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|The issue of knives in general and at school - an opinion/letter to the editor
5 - The amount number of knife attacks in the community has risen dramatically at an astonishing rate. ...the...
Writing Feedbackjgv115 - Jul 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 23, 2010
|My Sister and I - help proof-reading comparison/contrast paragraph
2 - Hi, Clarita I think, this is self-evident and true almost for all people, except twiling perhaps. Even...
Writing Feedbackccarlos816 - Jul 20, 2010 / Azeri - Jul 20, 2010
|sharp evolution in human history;Internet provides a lot of valuable information
7 - thanks for your helps. I have just participated in this forum and i hope to learn more experiences from...
Writing FeedbackDay - Jul 19, 2010 / Day - Jul 25, 2010
|GRE (argument): Comparison of two cars
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jul 18, 2010 / ershad193 - Jul 22, 2010
|Winners And Losers - & Help
4 - Thank you everyone for your advice. @ Kevin: I will learn to bring in metephor, simile. It will...
Writing FeedbackPhoebe Su - Jul 17, 2010 / Phoebe Su - Jul 20, 2010
|Favorite Word and why-Rate/give advice for my college essay
Writing Feedbackmrkay66 - Jul 17, 2010 / mrkay66 - Jul 26, 2010
|The main purpose of art is not to teach, but to show
3 - Despite the fact that there are many various purposes of art, which includes include entertainment, expression, and exhibition,...
Writing Feedbackairman - Jul 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 19, 2010
|essay - going to university and reasons for it
3 - ...there could be many possible reasons for attending college or university - from doing a degree to experiencing new...
Writing Feedbackfirefly5588 - Jul 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 19, 2010
|Most beneficail discovery in the last 100 yrs; Transportation, Communication
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 16, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Aug 2, 2010
|As the light begins to dim, Faith.
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jul 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 28, 2010
|The increasing number of overweight children
3 - i think that you need to explain on the means to prevent it and whether it will actually work....
Writing Feedbackscouser_ - Jul 16, 2010 / airman - Jul 17, 2010
|(Disease) Prevention is better than cure.
Writing Feedbackbluebellia - Jul 16, 2010 / Eggss - Jul 18, 2010
|Major cities should receive all the financial support they need. GRE(issue)
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|Ielts topic high levels of violence in films today :D
8 - Thank everybody for your all advices. :D /To Kevin :D i'm very glad to see your encouragement for me....
Writing Feedbackharubim123 - Jul 15, 2010 / harubim123 - Jul 20, 2010
|Scandals -whether in politics, academia, or other areas-can be useful. GRE(Issue)
6 - Here is an error: Recently, a judge of the local anti-corruption court in the state of Karnataka in India...
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|Is the opinion of the majority-in government or in any other circumstances-a poor
4 - Throughout history, when a kind of opinion or the voice of the government spread about, more and more people...
Writing FeedbackLoftyyyy Girlll - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|"Welcome to the good life" - Compare and Contrast Essay (Rich vs Poor)
Writing FeedbackEggss - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 20, 2010
|Memory from the past can always give people more specific guide in the present - SAT
6 - Thank you Kevin...You are awesome!! I think I do make my opening sentences sound confused and I will revise...
Writing FeedbackLoftyyyy Girlll - Jul 14, 2010 / Loftyyyy Girlll - Jul 16, 2010
|GRE (argument): Recommendation to change the marketing style of a company
11 - The sentence was like this: We must revert back to net marketing. My high school teacher would have...
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 3, 2010
|Describing graph + studying the past - two essays
2 - The given bar graph shows in percentage the contributions of three ... The contributions of three sectors changed...
Writing Feedbackvitconbobo - Jul 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 15, 2010
|Education comes not from books but from practical experience. (MCAT)
4 - But also Additionally, students have the opportunity to learn essential communication skills, leaderships skills, with which no one could...
Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Developed nations have an obligation to provide aid to the underdeveloped nations.
3 - Countries with a well-established economies, welfare systems, education, and minimal levels of poverty are seen as developed and successful...
Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|Essay for IELTS : Young people should go to university or not ?
Writing Feedbackpologirl27 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|IELTS: Goverment should write laws for using vehicles and everybody should follow them
Writing Feedbackruhi - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 28, 2010
|Clearview town mayoral election (GRE argument)
3 - I would write ...Moreover, there is no clear-cut evidence to suggest that... A small change makes it clearer....
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 14, 2010
|My (woman's) Weekend -TOEFL
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jul 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|GRE TEST:Issue130 How children are socialized today determines the destiny of。。
Writing Feedbacklanyuanweizi - Jul 10, 2010 / lanyuanweizi - Jul 18, 2010
|Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of travel or work after high school.
3 - Hellow Lynn, There are two disadvantages on the other hand. [b]Could be better: On the other hand, there...
Writing FeedbackLynn Truong - Jul 10, 2010 / George1 - Jul 28, 2010
|Advantages and disadvantages of living in apartment blocks.
2 - You are smart to use the word proliferate, but actually it is used in a slightly different way. It...
Writing Feedbackkumar1980 - Jul 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|GRE (Analysis of an argument): Handing over security job of a company to a group
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 12, 2010
|The most important characteristic to be successful in life and best way to tackle with difficulties
Writing Feedbacksummer_breeze3 - Jul 9, 2010 / Lynn Truong - Jul 10, 2010
|Essay for IETLS: Natural Talents and Trained Talents. Dicuss.
2 - Talented people are those who attain a certain exceptional skill that others' skill cannot be compared to. What...
Writing FeedbackLynn Truong - Jul 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 11, 2010
|Child Labor in the World - children are not anyone's property.
8 - Well, there is a good example of how the children are mistreated. One of them dropped a glass,...
Writing Feedbackyashsingh - Jul 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|Replacement of the president of a company because of low profits (GRE argument)
3 - Capitalize Salvo. They did not fire her, but instead asked for her resignation, which is different. This...
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 9, 2010
|Where do you like to learn foreign language, in your country or where it is spoken?
NEW - Many people have learned a foreign language in their own country; other have learned a foreign language in the...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 7, 2010 / — -
|IELTS ESSAY: Effects of mobile phones
Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Jul 7, 2010 / Nesreen - Jul 9, 2010
|Violence is never a real solution to a political crisis. (MCAT written topic)
6 - Hi Ripoff, I don't see this material online anywhere, and it seems to be original as far as I...
Writing Feedbackflavia03 - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 24, 2010
|An essay about having a mobile phone.
4 - At the end of the first paragraph, add a sentence. Make it a thesis statement that tells the main...
Writing Feedbackabadi_ksu - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|Topic: Events bring people together.
8 - Nowadays, globalization is a common trend, so many events are organized to bring people together. Events can do even...
Writing Feedbackbaohuy - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|TOEFL: All in all, traveling with a companion has a lot of advantages
Writing Feedbacklamlam - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|Do you think we should pay attention to the famous people opinions?
4 - I think this sounds better: ...in their master areas of expertise. Use the plural form: Celebrity Celebrities...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 6, 2010 / vrajveer89 - Jul 8, 2010
|Increased sales of leisure items. GRE(argument)
3 - You write very well Rajveer! Also, thanks for the great help you have been giving people here at EF....
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|telephone has greater effects on human kind than television has.
4 - Hey Bob, you have an excellent writing style; it seems like a rhythmic and creative way to structure sentences....
Writing Feedbacklalashow - Jul 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|House hunting; 'This group of landlords does not show compassion'
3 - thank you Kevin and Susan, I appreciate the feedback! I have really problems with the lead sentences :o(...
Writing Feedbackmarina2goode - Jul 5, 2010 / marina2goode - Jul 9, 2010
|A large factory near your community - do you support or oppose?
3 - "city-dweller" is a countable noun I think, you should change it to "city-dwellers" People would often get headache and...
Writing Feedbacklvnnk - Jul 5, 2010 / lin54390 - Jul 7, 2010
|GRE: argument51: antibiotics, a part of treatment for muscle strain patients??
4 - ...who suffer muscle strain should be treated with antibiotics to prevent themselves from getting secondary infections. Besides, the...
Writing Feedbacktiaw - Jul 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|Crap to a Craft, David's boredom
3 - Use a comma to separate dialogue from the rest of the sentence: "What to do," he queried in his...
Writing Feedbackwhoau49 - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|Is creative needed more than ever in the world today?
4 - Actually, I do think this essay has a good clear direction, and you assert your main idea in the...
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|Telephones and email have made communication between people less personal
NEW - Nowadays technology has developed enormously that people can communicate easily. Last century, we were dependent on post services; at...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 4, 2010 / — -
|If you could disappear for a week, where would you go? check the error
Writing Feedbackpoaro - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|Earth is a beautiful planet which will soon be demolished by human activities
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 6, 2010
|Descriptive Essay on making an important decision - test prep, CBEST.
5 - ...while bad ones bring us into the middle of nowhere. Throughout my entire life, the hardest decision that...
Writing Feedbackhoney91332 - Jul 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|If Exceed's walls could talk, what would they tell?
3 - After reading your essay, I think you are unhappy with your teacher. There are plenty of things you can...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jul 2, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jul 3, 2010
|How media affects the lives of famous people?
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 2, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jul 4, 2010
|'cultural monuments' Why people visit a museum while visiting a new place?
5 - Thanks susan and azeri.thanks for your valuable guide.i will try to improve in from my next writing....
Writing Feedbackrupjyoti2706 - Jul 1, 2010 / rupjyoti2706 - Jul 3, 2010
|Follow it up with adequate facts ; Limiting inventory to increase profits
4 - There might be a huge chunk of customers who might not bother to participate in such a survey, or...
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 3, 2010
|We need neighbors who are helpful, kind, understanding and encouragingr
9 - The generic prompt of sub-dividing ourselves at the base level of individuals assumes a western culture for the ambassadors...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 30, 2010 / Mustafa1991 - Jul 3, 2010
|Not only women but also men have to take care of their children
7 - I think the essay should be had more explanation for each idea instead of giving ideas without example or...
Writing Feedbackbluebellia - Jun 30, 2010 / nguyenhathu178 - Jul 23, 2010
|Essay on organ donation and genetic screening for philosphy
3 - Rajveer, we're so privileged to have another great participant helping to make these threads excellent. Division23, whjat is...
Writing Feedbackdivision23 - Jun 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 1, 2010
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