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|Doing a job with hands or with your brains?
4 - It sounds strange to say you have aptitude in thinking. Use this to be specific: ...special aptitude for...
Writing Feedbackhasty2150 - Jun 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|Chronic fatigue and depression in USA vs Asia: Reasoning of an argument
4 - You are making a new assertion here. It's not necessary to do this. The most important thing to...
Writing Feedbacksprasad89 - Jun 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|Victims in five different age groups in Venezuela - Table chart
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|Educational benefits of computers
4 - Phil, you are making this site a better place and promoting your service in a very cool way. I'm...
Writing Feedbacklowryder49 - Jun 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|IELTS: essay about British and Australian laws
3 - Sorry, I've just realised your question "Susan" ( For example, if the jury knew the criminal past of...
Writing Feedbackwemo - Jun 24, 2010 / wemo - Jun 26, 2010
|IELTS : Attitude of students is the main reason for many problems
3 - Lorena, this is great! Thanks for helping so much. Hi Choi, It;s nice to have you participating here....
Writing FeedbackYumi - Jun 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|'You didn't build that?' - Luck has nothing to do w/ success
10 - Luck is something that is not in one's hands, that could not be controlled. Luck might not come exactly...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 24, 2010 / Azeri - Jul 15, 2010
|IELTS essay: Factors Contributing to Job Satisfaction
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jun 24, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 26, 2010
|TOEFL: Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human
3 - Even though I have experience in only IELTS essays, I will give some general advice. You should not...
Writing Feedbackwraith - Jun 23, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 24, 2010
|P.S:Meet me"You know where " (chapter two), Reaching the lake
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Jun 23, 2010 / stranger4ever - Jun 24, 2010
|Children spend too much time on computers; IELTS
7 - Nowadays, most South Korean families have their home computers, and therefore many children are affected by it from very...
Writing FeedbackYumi - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|His name represents the basketball. Michael Jordan was a legend.
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|ILETS: The affects of smoking upon health and the benefits gained from stopping
4 - Hi Just a simple grammar advice. Whenever you use a singular noun which represents a class or group...
Writing FeedbackTetanya - Jun 23, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 24, 2010
|Pie charts, comparing the sales of books
5 - This first sentence is a tough one: The two pie charts show information about sales at the Famous Book...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|"Eyes On the Road" - Writing task for Emotional and physical journey
Writing Feedbackalekahraiki - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|I will live in small village. There are many reasons.
10 - Thanks Kelvin You always trying to correct my mistake. I am making same mistake again and again like...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 22, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jun 30, 2010
|Do changes that make our lives easier not neccessarily make them better?
4 - Technology may sometimes be helpful, but causes a lack of communication for those who live in this generation ....
Writing Feedbackredtoenails - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 23, 2010
|pleasure and satisfaction: the pursuit of our desires or the attainment of them?
4 - You can't go from third person, (one's lifetime) to second person, (your desires) in the same sentence. Actually, it...
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 23, 2010
|Story: Meet Me 'You Know Where', Reading an unknown letter
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Jun 21, 2010 / stranger4ever - Jun 24, 2010
|Bar Graph description (coffee and meat consumed in selected countries)
2 - It will be clearer this way: The bar graph compares the amounts of coffee and... Let's add one...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 22, 2010
|Learning about the past has many benefit for us; experience, virtues, wisdom
3 - HI~~ thank you for correction. You are great!! You always give me a good advice. Thanks a lot!...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 20, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 20, 2010
|IELTS immigrants should adopt to local culture or establish a minority community
3 - sorry , it is "approaches". Thank you for your generous help! your positive comments inspire me a lot....
Writing Feedbackshaieli - Jun 20, 2010 / shaieli - Jun 23, 2010
|NARRATIVE PAPER: on a lesson learned (sports). Question on comma placement.
2 - You can always make writing more powerful if you express the same size idea in fewer words: Many of...
Writing Feedbackrod606 - Jun 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|Car has helped people a lot, but the negative effects of automobile exceed the positive effects
Writing Feedbacklamktqd - Jun 19, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 20, 2010
|TV & Movies have many good influences on peoples' behavior
4 - Thanks silkesha Might be I am incorporate with my native language marathi. thanks for suggestion. I will...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 17, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jun 18, 2010
|TOEFL: Important to be able to work with a group of people or independently?
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|It is a paragraph, Are Zoos morally wrong?
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 23, 2010
|GRE AW ISSUE hunger, unemployment vs art
2 - The speaker asserts that using public resources to support the arts is unjustifiable when starvation and unemployment exist in...
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 19, 2010
|The city v small town-county - Comparison-Contrast Essays
3 - Jocelyne 3 There are muchmany more ways to pastimepass time , have a walklike having a walk around the...
Writing Feedbackjocelynephl - Jun 16, 2010 / sprasad89 - Jun 25, 2010
|Valuing of past is a must; shorten getting knowledge time, avoiding mistakes
Writing Feedbackwraith - Jun 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|ielts "When people break the traditions of their predecessors they advance more"
3 - Making Taking the next step of development creates a need to put aside traditional culture and experience. Cross-cultural...
Writing Feedbacklorena - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2010
|TOEFL: WHICH KIND OF WORKER WOULD YOU HIRE?
Writing Feedbackmayenlu - Jun 15, 2010 / mayenlu - Jun 18, 2010
|TOEFL:I strongly agree that government should improve public transportation
3 - First of all, a perfect public transporttransportation system can help people to save many time, they do not waste...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 15, 2010 / cathyliu - Jun 16, 2010
|Positive and negative aspects of globalization - two-edged sword
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 17, 2010
|To what extent do you agree or disagree?---modern & traditional building
6 - accompany = "go with" so do this: accompanying the population exploration explosion... :-) The Governor was accompanied...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 22, 2010
|Holistic communication in nursing care
4 - Sad Encouraged to know that my tutor failed me for my holistic communication essay is going to challenge...
Writing Feedbackantolo_kim - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 13, 2010
|As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work (job satisfaction)
2 - Name_Here did a great thing here, like usual. I know how tedious it is to make those corrections, so......
Writing Feedbackinderjeet - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 16, 2010
|The amount of money per week spend on fast foods in Britain - IELTS Task 1 essay
3 - The graph shows the expense per week on junk food in Britain. The graph shows the amount of money...
Writing Feedbackanggra_88 - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|"There are no challenges so difficult, no goals so impossibe" - the english comp
3 - You should use the word "often," because obviously some people do set high goals. I feel that people...
Writing Feedbackrachel d - Jun 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|TOEFL- Violent Media
6 - Hi Nesreen, Sorry for upseting you. I just thought to correct your essay first. As you have written...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 14, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 15, 2010
|Traffic congestion and ways to reduce it - Compare paragraph - What's better?
5 - In my country, people often struggle for position while driving and don't stay in their lanes so that everything...
Writing Feedbackmabu9669 - Jun 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|What must we do to truly understand ourselves?
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jun 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|Classmates vs parents; 'Teaching is the exalted duty than anyone could take'
2 - Hi, The topic is about child's success in school. When you focus on children and school, you can...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 13, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 13, 2010
|"I bet she's a tramp" - my English FINAL.
Writing Feedbackclarerawr - Jun 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 14, 2010
|Television- A Boon or a Bane?
Writing Feedbacksilkesha - Jun 13, 2010 / silkesha - Jul 7, 2010
|First of all, a healthy mental and body is prerequisite to succeed - TOEFL
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 13, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 15, 2010
|Okay, "Karate Kid" is one more film that confirms my hunch -- movies suck nowadays
2 - Thank you!! I can't believe there is another karate kid movie. I love Jackie Chan, though, and I love...
Writing FeedbackMustafa1991 - Jun 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: Internet and communication
3 - I would like to state the benefits of the internet in communication and the difference between the internet and...
Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|Using machines is very helpful because you can save time and effort
Writing Feedbackmayenlu - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|History -- A waste of time? 'meaning of a Microprocessor'
2 - You can say this in a way that does not involve mentioning evolution. Evolutionary Theory teaches us what...
Writing Feedbacksilkesha - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|Ungraded classrooms, which consist of students grouped by level of achievement
2 - In the second paragraph, the following statement doesn't go well... Although age matter for the development of the brain,...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Jun 10, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 11, 2010
|How successfully does the writer of "Climate Change: The facts"...
3 - Today global warming has become a political hot... When wrting about a reading, use the present verb tense...
Writing FeedbackSunazero - Jun 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Laws should not end up in motley - should give the law makers enough flexibility
Writing Feedbackprakharsingh - Jun 10, 2010 / prakharsingh - Jun 26, 2010
|Short Essay on High School Scholarship Program
5 - That's funny... yeah, when you have big success with a brilliant online business, you'll have 50K to donate. ...
Writing Feedbacknorthernlight - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|gaining knowledge/ More job opportunities; Reasons behind attending universities
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|History leads us to the bright destination in the ocean of social development and revolution
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 9, 2010 / jadetang - Jun 13, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL "Advances in transportation and communication"
2 - You need a comma here: acquired to human beings society all over the globe, and that... Capitalize Internet....
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|GRE: "All nations should help support the development of a global university"
2 - Here is another idea: In Today, a global university seems to be another Tower of Babel, because...
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|"An experience you have had that involves controversy" - Narrative Argument
3 - This is such a powerful sentence. Also, the notion of untouchables at the school is powerful. You are...
Writing FeedbackEcho1334 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL IBT BOOK "learning a foreign language"
4 - Yep, at this point in your practice, Nohna, I think you should use sentences that are not too long...
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
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