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|GRE-AW-Argument-Secondary infections and muscle strain
4 - Hey, you did a great job with this. Another point that might be important enough to write about is...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|"What is Success": LUCK OR HARD WORK?
6 - Dolly I mean writing style is too casual. In other words, the structure isn't clear enough. It's better to...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / chris0203 - Feb 15, 2011
|A university education should be provided free of charge to all the interested
3 - You wrote "should be" 2 times in that first sentence. It can be more efficient, like... Oh! I see...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|GOOD NEIGHBOR (reliable, trustworthy, with a sense of humor)
3 - Some are vey very positive, while there are others who can really make your life miserable.---That is so true!...
Writing Feedbackdolly - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 21, 2011
|Getting advice from friends who are older than you is more valuable
4 - Use the word standpoint, not standing point. From my standpoint, I prone to regard senior friends' advices more...
Writing Feedbackchris0203 - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|Some important qualities of a good supervisor
Writing Feedbackkarinab - Feb 13, 2011 / Jeecee - Apr 24, 2012
|GRE-AW-Issue-Faculty, practical experiences, working outside the academic world
2 - Faculty members can have first-hand perception and unverstanding understanding of the demand from the industry through their participation in...
Writing Feedbackjackrw - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|Schools should fund the classes and extracurricular activities with the same money
Writing FeedbackEmilyLee - Feb 13, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 27, 2011
|"Children to bring about a better society" - ISSUE 130
Writing FeedbackMary861003 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|How is the social or sociable constructed at the site of commerce?
2 - "For example" is strange there, at the start. Maybe this is not the beginning of the paper? A...
Writing Feedbackbeau4u1 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|"Who are you?" Lucy asked; Dystopian Short Story
Writing FeedbackSifan - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|Movies are popular all over the world. Explain why movies are so popular.
2 - The first sentence does not carry a lot of meaning. It will be a stronger start if you revise...
Writing FeedbackCHEN LU - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|The Jealous reactions of one person to the success of a friend.
3 - Jealousy can lead you to do something which you yourself would not even have expected. This was what happened...
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Feb 12, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2011
|Toefl - What makes a good parent?
3 - Thanks karinab, I think I should pay more attention on my grammar Really appreciate your corrections, Kak3521...
Writing Feedbacks80776 - Feb 12, 2011 / s80776 - Feb 12, 2011
|Exploring outer space, governments should spend as much money as possible?
4 - In addition to the very thorough feedback from Chi-han Huang, I want to add a point that might improve...
Writing Feedbacks033591 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2011
|TOEFL - Parents have many useful ways to help their children to prepare their adult life
3 - There are not many grammar errors in this article actually, but there is a repeated sentence"prepare their adult...
Writing Feedbackqqcandra - Feb 11, 2011 / s033591 - Feb 15, 2011
|O level: teenage love with study and emotional development
3 - As the society progresses, a variety of social issues also arises to be faced by... Among those, adolescent...
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|"The role of luck in our success" - When people succeed, is it because of hard work?
2 - with hard working-> hard work they have able -> are able having the luck help ->having luck helps is...
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 11, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 11, 2011
|TOEFL-iBT Giving money as praise for children's high marks, good or bad?
3 - Here is a quick lesson about singular and plural. It's easy. Every parent always wants... All parents want... One...
Writing Feedbackabao1123 - Feb 11, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Toelf: Never, never give up (to keep trying and never stop working for your goals?)
Writing Feedbacksabrinayaa - Feb 10, 2011 / 2011bss - Feb 10, 2011
|"Although my daughters are twins" - Contrast/Comparison Paragraphs
4 - Pre media.. that seems wrong. You should check to make sure you do not need a hyphen or something....
Writing Feedbackironhawk893 - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2011
|Toefl IBT: "attending college or university is required in our life"
Writing FeedbackJanet0928 - Feb 10, 2011 / Janet0928 - Feb 21, 2011
|Some practices harmed Chinese people's interests and damaged their emotions - GRE
Writing FeedbackXiaowang - Feb 10, 2011 / Xiaowang - Feb 15, 2011
|I and my sister went to the supermarket together
Writing FeedbackThuHien - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|TOEFL - domestic cars will not be considered as a reasonable way to work commuting
Writing Feedbackzjs92 - Feb 10, 2011 / zjs92 - Feb 11, 2011
|Ielts Task2: The problems and Solutions of Using the Internet
2 - I don't think "behind" is the right word to use here: However, there are still many drawbacks behind ...
Writing Feedbackshane - Feb 10, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|Population Growth: WORLD ISSUES PERFECT PARAGRAPH ON EHRLICH THEORY
3 - thanks :) I really appreciate the help and feedback! hahaha its okay it you help late LOL! at least...
Writing FeedbackMajo - Feb 9, 2011 / Majo - Feb 12, 2011
|"wisdom" that old people have - Knowledge gained from books or from experience?
Writing Feedbackkarinab - Feb 9, 2011 / Zakia15 - Feb 26, 2011
|Compare & Contrast "The Two Friends" - feedback.
4 - Thank you ioannidis007 and KathyLala for your feedback, and point out some weaknesses of the essay... I will fix...
Writing Feedbackiamthien - Feb 9, 2011 / iamthien - Feb 9, 2011
|IELTS-sports professional can earn a great more money than others
12 - Hehe, great quote =) (the one with the ending). Nah, I'm so NOT over the moon with my english...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 9, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|IELTS ESSAY The importance of robots and their influences
3 - Thanks, Sarah and Moon, you are great! Assel, I think you should type the essay again and try...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 17, 2011
|Television promotes propaganda and it destroyed the communication among friends and family?
Writing Feedbackmahrou - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 25, 2011
|Quest in IELTS: Information provided in the internet can be reliable or trusted?
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / jomse - Feb 18, 2011
|GRE_AW issue 131"The arts reveal the hidden ideas of a society"
4 - People say, "In terms of..." In terms of individual, art, not only representing truth, genuineness and beauty, but...
Writing Feedbackgintoki - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|Well-being of pets (Quest in IELTS)
4 - You need THEM. ... trained animals and kept them as... Do not capitalize there words: ... are Dogs,...
Writing Feedbackjomse - Feb 9, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|A persuasive essay: 'Death penalty should be abolished' for or against
6 - Why capitalize here? ---> severe Punishment if a Person disobeyed... When you include a little extra phrase in...
Writing FeedbackJovine - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2011
|Nursing, My First Job Experience (narrative essay)
Writing Feedbackmdipeolu - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|sacrificial love - I was contented, relieved and in peace.
Writing Feedbackamelia95 - Feb 8, 2011 / amelia95 - Feb 19, 2011
|IELTS: Influence of English - advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
2 - It's okay to say this, but then you need to add one more sentence before ending the paragraph....
Writing Feedbacklippea - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|IELTS- student behaviour- causes and solutions
7 - I see your question. I don't know much about the scoring for ielts, but maybe Kevin or someone...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 8, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|Rituals and ceremonies help define a culture. ---GRE
Writing FeedbackMrTom - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2011
|Travel broaden the horizon and knowledge; communications between countries
Writing Feedbackkate36 - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|Competitive children admire the sense of fulfillment therefore they are always trying to be better.
6 - ...childrens' characters and future lives . Besides, they will hold future responsibilities for a country. ( I changed...
Writing Feedbacks_maryam - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|Independent scholar seeks journal paper advice
2 - Hi Lance, it usually works like this: People post great essays on EssayForum so a lot of people can...
Writing FeedbackLector - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|Tv and Its drawbacks (spreading violence, changing social relations)
2 - Great edit, Kim! Now, Hamid, it is your turn to work some more. Please type the essay again, and...
Writing Feedbacknabilkhan - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 15, 2011
|schools don't prepare young people for life in the real life.
Writing Feedbackploniite - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 14, 2011
|The socialization of children determines the way of society development
4 - What do you mean? It's a sentence you copied from another essay? You should change some words to...
Writing Feedbacklcnk - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 24, 2011
|British and Australian laws - to access to the past criminal record of the defendant?
Writing Feedbacksweetheart87 - Feb 7, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 9, 2011
|Essay about Scientific Wonderment- feedback
Writing Feedbackbenshen11 - Feb 7, 2011 / benshen11 - Feb 10, 2011
|IELTS: Music was, remains and will be vital part of our lives
6 - @ekologic: I'm not sure about "All walks of life" - never saw it in such context. I'm more keen...
Writing Feedbackekologic - Feb 7, 2011 / m00ny - Feb 13, 2011
|"Evaluating the teaching effectiveness of the professors" - GRE, Omega
Writing Feedbackshubhi - Feb 6, 2011 / shubhi - Feb 15, 2011
|Parents can give everything to their children. They understand them more than anyone else does.
5 - Hey, it is true that there are some small errors, but you have to also remember that writing is...
Writing Feedbackthaitornadoes - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2011
|IELTS- creativity-should it be given freedom or restrictions?
4 - Hi Kevin, thanks for the reply... I will try to keep it in mind not to write such contradicting...
Writing Feedbackajit88rai - Feb 6, 2011 / ajit88rai - Feb 9, 2011
|Obamacare: Heading Down? (against the health care programs promoted)
5 - You should look at the advantages and disadvantages of Obamacare then come up with a stronger thesis which will...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / oscarsalmons - Sep 10, 2012
|Olevel: Internet/Computer harm or not?
Writing FeedbackChim Can Cook - Feb 6, 2011 / Chim Can Cook - Feb 28, 2011
|Rising China and its future: planned or liberal economy?
3 - The size of the government, or the capacity of its intervention defines a country's overall economic policies. or you...
Writing Feedbackjamessuh - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|GRE Issue: On the value of history
Writing Feedbackkitty__lan - Feb 6, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 13, 2011
|People who cannot work with computers will be soon disadvantaged.
3 - April and Junwoo Suh, thank you from the deepest of my heart!!! Hope your suggestions and examples will help...
Writing Feedbacktleuliyeva - Feb 6, 2011 / tleuliyeva - Feb 6, 2011
|Toefl essay: Modern technology; single world culture will not be created
2 - Especially, ancient cultural people, they will conserve their civilization to distinguish themselves from others. Loose sentence. The...
Writing Feedbacklittle_wingg - Feb 5, 2011 / shelok - Feb 5, 2011
|Advertisements increase sales volume - not wasting of a company's time or money
Writing Feedbacksongyi88 - Feb 4, 2011 / EF_Susan - Feb 12, 2011
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