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|SAT essay: Can success be disastrous?
2 - 1)When one becomes successful,he or she becomes haughty and arrogant 2)Success is about setting your goals,making life what you...
Writing FeedbackMLE27 - Nov 4, 2010 / Kimayu - Nov 7, 2010
|Education: compare and contrast state-run and privately-owned
NEW - Hi everyone please help me improving my IELTS writing. Having a good education is one of the most important...
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|Are we too dependent on computers?
Writing Feedbackmohab1220 - Nov 4, 2010 / mohab1220 - Nov 18, 2010
|Should successful sports player get a great deal of money??
4 - However, some people think sports players are sacrificed (maybe just change to sacrifice)their lives...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 4, 2010 / anthony1993 - Nov 13, 2010
|TOEFL "Why are some people attracted to dangerous sports?" - to fight boredom
3 - It is well written, indeed. I see you used three arguments here. What I recommend is that you only...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Nov 3, 2010 / Paullee - Nov 19, 2010
|Is cheating in school and work out of control?
2 - Cheating nowadays is associated with many different words, but actually it has they have the same meaning. There...
Writing Feedbackmohab1220 - Nov 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|globalization as it relates to politics & the society in small and developing society
3 - Start with a capital letter: As governance structures are established at a global level to deal with the growing...
Writing Feedbackkaycaste - Nov 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|What do people do and think when they decide to do shopping? (Essay for LLI class)
2 - === Nobody can deny the importance of shopping's effect on people's daily lives . Although shopping has become...
Writing Feedbackdmonkey - Nov 2, 2010 / EF_Susan - Nov 7, 2010
|developing a strong outline for essay: Banning Smoking in Public Places
Writing FeedbackEmone93 - Nov 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 12, 2010
|From China to America: Culture Shock (food, manner) - living in a new country
7 - Kevin: You are sooo sweet! I am not a good writer at all, but thanks for the confidence-boost. I...
Writing FeedbackKianna - Nov 2, 2010 / Kianna - Nov 25, 2010
|"The Business of being Born" essay
Writing FeedbackFlutter92 - Nov 1, 2010 / Flutter92 - Nov 20, 2010
|IELTS : Why should human beings travel to outer space?
Writing Feedbackanb_duck - Nov 1, 2010 / anb_duck - Nov 12, 2010
|MONEY is not the most important aspect of a job in certain cases!
4 - Many people need a job for financial purposes. or Many people need a job for a financial purpose. ...
Writing Feedbacko0oSaiyukio0o - Nov 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 11, 2010
|Isuues: Student behaviour at school
NEW - Q:In many countries, schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the cause of this?...
Writing Feedbackriny - Nov 1, 2010 / — -
|IELTS: Benefits of students doing extra jobs
4 - Your vocabulary is great, but your writing would be stronger if you eliminated unnecessary qualifiers/adjectives. I also noticed some...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Nov 1, 2010 / gracedrift - Nov 2, 2010
|Vietnamese iconic festival dish
NEW - I would like to introduce with you about New year rice cake (bánh Tét) as Vietnamese iconic festival dish....
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|IELTS- The freedom of expression, no government restrictions
5 - Here is a run on sentence. It needs a conjunction: This is because human rights are acknowledged by society,...
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 9, 2010
|Educational Success - view on single-sex education essay
Writing Feedbacksheikh_mohamed - Oct 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2010
|Government is a necessary evil - Can success be disastrous? - essay help
2 - Undoubtedly, human ought to be success.---a generalzation & change success to successful your intro leaves a lot to...
Writing Feedbackoeglairt - Oct 30, 2010 / em2always - Oct 30, 2010
|The effect of advertising is limited and not strong enough to influence people's eating habits.
NEW - The effect of advertising is limited to unhealthy eating habits Currently, the trend of advertising explosion seems more...
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|Help-is-needed-Essay about Traffic jams- Causes and Solutions
5 - Although there are some causes leading to aggravating traffic congestion, but effective solutions to alleviate the crowd are still...
Writing Feedbackshaaw - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 7, 2010
|City or village - what is better?
3 - This style of writing has something special about it. It really carries my attention along. In my view,...
Writing FeedbackTaniad - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2010
|IELTS: students can learn outside the textbook and classroom with a real working experiences
3 - Hi Keven, This is taught by an IELTS examiner. His reasons for writing like this have something to...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 29, 2010 / adriennelin - Nov 20, 2010
|IELTS: Paying more money is the only motivation to make employees work harder...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 6, 2010
|Human needs for farmland, housing and industry are more than saving land
4 - Dumi made a good correction here, especially at the beginning. Here is a way you could use "contemporary if...
Writing Feedbackwkp - Oct 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 5, 2010
|Laws should not be rigid. Instead, they should be flexible enough .......
3 - Laws are formed for the benefit of the people living in the country. It is therefore t heir responsibility...
Writing Feedbackpcube - Oct 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 4, 2010
|Essay:education, meet the needs of individuals and societies
3 - All in all, education should contain a variety of contents to produce educated people such as... then restate your...
Writing Feedbackqsy - Oct 28, 2010 / adriennelin - Oct 29, 2010
|"encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school" - agree?
NEW - In some countries people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting...
Writing FeedbackFarnaz - Oct 28, 2010 / — -
|Maintaining Individualism - Informal Essay
2 - Hi Tyler, I think you meant to use "conforming" here: Therefore, it is possible to gain success without...
Writing Feedbackyumyum242 - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2010
|Identifying with the villain, a figure who wasn't a hero
3 - Can ----> will or Could ---> would but not can---> would If people are prohibited from exploring for that...
Writing Feedbacknavalava - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Is the Internet itself bad for students?
2 - First of all, I believe all of you here are quite familiar with the internet.that sounds really awkward what...
Writing Feedbacknhilun - Oct 27, 2010 / midnight - Oct 27, 2010
|"Choosing a house pet and pet responsibilities" - this is a classification essay
Writing Feedbackkrystidavis - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Susan - Oct 31, 2010
|IELTS: The increasing business and culture contact between countries.
6 - You did! That is correct. But it could be much better. You could spend a whole paragraph expressing...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Should people never be satisfied with what they have? Jane Austine's pride
Writing Feedbackrenyu199014 - Oct 27, 2010 / renyu199014 - Oct 28, 2010
|Hawaii and Georgia - life comparison. Idea about conclusion?
2 - Be careful... it seems like you are calling Georgia and Hawaii cities when they are states. Later on in...
Writing Feedbackvsam - Oct 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|Internet censorship + Mandatory college curriculum - essays for CLEP english comp
2 - Capitalize Internet. Censorship pertaining to the internet is an extremely volatile topic. --- don't begin with a statement...
Writing Feedbackleahh - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 2, 2010
|What in our life does have more relevance: the experience or some characteristics we are born with?
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Oct 26, 2010 / sweetheart87 - Nov 2, 2010
|Fixed Punishment Vs Discretionary Punishment - Discuss
NEW - Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the...
Writing Feedbacksimi - Oct 26, 2010 / — -
|What is the best way to pursue happiness? In class essay assignment
Writing Feedbackkiller12125 - Oct 26, 2010 / killer12125 - Nov 1, 2010
|IELTS Compare the pros and cons of following as media for communicating information
NEW - Q: Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following as media for communicating information. State which you...
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 26, 2010 / — -
|Careers, living costs, jobs - life in a city vs. a countryside
Writing FeedbackSharonSian - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 1, 2010
|International effort in solving Enviromental problems - My final try before IELTS
2 - Let's put that first sentence together with the paragraph that follows it so that it all becomes one paragraph....
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 26, 2010
|Nature and nurture - are people born for certain talents?
NEW - It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents for instance for sport or music and...
Writing Feedbacksimi - Oct 25, 2010 / — -
|"brutal force by the army and police service" - Essay about Christmas
2 - Use a comma instead of a semi-colon: refurnishing of one's home, while the ... I feel like that...
Writing Feedbackchrometom - Oct 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2010
|Responsibility for the products safety: CLEP English composition practice essay
3 - Super! Thank you, this is really helping me to formulate a plan for tackling the actual essay prompt. The...
Writing Feedbackleahh - Oct 24, 2010 / leahh - Nov 4, 2010
|"About my flight and hijackers" - Improving on my narrative essay for O levels
3 - Well you did indeed show good use of language... very impressive. You write very well. I guess...
Writing FeedbackShane Valesquez - Oct 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 28, 2010
|Regret (the graffiti walls in the cell) - manslaughter essay
4 - WOW, is all I can say. The real, raw emotions that come with such a powerful essay was overwhelming...
Writing FeedbackShane Valesquez - Oct 24, 2010 / donkeykong98732 - Oct 28, 2010
|Innovation and technology" report on advertisement essay
2 - number agree =ment: Innovation and technology; these are the cornerstones of our modern... ...with the associated attributes of...
Writing Feedbackhannahkim91 - Oct 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|Smog: causes and solutions
5 - EF KEVIN thank you very much for your comments. as you said there was a word missing there when...
Writing FeedbackThmn - Oct 23, 2010 / Thmn - Oct 29, 2010
|TOEFL Essay "What single item would you take on a one year trip?"
3 - To start with the reasonsFor some reason , I believe my personal item should be something that can intrigue...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 23, 2010 / jazzmeen - Oct 24, 2010
|Chinese Music, Language and Literature
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|TOEFL; Judging a person is not an easy task because the human nature is so complicated
4 - This needs a comma: To begin with, the external appearance does not reveal one's exact character and personality, although...
Writing Feedbacklabroy - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|"heart-ache and identity transformation" - Cbest, negative experience essay
Writing Feedbackbobo4398 - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|media is responsible to create violence in young are u agree or disagree?
Writing Feedbackshakila - Oct 22, 2010 / oeglairt - Oct 30, 2010
|Dou agree with keeping traditional skills alive?
Writing Feedbackriny - Oct 22, 2010 / riny - Oct 27, 2010
|"a room in the Woodbridge Mental Institute" - The most enjoyable moment
Writing Feedbackmin - Oct 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 26, 2010
|Is there anything we can do to stop crime?
3 - Education is an essential element in reducing the crime rate in the long run. According to the recent...
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 22, 2010 / bakamanju - Oct 23, 2010
|IELTS WRITING: bad information in film books and internet should be controlled?
3 - hi if u add some more counter argumment it will be good.Because the way of topic is like that..''give...
Writing Feedbackeaglet008 - Oct 21, 2010 / sobin - Nov 19, 2010
|IELTS writing: should Art be ignored by the government?
4 - I think your essay structure is good enough, you discussed good point of art. 'I would like to...
Writing Feedbackeaglet008 - Oct 21, 2010 / riny - Oct 22, 2010
|ielts essay: what is happiness? I still do not find the answer
2 - I think this essay answers the question, but it seems to lack depth. You address the issue that happiness...
Writing Feedbackiishine - Oct 20, 2010 / akshays1993 - Oct 21, 2010
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