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|History -- A waste of time? 'meaning of a Microprocessor'
2 - You can say this in a way that does not involve mentioning evolution. Evolutionary Theory teaches us what...
Writing Feedbacksilkesha - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|Ungraded classrooms, which consist of students grouped by level of achievement
2 - In the second paragraph, the following statement doesn't go well... Although age matter for the development of the brain,...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Jun 10, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 11, 2010
|How successfully does the writer of "Climate Change: The facts"...
3 - Today global warming has become a political hot... When wrting about a reading, use the present verb tense...
Writing FeedbackSunazero - Jun 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Laws should not end up in motley - should give the law makers enough flexibility
Writing Feedbackprakharsingh - Jun 10, 2010 / prakharsingh - Jun 26, 2010
|Short Essay on High School Scholarship Program
5 - That's funny... yeah, when you have big success with a brilliant online business, you'll have 50K to donate. ...
Writing Feedbacknorthernlight - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|gaining knowledge/ More job opportunities; Reasons behind attending universities
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|History leads us to the bright destination in the ocean of social development and revolution
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 9, 2010 / jadetang - Jun 13, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL "Advances in transportation and communication"
2 - You need a comma here: acquired to human beings society all over the globe, and that... Capitalize Internet....
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|GRE: "All nations should help support the development of a global university"
2 - Here is another idea: In Today, a global university seems to be another Tower of Babel, because...
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|"An experience you have had that involves controversy" - Narrative Argument
3 - This is such a powerful sentence. Also, the notion of untouchables at the school is powerful. You are...
Writing FeedbackEcho1334 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL IBT BOOK "learning a foreign language"
4 - Yep, at this point in your practice, Nohna, I think you should use sentences that are not too long...
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Government should not limit scientific studies and growth
Writing FeedbackLew chuang - Jun 7, 2010 / Lew chuang - Jun 10, 2010
|TOEFL: Living in a big city has many merit and some disadvantages!
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Treatment of Illegal Immagrants - U.S. versus Mexico
Writing FeedbackPaula6 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Term paper about Christ Figure in literature
Writing FeedbackKingdom10 - Jun 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 8, 2010
|"global warming will result to numerous changes" - essay needs editing
Writing Feedbacksothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010 / sothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010
|Do-Gooders need to let us decide (the three risky behaviors), rough draft
Writing Feedbackreeseinskool - Jun 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2010
|the internet is contributing to the breakdown of family relationship
5 - Make the introduction part a bit interesting! Use some catchy statements and also a few thoughts or phrases...i feel,...
Writing FeedbackALICE K - Jun 6, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 11, 2010
|I think there is too much violence in movies.
6 - Thanks for comments, Yonman. Regarding your question, I do not need to support the reason with a realible...
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Jun 6, 2010 / Azeri - Jun 8, 2010
|IELTS Writing-Topic about TV, book, radio
4 - Hi Jet, In my openion, starting with the word civilization is compatable with mentioning some historical facts about...
Writing Feedbackjetzhu - Jun 6, 2010 / Nohna - Jun 7, 2010
|three battles significant in evoving canada as an independant country
6 - Thank you sooooooooooo much Kevin that was SOOOOOO much help im finished my conclusion now all thanks to you...
Writing Feedbackosma - Jun 5, 2010 / osma - Jun 7, 2010
|The College Experience: Exemplification Essay On College Life
2 - Some believe a 5 hour energy will do-- this will confuse some people. It is a proper noun, so...
Writing Feedbackamc2286 - Jun 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 6, 2010
|childrens eating habits nowadays are different from previous generation
2 - Nowadays, children's eating habits lead them to heath deterioration.I entirely agree with this view and believe that this alarming...
Writing Feedbacksheina - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|divorce: Causes and effects on children
Writing Feedbackbabyevy - Jun 4, 2010 / ah_zafari - Jun 15, 2014
|The main function of university
3 - Use capital letters to start each sentence: Some people think that university should provide graduates with the knowledge...
Writing Feedbacknoorahan - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|Focus on creative expression should be given importance or not ?
5 - In academic writing, you never have to say said that ,"blah blah...." William Shakespeare once said, that "An objective...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|TOEFL essay -Monumental Gifts
Writing Feedbackkovcastle - Jun 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 8, 2010
|Some students prefer to study alone - TOEFL Question
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 2, 2010 / yonman - Jun 7, 2010
|Computers affect society - CLEP English Comp Practice
3 - This is a compound sentence that needs a comma: Many things have changed over the years , but one...
Writing Feedbackoperalady - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|IELTS writing task two>Compare the advantage vs. disadvantage of three media
3 - In nowadays modern society, there are plenty of different media to spread information and knowledge. Here I am...
Writing Feedbackssachsieh - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|What I like apart from having fun.
Writing FeedbackCharz - Jun 2, 2010 / Charz - Jun 4, 2010
|In some countries at the age of 18 young people are allowed to drive, vote and mar
5 - In some nations, it is common that, young people at around 18 years are allowed to vote, drive and...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jun 2, 2010 / phuocqui - Jun 3, 2010
|IELTS taks 2 essay: computer has negative effects to children
6 - Well, the thesis statement should answer in a single sentence the question that the essay is trying to...
Writing Feedbackdungpvt2004 - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|'Imperfection is beauty' - If there has been some obstacle or bump in the road
4 - Imperfections, or bumps in the road are mere fragments that are there for a reason. (I crossed out part...
Writing Feedbackaubrey - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 3, 2010
|comparison between 5 countries, asking about Ielts writing task one
Writing Feedbackrashahanna - Jun 1, 2010 / rashahanna - Jun 4, 2010
|TOEFL: "couch potato"; How do movies or television influence people's behavior?
NEW - Watching television and movie are become a common entertainment in our daily life. In my opinion, movies and television...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 1, 2010 / — -
|Quammen vs. Scully: my Essay that compares and analyses two texts
2 - Hi there, We are lucky to have such an outstanding writer participating in our forum. I see that...
Writing Feedbackmisspellar - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2010
|TOEFL: NEWS ABOUT CELEBRITIES
7 - hi~~ Nowadays, it is very easy to hear the news about the personal lives of famous people such as...
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jun 1, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 4, 2010
|I analyzed the lyric "Temptation Waits" by Garbage
Writing Feedbackghgyfkd1 - May 31, 2010 / ghgyfkd1 - Jun 3, 2010
|Compare and Contrast Essay- sibling/no sibling
2 - Christian, how weirdly self-effacing it is to combine consonant sounds from your first and last name to produce "Crud"......
Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|Nowadays young children are using mobile phones
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: INFLUENCE OF LARGE FACTORY
3 - The main disadvantage is contamination. It is true that some areas are suffering the dire consequences caused by overdeveloping...
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and playing
3 - Your comments were absolutely fantastic. Along with your correction you mentioned the reason to emphasis why schools are important...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 29, 2010 / renga78 - May 30, 2010
|Agree or disagree that progress is always good? Yes it is always good!
4 - Thanks a lot Kevin and for homework as well. Your feedback was very encouraging. Will keep writing ......
Writing FeedbackUmeda - May 28, 2010 / Umeda - Jun 1, 2010
|Leisure time: spend it outdoors or indoors?
8 - I think adding their is better because there are too much or in the sentence. Everyone has his...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - May 28, 2010 / jjinko - Jun 15, 2010
|How should I describe all types of graphs,diagrams or charts?
8 - Now that I am looking at my description, I can see that I've made some spelling errors. The point...
Writing FeedbackMarutza - May 28, 2010 / Marutza - Jun 7, 2010
|CAPE poetry essay, experiences of trauma in the Caribbean
Writing Feedbackhustlerprince - May 27, 2010 / hustlerprince - May 30, 2010
|Required attendance in college or university classes.
6 - I reccomend you change up the transitions between paragraphs. "First ... Second ... Finally ..." Is so .. boring....
Writing Feedbackbabyevy - May 27, 2010 / LehFoxeh - Jun 12, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY : PREPARED FOOD
3 - This is great, thanks for making this an excellent thread. I'll add some ideas: Nowadays, more and more...
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Why We Crave Horror Movies
3 - It is great that you do not include lots of unhelpful words and phrases, like some writers do. Yet,...
Writing Feedbackreeseinskool - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Healthy life style
Writing FeedbackJuliaS - May 27, 2010 / JuliaS - May 31, 2010
|TOEFL: What I would change in my hometown if I could
5 - thx~everyone...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 27, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - May 30, 2010
|PEOPLE SHOULD CHANGE THEIR JOBS ATLEAST ONCE - FEEDBACK
NEW - If we are to compare the job flexibility of today's generation and those of 20 years back. We can...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 27, 2010 / — -
|Income gap is necessary to sustain a society to run dynamically; sports professionals earn big money
4 - Mustafa, don't you think it's important to help people in different ways depending on their level of skill with...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Has the Chinese government changed after the Tiananmen Square Massacre?
2 - Hello, I think you need to proofread your essay better. There are quite a few grammatical errors, some...
Writing Feedbackken349137 - May 26, 2010 / puroodsy - May 27, 2010
|TOEFL: Improve Roads or Public Transports
3 - I'm so glad Azeri is here helping people. Thanks!! Many people think that governments should spend money on...
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Classification essay- Modern students's learning style
5 - For a long time, studying have has been a significant issue among human beings. That is the only...
Writing FeedbackHUTAllen - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|Online Education Myths, peer review assignment
Writing FeedbackHigherEducation - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Art history paper about looted artwork during WWII
NEW - I just need general feedback like if my sentences and grammar make sense and if I'm answering the question...
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|Computer based Instructions ! Good or bad.
4 - Yes, good corrections here. You have some options: Computers represent one of the... or The computer is one of...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
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