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|Descriptive Essay: Description of a Flood
6 - Thesis statment: The college Presidents ar talking about making the lowering the drinking age 18 years old.Everbody know that...
Writing FeedbackEdzo - Feb 4, 2011 / kastro28 - Feb 25, 2011
|TOEFL - What things a movie tells about its country
5 - Let's use words that are specific.. not "things"...it reflects many characteristics of many things about the country that the...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 11, 2011
|IELTS-experience or born traits?which is more effective?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 4, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 10, 2011
|The movie "Troy", Achilles - someone you admire. How have they affected your life?
Writing Feedbackhachillies - Feb 3, 2011 / hachillies - Feb 12, 2011
|"Soon people who cannot work with computers will be disadvantaged" ESSAY
Writing Feedbackm00ny - Feb 3, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|A good son or daughter has a responsibility to obey parents and keep communication with them
2 - I try to give some suggestions for the first 2 paraghaps => Parents sacrifice for their children from...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Feb 3, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
|Describe table - companies advertising expediture IELTS task1
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Feb 3, 2011 / sweetheart87 - Feb 10, 2011
|IELTS-competition or co-operation-which is better?
7 - Thnks Susan, U gave a really good suggestion for writing the last line. :) i hope i will remember...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 2, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 10, 2011
|"fixed punishments for each type of crime?" writing about discuss both view
2 - I found one more error: However, there is increasing in crime rate, this problem does not only in specific...
Writing Feedbackmemory - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|IELTS-Happiness- factors,definition and importance - Prosperity makes individuals complete
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|Personal essay about myself - my identity
2 - I want to find places to shorten sentence and build intensity in the writing: To many high school students,...
Writing Feedbackwemm3 - Feb 2, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|"you can see the wonders" - Season of change
3 - Probably the reason no one helped you is that the help you gave others was like this: "Thats nice....
Writing Feedbackajoye - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2011
|(flexibility / tactfulness / fairness) important qualities of a good supervisor
Writing Feedbackzaid_86 - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|"Moving into the land of dream" how to improve my narrative essay
8 - Here are some edits => It was time to say goodbye! => When the airplane arrived in Detroit, we...
Writing Feedback8jhoi8 - Feb 1, 2011 / KathyLala - Feb 3, 2011
|Ways to spend less money - essay
Writing Feedbacklwshing - Feb 1, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 7, 2011
|a new holiday on honor of Savitribai Phule
Writing FeedbackkhushiGul - Jan 31, 2011 / khushiGul - Feb 6, 2011
|Inventive essay about shopping malls.
Writing Feedbackcaf68 - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 7, 2011
|"if i hadn't gone in the basement" - the time i made a costly mistake
2 - Your essay was chosen for a rewrite by the writers from college admission essay help. Below is the...
Writing Feedbackajoye - Jan 31, 2011 / EricJ - Feb 1, 2011
|"What is Happiness?" - A short essay about Hapiness
Writing FeedbackRamy Amjad - Jan 31, 2011 / Ramy Amjad - Feb 16, 2011
|'People's jealousy, greed, and supremacy' - People always want something more?
5 - thanks...
Writing Feedbackniki - Jan 31, 2011 / niki - Feb 8, 2011
|Why go to university? (gaining and gathering knowledge)
4 - After graduating from a high school, many students prefer to continue their study at college or university because of...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 6, 2011
|"Grateful to God" - personal experience essay
Writing Feedbackisyraf - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 3, 2011
|IELTS-most effective media for communication
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 31, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 3, 2011
|An associate system Engineer and BizTalk developer introduction in MBA Interview
5 - I see that you did not capitalize your name or the name of the district. Be sure to capitalize...
Writing Feedbackneophyte - Jan 31, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 6, 2011
|Reflective essay about global warming - legislators should listen to constituents .
2 - As the time passe s, more and more animals are suffering from the effects of Global Warming. We...
Writing Feedbackthania93 - Jan 30, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 1, 2011
|About religious discrimination, Muslim and Ms. Gordon
Writing Feedbacknida2192 - Jan 30, 2011 / Chocolette - Jan 31, 2011
|Essay - Observing & reflecting upon gallery teaching
4 - Great comparison and contrast, great topic sentences... the only thing I don't like is all that info in the...
Writing Feedbackmintchoco - Jan 30, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 5, 2011
|IELTS- capital punishment..necessary or not?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 30, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 5, 2011
|'nuclear family'; The extended family becomes less important than in the past
Writing Feedbackskyzhangty - Jan 30, 2011 / Shandana - Jan 30, 2011
|Toefl essay : One thing representing your country to an international exhibition
3 - Hi, little_wingg "rich of taste" Do you mean "Various kinds of flavors"? How about replacing it with "Plentiful...
Writing Feedbacklittle_wingg - Jan 28, 2011 / yecochi - Jan 31, 2011
|The causes of IMMIGRATION: social reasons, politic reasons and economic reasons.
4 - Another great point to think about is that you do not usually need to use "the" when you talk...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Jan 28, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2011
|Born talented or taught? - ielts essay
2 - -Music, sport etc has made usour life meaningful. although Although food, shelter and clothes are mans man's basic...
Writing Feedbackmanisha234 - Jan 28, 2011 / ajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011
|Rock involves sex sense,drug abuse,strong language;there are many types of music
2 - I t is generally believed that the music is voice of heart and a musician capable of conquering the...
Writing Feedbackfbi666 - Jan 28, 2011 / shesprettyodd - Jan 28, 2011
|IELTS-is a break good or bad after high school for students?
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Jan 31, 2011
|IELTS-computers..use,future prospects and over-dependence.
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011 / machinairum - Jan 29, 2011
|IELTS-should universities accept equal number of males/females or not?
4 - Hi, thanks Kevin. I didnt know this fact about my writing skills, but I refrain from copying other people's...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 28, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 20, 2011
|Students have to study a wide range of subjects, even the ones they don't like.
3 - Here is a great way to improve the first part. Students are going to school to gain knowledge, and...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2011
|'all men are equal before the law' - fixed punishments for each type of crime?
10 - I'm glad you are doing stuff like this, William, because I saw some valuable reviews you have given people....
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 9, 2011
|GRE Issue: Suggestion on improving the quality of instruction at the college
4 - Well, one great way to improve it would be to try to write 1 sentence that expresses the idea...
Writing Feedbackkitty__lan - Jan 27, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
|"Punta Cana" - My Favorite Vacation
5 - Your first sentence is excellent... perfect grammar. My favorite vacation destination is in the Dominican Republic, because it...
Writing Feedbackfdmonta - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|"It is better act than just complain" grammar and spelling on this paragraph
3 - Grisbel, thanks for doing such a great job here! You are making essayforum better by giving above-average help like...
Writing FeedbackCharito - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2011
|Why People Cheat? (cheating has its advantages and disadvantages)
Writing FeedbackChuchu8892 - Jan 26, 2011 / surfsamurai - Feb 1, 2011
|(No) Sympathy for the Devil
2 - I have to change a word or two in this first sentence: Light filtered through the steel frames windows...
Writing FeedbackAtlasa - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 31, 2011
|Does advertising encourages us to buy products that we really do need?
6 - Advertisement is an action which is taking greater part of human's an effort that is taking up a large...
Writing Feedbackniki - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 31, 2011
|IELTS: Post-school qualifications in Australia - men dominated by reaching 90%
2 - This is the hardest kind of writing. It is very hard to explain charts properly, so do not be...
Writing Feedbackaspasiakor - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 29, 2011
|'one and only one' - some people are born with certain talents
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|IELTS-is change required or not?
6 - A common expression is: Practice makes perfect. That is a common cliche in English. But it is NOT good...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|O level narrative:an attempt to help led to unexpected consequences for the helper.
2 - Cook woke up and found himself lying in the corner of a valley. --I like this very interesting first...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Jan 26, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 29, 2011
|Gender imbalance in classes is still proved to be acceptable
4 - This part should be simpler: Some claim that students are bestowed on benefits if the numbers of men and...
Writing Feedbackyaiba24 - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|academic writing task 1- family types living in poverty
4 - Excellent progress in this thread. I'll add an idea about that first sentence: The given table depicts in...
Writing Feedbackaspasiakor - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|How to deal with a gift of money ?
4 - Hi Ajit I think you must be a little disappointed about me, because I still have so many mistakes.It...
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Jan 25, 2011 / sabrinayaa - Jan 27, 2011
|my dad teaches me and has a big influence on me
5 - This is a good start, but you should look through to find the first excellent sentence: My dad has...
Writing Feedbacknee - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|Adults always say that life was better in their childhood and school days than it is
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 1, 2011
|Costa Rica, A memorable place, descriptive essay.
2 - This is too much for the reader to interpret, and not enough imagery. Let detail is more. The...
Writing FeedbackBradrick84 - Jan 25, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2011
|IELTS-visitor/host? who should adapt for cultural differences
10 - Hi Kevin, actually i did write a thread about what i wrote...but i dont know why/how, it was removed...will...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 25, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 24, 2011
|Living style, foods, jobs, relations: changes required by our life
4 - Oh, it's so confusing! I cannot easily explain it. I'll write some sentences to help you. These sentences...
Writing FeedbackkhushiGul - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 7, 2011
|About the Grad CF Course (difficulty, diversity)
3 - Sorry I'm so slow! Still catching up from the busy season... Shouldn't Institute be capitalized here? ...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2011
|"No support for the U.S. space program" - CLEP Composition - Product Safety
3 - ... the car industry, the airline industry, and the defense industry to name a few.--I think you should write...
Writing Feedbackmichalms - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 30, 2011
|IELTS-good news/bad news? whats the best?
2 - The credit for this awareness... goes to the power of media. News has become a quintessential part of...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 30, 2011
|Toefl, There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person.
3 - I'll improve the clarity right here: We can learn a lot of things from their the behavior, experiences...
Writing Feedbackhaleh - Jan 24, 2011 / EF_Susan - Jan 30, 2011
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