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|'no control' - The mass media and their influence on people's ideas
7 - hmm! not bad for a bigginer ,but i think you only concertrated on the image the media potrays,check things...
Writing Feedbacktramhuong - Feb 5, 2010 / BORE - Feb 9, 2010
|Essay about My Classmate from Cambodia
5 - Luong and Allen, great job here! Thanks for the excellent contributions you make to help others at EF....
Writing FeedbackPov - Feb 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2010
|THE PROCESS OF FORGIVENESS, BLAME, AND SELF-ACCEPTANCE
3 - Hi Overall great essay. But I'm sure that your readers will be much happier if you stop using profanity....
Writing FeedbackMementoMori - Feb 2, 2010 / Demha - Feb 19, 2010
|Cool vs uncool - an argumentive definition essay
Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Feb 2, 2010 / Rachach6 - Feb 3, 2010
|Editorial on Martin Luther King Day
Writing FeedbackNotoman - Feb 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2010
|Competition or cooperation---GRE ANALYSIS WRITING ISSUE
Writing Feedbacklola2010 - Feb 2, 2010 / lola2010 - Feb 4, 2010
|'I studied in the Philippines'; Spending money on travelling or saving?
Writing Feedbackduke616 - Feb 2, 2010 / duke616 - Feb 5, 2010
|A point to believe - Can anyone help me to short my creative essay?
15 - The whistle blows, and I hesitate. ---- I think this is better, but maybe you made it 2 sentences...
Writing Feedbacklittle636 - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|essay about yasser arafat
5 - Yes, I see that Paradokht already told you to capitalize proper nouns. Also, write Nobel Prize, not...
Writing Feedbackzahoora - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|work that one finds fulfilling or work that pays well? Van Gogh, C.Marx examples
3 - Yes, add a sentence to the end of that first paragraph. Make it a sentence that answers the question...
Writing FeedbackODIE - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|Machiavelli and Lao Tzu - compare and contrast essay
2 - Check verse 17 of the Tao. I see that you ended this essay with an inaccurate statement about what...
Writing Feedbacklink2314 - Jan 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|Trying to be "Little Miss Perfect" - Can someone give me feedback on this essay
3 - Let's do this part in the past tense and omit some unnecessary words: I feel that I have always...
Writing Feedbackcjharris24 - Jan 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 1, 2010
|my mother Pamela Miller, need help. descriptive essay :)
Writing FeedbackStarbucksxo - Jan 27, 2010 / kiwitahi1 - Jan 28, 2010
|'bedroom is essential' Toefl essay: The most important room in your house
4 - Nowadays, life is getting more and more busy busier and busier. That causes a new century disease called "stress"...
Writing FeedbackArielruan - Jan 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 28, 2010
|the trend:throw away old one instead of repairing. causes and effects?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2010
|Musqueam and UBC Golf Course Research Paper, Part 2
3 - Thanks, I just really dissaprove of our current Premier cause he is repeatedly abusing his power and adding extra...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Jan 26, 2010 / icemaster2340 - Jan 27, 2010
|Experience is the best teacher - THE RELATIVE VALUES OF EXPERIENTIAL AND ACADEMIC LEARNING
Writing FeedbackTAL - Jan 26, 2010 / Wanderer_x - Jan 31, 2010
|the defendant's past criminal record - IELTS Writing Task 2.
2 - Crime is one of the most discussed problems in the world, and governments of countries spend lots of time...
Writing Feedbackgabrielesan - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2010
|a job at Shell Plaza:An experience that significantly led the setting your goals
3 - Last summer, of 2009, I started my first job. I was thrilled with excitement but fear was present at...
Writing Feedbacklic12 - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 28, 2010
|Air Pollution in Hong Kong - ( 500-word essay )
2 - Let's begin with the cause of the problems, which includes three main aspects. You should add this sentence to...
Writing Feedbacknarrow1234 - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2010
|My Assignment: My New Year's Resolutions (200 words)
Writing Feedbacklvnnk - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2010
|Evolution of Federalism
2 - The word federalism is not seen in the constitution; however, throughoutthe many years in history, federalism has gradually... ...
Writing Feedbackpacers7ind - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 26, 2010
|Take a trip to Vietnam? (persuasive paragraph)
3 - I think that you shouldn't summerize what you're going to talk about in your intro. Just give out key...
Writing Feedbacknicolethuynh - Jan 25, 2010 / lic12 - Jan 26, 2010
|Narrative My life changing moment
3 - I joined the Army to become a strong , disciplined and a courageous person. --- I think it sounds...
Writing Feedbackmellyp74 - Jan 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2010
|The Hijab: Friend or foe? (argumentative essay on 2 authors essays)
7 - make your opinion clear. Make the opinion mara longer. The reader really wants to know what YOUR thoughts are....
Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Jan 25, 2010 / sineadkachroo - Feb 12, 2010
|computers have complicated people's life- agree disagree TOEFL essay
Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 25, 2010 / pinpin - Jan 26, 2010
|tobacco adverts should be banned?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2010
|Organic foods against conventional foods - Can you check my essay
4 - Organic foods are getting more popular among the people of the world, and people are often choosing them over...
Writing Feedbackkichikov - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2010
|Term Paper: Sailor Mentality
3 - Don't use a semi-colon here: ...when he writes: "With a philosophical flourish... or ...when he writes, "With a philosophical...
Writing Feedbackwilcerf - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|the Musqueam Reconciliatory Agreement: Part 1
3 - Keep this as part of the intro paragraph: In my opinion: Contrary to the... That is great thesis...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
|TOEFL:At present we rely on oil for most our energy needs!
Writing Feedbackgreentea93 - Jan 23, 2010 / greentea93 - Jan 28, 2010
|TOEFL ESSAY:HOW TO USE THE LAND THAT YOU WISH?
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
|How I learnt English
2 - I think you should start off where you came from, then proceed on to telling us where you work...
Writing FeedbackGSK - Jan 23, 2010 / lic12 - Jan 25, 2010
|Question about the structure of discussion essay according to IELTS exam.
2 - these sentences below are interesting because of the rule called "number agreement." As a result, many employees may...
Writing Feedbackgazel - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 24, 2010
|Toefl essay: Students learn better when they are not threatend
4 - Thanks a lot! @RabiaG: I'm in first steps of writting an essay,I will try to improve it! @soarer:I think...
Writing Feedbackreiihane - Jan 22, 2010 / reiihane - Jan 26, 2010
|Descriptive essay of a person you know (family first, himself last)
Writing Feedbacktwillis32 - Jan 22, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
|Trafficking in human beings - My 500-words essay
7 - After studying a number of publications on this subject I made the following conclusions. Non-governmental organizations are doing a...
Writing Feedbackmalenkaya_ya - Jan 22, 2010 / malenkaya_ya - Jan 23, 2010
|governments should try to promote alternative energy resources?
NEW - i am preparing for ielts, however, my writing skill is not good.could u check this essay for my mistakes....
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|My Existentialism Beliefs-Free Will, karma, and reincarnation
3 - It depends on whether or not you care about showing "good composition," whatever that is. If you want...
Writing Feedbackrosschang - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
|"Recent Moscow State University bachelor in psychology came to an unknown world"
Writing Feedbacksarapultseva - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 22, 2010
|using computers in schools results in the rise in the illiteracy rate?
3 - Great corrections, caonhungchi! Here is another one: There is no doubt that the computer is one of the...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
|Dream Job essay (independent films)
3 - Thank you two for all you input. And to Juniper this essay is for Western Washington University, i'm also...
Writing Feedbackalejandrocastil - Jan 20, 2010 / alejandrocastil - Jan 23, 2010
|Green Change - "cause and effect" essay
6 - What a powerful line this is! When people deeply understand the cultural turbulence that takes place, they really...
Writing Feedbacknewsha31 - Jan 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 25, 2010
|learning from experience or learning from books - compare essay
Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 19, 2010 / Keng - Jan 19, 2010
|rejected for Early Action - SHORT AND QUICK EMAIL
9 - I'm sorry that you didn't get accepted. Maybe you should try setting up an appointment with the undergraduate admissions...
Writing Feedbackalexakrivoniak - Jan 17, 2010 / wongtongsoup22 - Jan 25, 2010
|Compare and Contrast Paragraph - Frogs and Toads
2 - I think you could come up with something more interesting as the first sentence! :-) It might...
Writing Feedbackilovetowrite - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
|1500 word report on a letter by the author Norman Angell appeared in Times 1914
NEW - FULLY UNDERSTAND AND EVALUATE OF SOURCE PROVENANCE 10% UNDERSTAND AND APPLY WHERE APPROPRIATE WIDER CONCEPTUAL QUESTIONS REGARDING SOURCE MATERIAL...
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|people should try to earn money as much as possible??
5 - There are Hundreds of thousands of deaths around the world are caused every year by smoking. or There...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 23, 2010
|Some people prefer to work for large company. I belong to the technical domain
2 - The choice of company for an individual generally depends upon two factors -- namely, the salary package and the...
Writing Feedbackshraps - Jan 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 21, 2010
|the rise in good consumption reflect the power of advertising not for real needs
NEW - i am preparing for ielts test. however, my writing is bad, please help me to check for my essay....
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|Why do you want to be a part of Teach for India?
Writing Feedbackvineela - Jan 17, 2010 / niloo - Feb 1, 2010
|[TOEFL]Governments should spend much money on exploring outer space?
Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 20, 2010
|education at schools is necessary for all people, not just excellent students
Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 16, 2010 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
|MySpace Not Responsible for Predators (an argumentave essay)
3 - He backs his claim with four very strong and direct points, which include the following: MySpace is not there...
Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 19, 2010
|[TOEFL]I dont agree that businesses should do anything they can to make a profit!
Writing Feedbackyin - Jan 15, 2010 / yin - Jan 19, 2010
|Industrial Revolution (essay on a respectable topic)
2 - They showed us a powerful video/audio footage of Rachel's life and the Columbine tragedy that led everyone, including me,...
Writing Feedbackawaterbottle38 - Jan 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
|Evaluate: Is it more important to learn more about business or about agriculture
3 - Today with new technologies and globalization the world is shrinking and it has become difficult to define the differences...
Writing Feedbackjagk2j - Jan 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 19, 2010
|dormitory or apartment - comparison essay
NEW - please correct my essay and give me some tips how to improve my essay ?Students at universities often...
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|About A New Education Essay
8 - When kids are first taught calculus they're usually introduced to something called the 'limiting process'. Say, when we graph...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Jan 13, 2010 / Rajiv - Feb 16, 2010
|Animal and music lover - NCSSM Essay #1
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