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|Comprehensive Note on; A Civil servant is a Public servant
2 - Don't sever the public! Sever means something different! :-) This way is good: To sum up, the...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|"Five years ago, we residents of Morganton..." - GRE Task
Writing FeedbackMaxim - Sep 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|GRE - essay Laws should not be rigid or fixed; flexibility - 'hurricane Katrina'
4 - The first paragraph is excellent, but you should use the word should in there somewhere to show that you...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|Building a large shopping center in your neighborhood - 'hanging out place'
4 - Thank you both of you. It should be great comment to improve my writing. Do you have any further...
Writing Feedbackscarecrowd - Sep 8, 2010 / scarecrowd - Sep 9, 2010
|Why do we need music? The traditinal music of a country is more important than other?
3 - Below I'll give you some correct sentences to practice. Please type each sentence the correct way 10 times, and...
Writing Feedbackhedi_65 - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|University faculty should have some experience in the fields they teach.
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|(SAT essay)ARE there heroes who will be remembered forever?
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 17, 2010
|some people say TV has left family members unable to communicate with one another.
3 - Sandeep, You started with "Television media", author does not state anything about the media. You need to Read the...
Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Sep 8, 2010 / abcdef123 - Sep 9, 2010
|TOEFL TOPIC:Newspaper is the best way of learning about a foreign country.
Writing Feedbacktshml1990 - Sep 8, 2010 / tshml1990 - Sep 12, 2010
|informative essay; human trafficking
3 - If it comes in second, it is not fastest. Human trafficking is one of the fastest increasing criminal industry...
Writing Feedbackxoxsandrina - Sep 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|The Will of the Butterflies - An essay on any observation.
3 - I am impressed from the start. Here is how I would write this sentence: Somewhere amongst all in...
Writing Feedbackkame - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|TOEFL---Parents should help determining the future
12 - I wish to appreciate you for sharing this essay because I am also preparing for TOEFL and the writing...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 7, 2010 / eastspringkim - Sep 17, 2010
|GRE Argument Essay "People should not a misled by the advertising competition...
5 - It's important to refer correctly to the conclusion that belongs to the author. Use an apostrophe, but do...
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|GRE Issue Essay "Colleges and universities should offer more contemporary culture"
Writing Feedbackabcdef123 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Originality? Is it a fiction since older ideas are mostly prefabricated into some new theories? GRE
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|TOEFL- a part time job beneficial to students?
6 - At the start, I think I understand what you mean to say, but the sentence needs revision: 20-somethings...
Writing FeedbackBluesie - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|TOEFL:Ways of learning about life & Quickly made decisions are wrong
Writing Feedbackmuroslav - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Communicating information has been a primary and constant necessity for people
Writing Feedbackfordragon - Sep 7, 2010 / fordragon - Sep 28, 2010
|'It was a crisp October morning'; Innovation needs one thought, one person.
3 - This is very well-written! I don't have much to say about the writing, because you have a very sophisticated...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Climate changes is a threat to our planet, but there is not enough political pressure
2 - Your essay showed that you indeed had knowledge on global warming. But I felt that you could have talked...
Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Sep 7, 2010 / PurpleBook - Sep 7, 2010
|Essay about: should jobs be taken by young people before a serious career start?
Writing Feedbacktshml1990 - Sep 7, 2010 / tshml1990 - Sep 8, 2010
|Nation-state is an outmoded institution and should replaced with a world government.
2 - precedent president All countries have their own rulers or dominant people who make rules or discard rules according...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|TOEFL: Playing Sports teaches us lessons about life? Yes, there are at least 3 things
7 - More than what? I don't understand this either. Maybe they mean this: Playing sports teaches many life lessons....
Writing Feedbackfengyang2011 - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|If we were to admit one more student to the class of 2012, why that student should be
4 - Let's look at this first sentence: Having a B.E Comp degree with versatile experience of 5 years. It should...
Writing Feedbackhemlata - Sep 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|"wisdom of the former times"; GRE issue essay/ Important truths begin as outrageous
4 - thank you Anurag, and Kevin for you important inputs. To answer Kevin's question about the GRE - yes...
Writing Feedbackkgb66 - Sep 6, 2010 / kgb66 - Sep 8, 2010
|Does everyone see everything from the same perspective- SAT essay
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|Essay- Fatigue (after a full marathon)
Writing FeedbackPurpleBook - Sep 6, 2010 / PurpleBook - Sep 12, 2010
|Tracking down three citations in their original sources
Writing Feedbackgreenswing - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 9, 2010
|In our time, specialists of all kind (generalists and specialists): GRE topic
3 - Thank you so much Kevin! I promise I'll follow your directions in my essay writing. I really appreciate your...
Writing FeedbackMaxim - Sep 6, 2010 / Maxim - Sep 7, 2010
|living in a house compared with in an apartment; 'scarce land resources'
Writing Feedbackiishine - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|Advertising causes unhealthy eating habits. Do you agree or disagree?
4 - Practice 10 times whenever you see a correction. In recent weeks, I have begun to think that is very...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Sep 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|Past gives us preponderance experience which might be good or bad
4 - I think here is the mistake and it should be improved this way: good experience is seldom remembered...
Writing Feedbackjems007 - Sep 6, 2010 / Maxim - Sep 6, 2010
|The extended family less important; 'not bother to contact relatives anymore'
4 - Hey, I do not think the sentences are too long. Many TOEFL writers have sentences that are too long,...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|"Riding a motorcycle in Vietnam" - Risk you have taken, why and was it worth it?
4 - hahaha you have nothing to worry about! The process of translation is common to all bilingual people, but...
Writing FeedbackKathyLala - Sep 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|"alcohol is the cause of most College student death" - My significant moment
3 - This has too many unnecessary details. Imagery details are great, but meaningless details like names and street addresses are...
Writing FeedbackMikey305 - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
|Comprehensive Note on ' The impossible is often the untried'
7 - When referring to a word, I usually use " " marks for clarity and detail: The word impossible does...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|Revolutionary / communication is better than other types of communication
2 - However, I still assert that face-to face communication is superior to other means. For example, the modern logistics...
Writing FeedbackAnnie Ma - Sep 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|How technological development affect traditional skills and way of life in a country?
Writing Feedbackdrrahulsolanki - Sep 4, 2010 / drrahulsolanki - Sep 8, 2010
|A narrative essay -First time I experienced an earthquake- Feedback
9 - Ana, Now that you have a number of critiques and suggestions concerning your essay, why don't you take...
Writing Feedbackarubi - Sep 3, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 17, 2010
|Too much is spent on pets than starving people of Africa, your opinion.
3 - But because of this, do we neglect our own species across the ocean in Africa, where they do not...
Writing FeedbackAndy Nguyen - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits.
6 - I don't think irreplaceable is good here, because it implies that we want advertising to play this role......
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|What, in your opinion should be the main function of a university?
Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2010
|TOELF: Thomas Edison - One famous person you would like to meet
7 - Thank you for your help. I already made the list. Your corrections are not a waste of time, I...
Writing Feedbackmuroslav - Sep 3, 2010 / muroslav - Sep 6, 2010
|IELTS:Giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effect
3 - This sentence is awkward: In this world, there is no one who does not know this world 'globalization', which...
Writing Feedbackhealing80 - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|TOEFL--A job with more vacation time is better....& Teachers should show their...
6 - Famous writers use commas in different ways, and their uses have changed with time. My favorite approach...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
|SHORT ESSAY Describe your favorite food- Instant-boiled mutton
8 - First: Describe what a crepe is. Second: Elaborate on what makes a crepe unique, yummy. Third: Wrap it up,...
Writing Feedbackayida365 - Sep 2, 2010 / vinhstuh - Nov 6, 2011
|the media focuses too much on celebrity.how far do you agree?? a general paper essay
Writing Feedbackyuvly - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|THE CAY, story about one trip in the in Caribbean Sea
Writing Feedbackzeed - Sep 2, 2010 / zeed - Sep 14, 2010
|Grade is an assessment that encourages students to learn more.do you agree?
4 - Here is the way to follow the rule called 'number agreement' Keep singular with singular and plural with plural:...
Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|money either to protect arts or the environment - source of our livelihood
3 - This is a good idea for your argument. I think, though, that it should also include some mention...
Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|IELTS: effects of globalization (decrease in global tension)
3 - Let's fix the clarity here: Although it has undeniably beneficial effects on the economics of the world, it also...
Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|Repaying a kindness ("I have to treasure my parents' effort for funding me")
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|Comprehensive Note on ' Flatterers get together,the devil goes for dinner'
5 - Corruption, nepotism, favoritism is are some byproducts of this evil. The flattered person loses touch with reality...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|"Parents should never try to be a child's "friend" - Descriptive/Narrative Essay
2 - This is a common idea. Only when you think of a very original, intriguing, or useful idea would...
Writing Feedbackrhamrick - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2010
|Influence of past achievements is necessary for making a significant contribution
3 - Woah. To me, this is a bit of an overstatement. Whatever someone does must be influenced by something....
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Sep 1, 2010 / freezard7734 - Sep 1, 2010
|Originality is an identity. Every idea generated in this world is as original as its originator.
2 - I enjoyed thoroughly your discussion on originality! Some details, amoxicilline for instance, might not be easily absorbed by the...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 1, 2010 / Shadow93 - Sep 1, 2010
|Now and then: the mass movement of people into the cities
11 - Oh... yes, you will have difficulty as long as you come up with ideas first and then look for...
Writing FeedbackBrandon Zhou - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|"Being a Foreigner" - a narrative essay
5 - Hello Amal! I'll change many sentences in your essay. I hope you have time to read them aloud...
Writing Feedbackamal omar - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 2, 2010
|"The diagram related how are lead pencils made.", IELTS: writing part 1
7 - Dear Altraga, About your band score, I guess it is around 5.5. It would be raised if you could...
Writing FeedbackAltraga - Aug 31, 2010 / sharkondiet - Sep 11, 2010
|IELTS essay: compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio.
3 - thetre a lot of grammatical mistakes in your essay. and its spelt as although. sentences should be short n...
Writing Feedbackanhduy_tran - Aug 31, 2010 / divya2010 - Sep 2, 2010
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