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|Should we encourage children to be competitive or cooperative?
9 - Yes, Sir, I will! :D Write concisely, don't contradict myself, choose one argument and stick to it!...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Aug 15, 2010 / adriennelin - Aug 17, 2010
|GRE:ISSUE218 - "In order for any work of art-whether film, literature, sculpture,
Writing FeedbackEdward_L - Aug 15, 2010 / Edward_L - Aug 19, 2010
|Transportation is one of the source which convert area from rural to urban
5 - Transportation is one of the source factors which convert areas from rural to urban. It functions to...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Aug 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2010
|How important are staff working condition? Employers role?
2 - In many companies, staff working condition is a matter of great con cern. --- This is a difficult sentence...
Writing Feedbackthaonhung - Aug 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2010
|Playing sports teaches people more lessons about life.
2 - First and foremost, if people keep on training hard for a long period of ti me, they will have...
Writing Feedbacktingting - Aug 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2010
|IELTS Essay : Role of mobile phones.
2 - Work on singular and plural: Mobile phones and its their... This is even better: Mobile phones and...
Writing Feedbacknishanthand - Aug 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2010
|My relationship with my family (mother / father / step parents / siblings)
5 - You need a comma and an apostrophe: My parents were not married when I was born, and because of...
Writing FeedbackSocialorphan - Aug 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2010
|Gap years between finishing high school and starting university.
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Aug 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 24, 2010
|GRE AW eassy_ how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.
2 - When it comes to solving the above problem, the first question we have to answer is "What is GOOD...
Writing Feedbackandy_Z - Aug 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 15, 2010
|Choose one resource that is disappearing to save it - toefl test
4 - I like your first sentence a lot! Within Among the resources that are most critical is water....
Writing Feedbackrobchavar - Aug 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 15, 2010
|Schools should ask students to evaluate their teachers. Do you agree or disagree?
8 - Students should get to judge their teachers. It could effect their the futures of their peers and people younger...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Aug 13, 2010 / kaylakay2012 - Aug 21, 2010
|Low salary and more vacation time or high salary and less vacation - TEOFL
3 - Add one more sentence to that first paragraph. Make it a sentence that tells the main idea about why...
Writing FeedbackMissS1987 - Aug 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 15, 2010
|Some young people believe not staying with parents and some believe in staying.
2 - Hello Yats, I hope Maria's corrections are easy for you to understand. Do you have any questions? I also...
Writing Feedbackyats - Aug 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 15, 2010
|Why do some students study abroad? Review my TOEFL.
4 - ...that these situation are more common.--- is this supposed to say 'common'?? Also, I think you should list...
Writing Feedbackclaros - Aug 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 15, 2010
|Environemtal problem, to inculcate a sense of genuine commitment
4 - I think it is better to be more conventional in this intro: Boosting the price of fuel is one...
Writing FeedbacklittleJenny - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 14, 2010
|A two-paragraph essay about speaking in front of a crowd of people.
4 - I think it should be like this: They have are not used to speaking reasonably and choosing proper...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 14, 2010
|CBEST essay (Hiking and camping): Memorable childhood experience
3 - After this sentence, I think you should add a thesis statement that intriguingly expresses the main theme of the...
Writing Feedbackfenrir - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 14, 2010
|self assesment : attitude towards writing
Writing Feedbackmcolome - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 13, 2010
|People attend university because they want to prepare themselves for future career
Writing Feedbacknhoc_tini - Aug 10, 2010 / nhoc_tini - Aug 11, 2010
|Arts such as painting,music and dancing are the most colorful compositions.
2 - We all know that nearly all the outstanding humans have some hobbies involving art.---- good point!!! This is a...
Writing Feedbackmathsgao - Aug 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 11, 2010
|Summarise information about expenses on different items in five different countries in 2002
Writing Feedbackgugacb - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 13, 2010
|A paragraph about something that makes me angry.
2 - Having picnics at beaches and lakes is not enjoyable because of sickening smells. "Unenjoyable" is not in my...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Susan - Aug 11, 2010
|GRE AW eassy_ individuals VS groups of people in the significance of history study
5 - Overwatch_UA Hi Alexandr Thank you very much for your revised work!! I will make the sentences more...
Writing Feedbackandy_Z - Aug 11, 2010 / andy_Z - Aug 13, 2010
|Parents are the best teachers?--Toefl essay
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 16, 2010
|TOEFL Essay: Are there times when lying is acceptable?
2 - Since childhood, we have been told that we should be honest no matter what happens. A lie can...
Writing Feedbackcanto - Aug 11, 2010 / EF_Susan - Aug 11, 2010
|IELTS Essay : Should Society Ban All Forms of Advertising?
8 - Good points, Preacherjew, so you think it is not good to ban advertising. I guess I think it is...
Writing Feedbacknishanthand - Aug 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 14, 2010
|My Dad; He always stands by my side - A Person That Has Influenced My Life
Writing Feedbackqbt512 - Aug 10, 2010 / mikkychy - Aug 12, 2010
|GRE-Should governments solve the immediate or the anticipated problems?
4 - Is this supposed to say closer? -----> Local governments are more closed closer to the common people and...
Writing Feedbackbroad - Aug 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 11, 2010
|my Toefl: which do you prefer?get up early and start day work or get up later...
4 - Others are inclined to get up ... When you use 'incline' it should be like this: "inclined to" example:...
Writing Feedbackoceanyang - Aug 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 11, 2010
|GRE Issue: The intellectual benefits of attending a university or college are vast
3 - ...There are successful self-taught individuals such as Minhong Yu, who is the owner of trains of English training school...
Writing Feedbackinspiration - Aug 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 11, 2010
|Cooperating of fathers in child rearing
3 - Yes, cooperation is better in the title. However... cooperating is not exactly wrong. It can be a kind of...
Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Aug 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 11, 2010
|It is impossible for a man to stay alone - groups are part of human's life
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Aug 10, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Aug 14, 2010
|Children may be stimulated by some new subjects and enjoy a more colorful and meaningful childhood
4 - Oceanyang you have an interesting username!! In Chinese medicine, the top of the head is considered yang, and it...
Writing Feedbackoceanyang - Aug 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 11, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY : CONSUMER SOCIETIES
5 - Hi Dong, I'm taking IELTS at the end of August and I understand how frustrating it is to write...
Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Aug 9, 2010 / adriennelin - Aug 14, 2010
|How to take a good photograph? Chronological order - process Essay
Writing FeedbackMakubexD - Aug 9, 2010 / MakubexD - Aug 10, 2010
|Topic:My father.It's a preparation of speaking section for toefl.
5 - Okay, you got some very good corrections here. You can look at them all and practice typing the essay...
Writing Feedbackhonghee - Aug 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 10, 2010
|GRE-The arts reveal the otherwise hidden ideas and impulses of a society.
Writing Feedbackbroad - Aug 8, 2010 / broad - Aug 16, 2010
|Only by questioning accepted wisdom can we advance our understanding.
4 - That is great, but you should revise a little so that the reader can appreciate the significance of...
Writing Feedbackprakharsingh - Aug 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 10, 2010
|Baku-- a short paragraph about the hometown
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Aug 8, 2010 / Azeri - Aug 12, 2010
|IELTS essay feedback, regarding the idea of talking about power of advertising.
Writing Feedbackjcmorais - Aug 8, 2010 / jcmorais - Aug 10, 2010
|Friends, knowledge, purpose: people attend college for many different reasons
5 - You should add a sentence to that first paragraph. You can say it is indispensable... then give a sentence...
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Aug 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 9, 2010
|Topic:Is telling truth always better than telling lie or only partial truths?
5 - Yep, every article I have seen about this kind of issue involves a reference to Kant. You can...
Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 9, 2010
|IELTS essay:the disvantages of cars
6 - Hi, I am also an IELTS student (sometime my opinion may not be 100% correct). I believe that it...
Writing Feedbackstomnus - Aug 7, 2010 / nishanthand - Aug 15, 2010
|Advertising nowadays has more and more affects in our lives.
6 - Advertising nowadays more and more affects in our lives. We can see advertise everywhere, such as: televisions, newspapers, radio,...
Writing Feedbacknhoc_tini - Aug 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 9, 2010
|"to have three years of studying a foreign language" - my toefl essay !
4 - Learning a new language in high school can be very helpful when traveling to foreign countries or for study...
Writing Feedbackadoh - Aug 7, 2010 / oceanyang - Aug 10, 2010
|The best way to improve education is to raise teacher's salary.
Writing Feedbackhonghee - Aug 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2010
|How to write an argumentative essay about the advantages of recycling water?
Writing Feedbackarquimedesamaya - Aug 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2010
|'Digital life' -The 21st century has begun. What changes this new century will bring?
7 - Good question, my friend! As usual, I'm impressed with your careful study. All of these are correct:...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Aug 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 12, 2010
|IELTS essay: High sales reflect Power of Advertising and not the Real Need
4 - Google this: how to write a concession paragraph. I usually call it "refuting the counterargument." You probably already...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 7, 2010
|Topic: Which is the most effective method to bring people to peace?
7 - Well, you explain very well, but add a conclusion sentence to paragraph 2: This gradually ceased the hostility of...
Writing Feedbacktrungandhoai - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 8, 2010
|To speak well is more important than to write well
Writing Feedbackhonghee - Aug 5, 2010 / zengrz - Aug 15, 2010
|Favorite song - Kitto Mata Itsuka
4 - Hello, Boataaa, I see that Shin and Sara fixed the errors for you! Is your brother able to retype...
Writing Feedbackmamaki - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 6, 2010
|What do you want most in a friend -toefl feedback
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Aug 5, 2010 / MrTom - Aug 7, 2010
|GRE-is history relevant to our daily lives?
3 - Dear Trung Mickey: I really appreciate your valuable comments. There's much for me to learn. I have to admit...
Writing Feedbackbroad - Aug 5, 2010 / broad - Aug 7, 2010
|'Love, money, career and faith in God' IELTS Happiness essay
4 - your essay is good enough I think the happiness is to pursue what we love and fulfill a meaningful...
Writing Feedbackjulieta4648 - Aug 5, 2010 / lin54390 - Aug 9, 2010
|Are people held back by doing things in the conventional way? SAT essay. Advice.
4 - You have a great way of writing. I think this is redundant when you say nor---either. There isn't enough...
Writing FeedbackAmbermutt - Aug 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 5, 2010
|Students should not be told political & social views of the teachers.
NEW - Admittedly, as we all take for, teachers aim to provide knowledge to students. Teachers should confirm the scope of...
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|IELTS ESSAY: GUN CONTRAL
Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Aug 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 10, 2010
|leader you think is important
9 - Ha ha... that is so funny. Actually, when I saw you spelling it that way, I thought that must...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Aug 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 7, 2010
|Communicate effectively through the use of images, not language - GRE
3 - Freezard, thanks for being here and helping! I really like the theme of this essay. James Masayoshi Mitose,...
Writing Feedbackprabudhakshin - Aug 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 5, 2010
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