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|TOEFL: NEWS ABOUT CELEBRITIES
7 - hi~~ Nowadays, it is very easy to hear the news about the personal lives of famous people such as...
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - Jun 1, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - Jun 4, 2010
|I analyzed the lyric "Temptation Waits" by Garbage
Writing Feedbackghgyfkd1 - May 31, 2010 / ghgyfkd1 - Jun 3, 2010
|Compare and Contrast Essay- sibling/no sibling
2 - Christian, how weirdly self-effacing it is to combine consonant sounds from your first and last name to produce "Crud"......
Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|Nowadays young children are using mobile phones
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY: INFLUENCE OF LARGE FACTORY
3 - The main disadvantage is contamination. It is true that some areas are suffering the dire consequences caused by overdeveloping...
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 31, 2010
|Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and playing
3 - Your comments were absolutely fantastic. Along with your correction you mentioned the reason to emphasis why schools are important...
Writing Feedbackrenga78 - May 29, 2010 / renga78 - May 30, 2010
|Agree or disagree that progress is always good? Yes it is always good!
4 - Thanks a lot Kevin and for homework as well. Your feedback was very encouraging. Will keep writing ......
Writing FeedbackUmeda - May 28, 2010 / Umeda - Jun 1, 2010
|Leisure time: spend it outdoors or indoors?
8 - I think adding their is better because there are too much or in the sentence. Everyone has his...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - May 28, 2010 / jjinko - Jun 15, 2010
|How should I describe all types of graphs,diagrams or charts?
8 - Now that I am looking at my description, I can see that I've made some spelling errors. The point...
Writing FeedbackMarutza - May 28, 2010 / Marutza - Jun 7, 2010
|CAPE poetry essay, experiences of trauma in the Caribbean
Writing Feedbackhustlerprince - May 27, 2010 / hustlerprince - May 30, 2010
|Required attendance in college or university classes.
6 - I reccomend you change up the transitions between paragraphs. "First ... Second ... Finally ..." Is so .. boring....
Writing Feedbackbabyevy - May 27, 2010 / LehFoxeh - Jun 12, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY : PREPARED FOOD
3 - This is great, thanks for making this an excellent thread. I'll add some ideas: Nowadays, more and more...
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Why We Crave Horror Movies
3 - It is great that you do not include lots of unhelpful words and phrases, like some writers do. Yet,...
Writing Feedbackreeseinskool - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Healthy life style
Writing FeedbackJuliaS - May 27, 2010 / JuliaS - May 31, 2010
|TOEFL: What I would change in my hometown if I could
5 - thx~everyone...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 27, 2010 / kevinhsin1124 - May 30, 2010
|PEOPLE SHOULD CHANGE THEIR JOBS ATLEAST ONCE - FEEDBACK
NEW - If we are to compare the job flexibility of today's generation and those of 20 years back. We can...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 27, 2010 / — -
|Income gap is necessary to sustain a society to run dynamically; sports professionals earn big money
4 - Mustafa, don't you think it's important to help people in different ways depending on their level of skill with...
Writing Feedbackcathyliu - May 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 30, 2010
|Has the Chinese government changed after the Tiananmen Square Massacre?
2 - Hello, I think you need to proofread your essay better. There are quite a few grammatical errors, some...
Writing Feedbackken349137 - May 26, 2010 / puroodsy - May 27, 2010
|TOEFL: Improve Roads or Public Transports
3 - I'm so glad Azeri is here helping people. Thanks!! Many people think that governments should spend money on...
Writing Feedbackhatung94 - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Classification essay- Modern students's learning style
5 - For a long time, studying have has been a significant issue among human beings. That is the only...
Writing FeedbackHUTAllen - May 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|Online Education Myths, peer review assignment
Writing FeedbackHigherEducation - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 27, 2010
|Art history paper about looted artwork during WWII
NEW - I just need general feedback like if my sentences and grammar make sense and if I'm answering the question...
Writing Feedbackqueensuri - May 25, 2010 / — -
|Computer based Instructions ! Good or bad.
4 - Yes, good corrections here. You have some options: Computers represent one of the... or The computer is one of...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|ESSAY - READING ENTERTAINMENT BOOKS INSTEAD OF EDUCATIONAL BOOKS - FEEDBACK
2 - Capitalize the titles of books. If we are to compare the difference between the reading habits of today's...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 26, 2010
|SAT Essay: Are our decisions always limited by the rules of society?
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 25, 2010 / puroodsy - May 27, 2010
|Factory is always links to the pollution problem
2 - I'll give some help here, too. I hope you will tell us if you have questions about the changes...
Writing Feedbackkevinhsin1124 - May 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 25, 2010
|Students should be required to attend classes; may need explanations of teachers
5 - the teachers can find out what the students still do not understand or misunderstand and then explain ... ...
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 24, 2010 / sheldon - May 29, 2010
|IELTS ESSAY : FINANCIAL AID TO DEVELOPING COUNTRIES
Writing Feedbacksheldon - May 24, 2010 / sheldon - May 26, 2010
|IELTS TASK 2 : Study abroad (advantages and disadvantages)
3 - Comments: - Grammatical mistakes are quite visible, proving you not to have proofread. This field of errors includes...
Writing FeedbackNguyenXuanKien - May 23, 2010 / triplesmickey - May 23, 2010
|Art Self-Evaluation piece: the process of creating your art portfolio
Writing FeedbackJd87rh - May 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
|Today we have a variety of food and we have various choices to prepare food
3 - I also think that eating "fast food", whether it McDonald's or the Olive Garden it's not as healthy as...
Writing FeedbackArshin - May 21, 2010 / haeddleman - May 21, 2010
|It is easy to welcome innovation and accept new ideas
Writing FeedbackGary1986 - May 21, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 22, 2010
|IELTS task 2 : Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood.
9 - my suggest is that you can write about 3 sentences in first paragraph to support both sides. Make your...
Writing Feedbackwilly0123 - May 20, 2010 / mabu9669 - Jun 6, 2010
|SAT essay: Is censorship sometimes justifiable?
10 - Hi Jesslyn, I became a fan of your writing. I read your other posts. It was very interesting...
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 20, 2010 / renga78 - Jun 4, 2010
|Should crimes committed many years ago be forgotten? - Essay writing advice
7 - Well, some sentences like the one above are very, very impressive. You write like someone who is...
Writing Feedbacklentan - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 24, 2010
|ESSAY- Comment on freedom on choice of clothing in schools - FEEDBACK
2 - No comma necessary here: School is the place which lays foundation ... progress or their overall personalities ....
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
|People are moving in to the big cities for more comfortable and convenient life
10 - Mickey, you seem seriously interested in helping people. Everyone participating in this thread made such a unique contribution; I'm...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 20, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 23, 2010
|Marine Pollution Introductory paragraph
2 - Source of survival is a strange phrase. It might be better to write: Water is the most crucial factor...
Writing Feedbackeveehp - May 19, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|My hero, Terry Fox born in Canada
3 - Yes, that is true. It seems that Namon is struggling to improve her/his English, though, so let's help...
Writing Feedbackthailand - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|Parents should encourage their high school students for part time jobs !
4 - Working twenty years at an inconsequential job may not give as much satisfaction as a highly prolific and demanding...
Writing Feedbackshalini singh - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 20, 2010
|"I had a blood disorder" - help with Descriptive Personal Essay
15 - Yep, it was interesting to watch you make progress with this one. I hope you stick around and keep...
Writing Feedbackhaeddleman - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Jun 1, 2010
|SAT: even though having a good leader is important, we should not blindly follow his decision
Writing Feedbackpuroodsy - May 18, 2010 / puroodsy - May 20, 2010
|Equal number of students:IETLS essay
4 - the indispensable role of education in a man's life cannot be overlooked: i meant to talk about importance of...
Writing FeedbackaJ_M_65 - May 18, 2010 / aJ_M_65 - Jun 4, 2010
|Music and art in school essay
6 - In conclusion, undoubtedly, this is the era of computers and science. Therefore, schools must be flexible enough to...
Writing Feedbackprince303 - May 18, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 21, 2010
|IELTS; MOVIES & TELEVISION CAN POSITIVELY INFLUENCE PEOPLES' BEHAVIOR
2 - try to avoid writing firstly, secondly.. instead use sentences like one of the significant reasons.. over all good ideas,...
Writing Feedbackphuocqui - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 19, 2010
|Theatre Under The Stars
NEW - The popular musicals titled Shrek the Musical and West Side Story will be joining another popular musical that had...
Writing Feedbackshane123 - May 17, 2010 / — -
|ielts essay: Advantages of attending school from a young age
2 - HI..SEPIDEH You have some grammatical errors in your essay.Which i guess, already been corrected by other users. Just remember...
Writing Feedbackgingerpopo - May 17, 2010 / prince303 - May 18, 2010
|'dark metal genre'; About the Music and why it's important to many people?
4 - thanx alot bro for your notes,but unfortunately most of them are typos. i just want you to give...
Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 16, 2010 / Pink1 - May 17, 2010
|"Fifty-Four Forty or Fight" History Research Essay
2 - Capitalize "River" because it is part of a proper noun. Columbia River I see a little typo: rejection...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - May 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|"True beauty" is the good humanity
6 - I think your grasp of English is really good actually, but it just takes practice Tips on writing:...
Writing Feedbackyangzom - May 14, 2010 / meisj0n - May 20, 2010
|Children have trend to be significantly more violent and careless in their study and social life
Writing FeedbackPink1 - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 16, 2010
|Questioning authority is important for improvements and innovations in many fields.
Writing Feedbacktyro - May 14, 2010 / — -
|About Malaysia's problems
NEW - Every country has it own problem, for example, Iraq/Iran is facing a terrible war, Africa is facing poverty, and...
Writing Feedbackcelineccky - May 14, 2010 / — -
|School teach for career or general knowledge (IELTS test)
NEW - i'm prepairing for the IELTS test and my teacher give me this topic question. help me to check for...
Writing Feedbackviebboy - May 14, 2010 / — -
|Text messaging: write about an invention that has changed your life
3 - The invention that made the biggest change in my life was text messaging. This discovery changed my way of...
Writing FeedbackLordBartosz - May 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2010
|"Failure is necessary for education to take place?" - grade my essay
Writing FeedbackMizo Metallic - May 13, 2010 / Mizo Metallic - May 19, 2010
|CBEST Writing: My favorite subject/course in school (Korean Literature)
2 - Don't capitalize high: When I was in high school, my favorite... Thanks, Shalini, for the work you did...
Writing Feedbackimhe - May 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 15, 2010
|Technology, one offspring of science, is a world of imagination being made true
7 - to some extent* :? Interesting way of approaching the prompt. placing down arguments for the assertive and...
Writing Feedbacktriplesmickey - May 12, 2010 / meisj0n - May 22, 2010
|"Is personal satisfaction the motivation for people to achieve?", covers point?
Writing Feedbackstephen1341 - May 10, 2010 / stephen1341 - May 12, 2010
|Sex Education In Schools and Colleges Is A Must.
2 - Pathetic is a word that seems judgmental, so it is better without it: ...It indeed is the pathetic plight...
Writing Feedbackabhisheksahai - May 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - May 11, 2010
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