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|TASK-2: schools are no longer necessary because there is so much information available through WWW
4 - fiZa, here is the scoring breakdown: TA - 4, your opening paraphrase and body of paragraphs are only...
Writing Feedbacksfiza - Nov 23, 2017 / Holt - Nov 23, 2017
|Students leave high school without learning the way how to manage their money. What are the reasons?
3 - Dear@quynhvan, I have read your essay, I think you need follow the structure of essay for writing otherwise...
Writing Feedbackquynhvan - Nov 23, 2017 / sfiza - Nov 23, 2017
|Both charts gave the readers a glance of the education rates of different levels across the world
2 - Ellie, this essay will get an automatic failing score because you wrote only 141 words when the minimum is...
Writing Feedbackellie8615 - Nov 22, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|Single-gender profession brings more advantages owing to numerous differences in sexual physiques
Writing Feedbacklinhluong158 - Nov 22, 2017 / linhluong158 - Nov 23, 2017
|It is observed that some languages is diminishing as time goes. Saving those or not?
3 - Sumerlin, your introduction is not perfect. In fact, you show that you did not understand the prompt discussion instruction...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 22, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|Product variety and supply chain
3 - Chen, what exactly is the point of this statement? I know from the presentation that this is not for...
Writing FeedbackCHEN ZHIXIN - Nov 22, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|IELTS WRITNG 1: The total number of Olympic medals won by twelve different countries.
3 - I also find it struggling to describe a bar char every time when I check with the sample answers....
Writing FeedbackThuyLinhMarC - Nov 22, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 27, 2017
|All young people should be encouraged to try new sports, including extreme sports?
3 - Kathrin, what is the complete prompt that you are responding to? What kind of test is this for? Is...
Writing FeedbackKathrin1221 - Nov 21, 2017 / Holt - Nov 22, 2017
|task 2 essay : Gender Inequality Aspect In The Professional Zone
8 - Some spelling mistakes For example Although nowadays we are ... Frist of all First? Aim for long sentences. Normally,...
Writing FeedbackNguyenBinh - Nov 21, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|Essay about general&specific education - Writing IELTS Task 2
3 - I could praphrase the introduction in this following sentences below: In several nations, students are taught many subjects to...
Writing FeedbackRzkMg - Nov 21, 2017 / Richard Le - Nov 21, 2017
|Some people are afraid of new things therefore they stick to what they know
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 20, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 21, 2017
|Companies should actively recruit younger employees who have greater potential to learn
4 - @kuan446697 your line of reasoning in the essay is faulty. You have not appropriately defended your first line of...
Writing Feedbackkuan446697 - Nov 20, 2017 / Holt - Nov 21, 2017
|Proportion of older and young people in the society
2 - Arlen, while your opening statement is a somewhat accurate depiction of the original prompt, it falls under the minimum...
Writing FeedbackArlen - Nov 20, 2017 / Holt - Nov 21, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - TABLE - AVERAGE MONTHLY RAINFALL - Woodsville and Blacksboro
4 - Hello, here are my advises, I think the first paragraph should be like introduction, you shouldn't mention any...
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham - Nov 20, 2017 / Arlen - Nov 20, 2017
|People today suffer from pressures different from that present in the past. Life is more stressful.
4 - I believe that you should make your sentences longer as that what they are looking for as far as...
Writing Feedbacknooraleslam - Nov 19, 2017 / PeterBrown - Nov 28, 2017
|Today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives?
5 - @pier Thanks for your recommendations, it's helpful! @summerlin Thank you very much! @Holt I will rethink about...
Writing Feedbackvum - Nov 19, 2017 / vum - Nov 20, 2017
|Calories, protein - how much people need? Nutrient absorption in different parts of the world.
3 - Lin, your opening summary is incomplete. The various regions on the world should have been enumerated in the second...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 19, 2017 / Holt - Nov 20, 2017
|The international community should reduce or eliminate the debt of the world's poorest countries
5 - Thanks! summerlin I am also referring to Youtube English learning channel which helps me to work on my...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 19, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 20, 2017
|Should schools allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as to their libraries?
4 - @Holt I thank you so much for your constructive comment. This is an IELTS essay, and due to the...
Writing FeedbackAnn Ngo - Nov 19, 2017 / Ann Ngo - Nov 19, 2017
|Writing letters on a paper is obsolete nowadays?
6 - @chinkybehl22 Thanks a million ! I really appreciate your effort trying to help my with my essay !...
Writing FeedbackTuan Anh 16 - Nov 19, 2017 / Tuan Anh 16 - Nov 19, 2017
|The top performing sportsmen earn huge amount of money as compared to people in other professions
5 - @chinkybehl22 hello, I have read your whole essay. as per my knowledge I have rearrange your essay to...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 18, 2017 / sfiza - Dec 1, 2017
|Report for a university lecturer describing the information on Japanese tourist traveling abroad
3 - It is always my pleasure to read your feedback. The bar chart illustrates the percentage of some hurdles...
Writing FeedbackRidho Kodel - Nov 18, 2017 / Ridho Kodel - Nov 22, 2017
|TOPIC:- Crime is a problem all over the world, crime prevention will make no difference.
2 - P1 ... unlawful activities, etc." (I hope your intention to use etc. is to imply that the the reader...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 17, 2017 / Ridho Kodel - Nov 17, 2017
|IELTS WRITING TASK 1 - PIE CHART - AGRICULTURAL PRODUCTION
Writing Feedbackhunghoiham - Nov 17, 2017 / summerlin - Nov 19, 2017
|A paragraph about "Causes of children obesity"
4 - I recommend using e-prime. It allows your paragraph to have more specific information. Basically, you do not use any...
Writing Feedbackfrankovidaxt - Nov 17, 2017 / sugarcanexox - Nov 17, 2017
|The graph provides an overview of the percentages of people whose age is 65 or more
4 - The graph provides an overview... The graph shows the percentages of people from the United States, Japan, and Sweden...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 16, 2017 / rowliejohnflores - Nov 17, 2017
|IELTS essay Task 2. English as a global language. Advantages overweight the disadvantages? 250words
5 - Dariela, you totally misunderstood the prompt requirement. This is an "emotional" essay response. Note the existence of the word...
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 16, 2017 / Holt - Nov 17, 2017
|We should make factories and other forms of industry pay for all the pollution that they have caused
3 - Dear Chinky, your essay seemed nice to me. However, I can give you some suggestions that you might want...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 16, 2017 / eeeeeeehsan - Nov 16, 2017
|Different opinions regarding weather children should be taught to be competitive or cooperative
Writing Feedbackeeeeeeehsan - Nov 16, 2017 / eeeeeeehsan - Nov 16, 2017
|A significant fall in the proportion of production of energy from coal in four European countries
4 - Dear @pier @Holt Thanks for your detail feedback, I ask your consent to record your feedback as my...
Writing FeedbackRidho Kodel - Nov 16, 2017 / Ridho Kodel - Nov 16, 2017
|TOEFL independent writing prompt: kids are obsessed with video games and that causes health problems
4 - @yooceii, your essay will not pass the test in an actual setting for a serious number of reasons. The...
Writing Feedbackyooceii - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 16, 2017
|Universities should spend the same budget for libraries and sports activities.
2 - Good discussion and points. There are few grammatical mistake which I would like to highlight: 3rd paragraph: ......
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 15, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 16, 2017
|IELTES Task 2: Online shopping is replacing shopping in stores.
8 - yes. online shopping is replacing in stores.Today people are very busy that they wont time for shopping.The one who...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 15, 2017 / brucedeniger - Dec 11, 2017
|What the graph shows, what is the type of graph shown? What is the data?
2 - Ridho, you only wrote a summary overview in this essay. This is not the complete essay at all. I...
Writing FeedbackRidho Kodel - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Every success is because of hard working, luck has not much in common with success.
5 - @naseernasrati, You did a great job. But still, you need more practice same as all of us:). I am...
Writing Feedbacknaseernasrati - Nov 15, 2017 / Ashkan123 - Nov 19, 2017
|Should the community service in the high school be built by a volunteer or compulsory system
4 - Hi i have a suggestion about the whole style of writing an agree/disagree essay follow the (predicted) essay respond...
Writing Feedbackal50332 - Nov 15, 2017 / naseernasrati - Nov 15, 2017
|Idea of going abroad for university study is an exciting prospect for many people
6 - Hello, Thanks for all the valuable feedback, based on the feedback I wrote it again. Please suggest if...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 15, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 16, 2017
|Identity, Turkey's history and conflict with the west
3 - It will be really helpful, if you can write the actual topic in order to seek feedback. There are...
Writing Feedbackj9622 - Nov 15, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 19, 2017
|Does the progress is always good for the society? Why? Or why not?
2 - @al50332 Please provide the original prompt that you are trying to respond to because I need it to base...
Writing Feedbackal50332 - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|It is better for children to start learning English language at primary school already
2 - @al50332 Your opening paraphrase is off course, your discussion paragraphs do not follow the required information presentation, and you...
Writing Feedbackal50332 - Nov 15, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Young members of a society wants independence from their parents
4 - Overall good read, there are few sentence construction errors for which I would like to give suggestions: 1st...
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 14, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 17, 2017
|I have to write about one-day excursion - report
3 - Nastya, for starters, you can correct the title of the essay from Flesh Mob to "Flash Mob" which is...
Writing Feedbackravenrebel - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|Sport is reducing international controversies and leads citizens to express their patriotism
2 - Dang, the above example is inaccurate and does not properly represent the prompt requirements in the paraphrased statement that...
Writing Feedbackdangtam - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 15, 2017
|ILETS Task Line graph: Precantage of workers with Illness Absence
6 - @Holt It's just my reading, I am not confident enough be sure about my understanding. I wanted to make...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 14, 2017 / summerlin - Nov 19, 2017
|Some people argue that cars should be banned in city centres while others are against this idea.
5 - Chinky, did you provide us with the complete original prompt? The reason I am asking is because the prompt...
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2, University education should be free for everyone
3 - Hi overall i would like to write you a brief description of a good and academic essay guide, which...
Writing Feedbackmasako - Nov 14, 2017 / naseernasrati - Nov 14, 2017
|The government spending on sport training for top players as compared to everyone
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|People should sometimes do things they do not enjoy doing as it can be beneficial
3 - Trang, you cannot write more than 5 sentences per paragraph for this test. You should also do your best...
Writing Feedbacktrang2311 - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|Our lives has been changed by the Internet significantly in recent years. IELTS task 2
4 - Lin, this essay will receive an automatic failing score because you did not discuss the essay in the manner...
Writing Feedbacksummerlin - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing task 2. Resembling of most countries today. Positive or negative development?
Writing Feedbackcuban27 - Nov 13, 2017 / cuban27 - Nov 14, 2017
|IELTS writing part2, congestion and traffic jams are a common and major problem in most cities.
8 - Kay, you did not paraphrase the original prompt enough for it to not be considered a plagiarism or cut...
Writing Feedbackmacbz - Nov 13, 2017 / Holt - Nov 14, 2017
|Nowadays children are consuming too many sugar based drinks. what are the reasons and solutions?
Writing Feedbackchinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 14, 2017
|Essay about dicussing 2 ways (Building subway and building more wider road) to ruduce traffic jams
3 - @Holt Dear Contributor, Thank you for your advice Yes, this essay is for tast 2 in ielts exam. Below...
Writing FeedbackDuong Dung - Nov 13, 2017 / Duong Dung - Nov 13, 2017
|TASK 1: Recycling Rate of Selected Materials: 1982-2010
3 - @Holt Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it. Actually, I had difficulties when writing this essay. You're right,...
Writing Feedbacknisarahma - Nov 12, 2017 / nisarahma - Nov 12, 2017
|"Never, never give up" that translated as we should never stop pursuing our goals through hard work
Writing Feedbackpier - Nov 12, 2017 / ChannelBlonde - Nov 12, 2017
|Research Paper on Anabolic Steroid Abuse (Need peer review)
2 - Briana, you need to write a stronger introduction to this research paper. Before you launch into the discussion of...
Writing FeedbackBMass20 - Nov 12, 2017 / Holt - Nov 12, 2017
|The pie charts show the expenditure of a school in the UK in three separate years over 20 years
8 - @Holt Thanks for your bonus advice and examples, I really appreciate it. But I am still a little confused...
Writing Feedbackniennien260 - Nov 12, 2017 / niennien260 - Nov 13, 2017
|College Mid-Term Essay about facilities funding
4 - Deadline is 3 days away, I'm starting to get worried a little bit... I'd be really glad for some...
Writing FeedbackPlutonus - Nov 11, 2017 / Plutonus - Nov 13, 2017
|Sharing is a vital step in conducting research and doing business
Writing FeedbackQianting - Nov 11, 2017 / Qianting - Nov 27, 2017
|TOEFL independent writing - Why go to university?
6 - Please find below the sentence correction which I would like to make: ... is a bridge for the...
Writing Feedbackyauyau727 - Nov 10, 2017 / chinkybehl22 - Nov 13, 2017
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