you only...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Nov 3, 2010 / Paullee - Nov 19, 2010
|Is cheating in school and work out of control?
2 - Cheating nowadays is associated with many different words, but actually it has they have the same meaning. There...
Writing Feedbackmohab1220 - Nov 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|globalization as it relates to politics & the society in small and developing society
3 - Start with a capital letter: As governance structures are established at a global level to deal with the growing...
Writing Feedbackkaycaste - Nov 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|What do people do and think when they decide to do shopping? (Essay for LLI class)
2 - === Nobody can deny the importance of shopping's effect on people's daily lives . Although shopping has become...
Writing Feedbackdmonkey - Nov 2, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 7, 2010
|developing a strong outline for essay: Banning Smoking in Public Places
Writing FeedbackEmone93 - Nov 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|From China to America: Culture Shock (food, manner) - living in a new country
7 - Kevin: You are sooo sweet! I am not a good writer at all, but thanks for the confidence-boost. I...
Writing FeedbackKianna - Nov 2, 2010 / Kianna - Nov 25, 2010
|"The Business of being Born" essay
Writing FeedbackFlutter92 - Nov 1, 2010 / Flutter92 - Nov 20, 2010
|IELTS : Why should human beings travel to outer space?
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 1, 2010 / anb_duck - Nov 12, 2010
|MONEY is not the most important aspect of a job in certain cases!
4 - Many people need a job for financial purposes. or Many people need a job for a financial purpose. ...
Writing Feedbacko0oSaiyukio0o - Nov 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 11, 2010
|Isuues: Student behaviour at school
NEW - Q:In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the cause of this?...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 1, 2010 / — -
|IELTS: Benefits of students doing extra jobs
4 - Your vocabulary is great, but your writing would be stronger if you eliminated unnecessary qualifiers/adjectives. I also noticed some...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Nov 1, 2010 / gracedrift - Nov 2, 2010
|Vietnamese iconic festival dish
NEW - I would like to introduce with you about New year rice cake (bánh Tét) as Vietnamese iconic festival dish....
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|IELTS- The freedom of expression, no government restrictions
5 - Here is a run on sentence. It needs a conjunction: This is because human rights are acknowledged by society,...
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 9, 2010
|Educational Success - view on single-sex education essay
Writing Feedbacksheikh_mohamed - Oct 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2010
|Government is a necessary evil - Can success be disastrous? - essay help
2 - Undoubtedly, human ought to be success.---a generalzation & change success to successful your intro leaves a lot to...
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