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|ESSAY- Comment on freedom on choice of clothing in schools - FEEDBACK
2 - No comma necessary here: School is the place which lays foundation ... progress or their overall personalities ....
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
|People are moving in to the big cities for more comfortable and convenient life
10 - Mickey, you seem seriously interested in helping people. Everyone participating in this thread made such a unique contribution; I'm...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2010
|Marine Pollution Introductory paragraph
2 - Source of survival is a strange phrase. It might be better to write: Water is the most crucial factor...
Writing Feedbackeveehp - May 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|My hero, Terry Fox born in Canada
3 - Yes, that is true. It seems that Namon is struggling to improve her/his English, though, so let's help...
Writing Feedbackthailand - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|Parents should encourage their high school students for part time jobs !
4 - Working twenty years at an inconsequential job may not give as much satisfaction as a highly prolific and demanding...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|"I had a blood disorder" - help with Descriptive Personal Essay
15 - Yep, it was interesting to watch you make progress with this one. I hope you stick around and keep...
Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|SAT: even though having a good leader is important, we should not blindly follow his decision
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 18, 2010 / puroodsy - May 20, 2010
|Equal number of students:IETLS essay
4 - the indispensable role of education in a man's life cannot be overlooked: i meant to talk about importance of...
Writing FeedbackaJ_M_65 - May 18, 2010 / aJ_M_65 - Jun 4, 2010
|Music and art in school essay
6 - In conclusion, undoubtedly, this is the era of computers and science. Therefore, schools must be flexible enough to...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
|IELTS; MOVIES & TELEVISION CAN POSITIVELY INFLUENCE PEOPLES' BEHAVIOR
2 - try to avoid writing firstly, secondly.. instead use sentences like one of the significant reasons.. over all good ideas,...
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 19, 2010
|Theatre Under The Stars
NEW - The popular musicals titled Shrek the Musical and West Side Story will be joining another popular musical that had...
Writing Feedbackshane123 - May 17, 2010 / — -
|ielts essay: Advantages of attending school from a young age
2 - HI..SEPIDEH You have some grammatical errors in your essay.Which i guess, already been corrected by other users. Just remember...
Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 18, 2010
|'dark metal genre'; About the Music and why it's important to many people?
4 - thanx alot bro for your notes,but unfortunately most of them are typos. i just want you to give...
Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 16, 2010 / Pink1 - May 17, 2010
|"Fifty-Four Forty or Fight" History Research Essay
2 - Capitalize "River" because it is part of a proper noun. Columbia River I see a little typo: rejection...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - May 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|"True beauty" is the good humanity
6 - I think your grasp of English is really good actually, but it just takes practice Tips on writing:...
Writing Feedbackyangzom - May 14, 2010 / meisj0n - May 20, 2010
|Children have trend to be significantly more violent and careless in their study and social life
Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|Questioning authority is important for improvements and innovations in many fields.
Writing Feedbacktyro - May 14, 2010 / — -
|About Malaysia's problems
NEW - Every country has it own problem, for example, Iraq/Iran is facing a terrible war, Africa is facing poverty, and...
Writing Feedbackcelineccky - May 14, 2010 / — -
|School teach for career or general knowledge (IELTS test)
NEW - i'm prepairing for the IELTS test and my teacher give me this topic question. help me to check for...
Writing Feedbackviebboy - May 14, 2010 / — -
|Text messaging: write about an invention that has changed your life
3 - The invention that made the biggest change in my life was text messaging. This discovery changed my way of...
Writing FeedbackLordBartosz - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2010
|"Failure is necessary for education to take place?" - grade my essay
Writing FeedbackMizo Metallic - May 13, 2010 / Mizo Metallic - May 19, 2010
|CBEST Writing: My favorite subject/course in school (Korean Literature)
2 - Don't capitalize high: When I was in high school, my favorite... Thanks, Shalini, for the work you did...
Writing Feedbackimhe - May 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2010
|Technology, one offspring of science, is a world of imagination being made true
7 - to some extent* :? Interesting way of approaching the prompt. placing down arguments for the assertive and...
Writing Feedbacktriplesmickey - May 12, 2010 / meisj0n - May 22, 2010
|"Is personal satisfaction the motivation for people to achieve?", covers point?
Writing Feedbackstephen1341 - May 10, 2010 / stephen1341 - May 12, 2010
|Sex Education In Schools and Colleges Is A Must.
2 - Pathetic is a word that seems judgmental, so it is better without it: ...It indeed is the pathetic plight...
Writing Feedbackabhisheksahai - May 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2010
|"beauty" and "travelling"
Writing Feedbackhallohallo - May 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2010
|Childhood Experience-Writing Practice ("my parents are still my best friends")
Writing Feedbackimhe - May 9, 2010 / willy0123 - May 10, 2010
|Mrs. More: Describe a person you most admire, and the impact they had on you
2 - Please, check the Tenses you have used in your essay. In several phrases you are mixing them by using...
Writing Feedbackyahyabluecat - May 8, 2010 / milan2003_07 - May 10, 2010
|"She pulls the knife out..." - Short Story Help
4 - Don't switch verb tense: She stabbed Liam in the stomach. Liam was yelling... Yes, you certainly seem to...
Writing Feedbackchitown31 - May 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2010
|Toefl ibt writing Q2: University classes attendance, requirement or option ?
3 - Great corrections, "name here" Notice that "name here" added an apostrophe like this ' optional to enhance students'...
Writing Feedbackfrederic80 - May 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2010
|"health" again for my school leaving examination :)
Writing Feedbackvalentina - May 8, 2010 / valentina - May 8, 2010
|The important lesson is life. The best teachers for the life are parents.
4 - Generally, people should count( consider) their parents as their life's teacher.Because they had got more experienced life. They could...
Writing FeedbackShukur - May 7, 2010 / babydoll - May 16, 2010
|Happiness for my school leaving examination :)
Writing Feedbackvalentina - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Difficulties faced today are greater than yesterday - GRE Essay Preparation
NEW - I am a beginner here. I am trying to improve my essay writing skills. Below is my first practice...
Writing Feedbacktyro - May 6, 2010 / — -
|fossil fuel energy, "The Power and the Glory"
Writing Feedbackgotten - May 6, 2010 / gotten - May 14, 2010
|Growing up in a rural area provides an easy-going life pattern to children
3 - Since there are various specialized education systems in the city, it will help the children for education. - Existence...
Writing Feedbackbillryu94 - May 6, 2010 / Azeri - May 8, 2010
3 - Okay, the good news is that this essay is obviously very well researched and informative. However, it seems to...
Writing FeedbackG_D087 - May 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Machines have many great features that are impossible for human to compete it
3 - many thanks for your help. i must work hard. god willing i won't have these kinds of problems in...
Writing Feedbacksina1989 - May 5, 2010 / sina1989 - May 7, 2010
|My research assignment on binge drinking and the health effects, review request
12 - This is a case where you say 2 things, and each thing should have a whole paragraph written about...
Writing Feedbackbondsemerson - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2010
|Eating at restaurants or at home? TOEFL essay.
Writing Feedbackvijaya - May 4, 2010 / vijaya - May 5, 2010
|TOEFL: THE INTERNET - problems or information? 'most powerful media'
8 - I think like these: To begin with/The first factor(/belief/reason/catalyst...) is that/I believe/.../(TRY NOTHING in replacement, just leave a gap...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - May 4, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 25, 2010
|Thesis: "Hybridity and Metamorphosis"
4 - Hi again, so if you didn't entirely toss out "self fashioning" just yet, you can still save it. I...
Writing FeedbackBnoel - May 4, 2010 / meisj0n - May 5, 2010
|magnificent historical buildings should not be destroyed: protection by law
2 - ... while others say that it only consumes the place of new ones and they should immediately be knocked...
Writing Feedbackbaris alibeyogl - May 4, 2010 / EF_Susan - May 5, 2010
|Anti-Bullying Informative Paper (Our Brother's Keeper)
NEW - This is to be a Informative Paper in MLA format. Can someone proof read this? I dont see on...
Writing Feedbackqueenlyblessed - May 3, 2010 / — -
|Does advancement of Technology cause Pollution?
Writing Feedbackkayyao - May 3, 2010 / kayyao - May 8, 2010
|"always obey your parents" Childhood experience which changed my life completely
NEW - Many childhood experinces leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 3, 2010 / — -
|Study abroad should be encouraged when students are eighteen
Writing FeedbackEujin - May 2, 2010 / Eujin - May 3, 2010
|watching TV is an unhealthy pastime. what do you think about this statement?
3 - Great corrections here!! I also have this advice for you: Let this be paragraph 2: The first benefit can...
Writing Feedbackthuong_lethi - May 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|"Why people attend to universities or colleges" - Toefl IBT
3 - Hi, good luck on your test!! Generally, people from all nations strive to attend universities. Each individual who wants...
Writing FeedbackShukur - May 2, 2010 / kayyao - May 2, 2010
|Age of the Internet which brings the world so close to each other
2 - Capitalize Internet. capitalize English Use a spell checker. More and more people seem to be interacting with one...
Writing Feedbackbrainlair - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 1, 2010
|The Internet and Collegian Populace - checking the validity and soundness
6 - Honestly, this sort of paper, for which I have a high level of vested interest, was completed in the...
Writing FeedbackManDan88 - Apr 30, 2010 / ManDan88 - May 8, 2010
|Stereotype essay (races); Imagine having no friends in school just because of your skin color
Writing FeedbackJAM843 - Apr 30, 2010 / Uzi987 - Oct 29, 2011
|Single sex education and coed
7 - Compare and contrast essays are difficult. You need to revise the intro paragraph so that you are...
Writing Feedbackazhar - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|Cbest essay prompt :. Imagine that you could have made one change in the past .
2 - Here are some suggestions hope they help. I think you should go through this paper again and work on...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Apr 30, 2010 / monboddie - May 1, 2010
|"A simple life" - intro to my essay
5 - A simple life is a free and easy life which people live in without any complications and don't use...
Writing FeedbackLatifahH - Apr 30, 2010 / Loriww - Jan 10, 2014
|"dedication to mom" - people who influenced my values in my life
4 - I like the first sentence, but I would add a comma: Though there are many people who influenced my...
Writing Feedbackmarkweeta - Apr 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2010
|"How to Plan a Birthday Party for Adults" - process analysis essay
2 - The next step is to choos e an appropriate place, such as restaurant, history club, hotel's suite or ballroom...
Writing FeedbackTaoTao - Apr 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2010
|Control over happiness - 'people gain happiness differently' (SAT)
5 - The first sentence, which should aptly give the first impression, is quite prolix and obscure. To say that...
Writing FeedbackSA51 - Apr 28, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 17, 2010
|Media indeed poses an enormous influence on our opinions as well as attitudes
2 - are actually mastering the thought of individuals and that there are little can be done to eliminate this control....
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Apr 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2010
|Honesty - one of the treasured values of human being
Writing FeedbackPhoebe Su - Apr 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2010
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