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|Vice-President of Phi Theta Kappa; SERVE the underserved/Experiences
2 - No, the question is not the same. The second question is both more general and more specific, asking for...
Writing Feedbacksad_an6el - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|compare and contrast what conflicts the heroes have and how they face them
Writing Feedbackhollyn91 - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|Music helps people both personally and maintains the culture values of country
5 - Hi EF_Sean, GeneK, EF_Simone thank you much for your comments. I will incorporate your comments in my next essay....
Writing Feedbackprabudhakshin - Aug 20, 2009 / prabudhakshin - Aug 20, 2009
|TOEFL essay: Has easily-prepared-food improved the way people live?
7 - You don't need to address counterarguments in a TOEFL essay. In fact, you probably don't want to. You certainly...
Writing FeedbackLiwen - Aug 20, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 21, 2009
|Topic: Children engaging in paid work can have both negative and positive effects
5 - I can see how the prompt -- which itself blurs the distinction between child labor and youth employment --...
Writing Feedbackstranger1130 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 21, 2009
|The proper use of public resource--GRE ISSUE Appreciate your advice
4 - I notice that you work implicitly within Maslow's hierarchy of needs, which asserts that people will not care about...
Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 20, 2009
|Concept and story line good; I need help with correcting the grammar in my essay
4 - We patiently waited alongsideof many other excited spouses and parents. As the buses pulled up, everyone started cheering...
Writing Feedbackjenni929 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 19, 2009
|"Memom, how did you draw this?" Topic of Choice Essay -- opinions and critiques
5 - As others have pointed out, you point isn't really clear here. You decided that you were interested in art...
Writing FeedbackMichelleHob - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 19, 2009
|Toefl essay -- planning and organization
5 - to start with, people now are faced with a more sophisticate society that before, emerging along with the development...
Writing Feedbackclaire echo - Aug 19, 2009 / sirius51 - Sep 3, 2009
|English Aboriginal feature article.
3 - Even an editorial should probably be a bit more comprehensive and tightly reasoned. The Australian government should make it...
Writing FeedbackBillmc - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 19, 2009
|Learning from Electronic Media: GRE essay topic
Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 19, 2009 / EF_Susan - Nov 1, 2012
|The benefit of a global university-- GRE topic, need help
Writing FeedbackSuperkid - Aug 18, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 19, 2009
|IELTS Essay: Main purpose for Universities
Writing Feedbackcxfcxh - Aug 18, 2009 / jyxff - Aug 21, 2009
|Criminal records, British and Australia laws - IELTS Essay
9 - Passive constructions use the object of an action as the sentence's grammatical subject, as oppose to the active voice,...
Writing Feedbackstealthreaction - Aug 18, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 21, 2009
|Spanish Language proficiency
15 - Once you have left helpful comments for two other forum members, then you can start your own thread...
Writing Feedbacksad_an6el - Aug 17, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 28, 2009
|parents and relatives make the decisions
3 - Whereas parents and relatives never do this? No parent has ever pressured his or her child to be,...
Writing Feedbacktoefl7 - Aug 17, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
|"Questioning authority" - GRE topic.
4 - You need to elaborate more on your examples. At the moment, you are not using them to actually prove...
Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 16, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
|What do you want most in a friend TOEFL
7 - got it. thank you so much! your examples are easy to understand ,and i learned not only the grammar...
Writing Feedbacktoefl7 - Aug 16, 2009 / sugarzhi - Aug 18, 2009
|Travel Versus Saving Money (IELTS test prep essay)
Writing Feedbackorlando - Aug 16, 2009 / orlando - Aug 16, 2009
|toefl: We live in a world of music - Why is it important to so many people?
Writing FeedbackLiwen - Aug 16, 2009 / Liwen - Aug 17, 2009
|traditional foods vs international fast food (which is bad)
Writing FeedbackEricc - Aug 15, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 26, 2009
|TOEFL: Movies or television now play an important role in our life
Writing Feedbackdhanh90 - Aug 15, 2009 / sung_tung - Sep 2, 2009
|The Next Patient
7 - The air dances violently in the space between our stare. wow, definitely gave me goosebumps :o Awesome essay!...
Writing Feedbackjdharake - Aug 14, 2009 / CalLover - Aug 17, 2009
|TOEFL; Television Versus Friends and family
Writing Feedbackdhanh90 - Aug 14, 2009 / sad_an6el - Aug 20, 2009
|Frankenstein Essay: Critiques?
3 - A thesis needs to be debatable. Your isn't. Say something about the message of the book, preferably something that...
Writing Feedbackkenziii - Aug 14, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 15, 2009
|Essay about important characteristics of a co-worker.
Writing Feedbackarsdtbk - Aug 13, 2009 / arsdtbk - Aug 14, 2009
|"pet proposes man disposes" - TOEFL: Should pets be treated as family members?
Writing Feedbackalwaysholly - Aug 12, 2009 / alwaysholly - Aug 18, 2009
|Old saying; 'experience is the best teacher' -Review for CLEP
11 - Should be an "are" here because of the word "and". ____________________________________________________________ _______________________ I would suggest including...
Writing Feedbacktg2009 - Aug 12, 2009 / JunYuan - Aug 26, 2009
|"Justice can only exist when people obey laws that are not to their liking."
3 - Simone is right -- you need to start by defining what you mean by "justice". Virtually any definition you...
Writing FeedbackKahollavan81 - Aug 12, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 16, 2009
|"the personal consumption of butter" - IELTS task 1 Homework 1
2 - This graph shows the personal consumption (in grams) of butter, margarine and low-fat or reduced-fat spreads per week [omit...
Writing FeedbackAnne25 - Aug 12, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 12, 2009
|Formal educational credentials and hiring employees - GRE essay
5 - To improve your sentence by noticing that DON'T MISS WORDS, I believe your essay will be more attractive and...
Writing Feedbackwonglofu - Aug 11, 2009 / Superkid - Aug 19, 2009
|"About a time when you thought an experience would take place in certain way"
3 - This is essay drags on a little. The lesson learned not really something that would effect your character or...
Writing Feedbackpresario32 - Aug 11, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 11, 2009
|"Wise people appreciate the little things in life" - narrative essay
Writing Feedbackbal0601 - Aug 11, 2009 / bal0601 - Aug 20, 2009
|Should government withhold information?--A GRE Issue topic
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 11, 2009 / EF_Simone - Sep 4, 2009
|"Goods And Service Tax At All India Level"- how 2 improve this article
Writing Feedbackescritor - Aug 10, 2009 / escritor - Aug 12, 2009
|Results of publicly funded scientific studies for free -help for GRE issue essay
Writing FeedbackUlribe - Aug 10, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 10, 2009
|"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value"
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 10, 2009 / Llamapoop123 - Aug 10, 2009
|Personal Essay - Travels; I have inherited my mother's wanderlust
4 - I love experiencing the magic and draw of various cultures, each with their own flavor and distinctions which seizes...
Writing Feedbacksarahstu - Aug 9, 2009 / Liebe - Aug 10, 2009
|GRE Essay on "skepticism in student's learning"
6 - Your essay mainly seems to be arguing in favor of the idea, rather than against it as your introduction...
Writing Feedbacknatz - Aug 9, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 17, 2009
|"hard work leads you to success in your life" - need help in correcting my essay
5 - Your logic here isn't very tight. Overwhelming evidence suggests that hard work is in fact the key to...
Writing Feedbackpelaru - Aug 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 9, 2009
|The Saluda hospital - Advice for my GRE argument
6 - "The author" works. Or "the newspaper," or "the article." These all would be more standard, and accurate, than "the...
Writing Feedbackmathsam - Aug 8, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 23, 2009
|We are blessed with modern tools; Modern technology
Writing Feedbackrosamond00 - Aug 7, 2009 / arsdtbk - Aug 16, 2009
|Getting up early and starting day's work in the morning should always be preferred by people
4 - You need to attend to basics. For example, you must place a space after punctuation marks, as I have...
Writing Feedbackmansten - Aug 7, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Saving money for future is more useful than spending on travel.
2 - Is that true? How do you know? Students often start essays with an assertion that whatever they are...
Writing Feedbackgh52km42 - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Essay on Urbanisation
2 - For what purpose did you write this essay? I see you've got it posted under undergraduate admissions essays, but...
Writing Feedbackkillerwind - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|Cbest - Back to Basics
2 - One strength of this essay is your use of supporting evidence. However, you will need to work on your...
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 5, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|To be elected as the country's president gives prestige and honor.
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 4, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 5, 2009
|Gay Marriage: Is It Right?
13 - Note: I deleted John6503's comment to which Llamapoop123 is responding, because it ran afoul of our guidelines prohibiting postings...
Writing Feedbackladiired3 - Aug 4, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 12, 2009
|Benefits and drawbacks of urbanization. Better life for older in the countryside
Writing FeedbackJino - Aug 4, 2009 / HarryK - Aug 25, 2009
|Classification and Divison Essay on different "sources of energy."
6 - Natural fossil fuels, yes. Biofuels are universally considered renewable, as you point out. So, if petroleum becomes a biofuel...
Writing FeedbackReborn - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 8, 2009
|Dangerous sports and activities - for fun, money, or for nothing
11 - It's not so much that it sounds weird as that nobody knows it. This is a dictionary word that...
Writing Feedbacksugarzhi - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Our lives abound with examples of the importance of remaining creative
Writing FeedbackDiddy - Aug 3, 2009 / kenziii - Aug 14, 2009
|For Eng 121 class: Use of critical thinking using Mary Postgate and Yellow Wall
Writing Feedbackbiggestv - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|If people want to have a good future they should have a careful plan
2 - I understand the reason for the meditation on religion with which you preface this essay, but I feel that...
Writing Feedbacktimmytos - Aug 3, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 3, 2009
|Looking for a review of My Philosophy Paper
12 - I agree with that advice in general. Good writers say what they have to say rather than telling...
Writing FeedbackAli MacLennan - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 7, 2009
|Summary-Response Essay - Celebrating Nerdiness by Tom rogers
5 - Your summary is okay. Your thesis should probably include a summary of the reasons why you agree with...
Writing Feedbackkingdomcome - Aug 2, 2009 / EF_Sean - Aug 9, 2009
|'Harmful effects on our environment' - Benefits and Drawbacks of Urbanisation
10 - Thank you Notoman, Sean, it definitely quenched my curiousity^^ I'll practice hard, and thanks for the website !!...
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|Archie isn't just a typical guy I've encountered in my life! - Unforgettable person
Writing Feedbackelainedlcruz - Aug 1, 2009 / EF_Simone - Aug 6, 2009
|Originality and thinking - GRE Issue No:2.
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