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|Be very careful if you are driving in the winter...
Writing Feedbackpompom098 - Oct 17, 2010 / yojo1 - Oct 18, 2010
|Extinct Animals - Essay
2 - In fact, I disagree with idea that animals have been created to serve human beings so that we have...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Oct 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 20, 2010
|"Christians should be more active" - Does this essay fit the toulmin model?
Writing Feedbackgamhazell - Oct 17, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 20, 2010
|TOEFL; Clothing may influence the way people behave
2 - You shouldn't repeat expressions from the task writing your introduction. This shows that your vacabulary is not very diverse....
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Oct 17, 2010 / Taniad - Oct 17, 2010
|'from the top of a skyscraper' - Small town or big city - TOEFL
4 - Hi I think you right about the plural experiences . I misread your sentence and I thought you talking...
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 16, 2010 / RyanVi16 - Oct 18, 2010
|TOEFL- money for children - they don't have the ability to keep their money safe
Writing Feedbacklinying - Oct 16, 2010 / RyanVi16 - Oct 16, 2010
|Job with more vacation time but less salary?
4 - Here is some more help: Although the first reason I mentioned above is probably the most important reason,...
Writing FeedbackNUMJMM - Oct 16, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 19, 2010
|Topic: watching tv is bad for kids
Writing Feedbackjwoo1111 - Oct 16, 2010 / YPan - Oct 18, 2010
|The Passage - "don't know if it's fluent and adhesive"
3 - hey kev! thanks for ur comment...sorry i took so long to reply. thank you for the suggestion. i...
Writing Feedbackjcan - Oct 15, 2010 / jcan - Nov 6, 2010
|Thesis Statement for essay 'internet has destroyed the ability to communicate'
4 - Thank you so much for your feedback, I'm taking a Toefl course now, I hope, I'll write much better...
Writing Feedbacktoefl - Oct 15, 2010 / toefl - Oct 16, 2010
|TOELF Essay "Is it better for children to participate in team sports?"
Writing FeedbackIrrational - Oct 15, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 18, 2010
|Why You Shouldn't Get Excited on the Golf Course
5 - you should try to catch the readers attention without asking a question in the beginning. maybe at the end...
Writing Feedbackmegasoccer4 - Oct 14, 2010 / hannahkim91 - Oct 23, 2010
|What's important: get up early and programm your works and you will never let yourself to be lazy
Writing Feedbacksolmaz - Oct 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 18, 2010
|IELTS: giving financial aids to the poor countries is not the way to go
6 - Thanks linying and Irrational for correcting my grammar! Kevin, Thank you for your suggestions! One issue that has...
Writing Feedbackadriennelin - Oct 14, 2010 / adriennelin - Oct 19, 2010
|Important as classes and libraries are for students, health and social skills are also the keys
5 - You've write 335 words. According to the experience of my friends and I, a passage of 400+ words may...
Writing Feedbacklinying - Oct 14, 2010 / jinyangxue - Oct 18, 2010
|PAPER ABOUT HALLOWEEN (A RITUAL in a SOCIAL-CULTURAL KEY)
Writing Feedbackalicepozzi - Oct 14, 2010 / alicepozzi - Oct 18, 2010
|TOEFL-Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are?
5 - Hi, What's more, the most influential advertisements are dependeddependent on famous people (you can even use the word...
Writing Feedbacklinying - Oct 14, 2010 / dumi - Oct 18, 2010
|Internet provides massive amount of uncensored information which may includes antisocial materials
3 - Usually "among" is followed by a noun that is plural: great concern among the people of society.--- This way,...
Writing Feedbackkiennguyen123 - Oct 14, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 17, 2010
|"Honor towards One's Mother and Father" - I need help summing up my essay on honor.
Writing FeedbackSupernewtJR - Oct 13, 2010 / SupernewtJR - Oct 14, 2010
|Narrative Essay On A fictional Hero - Feedback on Mechanics.
3 - who posed possessed many abilities unknown to human kind. ...with her aunt and was destined to never...
Writing FeedbackJessyyy - Oct 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 16, 2010
|Checkmate, pawns, troops, bishop, queen, strategy - essay
Writing Feedbackcamucros - Oct 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Nov 3, 2010
|IELTS Writing - Should the reports of detailed crime be banned?
3 - That first paragraph needs at least 1 more sentence to help explain your argument. Add a sentence that tells...
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 16, 2010
|Perspective on Team Work - A group working or individual work?
Writing Feedbackradwa - Oct 13, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2010
|IELTS: Government should make more effort to promote alternative sources of energy.
NEW - Hi all... Could you please assess my writing and help me improving it Topic: Government should make more...
Writing Feedbackielts - Oct 13, 2010 / — -
|Immoral Experience: "you should never say swear words"
3 - sorry but I agree with ryanvi16. try focusing more on what this movie did for you if you really...
Writing FeedbackMichael B - Oct 12, 2010 / dfdfdf - Oct 12, 2010
|The mayor views on new automobile manufacturing plant: GRE argument essay
2 - Here is a good place to use a colon: ...and only focused on its most conspicuous negative quality: the...
Writing Feedbackradwa - Oct 12, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 15, 2010
|Does air travel creates a great deal of pollution and consumes resources?
4 - Try this one-you can download a lot of free e-books such as Cambridge IELTS Practice tests etc: englishtips.org/exam_materials/ielts/ ...
Writing Feedbackielts - Oct 12, 2010 / scowi - Oct 12, 2010
|Students should go to the army course with 12 months after their graduation?
3 - Politics is always a number one matter in a country. To prepare for war posibility in advance, going to...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Oct 11, 2010 / thaitam - Oct 14, 2010
|The process of researching and writing an essay
3 - I don't like the first sentence, because examinations are PART of life. Can you try a different intro sentence?...
Writing Feedbackanna_ lewin - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|a change of heart and different view on life
5 - Actually, I wonder about the format of your writing. i mean an essay needs three main parts; Introduction, body...
Writing Feedbackunavailableuser - Oct 11, 2010 / candynguyen381 - Oct 13, 2010
|Responce towards Iron Dice by John G. Stoessinger (Essay about cause of WW1)
2 - Okay, then I expect to see those factors explained as such in the essay... I'll keep reading... ...
Writing Feedbackicemaster2340 - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|"Honoring your parents" - my unexamined belief essay?
9 - You can do it easily, William. I'll tell you the secret: Instead of trying to think of something...
Writing Feedbackkawsneffect - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 27, 2010
|There is nothing that an uneducated person can teach an educated person
6 - Even though many people might think that we learn only from educated people, from my point of view we...
Writing Feedbackmehdi1995 - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|IELTS; "No boundary for art";Why creative artists be given freedom to express ideas!
2 - Here are my suggestions: The subject here is plural: Culture and existence, so use are Culture and existence...
Writing Feedbackpendar - Oct 11, 2010 / Zubaida - Oct 11, 2010
|Narrative essay about how was my feeling about getting money.
3 - Namrata, thanks for the time you invested here... great advice. I agree that Sim's attempt is not bad. It's...
Writing Feedbackhowtowrite - Oct 11, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2010
|A Life Long lesson Learned
Writing FeedbackKathyChen - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 13, 2010
|"Being Muslim" - UCF Amissions Essay: How my culture has influenced who i am.
3 - Doing...-----> requires However, doing these certain responsibilities requires dedication and commitment. When I decided to wear the head scarf...
Writing FeedbackZunaira94 - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 13, 2010
|IELTS-Should children cooperative spirit and a competitive mind
3 - thaitam, thank you very much for your checking. I agree with most of your modification. It really helps a...
Writing Feedbackzchen1987 - Oct 10, 2010 / zchen1987 - Oct 12, 2010
|"Human survival will depend on effective measures to cope with ecological problems"
Writing Feedbackqwerty123456789 - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 13, 2010
|The unsuspecting wayfarer
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Oct 10, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 16, 2010
|Reflective experience to Peck's inspiring article on struggle in life!
Writing FeedbackMoeMoe1 - Oct 9, 2010 / MoeMoe1 - Oct 12, 2010
|does high workplace risk render a higher pay?
2 - McDonald's Improvement of workplace safety does not necessary mean higher ... I don't think you should...
Writing FeedbackSugarJenn - Oct 9, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 12, 2010
|Do you agree or disagree:The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits
Writing FeedbackYuking - Oct 9, 2010 / Yuking - Oct 9, 2010
|Exploiting tourism is more lucrative than ever to nations galore; some concerns
4 - One clearobvious problem is that more and morewhen the numbers of tourists increasetravellers coming to visit means , more...
Writing Feedbackbemytthm - Oct 9, 2010 / dumi - Oct 9, 2010
|Employee Efficiency and Performance Evaluation: GRE argument analysis
4 - In this case, I would recommend putting the first two paragraphs together as one paragraph. Taht will make a...
Writing Feedbackradwa - Oct 8, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 11, 2010
|Pers.Essay: A Time When I Encountered Something Greater Than Myself--Poverty in India
5 - Thank you so VERY much for all the feedback. I wasn't expecting any at all; your comments were more...
Writing Feedbacktmiplease - Oct 8, 2010 / tmiplease - Oct 13, 2010
|Individual study helps keep me focused. If I study with my friends I easily get distracted.
5 - thanks kevin...
Writing Feedbackparpari - Oct 8, 2010 / parpari - Oct 12, 2010
|Will controling the amount of violence in films and on TV reduce violent crimes?
5 - Kevin,thank you for your comments You have motivated me to write more To improve my English,I will work harder...
Writing Feedbackmaxim john - Oct 8, 2010 / maxim john - Oct 11, 2010
|Guns Control or Not? - Essay with one body Paragraph
3 - Great job, Tan Vi! I want to improve one of the corrections: Moreover, banning guns in Yemen is going...
Writing FeedbackNesreen - Oct 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 11, 2010
|Miranda Rights are Important? - a persuasive essay
4 - The topic of Miranda rights in this essay may not be fully developed. First, these rights are when the...
Writing Feedbackhabibu79 - Oct 7, 2010 / writerblock - Dec 24, 2010
|Capital Punishment in modern society - should be applied or not?
Writing Feedbackrupamgump - Oct 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 11, 2010
|My journey that led me to pursue physical therapy school
Writing FeedbackPaola54 - Oct 7, 2010 / essays r hard - Oct 10, 2010
|Formal Analysis of Monet's "The Scene at Giverny"
2 - To the viewer hastily taking a glimpse, The Scene at Giverny might look... This is very well-written. If...
Writing Feedbackhiliun - Oct 7, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
|Compare/Contrast Family Dynamics
Writing Feedbacknn8nk - Oct 7, 2010 / nn8nk - Oct 13, 2010
|Buy books or borrowing books?- TOEFL
4 - Because of my desire to save money for ourselves and the resources consumed to manufacture books, I prefer t...
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Oct 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
|TOEFL essay about influential people in the world
2 - To begin with,the most important reason is that he gave some rights to women for... Use a spell...
Writing Feedbackkovcastle - Oct 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
|Not only belief: Young people are no longer interested in religion
5 - Ahaan. Actually the thing is that our English teacher has been posted to some other city last year and...
Writing FeedbackMilky_Sarisama - Oct 6, 2010 / Milky_Sarisama - Oct 7, 2010
|About the invetion of soap in ancient Egypt: edit my paragraph?
5 - Yeah, you're right. But they ask question like such: " Are all important discoveries the results of focusing on...
Writing Feedbacklzhd1028 - Oct 6, 2010 / lzhd1028 - Oct 6, 2010
|Are organisations most successful when members pursue individual wishes and goals?
Writing Feedbackgmt_snail - Oct 6, 2010 / gmt_snail - Oct 11, 2010
|IELTS writing: Commercialization of sports (wrong motivation?)
3 - Cool, and how about adding one more sentence to the end of that first paragraph to tell briefly...
Writing Feedbackcathead_2307 - Oct 6, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Oct 10, 2010
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