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|Creativity essay - Human thought must be free, imaginative and even playful
NEW - I wrote the following essay in 25 minutes, in preparation for the SAT. English is my second language, and...
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|Books are not needed because one can read information on computers.agree or disagree
Writing Feedbackkiana - Aug 15, 2011 / usnanathan - Aug 16, 2011
|MCAT-The nature of democracy requires that its citizens be dependent upon one another
3 - THank you!...
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|The production and sale of cigarettes should be made illegal.
3 - Hi, Susan Thanks for the correctings. I know the arugment is kind of week, but what I want to...
Writing Feedbackvanessa000 - Aug 14, 2011 / vanessa000 - Aug 15, 2011
|"Be Happy It Happened" - Using A Favorite quotation from an essay or book..
5 - Thanks. We just read "Of Smells" and "Of Studies" in class and I feel like reading more essays like...
Writing FeedbackMcK_Allie - Aug 14, 2011 / McK_Allie - Aug 15, 2011
|"training is more important than natural talent?" - IELTS WRITING TASK
Writing FeedbackIeltslearner - Aug 14, 2011 / Ieltslearner - Aug 15, 2011
|"Just another Thursday" - personal writing
3 - thanks for you edit. the formatting and the lack of the punctuation marks after the last words resulted during...
Writing Feedbackgreenfish16 - Aug 14, 2011 / greenfish16 - Aug 15, 2011
|People should listen to others criticism and think if it's to worth accept it
Writing FeedbackEricGreen - Aug 14, 2011 / EricGreen - Aug 14, 2011
|I prefer to work for a lager company - more chance for promotion
4 - Your writing is great! But if some words can be replaced by others , I mean diversity, such as...
Writing Feedbackshipima - Aug 14, 2011 / Icecreamquest - Aug 25, 2011
|Censorship! - prohibiting people from their own rights
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 13, 2011 / start208 - Aug 14, 2011
|How to reduce YOUTH UNEMPLOYMENT?
2 - Good work but you can do better. if the prompt is about ways to improve the employment situation, then...
Writing FeedbackCANDYCAT - Aug 13, 2011 / greenfish16 - Aug 14, 2011
|"Teamwork = Potential Risks" - IBT integrated writing about team work
NEW - In the lecture, the speaker shows his disapproval toward the statements made in the reading in three aspects. In...
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|All round or specialized? Broad knowledge and specialized knowledge.
7 - We have graded and submitted your essay into our database. Please email us @ email@example.com to get your FREE...
Writing FeedbackAuguste - Aug 12, 2011 / awengerse - Aug 17, 2011
|Ielts Topic: 'peaceful atmosphere' - Some people prefer to live in a small town.
3 - Good effort. The conclusion is ok. But the introduction is crappy. You should not start your essay with what...
Writing Feedbackhvthoteen - Aug 12, 2011 / greenfish16 - Aug 14, 2011
|The problem of ''helicopter parents''
NEW - There are growing number of the so-called ''helicopter parents''.In this essay, you should analyse some reasons and effects for...
Writing Feedbacksamuel11023 - Aug 12, 2011 / — -
|[TOEFL] pieces of advice that you would give visitors coming to your country.
3 - You almost need a communication with someone- delect "almost", then take Susan's correction. You might have problems, or you...
Writing FeedbackHusseinova - Aug 12, 2011 / vanessa000 - Aug 15, 2011
|"the effects of birth order" - Multiple alternative explanations <GRE Prompt>
3 - Thanks Susan. Wanted to know if there were other alternative explanations that you could think of based on...
Writing Feedbacknkhurana - Aug 12, 2011 / nkhurana - Aug 15, 2011
|Greece - which country would you visit if you have 2 weeks free time?
Writing Feedbackpooya p - Aug 12, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 14, 2011
|"changes in our life leads us in a progress" - an essay about changes
NEW - promt.Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change.Others,however,think that change is always a...
Writing Feedbackvanzbenzon - Aug 12, 2011 / — -
|Why do we need to study other cultures?
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 11, 2011 / start208 - Aug 12, 2011
|Our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces human interaction?
NEW - Some people believe that our ever-increasing use of technology significantly reduces our opportunities for human interaction. Other people believe...
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 11, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: 'tension & misunderstanding' - international tourism
NEW - International tourism is the biggest industry in the world now. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between...
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|"independence from their parents" - Should people live with parents ?
4 - This sentenceis eloquent but inefficient!It takes too many words to express the thought. But it is so powerful...
Writing Feedbacksubhash_ghosh - Aug 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2011
|IELTS------build for certain purposes our good exterior?
NEW - It is more important for a building to serve certain purposes than just to look good. Do you agree...
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|Writing ielts task 1_ Diagram: The water cycle
4 - yes i also agree that you should use the diagram below or above or whatever since in your answer,...
Writing Feedbacklylong - Aug 11, 2011 / bangshws - Sep 6, 2011
|Friendship-We will never apart!
3 - Thanks Emmawyy ..uh,i knew.i was no that good in English actually as this is my second language. Thanks for...
Writing FeedbackMissHanis - Aug 11, 2011 / MissHanis - Aug 12, 2011
|Communication through technology should replace all other forms of communication.....
3 - Thx Susan for your valuable feedback. Next time I will take care of avioding silly mistakes and be judicial...
Writing Feedbackbimala73 - Aug 11, 2011 / bimala73 - Aug 15, 2011
|The purpose of education should be to provide students with a value system
Writing Feedbackghafarimahsa - Aug 11, 2011 / ghafarimahsa - Aug 19, 2011
|Should the youngsters have part-time jobs?
Writing Feedbackaleafsun - Aug 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2011
|students should live at home with their parents or should live at school. Discuss.
2 - "Both sides seem to have some elements of truth that need to be discussed in detail" --> I think...
Writing Feedbacknjf20032005 - Aug 10, 2011 / hvthoteen - Aug 11, 2011
|IELTS--the proportion of elderly people is increasing steadily, positive or negative?
NEW - In many countries, the proportion of elderly people is increasing steadily. Does this trend have more positive than negative...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Aug 10, 2011 / — -
|"What was your best writing experience?" - Review my narrative essay
NEW - Write a narrative about your experiences with writing. Generally, what have they been like? What was your best writing...
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|"God defines me" - someone who defines me as a person
NEW - There is someone in my life that defines me as a person-I've always been compared to my older sisters,...
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|'Stress needs some causes to be developed'; Ways of controlling our own stress
NEW - HOW WE CAN CONTROL OUR STRESS? Philosophers say that everything needs some causes for its creation. Of course...
Writing Feedbackamir50 - Aug 10, 2011 / — -
|More and more village workers are not deciding to live in the city and travel in work
3 - "a tremendous number of workers numbers of people is escaping from countryside to urban areas" --> a tremendous number...
Writing FeedbackAlisha123 - Aug 10, 2011 / hvthoteen - Aug 11, 2011
|IELTS - Is Capital Punishment essential to control violence in society?
3 - Hello, Judy. I think you should state your opinion more clearly. Honestly, I cannot find your viewpoint after...
Writing FeedbackTTJudy - Aug 10, 2011 / ekekek - Aug 10, 2011
|My Essay for my First Academic English class: Should The Death Penalty be Illegal?
NEW - Last night, I was watching a Japanese movie called "Criminal Psychology: Personal Behavior Analysis" with my friend, David, at...
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|Do sorrows take much of our life? do we live to suffer?
NEW - do we live to suffer? In every day life, people enjoy some exciting things and live some happy moments,...
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 9, 2011 / — -
|living in a foriegn country can not be better than your own.discuss
Writing Feedbackstart208 - Aug 9, 2011 / start208 - Aug 10, 2011
|The role of talent in success - born with or received through hard work?
7 - First,point out your view in the first paragragh clearly; 2 or 3 paragraghs to support your view; A concession...
Writing Feedbackmkeyan - Aug 9, 2011 / Helen L - Aug 10, 2011
|[Toefl] Do we need different sources of news to know about truth?
NEW - Topic: We need to have different sources of news and information to know which one is real or who...
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|fashionably to be concerned; Young are more aware of issues like the environment
3 - well, as the essay title is the contrast of three aspacts between today and the past, so you need...
Writing Feedbackemphatic - Aug 9, 2011 / ekekek - Aug 11, 2011
|People should have hobbies and do activities that are different from their own work
2 - In order to relieve themselves from daily heavy workloads , some people feel that hobbies and activities much different...
Writing FeedbackHelen L - Aug 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Aug 9, 2011
|Tofle topic: a company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near you
NEW - Topic: a company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages...
Writing Feedbackhvthoteen - Aug 9, 2011 / — -
|Opinion of the effect of television on individuals or on nations
NEW - Topic: In a review of Don DeLillo's novel White Noise, Jayne Anne Phillips writes that the characters are...
Writing Feedbackboxu53 - Aug 8, 2011 / — -
|[TOEFL] Which is better: to work for a company or own business? If you're active..
4 - moderators, please correct my mistakes, i`m not satisfied with these(( People, please don`t write unnecessary posts, my post disappears...
Writing FeedbackHusseinova - Aug 8, 2011 / Husseinova - Aug 14, 2011
|IELTS - illness prevention, promoting healthy lifestyles?
Writing Feedbackekekek - Aug 8, 2011 / boxu53 - Aug 8, 2011
|IELTS; International organizations; international aid is necessary
NEW - International organizations have failed to help everyone who needs help so they should only focus on helping the poor...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Aug 8, 2011 / — -
|IELTS: People's interaction and relationships vs technology
8 - Thank you...
Writing Feedbackhuajianmeng - Aug 8, 2011 / huajianmeng - Aug 11, 2011
|Is the help from government necessary ?
NEW - It is true that people can solve most of their problems by themselves or with the help from their...
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|Today's world is full of cruelty and violence; Problems with student behaviour
4 - I think you should improve your introduction part. You need to illustrate "this tendency" more clearly. ...
Writing Feedbackemphatic - Aug 8, 2011 / ekekek - Aug 11, 2011
|TOEFL: To become well-informed, one has to get information from different sources
2 - Don't start with NOWADAYS, it will give the rater bad impression. Too many people use NOWADS. Try other options,...
Writing FeedbackHelen L - Aug 8, 2011 / jostar - Aug 9, 2011
|TOEFL:To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving~
Writing FeedbackHelen L - Aug 8, 2011 / biran - Aug 8, 2011
|FTMS Student Services Department event essay
NEW - With the blissful lights and the orderable decoration with theme of FTMS Staff Get Together & Breaking fast took...
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|IELTS Government-sponsored space travel wasted money and effort of our generation
2 - Spaced travel, likeenormousthe dream of scientists, has made a great achievementwas achieved when the spaceman had the first...
Writing Feedbackinskychen - Aug 7, 2011 / dumi - Aug 7, 2011
|Improving public transportation could reduce air pollution in a city
NEW - Some people believe that governments should spend more money on developing public transportation, such as buses, trains, and subways....
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|working from home or from your company's office which is better.
Writing Feedbackoluwakemi - Aug 7, 2011 / jenny328 - Aug 18, 2011
|I had power, but I seek happiness (examination)
Writing FeedbackGladys1620 - Aug 7, 2011 / Gladys1620 - Aug 19, 2011
|"Our Challenging Lives at Laconia State School" - How to eliminate "to-be" verbs
4 - I do agree with you, whole heartedly, because if Jocelyn is half as intelligent and compassionate and well spoken...
Writing Feedbacklilacmay4 - Aug 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Aug 9, 2011
|"I'm on plane to Africa, WHAT!!" - FIRST UNDERGRAD ESSAY
6 - morganday123 Some questions: Is there a maximum amount of pgs your essay can be??? So what you mean is...
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