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|Do you agree or disagree? a jury has access to the defendant's past record
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - Feb 14, 2010 / linmark - Feb 17, 2010
|Narrative essay about an experience that has changed the way I lean
3 - Good sentence!! Actually, see which one you like more... that way, or this: As I shyly made my...
Writing Feedbackjmoreh10 - Feb 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|Narrative Essay About My Grandmother - Feedback
2 - Your title of a narrative essay is very broad. What else do you want to communicate besides general narration...
Writing Feedbackchocolatepap - Feb 14, 2010 / linmark - Feb 15, 2010
|Smoking at public place should be banned. Argumental essay for IELTS GT
8 - Thank you, Kevin. You really have got the power to raise one's confidence higher. Thanks again for your overwhelming...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 14, 2010 / usalma2002 - Feb 16, 2010
|Taking vacation is one of the most important needs of each student.
4 - Short or long vacation, does not matter. The importance is to take advantage from the free time. In conclusion,...
Writing Feedbacknabg - Feb 13, 2010 / cathyliu - Feb 14, 2010
|"Good night daddy, I love you too" - Historical Narritive Essay
Writing Feedbackmsdenna - Feb 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 14, 2010
|Foster Care definition essay - grammatical assistance requested.
Writing FeedbackChillkindacat - Feb 13, 2010 / Chillkindacat - Feb 15, 2010
|Opinion on famous people's personal news, their hobbies in the media - IELTS
2 - In open market economy, all businessmen want to make money selling items that are in demand - regardless of...
Writing Feedbackusalma2002 - Feb 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|Why Life Insurance important? - It has many benefits
6 - I didn't realized how important it is until my grandmother passed away late last year. I feel like...
Writing Feedbackjaneypooh - Feb 12, 2010 / Randyhl - Feb 17, 2010
|"a great nation indicator" - GRE Issue essay
2 - Recently means "not very long ago" I'm going to take GRE analysis writing test soon. Would you please help...
Writing Feedbackchencong0320 - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 13, 2010
|Toefl essay: Grades represent a proper way of motivating and encouraging students to learn
3 - Hi, very well written, but i am not clear with your conclusion para. it helps students know their advantages...
Writing Feedbacklizzielu17 - Feb 12, 2010 / Poojasugandhi - Feb 17, 2010
|My Last weekend: "working around the house"
3 - Capitalize Internet. ...by watching TV and various kinds of movies. I really enjoyed my weekend this way...
Writing Feedbackserkitinati - Feb 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Schools are the only place to receive true education? toefl essay
Writing Feedbackchlghdgus - Feb 11, 2010 / chlghdgus - Feb 12, 2010
|Issue of local concern - parent-child relationship
4 - The essay is very good, except for the story you told about the little girl. It doesnt capture the...
Writing Feedbackjjinko - Feb 11, 2010 / RShemanski - Feb 12, 2010
|The surest indicator of a great nation, welfare, GRE Issue Writing
2 - I think you should add one more sentence to that first paragraph. After telling the 2 different opinions, you...
Writing Feedbackjuliachen - Feb 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 12, 2010
|Thomas (Tommy) Clement Douglas Essay Gr.10
8 - Well, the essay is your contribution to the site, so that people can find examples of good writing and...
Writing Feedbackcherry99 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 15, 2010
|the effects of stress (cause and effect paper)
11 - Here is another way to improve this sentence: Considering the fact that everybody deals with puzzling matters everyday, it...
Writing Feedbackbrooke4013 - Feb 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Mar 26, 2010
|Toefl; Do clothes have any influence on how people behave?
7 - SHABAIL thank you, Sharla , you really give me a good advice, I'll try that. Sometimes I just...
Writing Feedbacknicol018nie - Feb 9, 2010 / nicol018nie - Feb 10, 2010
|GRE Essay on::Success in any realm of life comes more often from taking ..
2 - Success is the ultimate goal most people work for. Success has its own definition and limits for individuals. Some...
Writing Feedbackprakashraj - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 10, 2010
|Maternity and faternity - correct my essay and give some suggestions
4 - It is thoughtful, and your topic sentences do express the meaning of the paragraph as they are supposed to,...
Writing Feedbackabduoo - Feb 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 11, 2010
|Toefl essay: Mass media influences people's ideas
NEW - Hope you guys give feedbacks to my essay.thank you so much. have a nice day! The mass media,including...
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|The new use for salicylates reduce number of headaches
5 - Thanks for your comments! You give me some confidence to deal with GRE analytical writing test!...
Writing Feedbackxymivy - Feb 8, 2010 / xymivy - Feb 15, 2010
|"Imagination is not enough. Knowledge is necessary." - GAMSAT essay practices
Writing Feedbackkumara - Feb 7, 2010 / kumara - Feb 9, 2010
|Theory of Knowledge Essay- Comparing scientific and historical facts
2 - They use very strict approaches when looking for the "truth." However, the problem with history is that it...
Writing Feedbacksaad91 - Feb 7, 2010 / jen50192 - Feb 8, 2010
|My best friend (despite of living in different countries)
Writing Feedbackserkitinati - Feb 7, 2010 / serkitinati - Feb 11, 2010
|"I want a wife" - is it a good tittle?
Writing Feedbackanwarhazamah - Feb 5, 2010 / serkitinati - Feb 12, 2010
|'no control' - The mass media and their influence on people's ideas
7 - hmm! not bad for a bigginer ,but i think you only concertrated on the image the media potrays,check things...
Writing Feedbacktramhuong - Feb 5, 2010 / BORE - Feb 9, 2010
|Essay about My Classmate from Cambodia
5 - Luong and Allen, great job here! Thanks for the excellent contributions you make to help others at EF....
Writing FeedbackPov - Feb 4, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 5, 2010
|THE PROCESS OF FORGIVENESS, BLAME, AND SELF-ACCEPTANCE
3 - Hi Overall great essay. But I'm sure that your readers will be much happier if you stop using profanity....
Writing FeedbackMementoMori - Feb 2, 2010 / Demha - Feb 19, 2010
|Cool vs uncool - an argumentive definition essay
Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Feb 2, 2010 / Rachach6 - Feb 3, 2010
|Editorial on Martin Luther King Day
Writing FeedbackNotoman - Feb 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 4, 2010
|Competition or cooperation---GRE ANALYSIS WRITING ISSUE
Writing Feedbacklola2010 - Feb 2, 2010 / lola2010 - Feb 4, 2010
|'I studied in the Philippines'; Spending money on travelling or saving?
Writing Feedbackduke616 - Feb 2, 2010 / duke616 - Feb 5, 2010
|A point to believe - Can anyone help me to short my creative essay?
15 - The whistle blows, and I hesitate. ---- I think this is better, but maybe you made it 2 sentences...
Writing Feedbacklittle636 - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 22, 2010
|essay about yasser arafat
5 - Yes, I see that Paradokht already told you to capitalize proper nouns. Also, write Nobel Prize, not...
Writing Feedbackzahoora - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|work that one finds fulfilling or work that pays well? Van Gogh, C.Marx examples
3 - Yes, add a sentence to the end of that first paragraph. Make it a sentence that answers the question...
Writing FeedbackODIE - Feb 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|Machiavelli and Lao Tzu - compare and contrast essay
2 - Check verse 17 of the Tao. I see that you ended this essay with an inaccurate statement about what...
Writing Feedbacklink2314 - Jan 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 2, 2010
|Trying to be "Little Miss Perfect" - Can someone give me feedback on this essay
3 - Let's do this part in the past tense and omit some unnecessary words: I feel that I have always...
Writing Feedbackcjharris24 - Jan 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Feb 1, 2010
|my mother Pamela Miller, need help. descriptive essay :)
Writing FeedbackStarbucksxo - Jan 27, 2010 / kiwitahi1 - Jan 28, 2010
|'bedroom is essential' Toefl essay: The most important room in your house
4 - Nowadays, life is getting more and more busy busier and busier. That causes a new century disease called "stress"...
Writing FeedbackArielruan - Jan 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 28, 2010
|the trend:throw away old one instead of repairing. causes and effects?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2010
|Musqueam and UBC Golf Course Research Paper, Part 2
3 - Thanks, I just really dissaprove of our current Premier cause he is repeatedly abusing his power and adding extra...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Jan 26, 2010 / icemaster2340 - Jan 27, 2010
|Experience is the best teacher - THE RELATIVE VALUES OF EXPERIENTIAL AND ACADEMIC LEARNING
Writing FeedbackTAL - Jan 26, 2010 / Wanderer_x - Jan 31, 2010
|the defendant's past criminal record - IELTS Writing Task 2.
2 - Crime is one of the most discussed problems in the world, and governments of countries spend lots of time...
Writing Feedbackgabrielesan - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2010
|a job at Shell Plaza:An experience that significantly led the setting your goals
3 - Last summer, of 2009, I started my first job. I was thrilled with excitement but fear was present at...
Writing Feedbacklic12 - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 28, 2010
|Air Pollution in Hong Kong - ( 500-word essay )
2 - Let's begin with the cause of the problems, which includes three main aspects. You should add this sentence to...
Writing Feedbacknarrow1234 - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 27, 2010
|My Assignment: My New Year's Resolutions (200 words)
Writing Feedbacklvnnk - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2010
|Evolution of Federalism
2 - The word federalism is not seen in the constitution; however, throughoutthe many years in history, federalism has gradually... ...
Writing Feedbackpacers7ind - Jan 26, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 26, 2010
|Take a trip to Vietnam? (persuasive paragraph)
3 - I think that you shouldn't summerize what you're going to talk about in your intro. Just give out key...
Writing Feedbacknicolethuynh - Jan 25, 2010 / lic12 - Jan 26, 2010
|Narrative My life changing moment
3 - I joined the Army to become a strong , disciplined and a courageous person. --- I think it sounds...
Writing Feedbackmellyp74 - Jan 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 27, 2010
|The Hijab: Friend or foe? (argumentative essay on 2 authors essays)
7 - make your opinion clear. Make the opinion mara longer. The reader really wants to know what YOUR thoughts are....
Writing FeedbackJoeyson - Jan 25, 2010 / sineadkachroo - Feb 12, 2010
|computers have complicated people's life- agree disagree TOEFL essay
Writing Feedbackpinpin - Jan 25, 2010 / pinpin - Jan 26, 2010
|tobacco adverts should be banned?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 29, 2010
|Organic foods against conventional foods - Can you check my essay
4 - Organic foods are getting more popular among the people of the world, and people are often choosing them over...
Writing Feedbackkichikov - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 26, 2010
|Term Paper: Sailor Mentality
3 - Don't use a semi-colon here: ...when he writes: "With a philosophical flourish... or ...when he writes, "With a philosophical...
Writing Feedbackwilcerf - Jan 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|the Musqueam Reconciliatory Agreement: Part 1
3 - Keep this as part of the intro paragraph: In my opinion: Contrary to the... That is great thesis...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 25, 2010
|TOEFL:At present we rely on oil for most our energy needs!
Writing Feedbackgreentea93 - Jan 23, 2010 / greentea93 - Jan 28, 2010
|TOEFL ESSAY:HOW TO USE THE LAND THAT YOU WISH?
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Susan - Jan 23, 2010
|How I learnt English
2 - I think you should start off where you came from, then proceed on to telling us where you work...
Writing FeedbackGSK - Jan 23, 2010 / lic12 - Jan 25, 2010
|Question about the structure of discussion essay according to IELTS exam.
2 - these sentences below are interesting because of the rule called "number agreement." As a result, many employees may...
Writing Feedbackgazel - Jan 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jan 24, 2010
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