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|Personal Story - The Child Hood
Writing Feedbackhyori14 - Feb 23, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 25, 2010
|Personal Essay- How the children from India transformed me
Writing Feedbackjenniferrchan - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
|[TOEFL essay] Teachers should update their knowledge every 5years.
Writing Feedbackduke616 - Feb 22, 2010 / duke616 - Feb 25, 2010
|In some countries children have very strict rules of behavior,
Writing Feedbackplotophyte - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|Nanotechnology (implications and the future) - essay polishing
2 - There are many different implications that nanotechnology has for the future.--- this kind of sentence always weakens an essay....
Writing FeedbackClyde - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|"Do Phone Calls Increase Voter Turnout?" - article summary and critique
NEW - I was hoping to get some quick revisions for the rough draft of my article critique, I feel like...
Writing Feedbackggc540 - Feb 22, 2010 / — -
|Reasons-winners are be motivated by money & fame, what impacts on youth & itself
3 - Great thanks, klusterfunk. (1)Due to the rapid ecomomic development, Due to /Owing to/As a result of; Along with...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 22, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 22, 2010
|Anti-social behavior, lack of respect to others -help me make some improvement
5 - This is what colons are for----> There are mainly two causes of this phenomenon: the negative influence of ......
Writing Feedbackadverb - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 23, 2010
|Essay-Mommy Makeovers, Newest Trend in Cosmetic Surgery-Feedback Welcome!
4 - Questions are good attention grabbers, for sure. They are almost a little cliche, though, because of how overused rhetorical...
Writing Feedbackamymich79 - Feb 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 24, 2010
|Compulsive buying disorder (CBD): Conceptualization and classification
Writing FeedbackMcGregor10 - Feb 21, 2010 / McGregor10 - Mar 4, 2010
|"big or small inventions and their roles" - English Composition Clep
2 - When you use a semi-colon, you are supposed to have a complete sentence worth of words on each side...
Writing Feedbackmonessie - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|toefl writting:Printed books have greater effects on society than television
2 - In fact, people in growing numbers prefer television to printed books, considering it efficient and effective. Yet, there are...
Writing Feedbackelvis_ma - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|TOEFL IBT ESSAY "Telephones have had more positive effects on human kind than TV
2 - Don't write it all as one long paragraph. Separate it into some 4 or 5 sentence paragraphs: ...telephone,...
Writing Feedbackcandy890411 - Feb 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|ESSAY 250 WORDS - IELTS - Politicians and Scientists
Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Feb 20, 2010 / winwin - Feb 24, 2010
3 - When you write, use capital letters at the beginning of every sentence. When you write the word Pakistan, capitalize...
Writing Feedbackkasi_gem - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
|garbage sites, safety council - GRE Argument
Writing Feedbackwoodcrowfoot - Feb 20, 2010 / woodcrowfoot - Feb 22, 2010
|Essay on describing MY REGULAR WALK
7 - Thank you EF_Kevin, I got several inspirations on the expression about my writing. Anyway, I will try more times...
Writing Feedbackwinwin - Feb 20, 2010 / winwin - Mar 4, 2010
|In achieving happiness,relationship is of more important than anything else.
2 - Thus the most frequent reason given for studying has changed to be a desire to become an authority in...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 21, 2010
|TOEFL"It is better to marry some who is similar to you rather than different
4 - I guess you finish it in a rush. Criteria, other believe, definitely, Some believes that marrying a person similar to...
Writing FeedbackPoojasugandhi - Feb 19, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 20, 2010
|Marshalls made me realize how sine qua non a higher education is
3 - Jonathan, you are a hero. Thanks for helping so many people lately. I see what the problem is...
Writing FeedbackBlaqnsassy - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Is persistence all that is needed to be successful? - A SAT essay
3 - god thesis statement. This is brilliant. Patience and motivation are indeed the components of persistence. Thanks for sharing...
Writing FeedbackDemha - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|Educating Children with Toys - help me with these pargraphs
5 - Consequently, toy manufacturers are designing toys that can aid children in learning to initiate action, to taking care...
Writing Feedbackmary123 - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|GRE Argument essay:Finding new jobs for laid-off XYZ company employees
2 - This is looking very strong! ...last year those who used Delany found jobs much more quickly than did...
Writing Feedbackeringao - Feb 19, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 19, 2010
|'Building character' - Community Service- Synthesis Essay
3 - This should be a comma and not a semi-colon: Having community service as a requirement to graduate is a...
Writing Feedbacktiger13twin - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 19, 2010
|'just a typical teenager' - Creative writing Who am i? essay
5 - thanks alot.....
Writing Feedbackeram - Feb 18, 2010 / eram - Feb 21, 2010
|Give reasons and make suggestions. unemployment problem , reasons and solutions.
3 - One of serious issues associated with this change is the high young unemployment rate among young people, which in...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 18, 2010
|People are being demoralized day by day.Discuss IELTS GT
4 - Perhaps elaborate on your conclusion or tie it into another paragraph somehow. Otherwise a great essay!...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 17, 2010 / Veta - Feb 24, 2010
|Some people prefer home theater, others cinema at hall, discuss. IELTS GT
3 - hai, Can't you introduce with some dialogue on movie,than starting with your agreement? Even one can review some more...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 17, 2010 / remya - Feb 18, 2010
|Inspiration Essay about a Broadway star
2 - Not many girls get the opportunity to meet the one person who they idolize, and the one person who...
Writing FeedbackDanni Nicole - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 18, 2010
|Revising and ideas..How has your childhood shaped you as a writer
4 - As a child, I was encouraged to be open, focused, as well as descriptive in everything that I did;...
Writing Feedbackashleyfloyd - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 18, 2010
|"never thought college was important at all" - Cause and Effect
4 - Comments: So far, it's ok. I think you should expend more on your essay. It's a bit short but...
Writing FeedbackDannyrestrepo - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
|Narrative Essay (an experience) - "How do I approach him?"
5 - Well, for good clear composition, you ca use the last sentence of the first paragraph to establish a...
Writing Feedbackbharat2363 - Feb 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 20, 2010
|achieving happiness through relationships - IELTS ESSAY
Writing Feedbackremya - Feb 17, 2010 / remya - Feb 18, 2010
|IELTS Essay - Technology vs Traditional Cultures
6 - comments: Your first paragraph sounds like you are giving your opinion. That should be your final paragraph. What is...
Writing Feedbackvictorp_sv - Feb 17, 2010 / comet2000 - Feb 18, 2010
|Reasons to attend college or university -(TOEFL) Writing practice
2 - Hi, are you preparing for the toefl ibt?? Then your essay is incomplete. You should follow proper pattern for...
Writing FeedbackMasterSci - Feb 17, 2010 / Poojasugandhi - Feb 17, 2010
|GRE issue essay:"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes..."
Writing FeedbackYeming - Feb 16, 2010 / Yeming - Feb 21, 2010
|Argu: discuss disad./ad. business and cultral contact bt countries,&your opinion
3 - an intensive discussion on whether it is a positive development or a negative one. Undoubtedly, there is a...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 16, 2010 / EF_Susan - Feb 16, 2010
|mobile phones is destroying social interaction. Do you agree? IELTS GT essay
3 - "Due to the contribution of technology, like other electronic devices, mobile phone has penetrated in our daily lives. Application...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 16, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 16, 2010
|TOEFL - I believe people can get more knowledge from books
3 - This is because books contain more information and knowledge, and people can learn from past. ---- yes, learning from...
Writing Feedbackchlghdgus - Feb 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 16, 2010
|First Impressions from Lasting Impressions (tattoos and piercings essay)
3 - Tattoos and piercings have been around for many years they are even found in the bible as a marking...
Writing Feedbackmonkeygirl76 - Feb 15, 2010 / Nets - Feb 16, 2010
|Politicians and scientists have the greatest influence on earth.discuss IELTS GT
4 - I like your argument that politicians and scientists have influence on earth. It seems very vague though as to...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 15, 2010 / hey_millie - Feb 24, 2010
|It is unrealistic for people to work at the same company for their entire lives.
Writing Feedbacknetseung - Feb 15, 2010 / chlghdgus - Feb 15, 2010
|Do you agree or disagree? a jury has access to the defendant's past record
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 14, 2010 / linmark - Feb 17, 2010
|Narrative essay about an experience that has changed the way I lean
3 - Good sentence!! Actually, see which one you like more... that way, or this: As I shyly made my...
Writing Feedbackjmoreh10 - Feb 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|Narrative Essay About My Grandmother - Feedback
2 - Your title of a narrative essay is very broad. What else do you want to communicate besides general narration...
Writing Feedbackchocolatepap - Feb 14, 2010 / linmark - Feb 15, 2010
|Smoking at public place should be banned. Argumental essay for IELTS GT
8 - Thank you, Kevin. You really have got the power to raise one's confidence higher. Thanks again for your overwhelming...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 14, 2010 / usalma2002 - Feb 16, 2010
|Taking vacation is one of the most important needs of each student.
4 - Short or long vacation, does not matter. The importance is to take advantage from the free time. In conclusion,...
Writing Feedbacknabg - Feb 13, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 14, 2010
|"Good night daddy, I love you too" - Historical Narritive Essay
Writing Feedbackmsdenna - Feb 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2010
|Foster Care definition essay - grammatical assistance requested.
Writing FeedbackChillkindacat - Feb 13, 2010 / Chillkindacat - Feb 15, 2010
|Opinion on famous people's personal news, their hobbies in the media - IELTS
2 - In open market economy, all businessmen want to make money selling items that are in demand - regardless of...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|Why Life Insurance important? - It has many benefits
6 - I didn't realized how important it is until my grandmother passed away late last year. I feel like...
Writing Feedbackjaneypooh - Feb 12, 2010 / Randyhl - Feb 17, 2010
|"a great nation indicator" - GRE Issue essay
2 - Recently means "not very long ago" I'm going to take GRE analysis writing test soon. Would you please help...
Writing Feedbackchencong0320 - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|Toefl essay: Grades represent a proper way of motivating and encouraging students to learn
3 - Hi, very well written, but i am not clear with your conclusion para. it helps students know their advantages...
Writing Feedbacklizzielu17 - Feb 12, 2010 / Poojasugandhi - Feb 17, 2010
|My Last weekend: "working around the house"
3 - Capitalize Internet. ...by watching TV and various kinds of movies. I really enjoyed my weekend this way...
Writing Feedbackserkitinati - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Schools are the only place to receive true education? toefl essay
Writing Feedbackchlghdgus - Feb 11, 2010 / chlghdgus - Feb 12, 2010
|Issue of local concern - parent-child relationship
4 - The essay is very good, except for the story you told about the little girl. It doesnt capture the...
Writing Feedbackjjinko - Feb 11, 2010 / RShemanski - Feb 12, 2010
|The surest indicator of a great nation, welfare, GRE Issue Writing
2 - I think you should add one more sentence to that first paragraph. After telling the 2 different opinions, you...
Writing Feedbackjuliachen - Feb 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Thomas (Tommy) Clement Douglas Essay Gr.10
8 - Well, the essay is your contribution to the site, so that people can find examples of good writing and...
Writing Feedbackcherry99 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|the effects of stress (cause and effect paper)
11 - Here is another way to improve this sentence: Considering the fact that everybody deals with puzzling matters everyday, it...
Writing Feedbackbrooke4013 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2010
|Toefl; Do clothes have any influence on how people behave?
7 - SHABAIL thank you, Sharla , you really give me a good advice, I'll try that. Sometimes I just...
Writing Feedbacknicol018nie - Feb 9, 2010 / nicol018nie - Feb 10, 2010
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