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|Mrs. More: Describe a person you most admire, and the impact they had on you
2 - Please, check the Tenses you have used in your essay. In several phrases you are mixing them by using...
Writing Feedbackyahyabluecat - May 8, 2010 / milan2003_07 - May 10, 2010
|"She pulls the knife out..." - Short Story Help
4 - Don't switch verb tense: She stabbed Liam in the stomach. Liam was yelling... Yes, you certainly seem to...
Writing Feedbackchitown31 - May 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 12, 2010
|Toefl ibt writing Q2: University classes attendance, requirement or option ?
3 - Great corrections, "name here" Notice that "name here" added an apostrophe like this ' optional to enhance students'...
Writing Feedbackfrederic80 - May 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 10, 2010
|"health" again for my school leaving examination :)
Writing Feedbackvalentina - May 8, 2010 / valentina - May 8, 2010
|The important lesson is life. The best teachers for the life are parents.
4 - Generally, people should count( consider) their parents as their life's teacher.Because they had got more experienced life. They could...
Writing FeedbackShukur - May 7, 2010 / babydoll - May 16, 2010
|Happiness for my school leaving examination :)
Writing Feedbackvalentina - May 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Difficulties faced today are greater than yesterday - GRE Essay Preparation
NEW - I am a beginner here. I am trying to improve my essay writing skills. Below is my first practice...
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|fossil fuel energy, "The Power and the Glory"
Writing Feedbackgotten - May 6, 2010 / gotten - May 14, 2010
|Growing up in a rural area provides an easy-going life pattern to children
3 - Since there are various specialized education systems in the city, it will help the children for education. - Existence...
Writing Feedbackbillryu94 - May 6, 2010 / Azeri - May 8, 2010
3 - Okay, the good news is that this essay is obviously very well researched and informative. However, it seems to...
Writing FeedbackG_D087 - May 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 8, 2010
|Machines have many great features that are impossible for human to compete it
3 - many thanks for your help. i must work hard. god willing i won't have these kinds of problems in...
Writing Feedbacksina1989 - May 5, 2010 / sina1989 - May 7, 2010
|My research assignment on binge drinking and the health effects, review request
12 - This is a case where you say 2 things, and each thing should have a whole paragraph written about...
Writing Feedbackbondsemerson - May 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 14, 2010
|Eating at restaurants or at home? TOEFL essay.
Writing Feedbackvijaya - May 4, 2010 / vijaya - May 5, 2010
|TOEFL: THE INTERNET - problems or information? 'most powerful media'
8 - I think like these: To begin with/The first factor(/belief/reason/catalyst...) is that/I believe/.../(TRY NOTHING in replacement, just leave a gap...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - May 4, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 25, 2010
|Thesis: "Hybridity and Metamorphosis"
4 - Hi again, so if you didn't entirely toss out "self fashioning" just yet, you can still save it. I...
Writing FeedbackBnoel - May 4, 2010 / meisj0n - May 5, 2010
|magnificent historical buildings should not be destroyed: protection by law
2 - ... while others say that it only consumes the place of new ones and they should immediately be knocked...
Writing Feedbackbaris alibeyogl - May 4, 2010 / EF_Susan - May 5, 2010
|Anti-Bullying Informative Paper (Our Brother's Keeper)
NEW - This is to be a Informative Paper in MLA format. Can someone proof read this? I dont see on...
Writing Feedbackqueenlyblessed - May 3, 2010 / — -
|Does advancement of Technology cause Pollution?
Writing Feedbackkayyao - May 3, 2010 / kayyao - May 8, 2010
|"always obey your parents" Childhood experience which changed my life completely
NEW - Many childhood experinces leave lifelong impressions on people. Write an essay in which you describe a memorable childhood experience...
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|Study abroad should be encouraged when students are eighteen
Writing FeedbackEujin - May 2, 2010 / Eujin - May 3, 2010
|watching TV is an unhealthy pastime. what do you think about this statement?
3 - Great corrections here!! I also have this advice for you: Let this be paragraph 2: The first benefit can...
Writing Feedbackthuong_lethi - May 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|"Why people attend to universities or colleges" - Toefl IBT
3 - Hi, good luck on your test!! Generally, people from all nations strive to attend universities. Each individual who wants...
Writing FeedbackShukur - May 2, 2010 / kayyao - May 2, 2010
|Age of the Internet which brings the world so close to each other
2 - Capitalize Internet. capitalize English Use a spell checker. More and more people seem to be interacting with one...
Writing Feedbackbrainlair - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 1, 2010
|The Internet and Collegian Populace - checking the validity and soundness
6 - Honestly, this sort of paper, for which I have a high level of vested interest, was completed in the...
Writing FeedbackManDan88 - Apr 30, 2010 / ManDan88 - May 8, 2010
|Stereotype essay (races); Imagine having no friends in school just because of your skin color
Writing FeedbackJAM843 - Apr 30, 2010 / Uzi987 - Oct 29, 2011
|Single sex education and coed
7 - Compare and contrast essays are difficult. You need to revise the intro paragraph so that you are...
Writing Feedbackazhar - Apr 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 3, 2010
|Cbest essay prompt :. Imagine that you could have made one change in the past .
2 - Here are some suggestions hope they help. I think you should go through this paper again and work on...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Apr 30, 2010 / monboddie - May 1, 2010
|"A simple life" - intro to my essay
5 - A simple life is a free and easy life which people live in without any complications and don't use...
Writing FeedbackLatifahH - Apr 30, 2010 / Loriww - Jan 10, 2014
|"dedication to mom" - people who influenced my values in my life
4 - I like the first sentence, but I would add a comma: Though there are many people who influenced my...
Writing Feedbackmarkweeta - Apr 29, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2010
|"How to Plan a Birthday Party for Adults" - process analysis essay
2 - The next step is to choos e an appropriate place, such as restaurant, history club, hotel's suite or ballroom...
Writing FeedbackTaoTao - Apr 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 30, 2010
|Control over happiness - 'people gain happiness differently' (SAT)
5 - The first sentence, which should aptly give the first impression, is quite prolix and obscure. To say that...
Writing FeedbackSA51 - Apr 28, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 17, 2010
|Media indeed poses an enormous influence on our opinions as well as attitudes
2 - are actually mastering the thought of individuals and that there are little can be done to eliminate this control....
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Apr 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2010
|Honesty - one of the treasured values of human being
Writing FeedbackPhoebe Su - Apr 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2010
|Jealousy -- a bad human habit!
7 - I think you provide us a very good topic. It's very thought-provoking. Well, maybe you are too young...
Writing Feedbackstranger4ever - Apr 27, 2010 / vivien_wang - May 3, 2010
|Finding an ideal community now a days has become a major problem. Vadalism is the threat.
6 - Thanks kevin!...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Apr 27, 2010 / shalini singh - Apr 29, 2010
|Why should it remain the persian gulf? - Argumentative Essay
NEW - why should it remain the persian gulf? The Persian Gulf is located between these countries: UAE, Kuwait, Bahrain,...
Writing FeedbackSarareh - Apr 27, 2010 / — -
|Semester Paper Intro (what we did throughout the course of year)
2 - Don't say "many literature." You don't say many water, because water is a substance. Literature is like that. You...
Writing Feedbackqomoco - Apr 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2010
|"parants are the best teachers" - I want a band for my essay(IELTS task 2)
3 - Be sure to put a period at the end of this sentence. Tran gave excellent corrections! Let's see...
Writing Feedbackcharming - Apr 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 28, 2010
|TOEFL: All high school students should be required to study foreign languages
4 - Kevin and Djanat, thank you for your feedbacks. They really helped me. I drew relevant conclusions from your comments...
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Apr 26, 2010 / Azeri - Apr 30, 2010
|GRE-issue8 political leaders withhold information from public
Writing Feedbackcasablancahp - Apr 26, 2010 / casablancahp - May 5, 2010
|'practice and hard work' - Successful sports professionals can earn huge money
3 - Today, famous and successful sports professionals are always on the top of among the rich who earn a huge...
Writing Feedbackthoigiandeyeu - Apr 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2010
|Classification essay: Foreign trade university students
5 - essay 2: priciple: major/faculty I am a second-year student at Foreign Trade University. People have diversed views towards...
Writing Feedbackthuong_lethi - Apr 26, 2010 / kayyao - May 3, 2010
|TOEFL: The most important does not come from books
6 - Thanks for your kind words! Well, contributing here is all about helping lots of people. We ask that...
Writing Feedbackmajsiu - Apr 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 29, 2010
|Homework every day - is it necessary for students? Why / why not?
Writing Feedbackzimone - Apr 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2010
|SAT: Are people motivated by personal satisfaction rather than by money or fame?
2 - Waw! The part about Sis A is amazing. I will give you a little version of my life experience....
Writing Feedbacksat_essay - Apr 25, 2010 / a 100 hills - Apr 26, 2010
|Society should ban all forms of the advertising - Essay for IELTS
Writing Feedbackrashidjon - Apr 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2010
|Should Humanitarian Aid be provided for illegal immigrants?
Writing Feedbackbabydoll - Apr 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 27, 2010
|Science and religion cannot coexist.Write your views.
3 - thank you very much.it indeed has helped me a lot and also to interpret correctly Einstein's quote! As far...
Writing Feedbackyuvly - Apr 24, 2010 / yuvly - Apr 25, 2010
|Just relationship between society and the individual Paper for poli sci theory
2 - Simplify: Determining a just relationship between the individual and society is the basis of the tension between arguments supporting...
Writing Feedbackmett87 - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2010
|Genes, physical traits - I need help in my point by point essay.
2 - I'm not quite sure I understand the point of this essay, that is, the topic that you are supposed...
Writing Feedbackfishergus - Apr 23, 2010 / McGregor10 - Apr 24, 2010
|TOEFL: students are the only direct receiver of the work of their teachers
3 - but also to help students inwith their studies. Secondly, some teachers need to be evaluated by their students...
Writing Feedbackdjanat - Apr 23, 2010 / zimone - Apr 26, 2010
|City Managar: What is Your Ideal Career Essay
Writing Feedbacknewmt2008 - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 4, 2010
|A Brief Essay on the Struggle of Coping with an Undiagnosed Eye Condition
3 - This is brilliant descriptive and introspective writing. One moment I would be reading a paragraph about Thomas Jefferson, and...
Writing Feedbackrupee2 - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2010
|Literary devices in in Dutchman and Native Son
Writing Feedbackxxyellow - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2010
|Education means developing mind,not stuffing the memory
4 - Hey ya I would also inclucde the sentence that education is power as knowledge is power example can be...
Writing Feedbacksingingbird - Apr 23, 2010 / alibaba 1983 - Apr 25, 2010
|Preparing for future career and networking with others- Reasons for attending college
4 - Nowadays, nearly all students graduating from high school are trying to enter college or a university. Every person has...
Writing FeedbackMagsad - Apr 23, 2010 / rmarin - Apr 25, 2010
|Today artists pass their privilege of revealing of hidden facts and meaning to the audience.
2 - You have to say "accessible to (someone or something)" like this: Art is derived from everyday life, and at...
Writing Feedbacksolotripper - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2010
|[IELTS] Children must be taught to have balance between competitiveness and co-operation.
Writing Feedbackfakeghost - Apr 23, 2010 / fakeghost - Apr 27, 2010
|I completely agree with the point that the ability to plan and organize is essential to young people
Writing Feedbackahhajuly - Apr 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Apr 24, 2010
|Teenagers work while they are studying - argumentative essay
6 - I think working part-time, while attending school is a good working experience. Especially in these economics times that are...
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