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|The important memorable day in my life - descriptive narrative essay
3 - When you use "although," you do not need to use "but"... Although it was my first day in high...
Writing Feedbackfat - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|[GRE] I-3-AW-NO.1 - Salt - Education
2 - Several tips from aosi 1.The structure and template of the essay is so good, your core idea is...
Writing Feedbackxyzyanxue - Apr 13, 2011 / aosi111 - Apr 14, 2011
|Creating an ideal society. If it's possible, how can we do it?
Writing FeedbackARIA - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|IELTS: Prize money and fame as motivation to sporting champions
5 - You don't have to use "whom" in that first paragraph. Just use "who." Also... By introducing prize money...
Writing Feedbackwaterolily - Apr 13, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 15, 2011
|IELTS: Is environmental damage evitable if a country is developing?
7 - Hi Ting, thank you for your suggestion. However, in my third paragraph, I wrote all about solutions because I...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - Apr 13, 2011 / Scientiana - Apr 17, 2011
|Elderly people alone or with their family (TOEFL Essay)
Writing Feedbacktdamqnova - Apr 13, 2011 / daliqin - Apr 17, 2011
|"One should never judge a person by external appearances" - TOEFL iBT- subject
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 12, 2011 / mahrou - Apr 15, 2011
|"a merchant in the year 1000 CE" - a diary on the silk road
Writing Feedbackmrxkms - Apr 12, 2011 / mrxkms - Apr 15, 2011
|All my life i had been wrong and now i had to pay!
Writing Feedbackdumbdumb - Apr 12, 2011 / axa - May 7, 2011
|[IELTS TASK 2] environment problem, is it an international problem?
3 - Awesome, Annika... I always am so happy when I see a thread where you participated, because you give high...
Writing Feedbackthe leaf ninja - Apr 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|[IELTS] increasing business and culture contact would lose cultural identities?
2 - ...and they enable the globalization to make an advantageous impact on us in several respects. Besides ,the advantages...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Apr 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|GRE Essay on working in professions for faculty
Writing Feedbackmealsome - Apr 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|"New Orleans Holiday" - A Holiday Memory -high school English essay
4 - Good make me want to go to Mardi Gras, include the history from the beginning till now, how it...
Writing FeedbackVivbuie - Apr 11, 2011 / hopeless - Apr 14, 2011
|<Ielts> traditonal skills should be protected?
5 - Here are some ways to write that sentence: When people are confronted by the situation in which our traditional...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|Group-studying couldn't be ignored - it still plays an essential part for us
5 - thx~kevin~^0^...
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 11, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 15, 2011
|dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely -Education
Writing Feedbacknini1008 - Apr 11, 2011 / nini1008 - Apr 21, 2011
|Educational institutions do not mean we can be deprived of what we insist
Writing Feedbackguoxuyang - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|Sports professionals are able to make more money than other occupations
3 - Hello, Baxil! Nice to see you, too. :-) ... it is an unfair distribution of human welfare wealth....
Writing FeedbackBaxil - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|Similar or different friends? What do you want most in a friend?
4 - ...and stress from living in the concrete jungle, my sporty friend can encourage me to go camping or... ...
Writing Feedbackadychang - Apr 11, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2011
|Cultural, economical, and political globalisation - is it worth it?
3 - Yep, this is a strong essay, for sure. I like that intro paragraph a lot. I wish, though, that...
Writing Feedbackbenzhu1985 - Apr 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 12, 2011
|Access to defendants' past criminal record - helpful and fair or not?
Writing Feedbackwaterolily - Apr 10, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 14, 2011
|[IELTS] fixed punishment or take into account circumstances
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Apr 10, 2011 / Panda271 - Apr 13, 2011
|"doing the same things and avoiding change?" - my target is 7 band
Writing Feedbackben123 - Apr 10, 2011 / ben123 - Apr 11, 2011
|GRE ISSUE 130 Do children's socialization determine destiny of society?
2 - Hello there, thanks for participating! I'll try to help you improve this: The influence of eduction to ...
Writing FeedbackOscar_C - Apr 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 11, 2011
|how would you describe yourself as a human being?
Writing Feedbacknicod - Apr 9, 2011 / nicod - Apr 15, 2011
|It is important that universities take a serious look at the sport facilities investment
4 - Although investment in library facilities is absolutely vital for universities, I disagree with any discrimination against spending money for...
Writing FeedbackBehroozz - Apr 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 11, 2011
|Are Photographs Representations of Real Life or Just Artistic Creations?
4 - Everyone has seen pictures, and many have taken pictures as well.---I fixed the grammar, but actually this sentence should...
Writing FeedbackLily Rose - Apr 9, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 11, 2011
|Criminals who break the law will get punishment, and some of them will be put into prison
3 - I think you might need to avoid the complex sentences,some times it just feel confused in your essay. Keep...
Writing Feedbackqingsong - Apr 9, 2011 / findthetime - Apr 12, 2011
|IELTS Task 2: people will spend less time on cooking food
Writing Feedbackautumnvagabond - Apr 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2011
|The main reason of spreading rubbish on planet Earth
2 - In our contemporary world, people are not concerned about spreading waste all over the planet Earth. I like...
Writing Feedbackshahabj13 - Apr 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2011
|"What is a good son or a good daughter?" - TOEFL iBT sobject
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 8, 2011 / mahrou - Apr 11, 2011
|(IELTS) old building preserve or demolish?
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 8, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 11, 2011
|Are we free to make our own choices in life, or are our decisions always limited
6 - Yes, excellent! It is supposed to be impracticable or impractical. Either of those words would work, but I don't...
Writing Feedbackxialiyu - Apr 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2011
|Should Schools Offer Moral Class? (SAT and homework)
4 - Thank you, Kevin! Parallelism is important, but I didn't notice. Thank you, Aria! Your illustrations are good and...
Writing FeedbackLily Rose - Apr 8, 2011 / Lily Rose - Apr 11, 2011
|IELTS task 2:People nowadays are more easily influenced by fashion
4 - It is okay in formal writing, but I hate it! People should not say "firstly" and "secondly"... but...
Writing Feedbackcouhe - Apr 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2011
|IELTS: Making an ideal society (opinions and solutions)
5 - Hello again, Annika, I just wanted to tell you that I think you are helping more people that anyone...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - Apr 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 10, 2011
|The Internet has transformed lives and economies_Essay
8 - Excellent, it sounds funny to say that! Some people say, "Let's meet here at eight o'clock. In the meantime,...
Writing FeedbackPanda271 - Apr 8, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 16, 2011
|Why are people attracted to dangerous sports, activities? 'to expose themselves'
2 - Great edit, Turbina! I am seeing a lot of helpful advice from you. Please consider joining our contributors (see...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Apr 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2011
|Ielts graph: Mobile Phones Market in 2005 & 2006
3 - Samsung was another giant manufacturer of cellulars. Itwhich produced 12.7% of all mobile phones in 2005 and with a...
Writing Feedbackprostyle - Apr 7, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 11, 2011
|Some people think widening the roads is as solution for traffic.Do you agree?
3 - oh.thank u...
Writing Feedbackkatayun - Apr 7, 2011 / katayun - Apr 10, 2011
|(IELTS topic) innate talent or pratice makes perfect?
Writing Feedbackekekek - Apr 7, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 11, 2011
|corrections in my essay "aspects of teenage life"
18 - heyy, this is really good. after reading the first few sentences, i was nervous that your claim was a...
Writing Feedbackhafsa abid - Apr 7, 2011 / joeservidio - Oct 30, 2011
|[Anne Boleyn] - Famous person I want to meet
6 - I don't have enough information about Anna Boleyn. I only knew from the movie. The movie told that Anna...
Writing Feedbacktdamqnova - Apr 7, 2011 / fm_rainbow - Apr 15, 2011
|[Ielts]anti-social behavior,why and solution..
4 - I appreciatie that you could write so long in the limitted time~~ Generally speaking, I think the second paragragh...
Writing Feedbackfindthetime - Apr 7, 2011 / ekekek - Apr 11, 2011
|[ielts graph] Underground Railway Systems / popularity
2 - Oh, I see that Turbina has a good idea. Instead of saying "London was opened in XXXX," you should...
Writing Feedbackkiraz - Apr 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2011
|IELTS: People are more fashionable now. What factors contribute to this?
4 - Excellent advice here. Kevin, please type the essay again using her corrections. If you have questions, ask us, and...
Writing Feedbackkvnpeng - Apr 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2011
|A Two-page essay discussing how the rest of the world view America.
2 - For many decades, America has been known as the... After the September of 2001 tragedy, the position has...
Writing FeedbackZubaida - Apr 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|[TOEFL]Do you agree or disagree the young children spend most of their time playing?
Writing Feedbackmhh2531 - Apr 6, 2011 / mhh2531 - Apr 9, 2011
|TOEFL: TV has destroyed communication among friends and family?
4 - Annika, you are so great! Let me work on that first paragraph: Some people consider television to be...
Writing Feedbackyecochi - Apr 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|Nature or Nuture: the talent is important, but tenacity and perseverance are more.
Writing Feedbackjamliu0229 - Apr 5, 2011 / jamliu0229 - Apr 9, 2011
|TOEFL writing: A new university will be established in the community. Agree or not?
Writing Feedbackjennyelbow - Apr 5, 2011 / jennyelbow - Apr 12, 2011
|IELTS: How to measure one's experiences and knowledge?
Writing FeedbackReal Fog - Apr 5, 2011 / Real Fog - Apr 8, 2011
|Children at work: damaging and wrong?
2 - On one hand, some people assert that employing children could be productive and gainful, and those who hold this...
Writing Feedbacksalam237 - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|People should place emphasis on improving the skill of working within groups, not independently
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|"Why are groups or organizations important to people?" - my writing practice
3 - Birdman did give some great advice. Birdman, please check out the contributor page! You do great work here. (see...
Writing Feedbackadychang - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|Choosing desirable subjects to study in the university?
3 - what?! When would it ever be appropriate for the government to decide what people study? It is not...
Writing FeedbackScientiana - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 7, 2011
|"how stupid I am"; 5 minutes down-town
Writing Feedbackvafa - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 9, 2011
|Someone is worth us telling the truth, someone isn't.
4 - We all make grammar mistakes. It's okay. The great thing is that you have brilliant philosophical ideas. ...
Writing FeedbackFrank zhao - Apr 5, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2011
|Which is more important family or friends?
3 - Wow, very nice... or example, even we were adapted children, we couldn't adopted children cannot stop...
Writing FeedbackMarsha2809 - Apr 4, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Apr 6, 2011
|Should history be taught in academic life of any student?
15 - 7...i am planning to retake. Consider yourself as a lucky candidate if you have Mr Alex as your speaking...
Writing Feedbackbirdman - Apr 4, 2011 / Real Fog - Apr 21, 2011
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