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|The amount of money per week spend on fast foods in Britain - IELTS Task 1 essay
3 - The graph shows the expense per week on junk food in Britain. The graph shows the amount of money...
Writing Feedbackanggra_88 - Jun 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|"There are no challenges so difficult, no goals so impossibe" - the english comp
3 - You should use the word "often," because obviously some people do set high goals. I feel that people...
Writing Feedbackrachel d - Jun 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|TOEFL- Violent Media
6 - Hi Nesreen, Sorry for upseting you. I just thought to correct your essay first. As you have written...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 14, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 15, 2010
|Traffic congestion and ways to reduce it - Compare paragraph - What's better?
5 - In my country, people often struggle for position while driving and don't stay in their lanes so that everything...
Writing Feedbackmabu9669 - Jun 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 20, 2010
|What must we do to truly understand ourselves?
Writing FeedbackLauratwilight - Jun 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|Classmates vs parents; 'Teaching is the exalted duty than anyone could take'
2 - Hi, The topic is about child's success in school. When you focus on children and school, you can...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 13, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 13, 2010
|"I bet she's a tramp" - my English FINAL.
Writing Feedbackclarerawr - Jun 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 14, 2010
|Television- A Boon or a Bane?
Writing Feedbacksilkesha - Jun 13, 2010 / silkesha - Jul 7, 2010
|First of all, a healthy mental and body is prerequisite to succeed - TOEFL
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 13, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 15, 2010
|Okay, "Karate Kid" is one more film that confirms my hunch -- movies suck nowadays
2 - Thank you!! I can't believe there is another karate kid movie. I love Jackie Chan, though, and I love...
Writing FeedbackMustafa1991 - Jun 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: Internet and communication
3 - I would like to state the benefits of the internet in communication and the difference between the internet and...
Writing Feedbacklin54390 - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|Using machines is very helpful because you can save time and effort
Writing Feedbackmayenlu - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 15, 2010
|History -- A waste of time? 'meaning of a Microprocessor'
2 - You can say this in a way that does not involve mentioning evolution. Evolutionary Theory teaches us what...
Writing Feedbacksilkesha - Jun 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 12, 2010
|Ungraded classrooms, which consist of students grouped by level of achievement
2 - In the second paragraph, the following statement doesn't go well... Although age matter for the development of the brain,...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Jun 10, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 11, 2010
|How successfully does the writer of "Climate Change: The facts"...
3 - Today global warming has become a political hot... When wrting about a reading, use the present verb tense...
Writing FeedbackSunazero - Jun 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Laws should not end up in motley - should give the law makers enough flexibility
Writing Feedbackprakharsingh - Jun 10, 2010 / prakharsingh - Jun 26, 2010
|Short Essay on High School Scholarship Program
5 - That's funny... yeah, when you have big success with a brilliant online business, you'll have 50K to donate. ...
Writing Feedbacknorthernlight - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|gaining knowledge/ More job opportunities; Reasons behind attending universities
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|History leads us to the bright destination in the ocean of social development and revolution
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 9, 2010 / jadetang - Jun 13, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL "Advances in transportation and communication"
2 - You need a comma here: acquired to human beings society all over the globe, and that... Capitalize Internet....
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|GRE: "All nations should help support the development of a global university"
2 - Here is another idea: In Today, a global university seems to be another Tower of Babel, because...
Writing Feedbackjadetang - Jun 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|"An experience you have had that involves controversy" - Narrative Argument
3 - This is such a powerful sentence. Also, the notion of untouchables at the school is powerful. You are...
Writing FeedbackEcho1334 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|BARRON'S TOEFL IBT BOOK "learning a foreign language"
4 - Yep, at this point in your practice, Nohna, I think you should use sentences that are not too long...
Writing FeedbackNohna - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Government should not limit scientific studies and growth
Writing FeedbackLew chuang - Jun 7, 2010 / Lew chuang - Jun 10, 2010
|TOEFL: Living in a big city has many merit and some disadvantages!
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 11, 2010
|Treatment of Illegal Immagrants - U.S. versus Mexico
Writing FeedbackPaula6 - Jun 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 10, 2010
|Term paper about Christ Figure in literature
Writing FeedbackKingdom10 - Jun 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 8, 2010
|"global warming will result to numerous changes" - essay needs editing
Writing Feedbacksothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010 / sothenkikisaid - Jun 6, 2010
|Do-Gooders need to let us decide (the three risky behaviors), rough draft
Writing Feedbackreeseinskool - Jun 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 7, 2010
|the internet is contributing to the breakdown of family relationship
5 - Make the introduction part a bit interesting! Use some catchy statements and also a few thoughts or phrases...i feel,...
Writing FeedbackALICE K - Jun 6, 2010 / silkesha - Jun 11, 2010
|I think there is too much violence in movies.
6 - Thanks for comments, Yonman. Regarding your question, I do not need to support the reason with a realible...
Writing FeedbackAzeri - Jun 6, 2010 / Azeri - Jun 8, 2010
|IELTS Writing-Topic about TV, book, radio
4 - Hi Jet, In my openion, starting with the word civilization is compatable with mentioning some historical facts about...
Writing Feedbackjetzhu - Jun 6, 2010 / Nohna - Jun 7, 2010
|three battles significant in evoving canada as an independant country
6 - Thank you sooooooooooo much Kevin that was SOOOOOO much help im finished my conclusion now all thanks to you...
Writing Feedbackosma - Jun 5, 2010 / osma - Jun 7, 2010
|The College Experience: Exemplification Essay On College Life
2 - Some believe a 5 hour energy will do-- this will confuse some people. It is a proper noun, so...
Writing Feedbackamc2286 - Jun 5, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 6, 2010
|childrens eating habits nowadays are different from previous generation
2 - Nowadays, children's eating habits lead them to heath deterioration.I entirely agree with this view and believe that this alarming...
Writing Feedbacksheina - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|divorce: Causes and effects on children
Writing Feedbackbabyevy - Jun 4, 2010 / ah_zafari - Jun 15, 2014
|The main function of university
3 - Use capital letters to start each sentence: Some people think that university should provide graduates with the knowledge...
Writing Feedbacknoorahan - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|Focus on creative expression should be given importance or not ?
5 - In academic writing, you never have to say said that ,"blah blah...." William Shakespeare once said, that "An objective...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - Jun 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|TOEFL essay -Monumental Gifts
Writing Feedbackkovcastle - Jun 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 8, 2010
|Some students prefer to study alone - TOEFL Question
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Jun 2, 2010 / yonman - Jun 7, 2010
|Computers affect society - CLEP English Comp Practice
3 - This is a compound sentence that needs a comma: Many things have changed over the years , but one...
Writing Feedbackoperalady - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|IELTS writing task two>Compare the advantage vs. disadvantage of three media
3 - In nowadays modern society, there are plenty of different media to spread information and knowledge. Here I am...
Writing Feedbackssachsieh - Jun 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|What I like apart from having fun.
Writing FeedbackCharz - Jun 2, 2010 / Charz - Jun 4, 2010
|In some countries at the age of 18 young people are allowed to drive, vote and mar
5 - In some nations, it is common that, young people at around 18 years are allowed to vote, drive and...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - Jun 2, 2010 / phuocqui - Jun 3, 2010
|IELTS taks 2 essay: computer has negative effects to children
6 - Well, the thesis statement should answer in a single sentence the question that the essay is trying to...
Writing Feedbackdungpvt2004 - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 5, 2010
|'Imperfection is beauty' - If there has been some obstacle or bump in the road
4 - Imperfections, or bumps in the road are mere fragments that are there for a reason. (I crossed out part...
Writing Feedbackaubrey - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 3, 2010
|comparison between 5 countries, asking about Ielts writing task one
Writing Feedbackrashahanna - Jun 1, 2010 / rashahanna - Jun 4, 2010
|TOEFL: "couch potato"; How do movies or television influence people's behavior?
NEW - Watching television and movie are become a common entertainment in our daily life. In my opinion, movies and television...
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|Quammen vs. Scully: my Essay that compares and analyses two texts
2 - Hi there, We are lucky to have such an outstanding writer participating in our forum. I see that...
Writing Feedbackmisspellar - Jun 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 2, 2010
|TOEFL: NEWS ABOUT CELEBRITIES
7 - hi~~ Nowadays, it is very easy to hear the news about the personal lives of famous people such as...
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jun 1, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 4, 2010
|I analyzed the lyric "Temptation Waits" by Garbage
Writing Feedbackghgyfkd1 - May 31, 2010 / ghgyfkd1 - Jun 3, 2010
|Compare and Contrast Essay- sibling/no sibling
2 - Christian, how weirdly self-effacing it is to combine consonant sounds from your first and last name to produce "Crud"......
Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|Nowadays young children are using mobile phones
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: INFLUENCE OF LARGE FACTORY
3 - The main disadvantage is contamination. It is true that some areas are suffering the dire consequences caused by overdeveloping...
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and playing
3 - Your comments were absolutely fantastic. Along with your correction you mentioned the reason to emphasis why schools are important...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 29, 2010 / renga78 - May 30, 2010
|Agree or disagree that progress is always good? Yes it is always good!
4 - Thanks a lot Kevin and for homework as well. Your feedback was very encouraging. Will keep writing ......
Writing FeedbackUmeda - May 28, 2010 / Umeda - Jun 1, 2010
|Leisure time: spend it outdoors or indoors?
8 - I think adding their is better because there are too much or in the sentence. Everyone has his...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - May 28, 2010 / jjinko - Jun 15, 2010
|How should I describe all types of graphs,diagrams or charts?
8 - Now that I am looking at my description, I can see that I've made some spelling errors. The point...
Writing FeedbackMarutza - May 28, 2010 / Marutza - Jun 7, 2010
|CAPE poetry essay, experiences of trauma in the Caribbean
Writing Feedbackhustlerprince - May 27, 2010 / hustlerprince - May 30, 2010
|Required attendance in college or university classes.
6 - I reccomend you change up the transitions between paragraphs. "First ... Second ... Finally ..." Is so .. boring....
Writing Feedbackbabyevy - May 27, 2010 / LehFoxeh - Jun 12, 2010
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