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|Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they released from prison. Causes and solutions??
3 - There is a fact ... >> ... more criminals repeat offend after releasing from prison, which is a complicated...
Writing Feedbackphuongthao810 - May 29, 2018 / liliaxa - May 31, 2018
|Is it essential for new residents to adopt the traditions and customs of local community?
4 - @anhtu96 I think the contributor means that you have to specify instead of using 'people', since you are...
Writing Feedbackanhtu96 - May 29, 2018 / jalp - Jun 3, 2018
|Do we need to require sport in school curriculum?
3 - Kim, since you failed to provide the complete prompt instructions for us to consider your writing on, I will...
Writing FeedbackKim Truong - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|'Religion and Global Perspective' - Semester at Sea Application Essay
2 - Truth be told the first 2 paragraphs of your essay is all fluff. Lots of words, beautiful words, but...
Writing Feedbackkatemanning - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|Ielts writing task 2 - eating local food or food from other regions
4 - Because I am a reading, not a professional writer so I just comment on my point-of-view. Your thesis statement...
Writing Feedbackhqcxx1516 - May 28, 2018 / Kim Truong - May 29, 2018
|Is it possible to become a truly successful person without a natural strong talent?
3 - Huy, since you did not provide the correct prompt for the topic in your essay, I will be unable...
Writing Feedbackghuylee - May 28, 2018 / Holt - May 29, 2018
|IELTS writing task 2 : One could learn about another country from TV
3 - Nguyen, your essay is taking a totally different approach to the given discussion for several reasons. For starters, you...
Writing Feedbackjasonnguyen - May 27, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|Many people keep dogs and cats as companion , Do the advantages outweigh the disadvatages?
2 - Aural, your essay suffers from severe punctuation errors. You are using comma's throughout the essay instead of placing periods...
Writing Feedbackauralfat - May 26, 2018 / Holt - May 27, 2018
|How technology affect our relationships? Has this been a positive or negative development
2 - @aitruong This is not a comparison essay. This is a single opinion essay that should have focused on one...
Writing Feedbackaitruong - May 26, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|Who should be in charge of activities related to scientific research?
Writing Feedbacklinhlinhlinh - May 25, 2018 / linhlinhlinh - May 26, 2018
|Human being actions are leading to the extinction of species and loss of bio-diversity
Writing Feedbackkmc - May 25, 2018 / kmc - May 26, 2018
|There's a question whether school teachers should incorporate homework into the teaching scheme
2 - Grey, unfortunately, your approach tot he whole discussion is incorrect. You have turned a compare and contrast with personal...
Writing Feedbackgreynd - May 25, 2018 / Holt - May 26, 2018
|To what extent do you agree that letter writing is disappearing? IELTS 2.
4 - Thank you very much for the criticisms. I actuallu didn't think of editing my second essay because I thought...
Writing Feedbackjalp - May 25, 2018 / jalp - May 30, 2018
|The way of communication between people has been changed due to the modern technology; IELTS2
3 - Bimal, you have written a focused essay that speaks of only one point of view. Excellent work. That is...
Writing Feedbackbimalp - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 25, 2018
|IELTS2: Some people believe that graduation from university is the key to a fulfilling career
3 - Duc, while your opening paraphrase was excellent, your body of paragraphs were lacking in the proper representation of the...
Writing FeedbackDucgiangbin - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 28, 2018
|Violence and disaters images in the media, what are the causes and our solutions
3 - Vu, since you did not post the complete prompt with this essay, I cannot really tell what your required...
Writing Feedbackvu1111 - May 24, 2018 / Holt - May 25, 2018
|Increasing the prices of fuels are the only way to reduce its consumption and pressure on the world
2 - Hi, make sure to always include the complete prompt so we can determine if you have addressed it in...
Writing Feedbacklamtuyen0610 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|The given diagram illustrates the process of brick making [Writing task 1]
4 - Yes, treating is not the same as handling. Think of a water treatment plant, where water is filtered and...
Writing Feedbackphongdang04 - May 23, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 24, 2018
|IELTS TASK 2 (People argue about children's decision)
6 - i think : the fifth line : the structure of the sentence is wrong because instead of : children...
Writing Feedbackabang yoga - May 23, 2018 / mailoc - May 26, 2018
|IELTS GT Essay - The use of cellular phones has negatively impacted person to person communication
2 - Neha, opinion discussions in the opening statement is only acceptable in the direct question essay. Unfortunately, this essay that...
Writing FeedbackNeha_b123 - May 22, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
|Solution for traffic - providing free public transport 24 hours per day, and seven days a week
3 - Nguyen, the essay that you wrote is not going to get a passing score because your whole approach to...
Writing Feedbackphuonglinhng23 - May 22, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|Teaching a foundation of logical reasoning gives more to a moral society that teaching morality
2 - Mohit, this is a seriously flawed GRE essay that cannot gain any score higher than a 2 for the...
Writing Feedbackmvarma - May 21, 2018 / Holt - May 22, 2018
|Young people causing trouble often. The reason/solution of juvenile delinquency
Writing FeedbackCong19082001 - May 21, 2018 / chidau - May 21, 2018
|An increasing number of transport revolutions. Which are considered as the most remarkable?
3 - Thanks. I highly appreciate your comment. I'll consider all what you said to write better essays....
Writing Feedbacklecongdoo3 - May 21, 2018 / lecongdoo3 - May 30, 2018
|Effect of technology. Do the advantages of the online business meetings outweigh the disadvantages ?
2 - Mai, the issue is not about online tools. It is about online business meetings. Your reference to business tools...
Writing Feedbackmailoc - May 20, 2018 / Holt - May 23, 2018
|Unequality in this world; Ielts topic: The gap between the rich and the poor. Problems and solutions
2 - Hi, it is important that you include the complete prompt along with your essay. That is the only way...
Writing Feedbackjenniferngo - May 20, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 23, 2018
|With the rise of e-books comes the decline in paper-books-What are the advantages and disadvantages
2 - Hi, I think you did a pretty good job of addressing the prompt until your final paragraph. The prompt...
Writing Feedbackwoemam - May 20, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 22, 2018
|SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT A SOCIETY MUST PUT IT'S OVERALL SUCCESS BEFORE PEOPLE.
3 - Hi, firstly, thank so much for a detailed review. On going into the details of the mistakes , what...
Writing Feedbackjaimatadi90 - May 19, 2018 / jaimatadi90 - May 22, 2018
|People have different views about what young individuals should do when they leave high school.
Writing Feedbackthaoduyen - May 18, 2018 / thaoduyen - May 23, 2018
|Gift giving should not be encouraged because of waste. What extent do you agree or disagree with it?
2 - Hello! You have some good ideas for the content, but the structural framework of most sentences are incorrect...
Writing FeedbackPemo Hoang - May 18, 2018 / DoctorWho - May 21, 2018
|The free information, available on the internet, is double-edged sword. It can be helpful or harmful
3 - Wasel, I hope that you are just writing this essay as an English writing practice activity because if you...
Writing Feedbackwasel - May 17, 2018 / Holt - May 21, 2018
|An uncharged service as a part of high school programs
2 - Wendy, the first mistake that you made in the writing of this essay is that your opening presentation did...
Writing Feedbackwendy900327 - May 14, 2018 / Holt - May 21, 2018
|Could taxation decrease fast food consumption? - IELTS - Writing Task 2
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 13, 2018 / Ann777 - May 15, 2018
|Multiple short school-free days or one long vacation for children?
3 - Ahh, thank you very much for the review of my essay. I am slowly learning from my mistakes, nonetheless,...
Writing Feedbackjalp - May 13, 2018 / jalp - May 25, 2018
|Computer is being used more and more popular in every field, especially in education
2 - Truc, the minimum word requirement for the Task 2 IELTS essay is 250 words delivered in a 5 paragraph...
Writing Feedbackbaotruc - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|Social status and material possions as the best parameters to judge the people's value?
2 - Please write the prompt of the essay in the start. To be honest the complete essay appears to be...
Writing Feedbacklhyang - May 13, 2018 / Rizwan89 - May 13, 2018
|Fast Food is Killing America One Combo Meal at a Time
2 - @bultmlisaj when you write an academic research paper, do the writing from the third person point of view. You...
Writing Feedbackbultmlisaj - May 13, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|Passengers on London Underground per hour, from 6 a.m to 10 p.m. - IELTS Task 1
2 - Sil, there are 2 mistakes in this essay. The first, is that Your opening and closing paragraphs are run...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 12, 2018 / Holt - May 20, 2018
|Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss Advantages, Disadvantages & opinion.
4 - @Holt, thank you for providing detailed feedback. I do not have a tutor, but I follow an online blog...
Writing FeedbackNeha_b123 - May 10, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 22, 2018
|Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity/IETLS task one
Writing Feedbackwonderinwander - May 10, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 11, 2018
|People tend to live alone which may have both beneficial and detrimental effects
3 - Nguyen, this is a single opinion essay that you opted to discuss as a double point of view. That...
Writing FeedbackToantranchauquoc - May 10, 2018 / Holt - May 19, 2018
|DISCUSS- If living in a country where you have to speak different language can cause social problems
Writing FeedbackAnn777 - May 9, 2018 / forsil - May 9, 2018
|Explain some possible reasons and solutions for the issue of obesity - IELTS writing task 2
3 - David, the main problem with your essay is that you began the discussion of the given topic in the...
Writing FeedbackDavid Doan - May 9, 2018 / Holt - May 18, 2018
|Smacking children is the best form of discipline. - IELTs writing task 2.
3 - Quang, this essay will receive an immediate failing score based on the prompt deviation that you created. The essay...
Writing Feedbackrotlata01 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|A competition entry: An important person in history
2 - Loc, this essay indicates information that covers only the reason why this person became famous. It does not give...
Writing Feedbackkakaloc1681998 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 9, 2018
|Help ! Ielts writing task 1 about the percentage of men and women regular exercise
2 - Dorothy, this analytical essay will receive an automatic failing score due to the lack of word count. You failed...
Writing Feedbackso11123 - May 7, 2018 / Holt - May 8, 2018
|Pollution and countries development - IELTS - Writing Task 2
4 - Thank you Holt, I have now searched how to structure different typologies of Writing Task 2 in IELTS and...
Writing Feedbackforsil - May 6, 2018 / forsil - May 7, 2018
|Show reasons why young people should not leave school before the age of 18
2 - Hi trifecta, is this a Essay for IELTS/TOEFL? If you provide us the purpose it will be easier...
Writing Feedbacktrifecta - May 6, 2018 / forsil - May 6, 2018
|The crime is still increasing - how to stop this? Teach criminals a lesson.
Writing Feedbackbollbat5566 - May 6, 2018 / bollbat5566 - May 6, 2018
|MOTIVATING OTHERS FOR ARMED FORCES
2 - Hi, here are my suggestions: time and again and that stated, 'The Military ... joined themilitary I...
Writing Feedbackresalat - May 4, 2018 / TJLuschen - May 11, 2018
|Overseas Study Tour is Worthwhile for Young Students
NEW - pre-school children and elementary school students abroad Although many people think that study tour programs for pre-school children...
Writing FeedbackCharlotte TTTT - May 3, 2018 / — -
|Looking for more other measures (than petrol price) to resolve problems with traffic and pollution
2 - Dung, this is an extent essay. So you need to provide a response that has an emotional extent to...
Writing Feedbackdungdevil216 - May 3, 2018 / Holt - May 3, 2018
|An ongoing discourse on whether children playing computer games is inherently a bad thing or not
3 - @martmaye Currently, there is an ongoing discourse ... awkward sentence end OR sentence fragment (unsure) Second paragraph:...
Writing Feedbackmartmaye - May 2, 2018 / tuedearerbluejay - May 3, 2018
|It is argued that the attainment of goals is often determined by the factor of fortune.
Writing FeedbackQuaAng - May 2, 2018 / QuaAng - May 3, 2018
|"How does the increase in the availability of information influence life in today's world?"
Writing FeedbackHoffmann161 - May 1, 2018 / Hoffmann161 - May 2, 2018
|Human activity has had a negative impact on our planet
2 - If you are writing for IELTS, please avoid sentences like "Although I am more favor ... his essay will...
Writing Feedbacktrunghau - May 1, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 2, 2018
|The rich are getting richer but the poor are getting poorer. What is the reason for this situation?
2 - Trung, I cannot mark this test because you did not indicate what kind of test you are taking. There...
Writing FeedbackMai Quoc Trung - Apr 30, 2018 / Holt - May 1, 2018
|TOEFL Writing "Public libraries are no longer useful!"
2 - Zheng, you must change all the wording of the first paragraph. You cannot borrow any portion from the original...
Writing Feedbacknickbigbang - Apr 30, 2018 / Holt - May 1, 2018
|The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong
2 - @zandu, your essay has good vocabulary and examples, but Introduction is too long. If you can break it down...
Writing Feedbackzandu - Apr 29, 2018 / Neha_b123 - May 2, 2018
|Provide examples of solutions to reduce traffic in big cities
2 - Dao, this is a pretty good direct response essay. The prompt that you provided, along with the discussion instructions...
Writing Feedbacklvddqt - Apr 29, 2018 / Holt - Apr 30, 2018
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