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|write to thank a local businessman for giving large sum of money to the club....
3 - Noted. Thanks alot. I will try to improve on it. How about the details I have written? Is there...
Writing Feedbackdylantcp - Oct 21, 2009 / dylantcp - Oct 22, 2009
|"Teach for India" why?
3 - Thanks a lot for givining the feedback..i will rewrite and send it again with keeping all the point u...
Writing Feedbackruchika kumari - Oct 21, 2009 / ruchika kumari - Oct 22, 2009
|Contrast viewpoints of the author and the lecturer about using cell phone
4 - tuanlnc have a hard look the reasons cause accidents and should not focus only on using cell phone. >>>...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 21, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 29, 2009
|WHAT is the message that advertisement is communicating to the viewer?
2 - You need to greatly tighten up this essay. You might start by looking at how the elements you describe...
Writing Feedbackmtelsayed - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 21, 2009
|Should Euthanasia be legalized?
16 - There are simple MLA formats that you can google online it helped me a whole lot when writing my...
Writing Feedbackjohnnylin_24 - Oct 20, 2009 / jaimeealexis - Oct 31, 2009
|Essay about the influence of Parents on Kids
2 - This is great, very engaging. I couldn't stop reading because of the emotion it conveyed. You should go...
Writing Feedbackriaboo46 - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 21, 2009
|Introsuce about college and faculty of pharmacy
3 - I will join in an international lecture on how to develop pharmacists' education in Vietnam and some countries in...
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 20, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 21, 2009
|'priceless gift of oneself' - People do different things to stay health; IELTS
4 - You say right. I'm a pharmacist. That maybe a reason why my essay like a writing on a newspaper....
Writing Feedbackvothiha - Oct 20, 2009 / vothiha - Oct 20, 2009
|Romanticism - British literature essay. i need a good proofread.
3 - I'm also glad that you made references to the poets. But I think there's some information here that came...
Writing Feedbackehoskin24 - Oct 20, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 21, 2009
|"Luck is very important factor to succeed" - toefl ibt
2 - ainash After reading your essay, I understand why no one has made response. Although my English writing is...
Writing Feedbackainash - Oct 19, 2009 / thanhlh84 - Oct 20, 2009
|Sport and motivations - money influence?
Writing Feedbackasoa - Oct 19, 2009 / asoa - Oct 19, 2009
|TOEFL:ELECTRIC BOOK OR PAPER BOOK?(contrast)
8 - EF_Stephen：thank you for your advice. but i am confused how to improve my vocabulary problem. how to make words...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 19, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 20, 2009
|Can a computer be hacked easily? Introduction to Computer research paper...
2 - Um, that seems like a fairly important issue, and one that has all sorts of ethical implications. ...
Writing FeedbackNita S - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 19, 2009
|Modernization vs Dependency Theory
Writing FeedbackMakeAnImpact97 - Oct 18, 2009 / MakeAnImpact97 - Oct 20, 2009
|Write a report about a graph; Coca-cola bottles
2 - ollowing the North America wereare the Latin America and Europe with 25.7% and 20.5% in total 17.1 billion bottles...
Writing Feedbackessay0405 - Oct 18, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 18, 2009
|life in prison is better punishment than death penalty
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 22, 2009
|TOEFL:Progress in civilization is always goog
Writing Feedbacklyqinyi - Oct 17, 2009 / yin - Oct 17, 2009
|An amazing place that you visited
Writing Feedbacksilentheart - Oct 17, 2009 / silentheart - Oct 17, 2009
|Should nations maintain old buildings. Ielts
3 - Thanks Sean specifally for the examples you gave. I can see how weak the first structure is. I will...
Writing Feedbackorlando - Oct 17, 2009 / orlando - Oct 17, 2009
|[TOEFL] All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school.
Writing Feedbackyin - Oct 16, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 24, 2009
|The advantage and disadvantage of the mobile phones
Writing Feedbackessay0405 - Oct 16, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 17, 2009
|Essay on three businesses if Mr. Gates awarded me with $300,000
Writing FeedbackSyed - Oct 16, 2009 / youngeebs - Oct 16, 2009
|brain drain and solutions for this problem
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 16, 2009 / essay0405 - Oct 17, 2009
|LEGALIZATION OF SAME SEX MARRIAGE - revise my introduction, argumentative paper.
32 - I personally would simply talk about the essence of human rights; how essentially we are all equal and that...
Writing FeedbackBrianne - Oct 16, 2009 / Envie - Feb 9, 2010
|TOEFL - prefer large or small company? Large - stable jobs and fine salaries
4 - it is a contrast essay, so your structure is wrong. mention both merits and demerits , besides what overweighs...
Writing FeedbackAnly - Oct 16, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 30, 2009
|giving more chance for women can cause some problem?what are your views?
3 - Hi, I agree with worldbound10, "develop themselves" is used three times. Instead of replicating it, you can use...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 15, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 17, 2009
|TOEFL College education is one of the significant sources of increased knowledge
3 - Thank you. i really appreciate. i will redo it as soon as possible. besides, what else do you think...
Writing Feedbackfuhuanluck - Oct 15, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 15, 2009
|Toefl iBT, integrated task: Invasive plants are a growing problem.
3 - Hi Jeannie, This is a Toefl iBT integrated writing task. After reading a passage & listening a lecture,...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 15, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 15, 2009
|'My sister's problems and solutions' - concise narrative describe a meaningful event
Writing FeedbackNoumon - Oct 14, 2009 / shaddy - Apr 16, 2013
|Narrative Essay: "Mother's heart is infinite like the Pacific Ocean overflowing"
3 - Dear EF_ Kevin, Although I handed in the essay to my professor, your advice is very useful for...
Writing Feedbacktrthanhthao109 - Oct 14, 2009 / trthanhthao109 - Oct 17, 2009
|Toefl essay:: Studying abroad, advantages and disadvantages.
8 - hi, in essay or any academic writing should avoid using some pronoun such as you, we, i as possible...
Writing Feedbackerfan222 - Oct 14, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 16, 2009
|"The most delicious meal I have ever eaten..." - Descriptive Essay
3 - This is called a dangling modifier. It implies that your girlfriend was coming home from work, because that...
Writing FeedbackHugcr84001 - Oct 14, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 15, 2009
|government should spend as much money as possible on developing technology
3 - Your have some grammar errors in this essay, but I would do some revision before I worried about that....
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 13, 2009 / mikesperry79 - Oct 14, 2009
|Is it a good thing to have children employed with paid jobs?
4 - the consciousness of earning money seriously by their own effort to cover their education tuitions and personal expenses...
Writing Feedbackmaybien_bk - Oct 13, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 15, 2009
|"City vs. Countryside" - English class essay
4 - Your essay is based on your personal experience. It's good however the overuse of these experiences makes your essay...
Writing Feedbackkokujampo - Oct 13, 2009 / maybien_bk - Oct 13, 2009
|Toefl Essay Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources
Writing FeedbackKeng - Oct 13, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 15, 2009
|face to face communication is better than others such as mail, phone...
6 - I am not sure if the "other types of communication" in the qns is restricted to the examples given...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 13, 2009 / xtlraptor - Oct 17, 2009
|cause of use the internet and solutions
3 - thanks mocixuan so much, your advices are very useful, thanks so much again, how do y think about this...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 13, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 13, 2009
|We, young people, should plan and organize as the modern life is more complex.
3 - Your essay is excellent! However, I think if there is a conclusion in each paragraph, it will be better....
Writing Feedbackmocixuan - Oct 13, 2009 / lyqinyi - Oct 16, 2009
|TOEFL essay "modern technology"
Writing Feedbacklyqinyi - Oct 13, 2009 / fuhuanluck - Oct 19, 2009
|Toefl Independ Essay : where to learn a new language.
3 - Although there are some advantages to of learning a foreign language in its original country, I firmly believe that...
Writing FeedbackZamanian - Oct 13, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 13, 2009
|Understand Our Heritage - critical essay on Alice Walker's "Everyday Use"
Writing FeedbackJasonB - Oct 12, 2009 / JasonB - Oct 13, 2009
|learning language in your own country or the country it is spoken.
2 - You write very clearly, and with good grammar. I think there is an error in that first sentence, though....
Writing Feedbackzhigoolet - Oct 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2009
|There are lots of unfairness between male and female over the past centuries.
2 - Verb tense and number agreement are giving you some difficulty: There are lots of unfair events that occur...
Writing Feedbackdltn88 - Oct 12, 2009 / EF_Kevin - Oct 14, 2009
|using computer influence on young children
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 12, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 13, 2009
|Toefl essay Which is more important for success ------
Writing FeedbackKeng - Oct 12, 2009 / trevgolfer - Oct 13, 2009
|Ielts---whether the pros of multi-cultured societies are more than the cons
5 - The first thing I notice is that the vocabulary is way beyond you. You don't use these words in...
Writing Feedbackwangzhuo029 - Oct 12, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 12, 2009
|"American Idiot" - I feel like my words just fail to do it with justice; Album review
NEW - The task is relatively simple: pick a rock/pop/country album that you love (you know, one of those albums that...
Writing Feedbackma201314 - Oct 11, 2009 / — -
|First Philosophy Essay; Pascal's Wager and the Advent of Infinite Future Gods
8 - Also, you could argue that an absolutely perfect being wouldn't inflict harm on another sentient being or allow...
Writing Feedbackaroundtheworld - Oct 11, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 13, 2009
|Eating at Home or at a Restaurant? I prefer HOME
8 - Try rereading your essay and fixing some of your spelling mistakes. It looks to me like you kind of...
Writing Feedbacksaadatyar - Oct 11, 2009 / juliat cung - Oct 27, 2009
|Sports professionals are genius like others professional & need to be paid well
4 - What I meant to say was that salary is not decided by the intrinsic value of a job. Professional...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 11, 2009 / Zoe - Oct 11, 2009
|increase in sale reflect the power of advertisement not for real need
3 - I'm not familiar with IELTS. I've read your other essay about professional athletes earning too much money and it...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 11, 2009 / Zoe - Oct 11, 2009
|in which ways, computer is a hindrance
3 - dear EF_Stephen, i was not comfortable with this essay. in this essay, i have to answer : in which...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 10, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 11, 2009
|Friction Between Roommates Draft
4 - Hi quiksilverq, I think your essay presents your points very well! But I don't know if adding...
Writing Feedbackquiksilverq - Oct 10, 2009 / aroundtheworld - Oct 11, 2009
|Free Art; positive artistic activities should always be encouraged
6 - Technically, if you limit art in any way, it isn't unlimited. This is a difficult argument. It is...
Writing Feedbackvivien_wang - Oct 10, 2009 / EF_Stephen - Oct 11, 2009
|Let's go to Mui Ne - Phan Thiet
4 - I think you misunderstand. That was a rhetorical question. Vietnam is in fact an S-shaped country. It is not...
Writing Feedbackheromanmax - Oct 10, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 12, 2009
|students should take a year between school and Univer for working, traveling
3 - many thanks to you, EF_Kevin. to be honest, i cannot decided whether taking a breaking between high school and...
Writing Feedbackthinhtvdhtm - Oct 9, 2009 / thinhtvdhtm - Oct 9, 2009
|Essay about young people and economic crisis
2 - Nice, but you have a few grammar errors. I assume, based on your comments to others, that this...
Writing Feedbackghaghayz - Oct 9, 2009 / EF_Sean - Oct 9, 2009
|Food has become easier to prepare now , do you agree or not?
13 - Hi Sean, I've just met a structure that I don't understand. Would you please explain it for me!...
Writing Feedbacktuanlnc - Oct 9, 2009 / tuanlnc - Oct 20, 2009
|It is the sport, the multiculturalism; What Australia Means To Me
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