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|An essay about having a mobile phone.
4 - At the end of the first paragraph, add a sentence. Make it a thesis statement that tells the main...
Writing Feedbackabadi_ksu - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|Topic: Events bring people together.
8 - Nowadays, globalization is a common trend, so many events are organized to bring people together. Events can do even...
Writing Feedbackbaohuy - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|TOEFL: All in all, traveling with a companion has a lot of advantages
Writing Feedbacklamlam - Jul 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|Do you think we should pay attention to the famous people opinions?
4 - I think this sounds better: ...in their master areas of expertise. Use the plural form: Celebrity Celebrities...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 6, 2010 / vrajveer89 - Jul 8, 2010
|Increased sales of leisure items. GRE(argument)
3 - You write very well Rajveer! Also, thanks for the great help you have been giving people here at EF....
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|telephone has greater effects on human kind than television has.
4 - Hey Bob, you have an excellent writing style; it seems like a rhythmic and creative way to structure sentences....
Writing Feedbacklalashow - Jul 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|House hunting; 'This group of landlords does not show compassion'
3 - thank you Kevin and Susan, I appreciate the feedback! I have really problems with the lead sentences :o(...
Writing Feedbackmarina2goode - Jul 5, 2010 / marina2goode - Jul 9, 2010
|A large factory near your community - do you support or oppose?
3 - "city-dweller" is a countable noun I think, you should change it to "city-dwellers" People would often get headache and...
Writing Feedbacklvnnk - Jul 5, 2010 / lin54390 - Jul 7, 2010
|GRE: argument51: antibiotics, a part of treatment for muscle strain patients??
4 - ...who suffer muscle strain should be treated with antibiotics to prevent themselves from getting secondary infections. Besides, the...
Writing Feedbacktiaw - Jul 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|Crap to a Craft, David's boredom
3 - Use a comma to separate dialogue from the rest of the sentence: "What to do," he queried in his...
Writing Feedbackwhoau49 - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|Is creative needed more than ever in the world today?
4 - Actually, I do think this essay has a good clear direction, and you assert your main idea in the...
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 7, 2010
|Telephones and email have made communication between people less personal
NEW - Nowadays technology has developed enormously that people can communicate easily. Last century, we were dependent on post services; at...
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|If you could disappear for a week, where would you go? check the error
Writing Feedbackpoaro - Jul 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 8, 2010
|Earth is a beautiful planet which will soon be demolished by human activities
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 6, 2010
|Descriptive Essay on making an important decision - test prep, CBEST.
5 - ...while bad ones bring us into the middle of nowhere. Throughout my entire life, the hardest decision that...
Writing Feedbackhoney91332 - Jul 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 17, 2010
|If Exceed's walls could talk, what would they tell?
3 - After reading your essay, I think you are unhappy with your teacher. There are plenty of things you can...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jul 2, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jul 3, 2010
|How media affects the lives of famous people?
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jul 2, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jul 4, 2010
|'cultural monuments' Why people visit a museum while visiting a new place?
5 - Thanks susan and azeri.thanks for your valuable guide.i will try to improve in from my next writing....
Writing Feedbackrupjyoti2706 - Jul 1, 2010 / rupjyoti2706 - Jul 3, 2010
|Follow it up with adequate facts ; Limiting inventory to increase profits
4 - There might be a huge chunk of customers who might not bother to participate in such a survey, or...
Writing Feedbackvrajveer89 - Jul 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 3, 2010
|We need neighbors who are helpful, kind, understanding and encouragingr
9 - The generic prompt of sub-dividing ourselves at the base level of individuals assumes a western culture for the ambassadors...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 30, 2010 / Mustafa1991 - Jul 3, 2010
|Not only women but also men have to take care of their children
7 - I think the essay should be had more explanation for each idea instead of giving ideas without example or...
Writing Feedbackbluebellia - Jun 30, 2010 / nguyenhathu178 - Jul 23, 2010
|Essay on organ donation and genetic screening for philosphy
3 - Rajveer, we're so privileged to have another great participant helping to make these threads excellent. Division23, whjat is...
Writing Feedbackdivision23 - Jun 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 1, 2010
|The Odyssey Years, drifting through life without a tangible goal in mind
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jun 29, 2010 / ershad193 - Jul 7, 2010
|people visit museums when they travel to new places; 'curiosity about ancestors'
4 - A museum is place where people can see history, culture and creativity. There are many reasons that people ...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 30, 2010
|Extracurricular activities bring various benifits to both students
2 - ...adequate funding to students' sports and ... .. various benefits to ... both students and the universites...
Writing Feedbackviebboy - Jun 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 28, 2010
|developed countries help the third world countries
4 - Second para 3rd line ....cut off from outside the world by mountains, forests...its not a mistake but from my...
Writing Feedbackshirui - Jun 28, 2010 / rupjyoti2706 - Jul 1, 2010
|Write about anything we feel effects our world
6 - thats such a lovely essay!.. :D however, there is something that I did not like--u misspelled the name of...
Writing Feedbackdidi4 - Jun 27, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 29, 2010
|Is it always essential to tell the truth, or are there circumstances to lie?
5 - Good job. However you can still give some more convincing examples which concerns with history, some far-reaching celebrities or...
Writing Feedbackndwy - Jun 27, 2010 / Lauratwilight - Jul 4, 2010
|My Friends - a Challenging Paragraph
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jul 3, 2010
|ILETS: Description of a camera
Writing FeedbackTetanya - Jun 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 29, 2010
|IELST essay : "learning by doing" or through books and teachers.
5 - This is a great thread! Everyone really gave some excellent help... Here are some ideas: Many language teachers...
Writing FeedbackSinclair - Jun 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 28, 2010
|Giving money to sports activities is as important as giving money to libraries
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 25, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jun 28, 2010
|Factors contributing to job satisfaction and its importance
5 - Job satisfaction is really a big factor for a professionals because it brings enjoyment while working, which in turns...
Writing Feedbackrupjyoti2706 - Jun 25, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 27, 2010
|Doing a job with hands or with your brains?
4 - It sounds strange to say you have aptitude in thinking. Use this to be specific: ...special aptitude for...
Writing Feedbackhasty2150 - Jun 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|Chronic fatigue and depression in USA vs Asia: Reasoning of an argument
4 - You are making a new assertion here. It's not necessary to do this. The most important thing to...
Writing Feedbacksprasad89 - Jun 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|Victims in five different age groups in Venezuela - Table chart
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|Educational benefits of computers
4 - Phil, you are making this site a better place and promoting your service in a very cool way. I'm...
Writing Feedbacklowryder49 - Jun 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|IELTS: essay about British and Australian laws
3 - Sorry, I've just realised your question "Susan" ( For example, if the jury knew the criminal past of...
Writing Feedbackwemo - Jun 24, 2010 / wemo - Jun 26, 2010
|IELTS : Attitude of students is the main reason for many problems
3 - Lorena, this is great! Thanks for helping so much. Hi Choi, It;s nice to have you participating here....
Writing FeedbackYumi - Jun 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 26, 2010
|'You didn't build that?' - Luck has nothing to do w/ success
10 - Luck is something that is not in one's hands, that could not be controlled. Luck might not come exactly...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 24, 2010 / Azeri - Jul 15, 2010
|IELTS essay: Factors Contributing to Job Satisfaction
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Jun 24, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 26, 2010
|TOEFL: Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human
3 - Even though I have experience in only IELTS essays, I will give some general advice. You should not...
Writing Feedbackwraith - Jun 23, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 24, 2010
|P.S:Meet me"You know where " (chapter two), Reaching the lake
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Jun 23, 2010 / stranger4ever - Jun 24, 2010
|Children spend too much time on computers; IELTS
7 - Nowadays, most South Korean families have their home computers, and therefore many children are affected by it from very...
Writing FeedbackYumi - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|His name represents the basketball. Michael Jordan was a legend.
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|ILETS: The affects of smoking upon health and the benefits gained from stopping
4 - Hi Just a simple grammar advice. Whenever you use a singular noun which represents a class or group...
Writing FeedbackTetanya - Jun 23, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 24, 2010
|Pie charts, comparing the sales of books
5 - This first sentence is a tough one: The two pie charts show information about sales at the Famous Book...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|"Eyes On the Road" - Writing task for Emotional and physical journey
Writing Feedbackalekahraiki - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 24, 2010
|I will live in small village. There are many reasons.
10 - Thanks Kelvin You always trying to correct my mistake. I am making same mistake again and again like...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 22, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jun 30, 2010
|Do changes that make our lives easier not neccessarily make them better?
4 - Technology may sometimes be helpful, but causes a lack of communication for those who live in this generation ....
Writing Feedbackredtoenails - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 23, 2010
|pleasure and satisfaction: the pursuit of our desires or the attainment of them?
4 - You can't go from third person, (one's lifetime) to second person, (your desires) in the same sentence. Actually, it...
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jun 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jun 23, 2010
|Story: Meet Me 'You Know Where', Reading an unknown letter
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Jun 21, 2010 / stranger4ever - Jun 24, 2010
|Bar Graph description (coffee and meat consumed in selected countries)
2 - It will be clearer this way: The bar graph compares the amounts of coffee and... Let's add one...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Jun 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 22, 2010
|Learning about the past has many benefit for us; experience, virtues, wisdom
3 - HI~~ thank you for correction. You are great!! You always give me a good advice. Thanks a lot!...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 20, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 20, 2010
|IELTS immigrants should adopt to local culture or establish a minority community
3 - sorry , it is "approaches". Thank you for your generous help! your positive comments inspire me a lot....
Writing Feedbackshaieli - Jun 20, 2010 / shaieli - Jun 23, 2010
|NARRATIVE PAPER: on a lesson learned (sports). Question on comma placement.
2 - You can always make writing more powerful if you express the same size idea in fewer words: Many of...
Writing Feedbackrod606 - Jun 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|Car has helped people a lot, but the negative effects of automobile exceed the positive effects
Writing Feedbacklamktqd - Jun 19, 2010 / ershad193 - Jun 20, 2010
|TV & Movies have many good influences on peoples' behavior
4 - Thanks silkesha Might be I am incorporate with my native language marathi. thanks for suggestion. I will...
Writing Feedbackvaishali1980 - Jun 17, 2010 / vaishali1980 - Jun 18, 2010
|TOEFL: Important to be able to work with a group of people or independently?
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
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