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|TOELF: Thomas Edison - One famous person you would like to meet
7 - Thank you for your help. I already made the list. Your corrections are not a waste of time, I...
Writing Feedbackmuroslav - Sep 3, 2010 / muroslav - Sep 6, 2010
|IELTS:Giving aid to poorer countries has more negative effects than positive effect
3 - This sentence is awkward: In this world, there is no one who does not know this world 'globalization', which...
Writing Feedbackhealing80 - Sep 3, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|TOEFL--A job with more vacation time is better....& Teachers should show their...
6 - Famous writers use commas in different ways, and their uses have changed with time. My favorite approach...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
|SHORT ESSAY Describe your favorite food- Instant-boiled mutton
8 - First: Describe what a crepe is. Second: Elaborate on what makes a crepe unique, yummy. Third: Wrap it up,...
Writing Feedbackayida365 - Sep 2, 2010 / vinhstuh - Nov 6, 2011
|the media focuses too much on celebrity.how far do you agree?? a general paper essay
Writing Feedbackyuvly - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|THE CAY, story about one trip in the in Caribbean Sea
Writing Feedbackzeed - Sep 2, 2010 / zeed - Sep 14, 2010
|Grade is an assessment that encourages students to learn more.do you agree?
4 - Here is the way to follow the rule called 'number agreement' Keep singular with singular and plural with plural:...
Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|money either to protect arts or the environment - source of our livelihood
3 - This is a good idea for your argument. I think, though, that it should also include some mention...
Writing Feedbackdivya2010 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 4, 2010
|IELTS: effects of globalization (decrease in global tension)
3 - Let's fix the clarity here: Although it has undeniably beneficial effects on the economics of the world, it also...
Writing Feedbackhaghshenas - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|Repaying a kindness ("I have to treasure my parents' effort for funding me")
Writing Feedbackjiajun95 - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|Comprehensive Note on ' Flatterers get together,the devil goes for dinner'
5 - Corruption, nepotism, favoritism is are some byproducts of this evil. The flattered person loses touch with reality...
Writing Feedbackasad - Sep 2, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 5, 2010
|"Parents should never try to be a child's "friend" - Descriptive/Narrative Essay
2 - This is a common idea. Only when you think of a very original, intriguing, or useful idea would...
Writing Feedbackrhamrick - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 3, 2010
|Influence of past achievements is necessary for making a significant contribution
3 - Woah. To me, this is a bit of an overstatement. Whatever someone does must be influenced by something....
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Sep 1, 2010 / freezard7734 - Sep 1, 2010
|Originality is an identity. Every idea generated in this world is as original as its originator.
2 - I enjoyed thoroughly your discussion on originality! Some details, amoxicilline for instance, might not be easily absorbed by the...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Sep 1, 2010 / Shadow93 - Sep 1, 2010
|Now and then: the mass movement of people into the cities
11 - Oh... yes, you will have difficulty as long as you come up with ideas first and then look for...
Writing FeedbackBrandon Zhou - Sep 1, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 7, 2010
|"Being a Foreigner" - a narrative essay
5 - Hello Amal! I'll change many sentences in your essay. I hope you have time to read them aloud...
Writing Feedbackamal omar - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 2, 2010
|"The diagram related how are lead pencils made.", IELTS: writing part 1
7 - Dear Altraga, About your band score, I guess it is around 5.5. It would be raised if you could...
Writing FeedbackAltraga - Aug 31, 2010 / sharkondiet - Sep 11, 2010
|IELTS essay: compare the advantages and disadvantages of TV,books and radio.
3 - thetre a lot of grammatical mistakes in your essay. and its spelt as although. sentences should be short n...
Writing Feedbackanhduy_tran - Aug 31, 2010 / divya2010 - Sep 2, 2010
|I disagree that television has destroyed communication between friends and family.
10 - It's funny that you mention that, because my sister watches Discovery more than anyone I know, and her...
Writing Feedbackjay4TOEFL - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 11, 2010
|essay/ IELTS Animal testing is the only way to guarantee the safety of new products?
Writing Feedbacksunshinebank - Aug 31, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 10, 2010
|Ielts: Study at school or get a job?
Writing Feedbackreiichi - Aug 31, 2010 / reiichi - Sep 2, 2010
|IELTS TASK 1: The US's energy consumption and production
4 - The most significant rise happened in the period between around 1955 and 1972, when the Americans ' energy production...
Writing Feedbackcathead_2307 - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|'Change will change a person' - avoiding change essay
2 - Cutting edge refers to the most advanced technology, which exists in every era... so I think this needs...
Writing Feedbacksandeepkale - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|Sex Trafficking, an issue of international significance
Writing FeedbackMiss_Swiss - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|Does the end justify the means? - GRE issue essay.
6 - No comma necessary in that first sentence. This question is about whether a moral end justifies immoral methods....
Writing Feedbackershad193 - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 1, 2010
|Mistakes in the tenses, could you check these sentences and their verbs?
Writing FeedbackTetanya - Aug 30, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 31, 2010
|New idea always faces contradiction desipte its reasonalbilty
4 - I think your thesis misses the point being asked in the prompt. You probably made a mistake distinguishing between...
Writing FeedbackKapayapaanify1 - Aug 29, 2010 / ershad193 - Aug 30, 2010
|sense of humor, honesty, willingness - QUALITIES OF A GOOD NEIGHBOR - TOEFL
Writing Feedbacksoccon36 - Aug 29, 2010 / mea505 - Sep 13, 2010
|TO SPEND BILLIONS OF MONEY ON THE SPACE PROGRAM? CLEP essay
Writing Feedbackritu40 - Aug 28, 2010 / ershad193 - Sep 1, 2010
|Essay about the importance of human needs for land and animal protection.
Writing FeedbackAnnie Ma - Aug 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|''University is a only way lead people to success''
4 - Thanks Tina! I hope you don't mind if I offer another way, though. There are still a few mistakes....
Writing Feedbacksamac - Aug 28, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|No matter if it's original, more important is how useful is this idea for the people in a new way?
Writing Feedbackrajeshaaidu - Aug 27, 2010 / rajeshaaidu - Jan 11, 2011
|Peer Pressure: Recalling an Experience (Autobiographical Narrative)
3 - Often I tell people that giving the name of someone like Mr. Tomanio is an unnecessary detail. Here, it...
Writing Feedbacknicole6370 - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|Peoples behavior is impacted by Television & Movies
4 - Watching television and movies is the cheapest and fastest way to transform information and entertainment . However, TV...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|Discoveries - Subject of your interest or subject good for career?
Writing Feedbackcanizarro - Aug 27, 2010 / thaitam - Sep 1, 2010
|"parents are the best teacher of their children'' - agree or not?
7 - Secondly , parent's teaching methods regularly have strong influence on their children's behaviour, because they understand their children better...
Writing Feedbacknamtuocbonghong - Aug 27, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 29, 2010
|Cosmetic surgery - agree or disagree with this trend?
NEW - Nowadays, people try to change their life by changing their clothing styles, wearing jewelers, changing their appearances through cosmetic...
Writing Feedbackkang - Aug 26, 2010 / — -
|Positive or negative aspects of giving aid to the poorer countries: An IELTS
2 - Actually, I do think an essay of 434 words is accepted in IELTS, provided that you spend no longer...
Writing FeedbackNash - Aug 26, 2010 / cathead_2307 - Aug 27, 2010
|IELTS essay: whether not teachers and doctoes should work in rural for many years
Writing Feedbackjszwan - Aug 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
|The best to improve the quality of education is to increase teacher's salary
3 - Nowadays, the question of how to provide qualititve a high quality education arouses widespread attention. Increasing the...
Writing Feedbackgarywang - Aug 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
|IELTS essay: More stress for younger generation?
11 - Well, it could result in disaster if the method I describe is used incorrectly, but what I have in...
Writing Feedbackcathead_2307 - Aug 26, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 6, 2010
|exciting and colorful - ielts: doing the same thing or change?
Writing Feedbackreiichi - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
|Technology Gap Between Generations, Interview Essay. Am I doing this correctly?
5 - yuck. Use an apostrophe to show possession. Obviously frustrated, he exclaimed, "These darn things!", while tossing the phone...
Writing Feedbackbookerhost09 - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
|A JOB YOU LOVE or A JOB THAT PAYS YOU WELL?
Writing Feedbackcanizarro - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 28, 2010
|Learning from books or from experience ? What is your opinion?
9 - Im assuming the promt for this essay is something like: Is more knowledge gained from reading books or from...
Writing FeedbackTomomi - Aug 25, 2010 / keberg1 - Sep 14, 2010
|The most important qualities of a good supervisor (boss) - rate my essay
3 - All Employees in different work situations experience dissimilar behaviors from their bosses, but they believe that some same...
Writing Feedbackhamed6134 - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
|What do you think are the duties of vietnamese youths nowsadays?
3 - Let's use the word "thoughtful" It's widely seen that in order to survive and improve we must be important...
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
|Easier cooking food deteriorates our life in aspects of: health, happy status and traditional value
6 - In modern life, everything is made more suitable for humankind. Among the things made more suitable is food, which...
Writing FeedbackSophie Tran - Aug 25, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
|"we must live in big city" -which is best palce to live small town or city?
6 - May be you can change it to, ''advanced tecnology which are used today enables people to live on...
Writing Feedbackjayeshjvm0805 - Aug 24, 2010 / jiajun95 - Sep 10, 2010
|human needs for framland .housing and industry are more than saving land for endan
2 - Hi Goat, I'm glad you are participating here! Do you have any questions about Eugene's corrections? Please type the...
Writing FeedbackWKPKOBE - Aug 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 26, 2010
|TOPIC Schools should teach students about the overweight burden
NEW - Contemporarily, school students always complain about the overweight burden resulted in myriad of subjects. Yet school never fails to...
Writing Feedbacksonghongbo - Aug 24, 2010 / — -
|Beach vacation are ideal for relaxing
2 - Beach vacations are ideal for relaxing. A beach has a beautiful view for relaxing. The combination of blue...
Writing Feedbackn_tina59 - Aug 24, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 26, 2010
|Catostrophic earthquake in Southern Haiti: issue of international significance
5 - Well, I can tell you have a good mind for language. You can write very well. It is important,...
Writing FeedbackMiss_Swiss - Aug 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 26, 2010
|'my actions have really touched' - day you made up a mistake which upset other people
Writing Feedbackkingofremix - Aug 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 24, 2010
|discuss the changes in society which have an efect on teenagers?
4 - This is the only statement you make about how changes affect teenagers, and it is not very clear....
Writing Feedbacklynaz - Aug 23, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 27, 2010
|TOEFL Topic: Lessons can be learned through playing games
5 - EF Kevin: I am so encouraged and will definitely keep practicing! :-) thank you for your advice. I really...
Writing Feedbackryutei133 - Aug 23, 2010 / ryutei133 - Aug 24, 2010
|"The study of history has value only when it is relevant to our daily life." -GRE
Writing Feedbackustcly - Aug 23, 2010 / ustcly - Aug 26, 2010
|TOEFL: I believe children should not learn a foreign language as they start school
NEW - Topic: do you agree or disagree: children should begin learing a foreign language as soon as they start school....
Writing Feedbackvirtuosoyell - Aug 22, 2010 / — -
|GRE AW eassy_ all faculty should undertake professional work outside the campus
4 - Andy, another EF member posted a message to you and offered his essay for you to look at, because...
Writing Feedbackandy_Z - Aug 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Sep 8, 2010
|Is Experience More book learning or significant in a person 's life ? Why ?
Writing Feedbackthaitam - Aug 22, 2010 / EF_Kevin - Aug 25, 2010
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