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|Toefl iBT writing - Integrated task: Global warming
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Sep 30, 2009 / kristinbrianne - Oct 3, 2009
|What is the real friend? A real friend is a person who is other-oriented, less self-centered.
2 - Hi, Here are some my ideas about your essays: 1. The first sentence of the introduction paragraph...
Writing Feedbackmocixuan - Sep 29, 2009 / tuanlnc - Sep 30, 2009
|Solution to the global climate change
2 - This doesn't seem like a fair prompt. There is no way you can write enough to give a thoughtful...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 29, 2009
|Music can kill much time if people are bored - sound is part of our lives
2 - Sometimes I really believe that music has a power which can make people relaxed. Almost everyone listen(s) to music...
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 29, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 29, 2009
|the way to achieve fitness and health
2 - This seems like the sort of essay where it might help to explicitly define the term "normal life" in...
Writing Feedbackkhoctham - Sep 29, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 29, 2009
|Collaborative Activity - Define Hope
Writing Feedbackmikesperry79 - Sep 28, 2009 / mikesperry79 - Sep 29, 2009
|Narrative + Descriptive Essay feedback
Writing Feedbackjm22 - Sep 28, 2009 / mikesperry79 - Sep 29, 2009
|Descriptive Essay A Memorable Place
3 - I agree. I've never been in Vietnam, so your descriptions are helpful in making me feel what it is...
Writing Feedbackteoster4o9 - Sep 28, 2009 / Stephen McGuire - Sep 28, 2009
|My two life accomplishments fedback
2 - You might wish to add some background information about yourself to the beginning of your essay. Apparently the incident...
Writing Feedbackmirianlandi - Sep 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 28, 2009
|"My future job" - revise an essay; I allways want to be a designer
5 - Also, there is no excuse for making really obvious spelling mistakes. Run your work through a spellchecker, which will...
Writing FeedbackKorh - Sep 28, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 2, 2009
|Exercise for upcoming final exam: How to be a good manager?
2 - Be careful with word choice. I'm guessing you mean "shrewd" rather than "shrew." I wonder if you really...
Writing FeedbackRosejoker - Sep 28, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 29, 2009
|Modern Technology & Single World Culture; Specific Reasons/ Examples
2 - dmittedly, there are many good opportunities for who wants to expand their knowledge about other countries' cultures on the...
Writing FeedbackMinnie - Sep 28, 2009 / khoctham - Sep 29, 2009
|academic essay for the important assessment of the English Curriculum.
Writing FeedbackKeng - Sep 28, 2009 / Keng - Sep 29, 2009
|ielts: academic module task 1 (Underground Station Passenger Numbers)
3 - yeah...sorry for that. i tried to copy the graph but it seems that the program can't follow the command....
Writing Feedbackdinky - Sep 28, 2009 / dinky - Sep 29, 2009
|Treating pets as family members is not a good way for human beings even though they are our friends.
3 - hi jin, i have ever written about this topic. however my essay support that statement. i think there are...
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 27, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 27, 2009
|Essay based on an aphorism - Black Tees in August
8 - I think there are parts - especially in the middle where sentences are too choppy. Also is a "brick...
Writing Feedbackcburns - Sep 27, 2009 / cburns - Oct 2, 2009
|why movies have become a part of life
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 27, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 28, 2009
|Explain the humanistic Approach to Counselling
3 - Thank you so very much for your help. I completely agree with you about my essay jumping here, there...
Writing FeedbackNessie - Sep 27, 2009 / Nessie - Sep 28, 2009
|Biased Metaphors in the Science of Reproduction
2 - You ought to get a good grade for this essay. You accurately summarize Martin's overall point, illustrating the idea...
Writing Feedbackjason123 - Sep 26, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
|Topic 4: Self-study or learning with a teacher
5 - i see, however, personally, i believe that yours will be better if you show that advantages from the second...
Writing Feedbackessay0405 - Sep 26, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 1, 2009
|Reading habits of Leeville citizens - Analyse An Argument. Rate on a scale of 6
2 - No, the argument does not state this. One study found that Leeville citizens reported this. In light of...
Writing Feedbackdesigningsally - Sep 26, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 26, 2009
|low-paying secure job OR high-paying unsecure job?
Writing Feedbacklitingjiao - Sep 25, 2009 / khoctham - Sep 29, 2009
|'How I adapted to fit in' - Meaningful experience
10 - i really like how you worded your essay it flows and it also describes your personaly like when i...
Writing Feedbacksly634 - Sep 25, 2009 / acat6332 - Sep 26, 2009
|A paragraph about Dreams
Writing FeedbackMermaid1 - Sep 25, 2009 / designingsally - Sep 26, 2009
|IBT essay - Study for free at the university
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Sep 25, 2009 / tuanlnc - Sep 26, 2009
|Personal Definition (AP Composition class)
Writing FeedbackTroubledWriter - Sep 24, 2009 / TroubledWriter - Sep 24, 2009
|Personal life of famous person is no longer "personal"
5 - With the remarkable development of public media, the personal life of famous person is no longer "personal". Personally, I...
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 23, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 27, 2009
|Toefl essay---a library is a good place for studying
Writing FeedbackKeng - Sep 23, 2009 / khoctham - Oct 1, 2009
|Writer's Duty (Faulkner's Nobel Prize Speech and Dillard)
3 - The best way to improve grammatical errors is to read English texts of various subjects such as politics, science...
Writing Feedbackluckystar - Sep 23, 2009 / Keng - Sep 23, 2009
|SOME PEOPLE HELP THEIR COMMUNITY DIRECTLY AND SOME THROUGH ORGANISATIONS,DISCUSS
Writing Feedbackniraj - Sep 23, 2009 / eternal flame - Sep 23, 2009
|GOOD AND BAD OF MULTICULTURL SOCIETY. DISCUSS
4 - Lol, I see you have discovered that some topics are, um, more sensitive than you thought. You are right...
Writing Feedbackniraj - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 22, 2009
|"Preparation Produces Opportunity" (A quote and how it relates to your life)
Writing FeedbackCantWrite - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 24, 2009
|Originality is not such a concept that can be categorized in the first group or the other
4 - thanks, yes as i read again, it seems unclear.:( i write these essays as a practice for GRE exam.....
Writing Feedbackmina_sedaghatir - Sep 21, 2009 / mina_sedaghatir - Sep 22, 2009
|Puerile Prince or Stalwart King: An Analysis of Shakespeare's Henry V
Writing FeedbackNotoman - Sep 21, 2009 / Notoman - Sep 29, 2009
|My Essay on Disappearances in Pakistan. Help
3 - If you're going to talk about the U.S. in relation to Pakistan, you have to go back further in...
Writing Feedbackcantonhero - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 22, 2009
|Hills Like White Elephants Essay (man and girl frustration)
Writing Feedbackhazelc - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 21, 2009
|Cbest Essay - Missing Opportunity in Life
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Sep 21, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 24, 2009
|"Studying overseas" - I AM PREPARING FOR IELTS EXAM
Writing Feedbackangel_luv - Sep 21, 2009 / elainedlcruz - Sep 21, 2009
|Toefl---TV good or bad?
Writing Feedbacklitingjiao - Sep 21, 2009 / looktor - Sep 24, 2009
|Good parents influence their children essay
5 - I think your introduction essay is too long. Why don't you make it shorter and divide you essay in...
Writing Feedbackkokidpham - Sep 20, 2009 / essay0405 - Sep 26, 2009
|Process Essay. Water Polo.
2 - This is your conclusion right now. It functions weakly as a conclusion and ought to go in the...
Writing FeedbackDEW72 - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 21, 2009
|the parallels of " The world on the Turtles back" and "The Genesis"
Writing Feedbackleone123 - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 22, 2009
|President Bush's September llth Address to the Nation
Writing Feedbackluckystar - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 23, 2009
|Are you bored doing the same tasks over and over again? - Definition Essay
Writing Feedbackvwyodapink - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 21, 2009
|reformation in education good or not? why?
2 - Certainly. But you must do your part too. I notice that you have posted two essays for feedback,...
Writing Feedbackkhoctham - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 20, 2009
|solution for new students to get on new school
3 - thank EF_Simone so much!i try to make better comment for others and avoid these mistakes in my essays. i...
Writing Feedbackkhoctham - Sep 20, 2009 / khoctham - Sep 20, 2009
|'Korean student died'; The advantage and disadvantage of the Internet
2 - In your conclusion, you list recommendations related to only two of your points. If you're going to list recommendations,...
Writing Feedbackessay0405 - Sep 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 20, 2009
|students should take apart in lecture or not? why?
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009 / looktor - Sep 24, 2009
|how can school help new students get accustomed to new environment?
6 - thanks mrchildchil! ielts 8 band, it means that your english is excellent. in your opinion, with this essay, how...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 26, 2009
|Descriptive Essay - A media event or a once in a lifetime event
8 - you can use methaphors, similes, analogies to help show and not just say things that describe emotions or feelings...
Writing FeedbackJSteinberger - Sep 20, 2009 / neuromancer - Sep 20, 2009
|toefl -- needed land / protecting environment
5 - I can't help but notice that many of your comments on other people's threads have been a bit brief...
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 20, 2009
|Narrative essay / the street artist
5 - The story is too pat to be realistic. Also, the theme of the etching, according to the website you...
Writing Feedbackal_nadwani - Sep 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 20, 2009
|Toefl Topic -- "A person you know is coming to your town"
5 - You're not doing too badly for a TOEFL essay. You should reorder either your paragraphs or your introduction, however,...
Writing Feedbackzhigoolet - Sep 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 19, 2009
|the main purposes of a country's education system
6 - talk about the variety in public school curriculum, private schools, boarding schools, athletes, scholarships, neighborhood, admission process, money. ...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 19, 2009 / kyleroland - Nov 15, 2009
|A licence to Write ?
11 - I lived some years in Bethesda, near Washington DC. My neighbor had a very cynical attitude towards Indians and...
Writing FeedbackRajiv - Sep 19, 2009 / Rajiv - Oct 31, 2009
|Rambo Verses the Boar; Descriptive Narrative Assignment
Writing Feedbackneuromancer - Sep 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Sep 27, 2009
|students should get jobs or not? why or why not? 'to be more confident'
3 - thank DJKessler very much. your comment encourages me very much; because, my teacher often says that my essays are...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009
|toefl -- success and luck
Writing FeedbackJin - Sep 18, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Sep 20, 2009
|Personal Essay: A Dog's Best Friend.
5 - Maybe some advice? My writing prof. explained that i should have a grey conclusion taht goes along with my...
Writing FeedbackJpicker - Sep 18, 2009 / Jpicker - Sep 22, 2009
|discuss advantages and disadvantages of building a new shopping center
4 - It is comment considered thatN othing in the world is perfect, and everything always comes at a price. ...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Sep 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 19, 2009
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