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|Advantages and disadvantages of computer to run a small business!
7 - you use too many linking words. This may make your essay incoherent or maybe sometimes illogical...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 9, 2010 / hatung94 - Jan 23, 2010
|Clean energy / threat to life on Earth - Benefits and risks of Nuclear Technology
2 - Do the people rate you on just your structures and grammar or including your ideas? If they rate you...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 8, 2010 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
|IELTS: The money spent on Leisure and Education was a very little amount in all 5 countries
2 - This is very good! You should feel confident in your communication skills. Whenyou put 2 complete sentences together...
Writing FeedbackRuah - Jan 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
|toefl essay - Human is a threat to an another human
Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 8, 2010 / Keng - Jan 16, 2010
|Essay about responsible for bringing children up
Writing Feedbackcavin301 - Jan 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 16, 2010
|Are Juveniles Responsible for Their Crimes
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|Toefl essay Advertising can tell you a lot about a country
4 - Usually, people say More importantly More importantly, it can draw a lot of tourists to visit your country....
Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 15, 2010
|An essay about Building up our Immune System.
8 - Thank you everybody for all your help! I really appreciate your prompt reply to my questions. Regards...
Writing Feedbackabd85 - Jan 6, 2010 / abd85 - Jan 9, 2010
|IELTS practice writing for music.
3 - In my opinion, traditional music in the past seemed to be more important than modern , international music but...
Writing FeedbackSeong - Jan 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 15, 2010
|The overpopulation leads many serious problems
4 - Thanks you for helpful comments. I wil continue to write and share them to you. Your advice and encouragement...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Jan 5, 2010 / vothiha - Jan 7, 2010
|"Miss Wordy" strikes again. I have to chop oh, about 193 words.
4 - This sentence gives chills. It is very powerful the way you place it here. It's a very powerful...
Writing FeedbackJeannie - Jan 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 14, 2010
|" GRE essay: Laws should not be rigid or fixed. ..
Writing FeedbackDipD - Jan 4, 2010 / Dulie - Jan 14, 2010
|For good or ill, I a feel intensely drawn toward adventure, risk and excitement
2 - When you want to post an essay, please select "New Thread." Don't post your essay in someone else's thread....
Writing Feedbackhadi - Jan 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
|Cheating in School- Satire Essay Help
2 - Hi Anna, I think this seems forced and uninspired. What are you making fun of exactly, the whole college...
Writing FeedbackAnnAsburY - Jan 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
|Journal. Why do people hurt each other.
Writing Feedbackkayyao - Jan 3, 2010 / kayyao - Jan 5, 2010
|The Lessons of Groundhog Movie
3 - Thanks Kevin...
Writing Feedbackraiya - Jan 3, 2010 / raiya - Jan 5, 2010
|'first thing people think about work is salary' - job satisfaction essay
NEW - Topic : As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an...
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|"Terrorism is not new." - can sb help me edit this analytical writing piece?
5 - Hey Yin! Tnx a lot. I actually agree wid you that the first paragraph completely seems bizzarre and out...
Writing Feedbackmarpals - Jan 2, 2010 / marpals - Jan 7, 2010
|TOEFL "Having job while studying or not"
NEW - 19. In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good...
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|A girl who decides to stand up for what is right - Antigone essay
Writing FeedbackBenk84 - Jan 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 11, 2010
|Toelf essay Some people believe that success comes in life from taking risks
4 - Hi, ...attend to a famous and cannot be friendly with other people working in a office Maybe it's...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Jan 1, 2010 / hitchhike - Jan 2, 2010
|historical event stanford grammar; "bulldog running along at the feet of Jesus"
Writing Feedbackshannon92 - Dec 31, 2009 / medelman2010 - Dec 31, 2009
|TOEFL "Playing game is fun when you win?"
5 - In my point of view, the latter group's idea due to some significant reasons which will be discussed in...
Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Dec 31, 2009 / yin - Jan 16, 2010
|teacher's teaching ability, a salary rise and a promotion to a higher level - teachers evaluation
Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 31, 2009 / Keng - Dec 31, 2009
|the gap between poor people and rich people - ielts writing
Writing Feedbackmanda - Dec 30, 2009 / Seong - Jan 6, 2010
|Taking one long vacation has more educational benefits than it used to be.
3 - Hi Panyapon, Don't capitalize student in that first line. They will have a good opportunity to do...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 30, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 10, 2010
|Innuendo in "Ode to Billy Joe". Check my grammar!
3 - garfunkel129 Garfunkel129, Thank you so much for your comments. I will definitely look into these changes....
Writing Feedbackkayyao - Dec 30, 2009 / kayyao - Jan 1, 2010
|"Faker?" - Somatization Disorder (abnormal psychology essay)
4 - Is it possible to feel physical pain from a psychological disorder with no traceable cause? In the 1980's the...
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|'a diary in English' - TOEFL optional essay - English ability
Writing Feedbackmafia - Dec 29, 2009 / mafia - Dec 30, 2009
|Talk about how the poets show their respect to animals.
4 - This confused me... Agamemnon is ancient mythology, and it has been told many times, but when I google...
Writing FeedbackKellyli - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
|Talk about the metaphor of a movie "The PaintedVeil".
Writing FeedbackKellyli - Dec 29, 2009 / KAJAL - Dec 30, 2009
|Media essay - GRE (Issue Topic)
4 - The structure is pretty good; those grammar errors Susan caught are most important. For the structure, you hae...
Writing Feedbackivanka22 - Dec 29, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
|Pieces of Literature (section of a magazine)
2 - It seems like you could use a 'lead in' sentence at the beginning. One sentence perhaps giving an idea...
Writing Feedbackjeffliwin - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 29, 2009
|nutrition for biology essay: becoming obese.
NEW - i'm not completely done with my essay. but i would love some suggestions or comments about my essay so...
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|Essay for a Contest: Living in Suburbia- Looking for some criticism
Writing FeedbackLewisClark13 - Dec 28, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 4, 2010
|'unusual behaviors' - Games are as important for adults as they are for children
4 - Your feedback is very useful to my understanding a given prompt. each time i write an essay, i...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 28, 2009 / Keng - Jan 3, 2010
|essay on sovereignty, MA International politics essay
5 - Thank you very much for the answer. "Relative equality of states and the ungoverned international arena" is a practical...
Writing FeedbackUmbyboy - Dec 28, 2009 / Umbyboy - Jan 7, 2010
|Essay about a valuable life lesson that you have
3 - what are types of your writing? Narrative, descriptive, explanation or just a storyline. I think you write...
Writing Feedbacksujujun - Dec 26, 2009 / Keng - Dec 28, 2009
|Computer is useful tool - has many functions
3 - Keng Thank you Keng so much! I still remember that you instruct me how to post essay into essay...
Writing Feedbackautumnwave - Dec 26, 2009 / autumnwave - Dec 28, 2009
|TOEFL "working by hand vs. using machines"
Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Dec 26, 2009 / hitchhike - Dec 28, 2009
|Rensselaer Polytechnic Institute: They say I impacted the 21st century...
8 - The world has entered an era of rapidly increasin g change. The people who lead Leading scientists of this...
Writing Feedbackmstickel - Dec 26, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 30, 2009
|IELTS: Television has changed the way children spend their leisure time.
5 - Hi, I'm Seong and I am also studying IELTS course of english. When I learned introduction of IELTS,...
Writing FeedbackROKO - Dec 26, 2009 / Seong - Dec 28, 2009
|Toefl essay Image that you have received land
Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 24, 2009 / Keng - Dec 28, 2009
|introduction paraghraph about equal numbers of male and female in universities
3 - In paragraph 1, You should begin with what do you think about the prompt, then write opinions of the...
Writing Feedbackmona80 - Dec 24, 2009 / Keng - Dec 28, 2009
|TOEFl "ability to read and write more important today than.."
2 - This seems like it should be one sentence, not 2: How can I neglect the importance of writing and...
Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Dec 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|Toefl essay A person you know is planning to
Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 23, 2009 / Keng - Dec 26, 2009
|Fatherhood - fathers have now same obligation as much as mothers have
2 - Don't forget to capitalize the first word of every sentence. In the past, time this role was mostly...
Writing Feedbackarvind143 - Dec 23, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 24, 2009
|Some people are born with certain talents..
Writing FeedbackSeong - Dec 23, 2009 / SnowWolf - Dec 23, 2009
|'freedom and independence' Do you learn better by yourself or with a teacher?
Writing Feedbackdarklight - Dec 22, 2009 / Keng - Dec 24, 2009
|TOEFL "growing in countryside vs big cities..."
2 - Hello! I noticed you've been helping a lot of people with their essays, thank you! Some people believe...
Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Dec 21, 2009 / EF_Susan - Dec 22, 2009
|How computers have affected the way we work today vs. 100 years ago - CLEP
Writing Feedbackstars - Dec 21, 2009 / stars - Dec 25, 2009
5 - Its a cynical piece on an attitude I find much too often in the people in Western countries. ...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Dec 20, 2009 / Rajiv - Dec 31, 2009
|TOEFL Essay "read only factual books or not.."
NEW - 13. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should read only those books that are about...
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|the relationship between Jews and Christians, how to write about a film?
2 - Use italics instead of quote marks: James Carroll's Constantine Sword is a... James Carroll was a former priest...
Writing Feedbackstylegirl100 - Dec 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 21, 2009
|Toefl essay. people succeed because of hard work
2 - hi, Some suggestions: In my idea, it's better to introduce names used in your essay, for example: Karen,...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 20, 2009 / hitchhike - Dec 20, 2009
|How to write an argumentative essay Modern technology has increased material wea
Writing Feedbackngothanhtam - Dec 19, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Jan 6, 2010
|IELTS composition G class Task1 (Fitness facilities renovation)
Writing Feedbackfzhongjie - Dec 18, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 21, 2009
|Toefl essay "such as: improvement in their reading and writing skills, helping "
2 - For the reasons above, rich people not equal to unhappy people.----> in this sentence, you should write that being...
Writing Feedbacks011208 - Dec 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 20, 2009
|TOEFL "A gift can contribute to child's development..." - BOOK
5 - When you put 2 complete sentences together as a compound sentence, you are supposed to use a comma....
Writing Feedbackhitchhike - Dec 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 20, 2009
|Toefl essay. The twentieth century
5 - Excellent, I sure respect that. I hope you will read some books by Stephen Kind, and read them...
Writing FeedbackKeng - Dec 17, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Dec 20, 2009
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